@Dr. Snark

I now have +40!

Also I promise not to abuse the omakes too much. Also don't you think the exploration option for lore is too much? I mean what will we do if we clean out that tree? Can we only get half as strong skills in order to keep some balance instead of nomming all of the skills?
 
...I know you've made this argument before, but I really don't see why "Peacemaker" is the best anti-Palpatine option on offer. Why not reach out to the anti-Palpatine faction in the Senate instead?

On the other hand, you might be right that Palpatine intends to draw the CNS into the war, and so we should go 'all hands on deck' to pre-emptively foil his plans. But again, making contacts and allies within the Senate (and aligning ourselves with the anti-war, anti-militarism party) would go a long way to relieve people's fears....

Because of how the Force works. All the death and violence is fueling the Dark Side. Also, Palpatine's plans depend on escalating violence and chaos. If we can force a pause, that seriously derails his schemes as billions of people catch a breath and ask "wait, why are we fighting again". And then of course, we can show them door #3.

I'm all for letting violence escalate when it helps Ciaran, but I think right now we need to take some wind from Palpatine's sails.

Also, I think you are seriously over-estimating the strength and capability of the Senate anti-Palpatine faction. Right now, the Republic is facing escalating disasters and that is going to encourage senators to back Palps. To give the anti-Palpatine faction a chance, I think we need peacemaking.

fasquardon
 

You think we want the galaxy to be a unified orderly system? What have you been smoking? Such a galaxy would result in our destruction more likely than not, and even if we would be able to live in such a galaxy, we would be unable to grow or expand in any way, shape or form! Look at our situation when we first started, if it wasn't for the chaos that resulted from the preludes to this war, we would most likely still be nothing but a small time crook, instead of one of the major players in the galactic stage. Chaos results in both risk and opportunity in equal measure, while the order that you seem to desire is freezing things, so that no decline or improvement is possible. To Ciaran, I suspect this would be akin to a fate worse than death.


.... no need to be rude -__-

We clearly don't want the Empire to form as I think that could be worse for us, and something like a re-stabilization of the republic would be better. Depending on specifics we could also try to keep the CNS & other groups around to provide multiple factions to allow room to maneuver. But any republic/non-despotic government as big as the galactic republic will give Ciaran room to maneuver. If only due to how politics and politicians are along with special interest groups. Sure it won't be has much as the pre-war republic, but those were exceptional circumstances.

It's not like I'm proposing we try to make the republic corruption free or something. But we also don't want to wreck so much chaos that we can't do trade or risk someone else trying to make a autocratic regime for the sake of 'peace and security' or some such. We also can't risk the current status quo since that serves Palpy more then us - and I doubt working inside the Empire will be ... pleasant.
 
OMAKE COMPILATION POST

Ciaran Interrupt by @Echo 101

A Possible Future: Factions by @Whumbly

Ciaran's Relatives by @Teron

Yorvi the Hutt's Bad Day by @Panory

Playing Favorites by Me

The Dark Plan by @fasquardon

The Light Plan by someone who is bad with names

A Literal Blast from the Past by @Bones

Let's Work Together... Intern by Echo 101

Aggressive Negotiations by this guy

Jack the Ripper by @Silver719

The Weakest Link by the first person to feature Tyro

Hey Cousin, Let's Go Bowling by me again

Boot to the Face Camp by The Great Omake Dragon

Down, Set, Hutt by a Pachirisu in an Emolga hoodie

Thrawn's Assessment of Grievous by @Stealthy

Self-Betterment by the first person to feature PR-1

The First Link by the person running out of names for himself

A Twi-lek Visits Vectivus by Echo 101 again

At Least We're Not Related by take a wild guess

Duel by Echo 101

General Bookkeeping has earned @Publicola a bonus as well

In total, we have +220

People with more than one include myself with +110 and Echo 101 with +40.
 
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@Dr. Snark

I now have +40!

Also I promise not to abuse the omakes too much. Also don't you think the exploration option for lore is too much? I mean what will we do if we clean out that tree? Can we only get half as strong skills in order to keep some balance instead of nomming all of the skills?

...You've got like ten options now, and those are just the sites that are known publicly. That's not going to be a problem.

And as I have said previously I do honestly want to see what will happen when all of these bonuses are applied. For science. Besides, it's why I have the "no more than two bonuses per action" rule now.
 
... now I want to see if I can write a tom clancy esque naval battle [Red Storm Rising style really]... In space. Just to show how the republic and CIS fleets are doing.

But I don't know enough of the verse to grab characters for names ;___;
 
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At Least We're Not Related​


Despite Galvin defining his first mission for the Abyss Watchers as a fiasco, his cousin Ciaran had actually been serious about paying him. And as she had confessed over bowling, she'd be more than happy to funnel some jobs his way when he asked, on the condition he not attempt to murder their grandfather while on Coruscant or Abyss Watcher business. Considering the prices Ciaran attached to her jobs, Galvin certainly wasn't about to rat out the galaxy's greatest humanitarian for nepotism.

He had spent a solid month on Zeltron blowing off steam though, as was his custom when finding one of his female cousins by accident like that. Finding a male cousin like that warranted a several month binge on his homeworld, but he had only been that unfortunate once before. In his defense, Wookies looked remarkably androgynous to the untrained eye.

Once Galvin had finished his pilgrimage, he sent out a call to his cousin to see what she had for him. A lot of it was stuff he could do on the way back to Coruscant anyway. Apparently some information leak needed plugged before he could scurry off to CIS space. His worst mistake was trying to betray Ciaran. His second was making a bee line for his destination in the fastest ship as if Ciaran didn't have any agents between Coruscant and Separatist space. Like him. Or the entirety of the CNS. Apparently hiring him had eliminated any need for the CNS to explain why they'd shot him down though, and Galvin wasn't about to say no to more credits in his bank account.

Then she had him pick up and experimental ship from Sienar Systems for delivery to Coruscant so she could look it over and provide feedback about future designs. At first Galvin was a bit worried, what with the ship being experimental and all, but his doubts were washed away as soon as he started flying the thing. The ship handled like a dream, had more systems than he could reasonably fiddle with on the way to Coruscant, and goddamn if it wasn't comfortable.

He almost felt sad when he touched down on the planet since it meant he wouldn't be able to keep using the thing. As he was exiting the ship, a Tortuga woman sprinted into the hanger and began climbing on the ship.

"Hey hey! What do you think you're doing?" shouted Galvin.

"Huh?" she started, turning to identify the speaker. "Oh, you must be the pilot. I'm Cheriss, the one Lady Ciaran sent to look over the ship. And oh my Force does it look nice."

"Not as nice looking as you." said Galvin. Unlike most Zeltron his first instinct was violent passion, but romantic passion was still a close second.

Despite the compliment being incredibly basic (Galvin wasn't really trying since he wouldn't put it past Ciaran to find another one of their cousins and recruit her just to torment him), Cheriss still became incredibly flustered.

"Oh um… do you really think so?" she managed to stutter out.

"Of course. I'll have to thank Ciaran for sending such a radiant beauty for me to behold." Cheriss was actually giggling now. "What say you and I get to know each other a little bit better over some drinks later tonight, huh?"

"Okay. Where should we meet?" Fuck. Galvin hadn't thought he'd get this far. He hadn't even had to play the 'I'm a mercenary/bounty hunter, look how dangerous and mysterious I am' card.

"How about I pick you up here later? It can be our special place." Galvin could have kicked himself. He had been saving that line for somewhere a tad more romantic than a fucking hanger.

Apparently some random hanger was romantic enough for her though. "Okay! I'll go get ready." said Cheriss as she ran off, presumably to get ready.


XXX

It wasn't that Cheriss was unused to people hitting on her. She was aware that her body was conventionally attractive, and while the bare midriff was for the emergency ejection of her actual body, it certainly didn't drive men away. But she was always aware that the attraction was purely for a physical form that wasn't her own. But Galvin was Lady Ciaran's cousin, which meant he likely knew she was a Shard. It was her first real chance at an actual romance.

"Cheriss, did you manage to finish those- oh." started Ciaran as she entered Cheriss's room and saw the shard picking out fancier clothes than usual. "Ohhohohohoho. What's the occasion dear Cheriss?"

"I… have a date." said Cheriss carefully. Ciaran's antics were humorous, but Cheriss had a distinct impression they were less enjoyable on the receiving end.

"Well you have fun." said Ciaran, backing out of the room with a disturbingly large grin on her face. "But afterwards… we will talk."

Cheriss shuddered and hurried to where she was meeting Galvin. The hanger was far from romantic, but just the gesture of having a special place was exciting to her. Galvin had managed to beat her there, wearing a pair of bantha leather pants that looked too tight to be comfortable and going topless save for an open vest that ended just past his chest.

"M'lady." He said with an extravagant bow. Cheriss laughed at the absurdity.

"So where are we going? I don't see a transport." Which made sense, since he had taken the experimental ship to Coruscant, leaving his personal one with Sienar Systems.

"Luckily for you, I happen to know the best bar on the planet. And as I was planning to spend my downtime there anyways, this hanger happens to be within walking distance." said Galvin, offering her an arm.

The drinking was fun, both for the stories Galvin had aplenty and the discovery that a Shard's body did in fact absorb alcohol through contact. Shards were also apparently lightweights who couldn't hold their liquor, and the two had to leave a bit earlier than Cheriss would have preferred. Then again, she was so drunk Galvin had to practically carry her home, so her judgement probably wasn't the best in retrospect.

"Well, here we are." said Galvin. "Home sweet home I guess." He didn't remark on the fact that Cheriss's home was in fact just her lab at the Abyss Watcher's headquarters.

"Psst. Galvin." Cheriss whispered, despite the fact that there was no one else in the halls. "Want to see something secret?"

"My lips are sealed." Galvin played along and whispered back. He had been around the block enough times to know that girls did crazy, sexual things when they were drunk, and he knew that Cheriss was completely wasted.

Cheriss reached down slowly, hands gliding over her stomach. Galvin knew exactly what happened after that from experience, and it wasn't for the woman's stomach to open up, revealing a bunch of gently glowing crystals. "Tada!" said Cheriss loudly, apparently not caring that this was a secret. "It's my real body. I don't show it to just anyone you know, so you'd better appreciate it."

Galvin blinked. And again. Out of habit, he defaulted to the question he always asked when what he had expected happened. "Are you in anyway related to Silas Cata?"

"Nope. I don't think Shards and Humans even can reproduce. How would that work?" said Cheriss, giggling at first before getting contemplative about the reproductive capabilities of her species.

"I wouldn't put it past the bastard. He'd find a way." grumbled Galvin. "Still, I suppose that's more than I usually get." Galvin squatted down and kissed the rock in Cheriss that apparently was Cheriss before standing back up and walking to the quarters Ciaran had put aside for her family, stopping only for a second to wish Cheriss farewell.

XXX​

AN: One last omake for double digits and good luck. I can now turn an impossibility into a guaranteed success. Or I could if it weren't for this glass ceiling imposed by the good doctor to bring balance to the quest. General idea for this one came from @ConfusedPotato so thanks for that.


Your welcome, and the omake was just as good as I thought it would be.
 
... now I want to see if I can write a tom clancy esque naval battle [Red Storm Rising really]... In space. Just to show how the republic and CIS fleets are doing.

But I don't know enough of the verse to grab characters for names ;___;

Jesus man are you a novelist? I mean how can your attention be on something so large for so long? I'm being honest here too btw.
 
Jesus man are you a novelist? I mean how can your attention be on something so large for so long? I'm being honest here too btw.

Well I *am* working on my own sci-fi setting as a setting for stories...

so .. yes? I am... sorta?

Really when it comes to something like those very large battles, it helps in the overall story if they are in place to show how it effects the main characters. So for example show casing a large scale naval battle that influnces the politics your main character is dealing with, or keeping your MC's special forces team from being extracted as planned or something.
 
Well I *am* working on my own sci-fi setting as a setting for stories...

so .. yes? I am... sorta?

Really when it comes to something like those very large battles, it helps in the overall story if they are in place to show how it effects the main characters. So for example show casing a large scale naval battle that influnces the politics your main character is dealing with, or keeping your MC's special forces team from being extracted as planned or something.

Well nothing says defining when everything you know turns upside down, so yes. If I may suggests effect of living in a 'normal' world only to have to submit to a new order/regime (kinda like how communists do things) and than fighting a bloody insurrection on some mountains for freedom. As an american nothing gets me going quite like killing communists while holding the line in some mountains.

Or well. W.e it is your doing in your setting Mr. Important writer you with your big words. :)
 
Well nothing says defining when everything you know turns upside down, so yes. If I may suggests effect of living in a 'normal' world only to have to submit to a new order/regime (kinda like how communists do things) and than fighting a bloody insurrection on some mountains for freedom. As an american nothing gets me going quite like killing communists while holding the line in some mountains.

Or well. W.e it is your doing in your setting Mr. Important writer you with your big words. :)

Well I was just thinking of an omake covering a naval battle between the CIS and Republic fleets and using the style of Tom Clancy's Red Storm Rising as a basis for how to handle writing the battle - thats all.

besides... America is clearly a naval power. Nothing is more American then sending warships to deal with it (Barbary Corsairs, the French, The British (round two), Spanish Fleet, Germans, Japanese....)
 
Seeing as things are getting heated up, we might want to lean towards enhancements as opposed to more stuff.

Defenses, better quality equipment or training, a firmer foundation, etc.
 
... now I want to see if I can write a tom clancy esque naval battle [Red Storm Rising style really]... In space. Just to show how the republic and CIS fleets are doing.

But I don't know enough of the verse to grab characters for names ;___;

I can tell you that the admiral that generally hangs around Obi-Wan and Anakin is named Yularen for starters. After that, I'd recommend having Sev'rance either directly or indirectly be the main opponent.

I'm certainly not providing these names because I totally would want to see that. Not at all.
 
I can tell you that the admiral that generally hangs around Obi-Wan and Anakin is named Yularen for starters. After that, I'd recommend having Sev'rance either directly or indirectly be the main opponent.

But would Obi-Wan and Anakin hang around these guys in THIS galaxy? Remember, we stopped the Jedi from being generals when Ciaran told the Jedi council off to their faces.

fasquardon
 
I can tell you that the admiral that generally hangs around Obi-Wan and Anakin is named Yularen for starters. After that, I'd recommend having Sev'rance either directly or indirectly be the main opponent.

I'm certainly not providing these names because I totally would want to see that. Not at all.

Given that the scenes for Luke and Han fighting off tie fighters where based off WW2 bomber turret gunner footage I'm going to assume the battles work like WW2 naval combat... IN SPACE.

Just need to decide who 'wins' tactically

... oh and likely task force compositions.
 
Omake Directory for Turn 22:
Total: +280

(EDIT: Ninja'd by Panory. Curses. Still useful).
(EDIT 2: I also keep it updated in case people publish more omakes. Which they did. Of course.)
(EDIT 3: ...and we just hit the cap for this turn. Well done!)

@Echo 101: +40
Omake - CIARAN! *Shakes fist*
Omake - Let's work together...intern
Omake - A Twi-Leki visits Darth Vectivus

@Whumbly: +10
Possible Future: Factions

@Teron: +10

@Panory: +140
Yorvi the Hutt and the Terrible, Horrible, No Good, Very Bad Day
Aggressive Negotiations
Hey Cousin, Let's Go Bowling
Boot to the Face Camp
At Least We're Not Related
A Totally In-Character Meeting
The Following is a Non-Profit Fan-Based Parody

@fasquardon: +10

@Bones: +10
OMAKE: Blast From The Past (Literally)

@Silver719: +10

@Stealthy: +10
Excerpts from Mitth'raw'nuruodo's Assessment of Key Members of the Abyss Watchers Organization

@BurnNote: +20
Snips and Thrawn play games together

@Publicola: +10
Map: Abyss Watcher Assets & CNS Space
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Given the everything, I'm prepared to throw out a +10 for generally making my life a lot easier with this. I'd give you another one under normal circumstances, but I honestly think you're close to hitting the bonus limit at this point between Panoply and everyone else.
@Dr. Snark: If we don't hit the bonus limit, would I get the extra +10? :ninja:

Also, does Whumbly get any bonuses for the pictures of our Seekers/Guardians/Abyss Agents?
Also I found a picture for our seeker uniform. Just add a opaque visor over the eyes:
My other idea was to keep using Rebel Armour stock, but I wasn't sure what people would think:

Finally, you didn't mark it as an omake, but does @Killerflood get a bonus from his scene with the Hutt and the 'Random Unknown Nobody'?
Hutt: "I need better assistants."
 
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Omake Directory for Turn 22:
Total: +220

(EDIT: Ninja'd by Panory. Curses. Still useful).

@Echo 101: +40





@Whumbly: +10


@Teron: +10


@Panory: +110












@fasquardon: +10


@Bones: +10


@Silver719: +10


@Stealthy: +10


@Publicola: +10





@Dr. Snark: If we don't hit the bonus limit, would I get the extra +10? :ninja:

Also, does Whumbly get any bonuses for the pictures of our Seekers/Guardians/Abyss Agents?



Finally, you didn't mark it as an omake, but does @Killerflood get a bonus from his scene with the Hutt and the 'Random Unknown Nobody'?
Holy mother of-
 
A few items I noticed on the re-read:
19 Watcher teams + 2-5 per turn (Survival Rate 60%) (Cap 20)
We should spend at most 9 this turn to keep it maxed. We might actually want to spend fewer to make sure our Watcher teams are maxed for next turn, given the ominous noises Dr. Snark has been making...

Incidentally, the Neimoidia base would also increase the cap and boost the combat strength of all our droid units, just by giving us an excuse to come & go and move stuff off-planet.
According to this, our facility on Neimoidia can actually produce any and all known Trade Federation vehicles.
As for the heavier vehicles, it's more of the fact that there's really not a good way to get them off of Nemodia without raising a lot of questions. You might need a better presence to figure that out. (Hint, hint.)
I'm still not convinced we should spend money on upgrading it, but it's food for thought.

Finally, I will pay good money (and/or enthusiastically press the 'like' button) for someone to come up with a good name for our Humanitarian organization and/or our Security Company.
In unrelated news, can we please decide on a name for our 'Humanitarian organization'? In a quest full of awesome names, leaving it as a generic 'unnamed Humanitarian organization' feels just so wrong.
The same applies for our new Coruscant-based 'Security Company', especially since that will be responsible for protecting any number of anti-Palpatine Senators in the near future. I gave it a bland 'Abyss Security Inc.' name, but I'd prefer to come up with something more creative.
Honestly, in a turn with so many omakes, I really thought someone would have added an off-hand mention of either one at some point.


Finally for @Dr. Snark: just after I posted the asset text of our new asteroid base, I updated it with a line describing the depelted iron mine. Feel free to add that to the front page...
The Home (Asteroid Base), MZX32905 asteroid field
- Jonex Mine 8-11B (depleted)
 
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