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Marked for Death: A Rational Naruto Quest

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[X] Do not get ready for Leaf destruction; maintain actions from previous plan
 
I mean, I don't particularly want to deviate from the previous plan, but on the other hand I kinda want to have a bit where Hazou says to Noburi, similar sentiment if not exact wording:

"By the way, Noburi, I thank you for your contributions to my organization. The reminder was sincerely appreciated, and I am overflowing with gratitude for your help. In fact, I am so overcome with gratitude that I feel the need to pay you back in kind."

Edit: does anyone have any comments about integrating this into our scene?
 
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I'm not actually against deviating from prevous plan, ^ that was just a panic "NO NO NO NO NO NO" vote.
 
eaglejarl said:
Done! :>

And, of course, 'screaming in kagome' in honor of...well, originally @faflec but many other people since then.
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None of the others?
Vecht said:
Cover art by Jen Cao.
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Those are all really good, with the sole exceptions of Hazo (perspective's all wonky, which doesn't match the rest of the piece) and Kagome's katana (looks weird, also why would he have a katana when he could carry hand grenades).
Vecht said:
And special thanks to @OliWhail for gathering feedback from peoples, coordinating with the artist throughout the project, and for faithfully preserving my anonymity as the benefactor.

...Er, wait.
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:rofl::lol:rofl:
 
My observations on the latest chapter:

-Keiko does not seem perturbed by being the agent of a murderous enslaving race and the one to have assisted, armed and instigated thousands of deaths and generations of misery. Does the Uplift plan apply only to humans?

-Keiko regards Hazo's opinion very highly but while it might seem comical, is troubled by her sexuality. It fuels her aversion to touch, which will give her many problems in the future.

-Hazo, if I recall correctly, doesn't seem to be as open with Akane as with Keiko.

Suggestions:

-Ask Keiko to ask the pangolins about the outcome of previous wars between races in the Summon realm. Do they have a legitimate fear of what they're doing to the Condors happening to them?

-Let the kids play! Grim stressful paranoia and being ready to kill or be killed is great and all for a ninja, but a human being must be able to switch off their survival mode to provide a peaceful counterpoint. For example, US soldiers are constantly reminded that they're fighting for the cozy homes and social lives they left. Marines spend gruelling hours in the mud, but also enjoy bonding moments with their unit and a sense of belonging and contributing to the general Armed Forces collective. What we're doing here is pushing these kids to become killing machines... but also social disasters that will eventually find themselves in a situation where their skills don't matter or aren't suited.
So, again, let them play. Have some physical, non-training fun. Even in canon Naruto, some 'training' was just playing tag, running and throwing contests or team effort exercises.

-Some of Keiko's touch issues can be mitigated by expanding her experiences of physical contact. Less sparring, more hand-holding and carrying each other. Maybe disguise it as rescue training for an incapacitated team-member, or hands-on instruction on how to inspect each other for fractures, torn ligaments or internal bleeding. Lots of touching there that isn't hostile or controlled. And hugging. And hand-shaking. We might conceal it as integration training.
 
matterbeam said:
-Some of Keiko's touch issues can be mitigated by expanding her experiences of physical contact. Less sparring, more hand-holding and carrying each other. Maybe disguise it as rescue training for an incapacitated team-member, or hands-on instruction on how to inspect each other for fractures, torn ligaments or internal bleeding. Lots of touching there that isn't hostile or controlled. And hugging. And hand-shaking. We might conceal it as integration training.
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@MadScientist Do you know how to contact DayStarEld and ask about haphephobia (fear of touch) treatments for Keiko?
 
huhYeahGoodPoint said:
I mean, I don't particularly want to deviate from the previous plan, but on the other hand I kinda want to have a bit where Hazou says to Noburi, similar sentiment if not exact wording:

"By the way, Noburi, I thank you for your contributions to my organization. The reminder was sincerely appreciated, and I am overflowing with gratitude for your help. In fact, I am so overcome with gratitude that I feel the need to pay you back in kind."

Edit: does anyone have any comments about integrating this into our scene?
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N: "Say that in CCNJ."
H: "I refuse."
N: "Because you're planning something, or because the thought of you planning something is payback enough?"
H: "No comment."
 
[X] Bracing For Tea, Post-Tolerance
  • Execute Bracing For Tea, ignoring scenes that have already been carried out.
  • When asking Akane about ice, mention that Noburi has challenged us to a prank war, and being good teammates we need to respond in kind.
  • When briefing Minami, mention that we'll be doing Awareness training exercises over the coming weeks for revenge out of our concern for our teammates
  • Tell Noburi, in an extremely polite and friendly manner, that we'll be returning the favor over the coming days and weeks.
 
1234qwerty said:
POW, right in the hivemind. Keiko doesn't know the half of it, but is likely one of the few capable of being properly horrified if she found out.
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I somehow feel I'm relegated to some horrifying weapons lab with @Radvic where we take shifts being the little devils on Hazou's shoulders. I guess it's currently my turn. Must mean Radvic has some new plan to make the world burn.
 
Nejiranu said:
I somehow feel I'm relegated to some horrifying weapons lab with @Radvic where we take shifts being the little devils on Hazou's shoulders. I guess it's currently my turn. Must mean Radvic has some new plan to make the world burn.
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Not really. Your cute little FAE bombs don't really have the horrifying nonlinear potential that only a true @Radvic weapon would have. Stuff like the implosion planet buster, and the transfinite bomb, for example.

FAE bombs are really just good sense.
 
Im thinking we should work out some safety measures. Like, Ultra-powerfull YOUTHSUIT that we can make without major preperations or equipment. It would be usefull to posess a way to create such dangerous weapons in death-cell situation. Scaring them with 'If you don't let us out, we'll blow up the whole village together with ourselves to shreds' would be a good way to save our little lives.

Over-all, we should check what are the limits for materials for seals. Is it bound to paper, or can we make them on stones, wood, Leaves, Sand. . . In pure chakra flow?
If we aren't bound to paper (And we shouldn't be, since paper wasn't always there. Im more inclined to seeing it as convenient.), and if we check to see what is recognised as a proper chakra-ink (Again, Is pure chakra regarded as legitimate ink?), We'd be able to create seals engraved in walls, ground, Bah, even floating in the air.
 
Matesz said:
Im thinking we should work out some safety measures. Like, Ultra-powerfull YOUTHSUIT that we can make without major preperations or equipment. It would be usefull to posess a way to create such dangerous weapons in death-cell situation. Scaring them with 'If you don't let us out, we'll blow up the whole village together with ourselves to shreds' would be a good way to save our little lives.

Over-all, we should check what are the limits for materials for seals. Is it bound to paper, or can we make them on stones, wood, Leaves, Sand. . . In pure chakra flow?
If we aren't bound to paper (And we shouldn't be, since paper wasn't always there. Im more inclined to seeing it as convenient.), and if we check to see what is recognised as a proper chakra-ink (Again, Is pure chakra regarded as legitimate ink?), We'd be able to create seals engraved in walls, ground, Bah, even floating in the air.
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You, I like. I've been thinking for a while that Hazō's character has survived too long in this high-lethality death world campaign.
 
Voting is closed.

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Plan name: Bracing For Tea
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Num votes: 5


Plan name: Hazou: Face Puncher
Voters: @2BR02B, @Cariyaga, @faflec, @Oneiros43, @Rafin
Num votes: 5


Plan name: Noburi: Living Water
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Num votes: 5


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Let the Bodies Hit the Floor
Voters: @Cariyaga, @ContextBot, @huhYeahGoodPoint, @Traiden, @Vecht
Num votes: 5


Plan name: Do not get ready for Leaf destruction; maintain actions from previous plan
Voters: @faflec, @Inferno Vulpix, @Vecht
Num votes: 3


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Arikada Takedown
Voters: @ContextBot, @huhYeahGoodPoint, @Vecht
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Plan name: Bracing For Tea, Post-Tolerance
Voters: @huhYeahGoodPoint
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Color the water in Noburi's barrel pink, with genjutsu if possible.
Voters: @Draconomial
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Get ready for leaf destruction
Voters: @Matesz
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Hazou Close
Voters: @huhYeahGoodPoint
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Keiko: Chakra Buff
Voters: @faflec
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Beach Scenes
Voters: @Vecht
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Buy a YOUTHSUIT
Voters: @Cariyaga
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Dreams and lists (uncensored)
Voters: @faflec
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Go Pretty Damn Far to Keep Her Safe
Voters: @Cariyaga
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): Swamp of Death
Voters: @Vecht
Num votes: 1


Plan name: Poll (Manga Pages): VHitM Battleground
Voters: @Vecht
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Plan name: Where's My Lab Coat?
Voters: @Raxner
Num votes: 1



Number of voters: 14
 
Hey all, I haven't been able to follow the thread recently due to spotty internet and other obligations where I am, but I just want to say that I'm really glad I found this community back in November. Even though I've only been an infrequent poster, I've been reading this pretty constantly since then, and it's a really friendly and welcoming and interesting community. I wanted to let people know that I'm going to have poor internet access for the next two weeks, and then I'm going to disappear on a canoe trip in Western Ontario until the middle of August. Not quite as long as @Radvic, but pretty remote. If anyone wants more information, let me know; otherwise, I'm looking forward to seeing where the team goes!
 
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