and every more of everything that you can do to keep yourself from picking at the thread
Should be "even".
Onogoro would never let something like that happy.
Should be "happen".
what you could have ever hopped
Should be "hoped".
Every single instance of this word in this update is misspelled. It should be "Vajra".
I was created to help bring this world to it's knees.
Should be "its".
"Is that what you think I'm trying to make you do."
Should be a question mark.
"They've fought warriors of the Doketsu zone before,
Should probably be capitalized? I don't know enough about the series to know if it's a proper noun.
as it makes it's way back towards the woman.
Should be "its".
Seems much more like the kinds of foolish plans that you come up with.
Should probably be "kind".
"But how exactly do you plan on proving it."
Should be a question mark.
to something looser and lighter on it's feet that she is planning on running.
Should be "its".
- As the Poisony possessed woman's hands begin to glow black, lashing out,
I think just "possessed" would suffice in this case. Or if you're set on keeping her name in there, "Poisony-possessed" would also work.
In a way, it is like the woman is strapped to a bunch of bungie cords that will prevent her from touching herself. it's not perfect,
Should be capitalized. Also, this is the first instance I can recall this word used correctly.
or whoever this person really is is going to be sore in the morning,
Should be a period.
Shouldn't be capitalized.
"I'm free up, so what's the issue."
Should be a question mark.
"Begone." The says simply to the creature.
Should probably be "He".
two more fighters brings the second to it's knees
Should be "its".
"I'm free up, so what's the issue."
As the last part of this particular update is a direct copy-and-paste of the last one, it has the same errors.
had all arrived at Natts house
Should be "Natts'".
Should be capitalized.
even as Neptune manages to catch the blonde senshi,
Should probably be capitalized?
Should be capitalized.
will accept whatever decision you.
Sentence seems to end abruptly. Maybe should end with "you make."?
Destroy me, Banish me, let me go.
Don't think this should be capitalized.
So the question is... What will Sailor Moon suggest to the two.
Should be a question mark.
To avoid double-posting:
Some of these will seem out of order. That is because most of these were collected while on my phone, and apparently SV keeps the mobile version separate from the desktop version, and it took me this long to find that out.
The Youma is nearly as all as it is wide,
Should be "tall".
the arms that are as wide as the Ami is in total
Unneeded word.
that Daisuke ha been waiting for.
Should be "has".
the demon as it's body begins
Should be "its".
Black blood spills from the creatures wounds
Should be "creature's".
adn I wanted to thank him for helping him when he was younger."
Should be "and".
for her to have magic strong enough that Inuyasha compared it to magic users of her own time...
Should be "his".
The gem stone flowers contract, closing in on themselves to become Ten separate gems placed along the back of the blade. There, right at the edge of the hilt is a glimmering ruby, then the second gemstone is a glistening Emerald, followed by a shining diamond. After that comes a shiny Tigers eye and a a garnet, then a glittering yellow sapphire. After that is a Lapis Lazuli, a pale blue Amazonite, then a purple Amethyst, and finally a piece of black Tourmaline.
This one is a bit different.
Red are errors;
"gemstone"
"Tiger's"
Extra "a".
And
Blue represent the improper or inconsistent capitalization, mostly of the gemstones.
and there is a sound that can best be described as a glass shattering, only with the base turned ALL the way up,
From context this should be "bass".
The Blood Blade Tessaiga is a Gem encrusted form of the Tessaiga with a thorned hilt. When wielding the Blood Blade Tessaiga, the thorns on it's hilt stab into the user's hand, drawing and drinking the user's blood. This process fills a portion of the Crystal Clear Blade with the users blood which allows for any techniques that use the user's blood to be channeled and used through the Tessaiga, as well as several new techniques which can be used via the blade. Additional abilities that this form of the blade grants to it's user is the capability to pierce through the Dimensional Veils that Youma use to hide their folded spaces, and knowledge of the location of the celestial bodies.
In order, "its", "user's", and "its" again.
Every fucking thing that Beryl said to use was a lie.
Should be "us".
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Should be "TRY".
Is a belt that the rrevious Princess of Jupiter wore."
Should be "previous".
But Sailor Venus when Sailor V encountered him, she discovered that he had been a traitor,
I think this should be just "Sailor V"?
"She had killed... or at least, so she thought."
I think this should be followed up with "him".
After words, she was apparently inconsolable,
Should be "Afterwards".
The last time that the girl say the Dark General,
Should be "saw".
So... the dark thought worms it's way into her head.
even as the monster had it's hands
Should be "its".
"I heard you yell," Luna says, "What happened."
"Not to say that I don't believe you, but are you certain." Luna asks,
Should be a question mark.
"So you're saying that Mom is going to be okay?" Usagi asks?
I think this should be a period.
just because a different random stranger said that the attackers actions were out of the ordinary.
Should be "attacker's".
While she can't change schools until the investigation is done, but the idea of moving is becoming more enticing to the dark haired Senshi.
I don't think this word is necessary.
towards her friends house.
Should be "friend's".
and watch the fire works to make sure that nothing bad happened.
Should be "fireworks".
Kimiko isn't sure who she can trust this information too,
Should be "to".
With a grin and a nod, Kimiko Salutes the Superintendent. "Yes Ma'am!"
Shouldn't be capitalized.
"Those who Desecrate the Holy Fountains!" The White wearing Pretty Cure says, before her partner steps up, pointing at the Uzaina.
The sentence after the dialogue maintains the formatting of the Rainbow Text.
Saki and Mai look to the leader of the Sailor Senshi fora moment,
Should be "for a".
Vision and taste are the first too fade,
Should be "to".
This minuet sliver of power
Should be "minute".
They're King Oblivion is actually Azazel,
Should be "Their".
However, for all of it's frustrations,
does has it's own... difficulties.
Should be "its".
The feeling reminds her of the 'Cured Mask' that she once saw when she was younger, during one of the times that her grandfather took her to one of the other Shrines in the area.
I'm assuming this should be "Cursed Mask".
Rei stops, shelves fthe thought
Should be "the".
"For some reason, you're body is eating up close to ten times the magic that the regular person does.
Should be "your".
and over all making become tired easier because your blood would suffer.
Should be "overall".
they just became hungrier than normal,"Ami argues,
Should be a space immediately after the quotation mark.
Finally, after close to ten minutes of teasing the two Pretty Cure back and Forth, Pisard laughs at the way that the gasp and wheeze.
Shouldn't be capitalized.
Should be "they".
However... Usagi glances over to Naru, her thoughts racing.\
Unneeded backslash.
Should be "its".
crafting an image for herself that is very much not at all what magic eating girl looks like under ordinary...
Should be a "the" between these two words.
and the transformations svelte appearance
Should be "transformation's".
And now, back to where I left off:
order to restore the fountain of metal.
From context, both of these should capitalized.
but honorable and straight forward.
Should be "straight-foward".
They say that it's hidden away inside of a Chiropractor's office.
I don't think this should be capitalized.
Knowing where the place is isn't enough to be allowed in. No, there's some kind of password that you need in order to actually get in and use the service. Unfortunately, it seems that no one knows what the place is...
This seems like it should be "what the password is".
Seems that she isn't the only one whose
Should be "who's". "Whose" is a possessive pronoun, while "who's" is the desired contraction of "who has". Or "who is", but that version isn't currently relevant.
Should be "Every".
Meanwhile, Her dad sits at the table,
"Anyways. I'm trying something new for Breakfast."
Shouldn't be capitalized.
The moment that Usagi's eyes with the other girls, Ahma freezes for a moment,
Should be "eyes meet with".
Should be "girl's".
except when she is Sailor Moon perks up. the moment
Should be capitalized.
and finally the one thing that you really wanted to know about.
Should be "she".
