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Marked for Death: A Rational Naruto Quest

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@Enjou Oh! One more thing before I pass out. Either on the way in, or assuming we've already got the materials, Hazou should test invisible ink. That could be the little extra that Mari was talking about.
 
OliWhail said:
A note in case you wake up in time: it was the meeting room that was said to be shielded, not the cell.
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Thanks, will fix. EDIT - done

Cariyaga said:
@Enjou Oh! One more thing before I pass out. Either on the way in, or assuming we've already got the materials, Hazou should test invisible ink. That could be the little extra that Mari was talking about.
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Alright, I'll see about adding the notion. EDIT - done

Langevin said:
*snip*
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Imma gonna need half an hour to fully wake up and some breakfast before I have the willpower to go over these. Will look though.
 
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Well, no lore update this time. Sunday's, or rather, Monday's update promises to be a very interesting update.

Hopefully not in the Chinese sense of the word.
 
@Enjou

Adding to the reason to NOT do the mission, have Hazō notes the risk of the pangolin summoning scroll and the skywalker tech falling into the enemy hand, and that our genin can't possibly survive against a possible jonin plus her summons plus Hinago ninja and scroll thieves.
 
[-] Training Hazou: Fly You Fool 2.0
[-] Training Noburi: Fly You Fool 2.0
[-] Training Keiko: Fly You Fool 2.0
[x] Training Hazou: None
[x] Training Noburi: None
[x] Training Keiko: None
 
eaglejarl said:
FYI: I'm not going to follow such a clause this time. The update will end where I choose to end it. This is too interesting a segment to get wordus interruptus on.
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Removing the line at the end about this since you won't follow it anyways.

eaglejarl said:
I'm fine with this. The codes are to be used with a patrol and Mari thinks it's a good time to use them.
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Removing unnecessary arguments bits since we already have Mari's opinion.

Kiba said:
@Enjou

Adding to the reason to NOT do the mission, have Hazō notes the risk of the pangolin summoning scroll and the skywalker tech falling into the enemy hand, and that our genin can't possibly survive against a possible jonin plus her summons plus Hinago ninja and scroll thieves.
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Added some of this to the opening. Not going to get too verbose about it because the risks are probably obvious to the team.
 
Well catching up was quite a rollercoaster ride. The thread never sleeps.

Wrt the currently winning plan, we need to consider for timetable for our emigration. We also should ask for a summary of Konoha's laws wrt it's citizens and said citizens obligations to Konoha. Not knowing the rules we will have to abide by for the foreseeable future is undoubtedly going to end badly for us.

As for an origin cover story, we could have paperwork claiming we are long lost refugees from Whirlpool.

And if we need stretch goals, we could ask for unrestricted access to all of Konoha's secret techniques. Or jonin-rank access to the library. The more books we have the better.
 
@Enjou PING PING PING
Enjou said:
Mari's intel on Mist
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Mari had issues with risking sacrificing all her old friends to Mist. We'll obviously give this if prompted but don't bring it up yourself.
Enjou said:
A genin to taste our food for us at random. Suggest the Akimichi kid. He'd enjoy it.
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This does not sound nice. Remove it, it'll be "assumed" with the next line, i.e., with Kagome's other demands.
Enjou said:
Bypass rough terrain - Example: the team moved from middle of the continent to Snow, and then from Snow to a tropical island, in a matter of days, crossing over a dozen borders undetected.
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Possibly add "we were able to go through the Land of Fire without, presumably, being detected in the slightest"
Enjou said:
  • Walking upside-down or sideways; fully exhibiting the entire range of human acrobatic motion - hopping, skipping, jumping, spinning, sprinting, mock combat with full jutsu usage - while sideways or upside-down, doing so for several minutes at a time
  • Jiraiya has a friendly spar against Mari to demonstrate the full power of Skywalker evasiveness & stealth buffs?
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Avoid combat showing. I'm honestly worried someone watching Jiraiya (since we're gonna be in Leaf, right) will react badly.
Enjou said:
Your counter: Regardless if it sounds outrageous, what matters is the actual value of the strategic asset on offer, and the actual value of Skywalkers is far beyond the asking price. How many S-class missions would he take in order to ensure +20 TacMove, +15 Stealth for every Leaf jounin? Most of what Hazou is asking for is a moderate expense for a Hidden Village (an A-rank witness protection mission, some money, etc) or actively helpful to improving Skywalkers (high-status/resource position, Hana's safety - Hazou more able to develop WMDs if his mother is outside the blast radius).
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Enjou said:
Your counter: Yes, which is why Hazou is selling Skywalkers for relatively cheap, instead of asking for 50 S-Rank and 200 A-Rank missions worth of favors. Also countered by establishing alternative buyers and taking reasonable precautions
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Replace Hazou with "Mari" or "we". Mari is doing the negotiating, not Hazou. "Mari" is selling Skywalkers, not Hazou.

Edit: Also, don't mention WMDs. Fuck that.
Enjou said:
Your counter: You had the seal for how long and didn't think of this? Wonder what Hazou could come up with if allowed to look at all of Leaf's Seals...
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I'd rather not say this at all, it seems pushy for us to be asking for all of Leaf's seals so quickly. Might lead to something bad.

If you must keep it, replace Hazou with "we". "We" will be coming up with new stuff, not just Hazou.
 
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Dictator4Hire said:
Well catching up was quite a rollercoaster ride. The thread never sleeps.

Wrt the currently winning plan, we need to consider for timetable for our emigration. We also should ask for a summary of Konoha's laws wrt it's citizens and said citizens obligations to Konoha. Not knowing the rules we will have to abide by for the foreseeable future is undoubtedly going to end badly for us.

As for an origin cover story, we could have paperwork claiming we are long lost refugees from Whirlpool.

And if we need stretch goals, we could ask for unrestricted access to all of Konoha's secret techniques. Or jonin-rank access to the library. The more books we have the better.
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March 31st was in the 500 range, which was record breaking, while yesterday was in the 400 range.

We're not going to see that for quite a while in the quest.
 
1234qwerty said:
Put our seals/etc in the summoning realm as last time to avoid confiscation from patrols.
Placate Kagome about joining Leaf before he's ready by emphasizing that this involves Keiko's safety and preventing an enemy that can counter our air control from getting more powerful.
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Added these.

faflec said:
Mari had issues with risking sacrificing all her old friends to Mist. We'll obviously give this if prompted but don't bring it up yourself.[/USER]
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I'll make a note of it.

This does not sound nice. Remove it, it'll be "assumed" with the next line, i.e., with Kagome's other demands.
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Done.

Possibly add "we were able to go through the Land of Fire without, presumably, being detected in the slightest"
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Will do.

Avoid combat showing. I'm honestly worried someone watching Jiraiya (since we're gonna be in Leaf, right) will react badly.
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It's a spar. It would happen in a controlled environment, and any watching ANBU (who will be there just because we're there) would be aware of what it is. I'm not really worried about it.

Replace Hazou with "Mari" or "we". Mari is doing the negotiating, not Hazou. "Mari" is selling Skywalkers, not Hazou.
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Will switch.

Edit: Also, don't mention WMDs. Fuck that.
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Didn't even notice that. Removing it. Yeah, no WMDs.

I'd rather not say this at all, it seems pushy for us to be asking for all of Leaf's seals so quickly. Might lead to something bad.

If you must keep it, replace Hazou with "we". "We" will be coming up with new stuff, not just Hazou.
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I will switch it to something less specific, like "more of Leaf's seal library" or something along those lines that isn't so greedy. Basically, the idea is sound, but yes, the entire Leaf seal library is too much.

Also, will switch this instance to "your team".

EDIT - All done.
 
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