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Not-exhaustive list of various factors that contribute to making things fun to write:
  • Agency
  • Initiative
  • Impact on the world
  • Risk of failure
  • Consequences for failure
  • Escapism. Writing about ninja solving problems with magic is more exciting than writing about some guy having a meeting over donuts and coffee
  • Inspiring speeches
You don't need all of these, but more is usually better.

Compare:

"Go out into the monster-infested woods and punch monsters in the face so that they leave you alone long enough to use MEW to build an aqueduct."

I don't know why you want to write about punching local chakra beasts. They are neither challenging or particularly interesting.

Also, it's appeared that I don't have particularly high tolerance for danger. Orochimaru's dungeon has me alarmed once it's shown that Noburi almost died. The SIN stuff was an "oh crap" moment. Problem solving is interesting....but.

Consequence of failure is extremely serious. It could very well mean the end of the quest. And there's no REDO button once we move past the very likely salty reaction, and very likely no resurrect button either. I can tolerate setbacks we can recover from, though.
 
CCnJ
  • Hazou knows he's earnest but is self aware enough to know he's not subtle. This requires a delicate touch, something that we're not that good at
  • While setting those two up for marriage would be nice, that's not the goal. We see two good friends in pain because of things left unsaid and their pain causes us pain.
  • We trust Ino

CCnJ is for nerds who have difficulty managing social nuances. If we use it with Ino an a plus social spec it won't go well. This played out when we tried it with Minami back in the day
 
CCnJ is for nerds who have difficulty managing social nuances. If we use it with Ino an a plus social spec it won't go well. This played out when we tried it with Minami back in the day

I'd like to think that she'd appreciate the transparency of it, but I can see where you're coming from. I'll get rid of it and just put "honestly state." Ino's a social butterfly and can read people like a book, so I suspect she'd be able to discern Hazou's true intentions pretty easily if he tries to naturally explain it. The added buffer between thought and word that is CCnJ would likely just annoy her. A little like a person that adds the qualifier of "in my opinion" every time they make an opinionated statement.
 
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[X] Action plan: The quest for the scroll
  • meet with Ebisu and get the results of his training
    • If appropriate send a report of the results to Asuma
  • Scroll hunt
    • We have all the information we need to start the mission
    • Just looking to recruit a Jounin to take point on the mission
      • Possible recruits
        • Mari: pro, works best with the team, incredibly talented. Con, retired, might not be able to spare her from political work
        • Snake: pro, Good relationship, very talented con, ANBU
        • Anko: Pro? Infiltration spec, friends with Mari cons, Is Anko
        • Tsunade: pro, most talented ninja available con, high difficulty in recruiting
      • Pay any reasonable amount to recruit one of them
      • Once recruited Hazō, Akane and Haru head to Todoroki Shrine
        • Meet with Jiraiya's contacts
          • Looking for anyone who came from Sky or Moon in the past 20 years
          • Might or might not have been a ninja

We shouldn't have Hazo go on a mission if he isn't at 100% readiness, that is...consequence free.

Also, did we verify that the agents at Todoroki Shrine are not compromised by the agent in Noodle?
 
We shouldn't have Hazo go on a mission if he isn't at 100% readiness, that is...consequence free.

Also, did we verify that the agents at Todoroki Shrine are not compromised by the agent in Noodle?

huh you didn't have a problem voting to have Hazō go on a mission last time when he had the consequences. Wonder why you're so adamantly against it this time
 
[X] Action plan: The quest for the scroll

@Oneiros My thoughts:
  • Please add something involving checking things through with the plan.
  • I'm uncomfortable with the idea of hiring a Jonin to "take point"; FMPOV it implies they're there to act as the meatshield, and I'm leery of putting the thought into Hazou's head. Maybe rephrasing it as hiring them to provide firepower/combat power?
  • For that matter, do we need a Jonin specifically? Konoha Jonin are a dying breed and Asuma would certainly be concerned with us taking one with us. Perhaps looking for a competent Chunin, especially one with stealth or social focus?
  • Jonin or otherwise, after the person is recruited they aren't mentioned to be coming with us to Todoroki Shrine; it's only Hazou, Akane, and Haru.
  • It might be a good idea to prepare disguise kits before we leave. You know, because Henge was eaten.
Edit: Oh yeah, if we're doing this we should level Akane up, by a ton. She has over 200XP.
 
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huh you didn't have a problem voting to have Hazō go on a mission last time when he had the consequences. Wonder why you're so adamantly against it this time

Because even if I did, I can change my mind? Plus, this mission has potential to be a life and death scenario.

[X] Action plan: The quest for the scroll

@Oneiros My thoughts:
  • Please add something involving checking things through with the plan.
  • I'm uncomfortable with the idea of hiring a Jonin to "take point"; FMPOV it implies they're there to act as the meatshield, and I'm leery of putting the thought into Hazou's head. Maybe rephrasing it as hiring them to provide firepower/combat power?
  • For that matter, do we need a Jonin specifically? Konoha Jonin are a dying breed and Asuma would certainly be concerned with us taking one with us. Perhaps looking for a competent Chunin, especially one with stealth or social focus?
  • Jonin or otherwise, after the person is recruited they aren't mentioned to be coming with us to Todoroki Shrine; it's only Hazou, Akane, and Haru.
  • It might be a good idea to prepare disguise kits before we leave. You know, because Henge was eaten.
Edit: Oh yeah, if we're doing this we should level Akane up, by a ton. She has over 200XP.

From Asuma's POV, why would he let the golden geese be that unprotected? Hazo, Akane, and Haru are chunin at best, and Hazo still have consequences with genin level stats(or so I am told).

Why are we rushing into a potentially dangerous situation without Hazo being full healed?
 
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[X] Action plan: The quest for the scroll

@Oneiros My thoughts:
  • Please add something involving checking things through with the plan.
  • I'm uncomfortable with the idea of hiring a Jonin to "take point"; FMPOV it implies they're there to act as the meatshield, and I'm leery of putting the thought into Hazou's head. Maybe rephrasing it as hiring them to provide firepower/combat power?
  • For that matter, do we need a Jonin specifically? Konoha Jonin are a dying breed and Asuma would certainly be concerned with us taking one with us. Perhaps looking for a competent Chunin, especially one with stealth or social focus?
  • Jonin or otherwise, after the person is recruited they aren't mentioned to be coming with us to Todoroki Shrine; it's only Hazou, Akane, and Haru.
  • It might be a good idea to prepare disguise kits before we leave. You know, because Henge was eaten.
Edit: Oh yeah, if we're doing this we should level Akane up, by a ton. She has over 200XP.
All implemented if you wanna take a look
 
Look, man. If you want to do the scroll hunt so badly, at the very least timeskip to the point when Hazo is consequence free. That will take 2 months, I am told.
 
I will vote for any plan that has the following section in a prominent position:
Relatedly: Condors.
  • If the Scroll's taken, Conjura won't be cooperative because Leaf also houses the Pangolins. It'll be caldera'd for Pangolin support or lay fallow until Conjura's hunted down (which may take years).
  • However, an elite social-spec might be able to negotiate for powerful jutsu/summoning contracts in exchange for (clandestinely) moderating Pangolin aggression or providing Conjura resources.
  • Present the idea to Asuma if Mari would be up to it and thinks Asuma'd agree.
By "prominent position" I mean "placed in a way such that it's logically the first or the second scene to be written".
 
[X] Action plan: The quest for the scroll
Check if my placement works for you
Ah, right, the first scene is locked as the Ebisu meeting. I think having it in the second one is fine, then.

Here's an optimized rewrite. Minor changes in blue.
  • Meet with Ebisu. Get the results of his training.
    • If appropriate, send a report of the results to Asuma.
  • Discuss with the clan: the Scroll Hunt.
    • First: Condors.
      • If the Scroll's taken, Conjura won't be cooperative because Leaf also houses the Pangolins. It'll be caldera'd for Pangolin support or lay fallow until Conjura's hunted down (which may take years).
      • However, an elite social-spec might manage to negotiate for powerful jutsu/summoning contracts in exchange for moderating Pangolin aggression or (clandestinely) providing Conjura resources.
      • Present the idea to Asuma if Mari would be up to it and thinks Asuma'd agree.
    • Other Scrolls: we have all necessary information to start the mission. Should we recruit more ninja for firepower/support? Possibilities:
      • Mari:
        • Pros: works best with the team, incredibly talented.
        • Cons: retired, might not be able to spare her from political work.
      • Snake:
        • Pros: good relations, talented.
        • Cons: ANBU.
      • Anko:
        • Pros: social-spec, Mari's friend.
        • Cons: is Anko.
      • Tsunade:
        • Pros: most talented ninja available.
        • Cons: difficult to recruit.
      • Other ninja? Follow the clan/Mari's recommendations.
    • Pay any reasonable amount to recruit one (or more) of them.
    • Once recruited, Hazō, Akane, Haru and the others head to Todoroki Shrine.
      • Prepare disguise kits.
      • Meet with Jiraiya's contacts. Look for anyone who came from Sky or Moon in the past 20 years, civilian or ninja.
 
[X] Action plan: The quest for the scroll

Ah, right, the first scene is locked as the Ebisu meeting. I think having it in the second one is fine, then.

Here's an optimized rewrite. Minor changes in blue.
  • Meet with Ebisu. Get the results of his training.
    • If appropriate, send a report of the results to Asuma.
  • Discuss with the clan: the Scroll Hunt.
    • First: Condors.
      • If the Scroll's taken, Conjura won't be cooperative because Leaf also houses the Pangolins. It'll be caldera'd for Pangolin support or lay fallow until Conjura's hunted down (which may take years).
      • However, an elite social-spec might manage to negotiate for powerful jutsu/summoning contracts in exchange for moderating Pangolin aggression or (clandestinely) providing Conjura resources.
      • Present the idea to Asuma if Mari would be up to it and thinks Asuma'd agree.
    • Other Scrolls: we have all necessary information to start the mission. Should we recruit more ninja for firepower/support? Possibilities:
      • Mari:
        • Pros: works best with the team, incredibly talented.
        • Cons: retired, might not be able to spare her from political work.
      • Snake:
        • Pros: good relations, talented.
        • Cons: ANBU.
      • Anko:
        • Pros: social-spec, Mari's friend.
        • Cons: is Anko.
      • Tsunade:
        • Pros: most talented ninja available.
        • Cons: difficult to recruit.
      • Other ninja? Follow the clan/Mari's recommendations.
    • Pay any reasonable amount to recruit one (or more) of them.
    • Once recruited, Hazō, Akane, Haru and the others head to Todoroki Shrine.
      • Prepare disguise kits.
      • Meet with Jiraiya's contacts. Look for anyone who came from Sky or Moon in the past 20 years, civilian or ninja.
Implemented!
 
So, we(As is, the person that invented Skywalker and is probably considered the most valuable asset to kill/steal;S-Rankers aside) are we going with other three chunin outside of Leaf to met someone, something that does not require our presence in any way,shape or form.Ii understand the interest in a scroll, i don't understand wanting a scroll so bad that we're ignoring any safety concern not taking a scroll, but for finding information about one.
There is a reason Ami brought Naruto with her, and she's a jonin.

We're treating the most important part of the of the mission, recruit Tsunade(Because we need an S-ranker if we want to be safe If we're discovered) as an after-thought, instead of the vital piece of the mission it is. So the question is...
Why so much urgency that we're doing "planning", "recruiting" and "Starting operation" in a single plan?

EDIT: also, as it is written the whole "choose Mari for the scroll" is 100% political manouvering, and it's going to burn some that goodwill Asuma has to us, a better way would be simply explaining the Pangolin/Condor problem to Asuma and let him find a solution. Then propose various solution when asked.
 
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@eaglejarl, @Velorien, @OliWhail: I'm trying to write a letter to Asuma and have a few questions:
  • Current estimate for the ninja population of the EN is about 10,000, yes? (Already answered)
  • Likewise, the estimate for the civilian population of the EN is about 200,000?
  • Has this been trending up or down from the start of the Village Era?
I know the first two Qs have been answered before, but I can't find confirmation of the second. The last seems like an easy question to ask Keiko. In her capacity as second in command of the Nara, someone who knows about the long-term existential threat, and skilled logistician, she should at least have some vague idea of the trend, even if it's just at the resolution of "mostly up" or "ninja up, civilians down".
 
This reason is because the mission is to actually kill the Summoner, who is a known Jonin.

I have been under the impression that the summoners for the scrolls we're after (Porcupines, Krakens) are dead.

Scrolls are high value targets. Why exactly are we pursuing this mission with inadequate preparation, especially with Hazo still suffering consequences?

@eaglejarl, @Velorien, @OliWhail: I'm trying to write a letter to Asuma and have a few questions:
  • Current estimate for the ninja population of the EN is about 10,000, yes? (Already answered)
  • Likewise, the estimate for the civilian population of the EN is about 200,000?
  • Has this been trending up or down from the start of the Village Era?

200,000 is too small. That's smaller than the population of Fire Country.

[X] Action Plan: Structural Reforms
 
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This reason is because the mission is to actually kill the Summoner, who is a known Jonin.

I have been under the impression that the summoners for the scrolls we're after (Porcupines, Krakens) are dead.
Also we can always get in touch with J's contacts then head back to leaf. We can do this in stages
 
This reason is because the mission is to actually kill the Summoner, who is a known Jonin.

I have been under the impression that the summoners for the scrolls we're after (Porcupines, Krakens) are dead.

Exactly, we on the other hand are, in the best case scenario, a Leaf Sealmaster that knows Skywalkers outside of Leaf, at worse(Meaning if the other villages aren't made of idiots) the person that could have invented Skywalkers outside of Leaf. If we're discovered? We could see S-rankers after us, not Jonin.
I'm not opposed to doing it, but doing everything in one plan, without even making sure we have an S-ranker covering our back...If someone see us going out of Leaf, things are going to get difficult
 
Exactly, we on the other hand are, in the best case scenario, a Leaf Sealmaster that knows Skywalkers outside of Leaf, at worse(Meaning if the other villages aren't made of idiots) the person that could have invented Skywalkers outside of Leaf. If we're discovered? We could see S-rankers after us, not Jonin.
I'm not opposed to doing it, but doing everything in one plan, without even making sure we have an S-ranker covering our back...If someone see us going out of Leaf, things are going to get difficult
That wasn't my point. At all.

My point was that the Condor mission and our mission are completely different.
 
That wasn't my point. At all.

My point was that the Condor mission and our mission are completely different.

I see, my point wasn't "We're going to fight a summoner" but "Even Amy, a Jonin, prefer bringing a S-ranker when going into that kind of battlefield", i can see how my argument could be misunderstood, but core of it was "Ami, a Jonin, when going into a Jonin/S-Ranker Battlefield, is bringing an S-ranker", we're going into a situation we could easily meet enemies of that caliber with the least possible preparation.
Re-reading my post i should have formulated the argument better, fair is fair.
 
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