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Naruto reimagined as a deathworld without most of the canon plot holes.
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Chapter 0: Out of the Mist
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The Adventure Begins
by @Velorien


Three weeks ago, you became a traitor.

The summons had come out of nowhere. After the series of unfortunate incidents that had you branded "disrespectful of authority", you'd been stuck with one D-rank mission after another, using your finely-honed skills to chop onions and stack boxes while your fellow genin battled brigands and infiltrated criminal associations. So when it seemed like the Powers That Be had finally forgiven you, and wanted you to be part of something important again, you jumped at the chance.

It was nothing like the missions you were used to. You were one of many genin on the mission, led by several chūnin, and even multiple jōnin. A powerful battle unit that would march into contested territory and end the region's biggest conflict once and for all. A dream come true for a genin afraid that their career was over before it had even begun.

But after a week's travel came the night when things went wrong. Raised voices coming from the commander's tent. The ring of steel on steel. Then, before any of you could get close, a brilliant flash of light that could only have been ninjutsu. After a second's silence, Shikigami-sensei emerged from the tent, covered in blood. The commander did not.

With the entire camp watching, it was too late for damage control, so Shikigami-sensei told you all the truth, and showed you the commander's documents. You discovered that you weren't a heroic strike force. You were a collection of problem ninja - some with histories of insubordination, others whose loyalty had come under question or who had shown excessive ambition... The details didn't matter. What mattered was that you were being led into a battle you couldn't win, your purpose to soften up the enemy before the real squads arrived and completed the mission. Your death sentences were already signed.

So all of you ran. It was a painful decision. It meant abandoning your friends and family. It meant giving up on countless hopes, ambitions and plans. But your village wanted you dead, and your other choices were to continue with the suicide mission, or to go back and face court martial for abandoning it.

Now you're a missing-nin. After three weeks on the run, you were able to find a safe place to make a longer-term base, with concealment on the level of a small ninja village. Your perimeter is secure for now, your supplies are adequate, and between your eighteen genin, your six chūnin and your three jōnin, you have a good range of skills and expertise. But your names are in the Bingo Book, and if your village considered you dangerous before, it will stop at nothing to find and destroy you now.

The clock is ticking. What path will you choose in order to survive?
 
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Rules, Stunts, Jutsu, Characters, etc




Welcome to Marked For Death, an AU Naruto-verse quest by and for the rational fiction crowd. The protagonist, Gōketsu-née-Kurosawa Hazō, is a young ninja from the Village Hidden in the Mist who went missing, had adventures, and then managed to buy his way into the Village Hidden in the Leaves by way of a seal that he co-invented which transformed warfare.


For anyone new to quest participation, the basic notion (for the purposes of this story) is that everyone in the thread controls a single character (Hazō) by voting on what the character does. We use approval voting, meaning that you can vote for as many plans as you like.

This AU has some significant changes from canon, so be careful relying on OOC knowledge. Also, very important: Filler is not canon in MfD unless explicitly stated to be.



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Author: Your humble poster, eaglejarl. I'll be posting every Sunday.
Author: Velorien. He'll be posting every Thursday.
Gentleman, Scholar, Master of Mechanics: Paperclipped
Grandmaster of Questions and Documentation, He of a Million Omake: OliWhail


Special thanks to:

Loremaster First Class: faflec. His photographic memory has made it much easier for both players and QMs to keep everything straight. We've started checking things with him before deploying them, just to make sure we don't accidentally contradict ourselves.

Former QMs: AugSphere and Jackercracks for their early contributions in setting up and running the first portions of the quest.



Thank Yous and Acknowledgements

The QMs would like to say that we have the most amazing players ever. They spent time, energy, and real-world money to commission professional fanart as birthday presents for myself (eaglejarl) and Velorien. These are actual physical paintings that they snail-mailed to us. You folks rule.

Expand the following so that you can see both of the amazing pieces:


Finally, a special thank you to the talented artist and Naruto fan 'ShadowRebirth' (I think that's the right name), who created the gorgeous map of the Elemental Nations that we based our setting on. They are not associated with us, but tip of the hat regardless.
 
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[canon] Omake 1) Repay in Kind
Here're a few snippets of prospective backstory, revolving around one application of the Iron Nerve. As for name, I think we should be named

-[X] Kurosawa Hazou
-[X] Male


Because it has a nice, effortless flow that resembles the character himself in motion. Hazou Kurosawa. It's like a classic japanese action flick, compressed into a name.

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Repay in Kind


It was the day of the bet, and Hazou intended to collect. He rocked on his toes, back and forth across the precipice, keeping his balance on the stony ledge. It was a movement he'd performed one thousand, four hundred and sixty-four times before. Below sprawled his home, the Village Hidden in the Mist, though much of it lay concealed under endless banks of its namesake. The morning sun was an orb of white fire, wreathed in shawls of fog, and from it broad tendrils of mist crawled across the landscape. It was the same mist that swept in every day, regular as the tides, enveloping and enshrouding, permeating every cranny. A hug, his mother called it, that the sea gives to the land, a shroud for their Hidden Village that sheltered them from the burning heat of the Eastern sun and - deadlier by far - the clear regard of enemy ninja.

Hazou scowled at the thought. It was a childish metaphor, and he was eleven now, basically a ninja grown. His third year at the genin academy was all but over, the springtime of his youth already passed. With this bet, he would con his first mark, earn his first ill-gotten wage as a shinobi. Scents wafted up from below: fresh-caught fish and shaven ice, preserving salt and pickling brine, and above it all the heavenly aroma of Amatetsu's roasted yams, sticky-sweet with their pulpy flesh caramelized, kept always just on the right side of burnt. Rumor had it Amatetsu cooked them so that they'd slightly scald the tongue, a tasteful reminder to any genin-candidate that slacked on his elemental defense. Some jounin liked to eat them by the whole armful, because they were delicious, but also to show that they could.

There was the slap of sandals against stone, and Hazou knew from the gait that Hoshigaki Tonume was here to pay. He turned, putting on his best impression of a confident smirk.

As usual, Tonume's face was distorted by the overlarge lollipop in his mouth. Blue-skinned and tall for his age, Hazou's classmate answered his smirk with a widely gleaming shark-toothed smile.

"When I win," Tonume said, "I'm going to buy fifty candies. If you beg nicely, I won't tell the others how I got 'em."

Crap.

Hazou was no good at this ninja banter thing.

He plucked at the collar of his loose, long shirt, painfully aware that it was many sizes too large.

"Um... Just shut up and watch!" he eventually replied, tone boastful. "You better have the money."

"Got it right here," Tonume revealed a thick roll of 1- and 5-ryou notes, wealth enough to buy ten bowls of ramen, or thirty baked yams. "Nicked it from my brother the other day. And you? Last chance to back out. I don't mind taking your money, but this almost feels too easy."

"B-Back at you," Hazou replied, slightly unsteady. The sight of so much money... he was starting to get anxious. He briefly flashed his own ante, a neatly folded stack of ryou that he had painstakingly counterfeited over the last week.

"Great!" Tonume sat down and leaned back, resting his head on crossed arms as if they were on one of the island's sandy beaches. "Entertain me. And remember, it's foot-to-foot only. If you grab on with your fingers, or even knock a shin, your money is mine."

Hazou blew off Tonume's condescension with a casual wave. "Keep talking tough. Maybe you'll talk yourself out of life's regret, following your loss to me. After all, you'll need something to fill that mouth once you're too poor for candy."

That was okay, Hazou thought, marshaling his confidence. Maybe a little stilted, but respectable for a genin-candidate.

"Hey! I teethe!" Tonume protested, but Hazou was already running, already breaking for the edge, steps clattering against stone with metronomic regularity. He sprang off the final ledge with convulsive power, shocking strength for a body that small, and hung suspended for a brief breathless eternity over all the Hidden Mist, the bustle and din of the market, the shopkeeps and haggling matrons, ricksaws clattering against cobblestone, the muted glow of oven-fires against the churning fog, and beyond that the sea, and the blazing sun, rising now into the sky that Kurosawa Hazou now shared with the seagulls.

Despite the injuries he'd taken, despite everything, it was a feeling that never got old.

And yet, any spectator that looked from below would have known for a certainty that the little boy with outflung arms wouldn't make it, that he was too low by a hair.

But as Hazou neared the apex of his jump, he passed above Amatetsu's shop, directly over the exhaust pipe of Amatetsu's mighty Thousand-Yams Furnace. Its warm, steady updraft was caught by the boy's outflung arms, trapped momentarily by the cloth of his oversized shirt. It carried him just a bit further, just a touch higher at the peak of his leap, and he landed feet-first on top of the Mizukage's Tower, the subject of so many forlorn bets by so many genin-candidates in the past.

It looked an exceptionally haphazard landing, a chaos of twisting limbs to keep his balance, but on a windless day he could stick it every time. Below, Tonume shouted a very dirty word, and raised his palms to his head in despairing disbelief.

"No way... No student makes that jump! One in a hundred times you make that jump, and it had to be this one," Tonume groaned.

One in four hundred, actually, and Hazou had the bruised shins, bruised knees, and bloodied fingers to prove it. But one in four hundred was good enough for a Kurosawa to stick it every time.

Hazou raised an eyebrow. "Pay up, Hoshigaki."

"Yeah, yeah," Tonume grumbled. "Let it not be said that a Hoshigaki failed to keep his word... What'm I gonna teethe with now?" The blue-skinned boy threw his cash on the ground, and Hazou deftly made the much easier gravity-assisted leap back to collect it. Carefully he inspected the bills, rubbing them between his fingers. They were good.

"Pleasure doing business with you," Hazou said, trying out his most professional tone of voice.

"Whatever," Tonume had turned away, and was already absentmindedly gnawing on a kunai. "I'll get you, Kurosawa. Next time!"

Hazou hoped Tonume wouldn't ask for his money back, after he found out that the Kurosawa were a Bloodline Clan. Well, if he ever found out. The Hoshigaki's chakra was almost casually overpowering, but he was extremely inattentive in class.

He waited until the other boy had departed before allowing himself to feel a spark of hope. Hazou clutched the wad of cash protectively against his chest, and began an excited trek home. Maybe with this... with this, maybe their money troubles wouldn't be so bad.

He couldn't wait to see the look on his mother's face!

--- [The Following is Non-Canon / Not Yet Canon]

"...And that's how I came up with the idea," said Kurosawa Hazou, genin, missing-nin, traitor to the Hidden Mist, who was currently standing before a massive chasm next to his temporary teammate for this mission.

Tonume had never gotten his next time. Over the weekend his distant relative betrayed the Mizukage and Hazou had never seen the boy again. Nor had his minor fortune put a dent in his mother's arrears. She'd been a jounin, with a jounin-sized debt, up until the day she died.

But it had given him this fast-traveling method, and bittersweet memories of his mother were still warmer than the ones that presently dominated his mind. The ones that had, as of late, clung to his awareness like a stubborn mist, as if scratching out the symbol on his headband had caused another to emerge in retaliation. Another mist that he wished desperately to discard.

"So it took you about twenty tries to make this jump, but since you made it once, you can do it every time? And this entire route is filled with obstacles like that?" His companion pressed a finger to her lips. "I can see how that would be useful."

"Not obstacles," he said, "shortcuts. There are seven chasms like this that block off the southern region. Even chunin otherwise as accomplished as yourself can't jump them consistently. To continue in a straight line towards the main road, there are two mountains that can only be traversed via goat-path, and in the forest beyond I can take four-tree jumps instead of two for further speed. I've three separate landing points encoded for each jump, alternate branches for the tree jumps, and slightly slower paths in case of heavy wind or storm. There are subroutes that branch off of each of the main routes, for easy delivery to a specific vicinity." This he delivered with calm confidence, encoded synpases firing flawlessly, not a muscle out of place.

He showed her the map he'd drawn, which resembled a single snaking blood vessel flanked by a thicket of capillaries extending into the thick forests of Fire Country. There were two other primary routes as well, cutting east and north-east, each laced with fewer, but still numerous, sub-routes.

"If your client needs it delivered quickly, in the dangerous terrain around here, I'm your man."

His companion propped up the run-through forehead protector covering her eyes. Inimitably blue, they looked upon him with amused interest.

"Huh," she said, "who knew one of our cute genin could be so useful? Maybe you're not all dead weight."

"I never forget a movement," he replied, and returned her smile with his own, an easy smile that seemed to emanate genuine goodwill. It was rare, to see a smile so sincere on a shinobi.

Don't forget, Hazou.

Don't forget me.

Don't forget us, don't forget why we died. Don't- Oh, what am I asking?

I'm being silly. There's no need to ask this of you. The talent is even stronger in you than it is in me. We might almost have succeeded in you, or maybe your daughters and sons.

Listen to your mother, Zou-chan. You're a genin now, so be strong. Obey your sensei's orders, that man can usually be trusted. Try not to eat so many sweets, and remember to dress warmly when it gets cold. Be prepared to kill everyone you meet. One day, when you're strong, find a nice girl and treat her well. Mama won't forgive you if you're mean to her, okay? Take care of yourself. Don't worry if you seem selfish. It's selfish people who get what they want in this world.

Now, place the kunai like this, right above my heart. You know what follows. I want you to do it yourself. That way...

...You'll never forget.


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Climbing the hill back, she placed the forehead protector down over her eyes. The less pollen that got in from this damnable country, the better. Who said allergies were too trite for medical ninjutsu!?

"Shikigami." If she was surprised by the jounin's presence, her voice didn't betray it.

"So, what'd you think? He's my personal student, so be kind." It was impossible to tell if he was being serious.

She turned to regard the student, far below them, as he packed up his maps. His movements were crisp and efficient, surprisingly quick despite their almost unhurried air. He was fast, for a genin.

"I've heard of the bloodline, but I guess they're rare enough we don't see them," she ventured.



"Should've seen the boy's mother," Shikigami interjected. "No one's ever forgetting her."

She rolled her eyes. "Anyway, I guess he's... pretty normal? I don't know, I just kind of thought his movements would be more puppet-like, artificial. With what they can do."

"You still have a lot to learn," the jounin exhaled. "Here's a lesson for you: a perfect copy of human movement, looks like human movement. If it betrayed anything else, it wouldn't be perfect."
 
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Chapter 1: Into the Swamp
Chapter 1: Into the Swamp

Eternity is made up of moments, and so is a human life.

Hazō's earliest remembered moment, from before he knew his age: in his mother's arms, her smiling face looking down at him as she bounced him gently and made happy noises. Poppa stood behind her, arms around her waist and chin on her shoulder. He was quiet, his face calmer than hers, but all the joy in the world shone from his eyes.

When Hazō was two, he saw his mother getting out of the tub. The scars crisscrossed her body like lines on a map—a map of all the pain and hardship that is ninja life.

"Ouch, momma!" he said. "Did those hurt?"

She smiled quietly and shrugged into her robe. "Yes, cricket," she said, using the pet name that always made him giggle. "But they were all worth it. I got those scars because I am a ninja. Because I am a ninja I met your father, and he is my heart. And because he is my heart, we had you."

It was at that moment that he knew he would become a ninja, so that he could meet his own heart.

When he was three, poppa took him roof-running for the first time. He clung to his father's back, shrieking in glee as they raced at blinding speed across the rooftops. Poppa leapt between roofs like a joyful Monkey God, traveling in the blink of an eye from one to another. Sometimes he ran on the flat, sometimes he ran sideways on a wall, and once he hung upside down under the eaves of a tall building. Hazō's shirt flew up, baring his stomach, and he eeped in delight. His father laughed and slung him around in his arms so that he could blow a giant raspberry on the boy's stomach, drawing a giggling shriek.

When they got home momma scolded his father, wagging her finger at him. She didn't mean it though, and she laughed when poppa scooped her up and ran up the outside wall to sit on the roof. They didn't come down for a while, and when they did, momma's robe and hair were mussed and she was wearing a goofy smile.

When he was four and one-half, he and his parents sat in the garden under the branches of the plum tree. Poppa was making the mist dance, tiny dragons swirling and playing just to make the little boy laugh.

When he was five, a man in a formal uniform came to the house. He and momma sat in the outer room and talked quietly for several minutes. After he left, momma went into the bedroom and cried for an hour, quiet sobs that were just barely audible when Hazō pressed his ear to the door. Afterwards she came out and explained that poppa would not be coming home again.

It was at that moment that he knew he would become a ninja, so that he could kill the man who kept his poppa from coming home.

When he was six, he begged his momma to let him apply to the Academy. She said no, he had to be eight. He begged and begged, and she still said no...but she took him into the garden and put a kunai in his hands.

"Stand like this," she said. "Strike up from underneath, through the stomach and into the heart."

He did it once and she corrected him. He did it again and she nodded in approval.

He did it perfectly from then on. Every time, he imagined that he was gutting the man who had taken his poppa away.

When he was eight, he joined the Academy. Momma's smile was complicated when she dropped him off at the gates—proud, but sad. He might have added "afraid", but his momma wasn't afraid of anything; things were afraid of her.

When he took his fourth taijutsu class, a man with grey hair and a scar stood on the sidelines, watching and frowning thoughtfully. The boy didn't know who the scarred man was, but sensei—a terrifying man who barked orders and brooked no backchat—spoke quietly and respectfully to him.

After that, the boy was pulled out of the class and moved into a different one, where he sparred with children a year older. Six months later, he was sparring with seniors. Two years later he was sparring only with instructors.

Countless moments: "Why, sensei?" "Sensei, wouldn't it make more sense like this?" "Sensei, that can't be right. Why would anyone..."

An equally countless number of moments: on his knees, scrubbing the stone floors of the Academy across which five hundred active children constantly tracked dirt. Or cleaning the kitchen grease trap. Or sweeping the chimneys.

For each chore, he learned the most efficient motions to complete it quickly, then did them perfectly.

When he was eleven, he came home to find momma sitting at the kitchen table, papers spread out around her and her face showing utter despair. She saw him and immediately smiled her perfect, happy smile.

"Hullo, cricket," she said. "How was school? What did you learn today?" He sat down beside her, babbling happily about the three ways to kill a man with a garotte and how he thought that the turn-and-throw method was much more efficient than the grapple-and-steady-pressure method that sensei recommended. After all, as long as you did the throw perfectly it was much faster. The whole time he was babbling, momma kept giving him her perfect smile and never once looked at the stack of bills with "OVERDUE" stamped across them in big red kanji.

Two weeks later, he bet one of the other students that he could make the impossible jump from the cliff to Mizukage Tower. He had practiced that jump hundreds of times before making the bet, the bruises and scrapes on his body the proof of it. It was worth it though, for the feeling of triumph he had when he was able to come home in victory with money in his hands to give to momma for the bills. She saw the money and heard what he'd done to earn it, how he'd battered himself bloody against the rocks because he wanted so much to help her. She burst into tears. His eyes went wide in panic, but she fell to her knees and hugged him so tight his ribs creaked. "Thank you, cricket," she said, and gave him a not-quite-perfect smile.

It didn't take long before the other students learned not to bet against him, so he went into the city and started betting civilians. The Academy left him little time and no energy, but momma's bills were piling up. He trained all day, then raced into the city before sundown so he could make some ryō. Soon enough, the civilians stopped betting against him and he had to go to different parts of the city, parts that were far enough away that he couldn't get there and back before dinner. Momma insisted he be home for dinner, so he went afterwards, slipping out the window after momma put him to bed.

It wasn't long before he discovered craps. The first time he played, he lost all his money, but afterwards he went home and practiced throwing the dice until he rolled each of the numbers. After that, he did it perfectly. He was careful to always keep that pair with him from then on.

He'd lost all his money the first time, but he scraped up six ryō in change and went back to the tables. His six ryō rapidly turned into six hundred, then six thousand. The owner of the table told him to get lost. Hazō went and found another table at the back of another bar.

There were still too many moment of "why?" and "but!"; his demerits cost him Rookie of the Year and put him in the seventh decile. When he graduated, he was given D-rank missions: babysitting, dog walking, splitting firewood, guarding the market. Each mission was a (mostly) friendly competition with his team; he could always split more wood than his teammates, because every stroke of the axe was perfect. He was never as good with the dogs as his teammate Junko, though.

Momma loved hearing about the missions, and she laughed her bell-like laugh when he grumped. He grumped a lot; not because the missions bothered him—they did, but not as much as he let on—but because her laughs had gotten rare as plums in fall since poppa died and the bills started piling up.

He kept playing the tables to bring in money. Momma scolded him and told him to stop, that it was dangerous, but he continued anyway. He continued until the man with the dragon tattoo took him into the back of the casino and had a long talk with him. The man placed a hammer on the table at the beginning of the talk, but never touched it.

Two weeks later, he was taken off his team and assigned to a new team. His new team and a dozen others were being sent on a mission, an exciting mission, a mission that showed he'd earned the respect of his superiors.

His momma heard about the mission and smiled a perfect smile, kneeling down so she could hug him so tight and ruffle his hair. "Do your poppa and me proud, cricket," she said. "And come home to me." He'd promised he would.

And then the bad moments started.

It was a bad moment when Shikigami-sensei came out of the commander's tent covered in blood and told them it was a suicide mission. There'd been angry shouting, the various jōnin and chūnin arguing loudly while the genin stood back, quiet as frightened mice.

It was a bad moment when shouting turned to killing.

One of the jōnin, Shenzi-san, threw the first blow. His fingers twitched in a furious chain of hand seals and the mist surged into Fukama-san's mouth and nose like snakes. An instant later, Fukama-san exploded, the mist ripping its way out of him in a fountain of gore.

The moments that followed were full of blood and death. When jōnin fight, the very land suffers, and they were fighting with all they had. Centennial oaks exploded as chakra-reinforced fists blasted them apart. Water from the river lashed back and forth, whips and dragons and sling bullets smashing fragile human bodies to pulp. Fists and feet and kunai flew everywhere. Genin dove for cover; the ones who dove too slowly died.

Battles between jōnin rarely last long, especially when they start at arm's length. The moments of the battle were not quite countable, but that was more a lacking of perception than numbers.

A few jōnin escaped and returned to Mist, hoping to bargain the news of the others' defection for their own salvation; Hazō and the other survivors fled.

Shikigami-sensei had a plan. It wasn't a good plan—he admitted that himself—but it was the only one they had with a prayer of working. A decade earlier, he had been assigned an infiltration mission against Fire. He'd succeeded, but a Konoha ranger squad was right in his shadow on the way out. He'd run for a week, using every trick he knew to hide and break trail, but nothing had worked until he'd entered the swamp on the northwestern corner of Fire. The place was lethal; Shikigami-sensei showed them the back of his calf, where something had scooped out two cherry-sized balls of flesh. The rangers had refused to follow him in.

"Lethal or not, there's nowhere in the world better to hide," Shikigami-sensei said. And then he'd laid out the full plan: the founding of a new village.

It was the most audacious idea imaginable. Oh, there were contingencies—diplomatic approaches for dealing with Konoha if they were discovered too early, escape plans if it became necessary, a plethora of fallbacks. Shikigami-sensei was old for a ninja, at least fifty, and that age and experience showed in his planning. It also showed in the respect he was given; despite his age, no one wanted to spar with him except the most senior instructors at the Academy. He was fast, vicious, and utterly ruthless in a fight, and he barely held back. While he calmly laid out his plan he was focused on cleaning his hand; it was soaked in blood to the elbow from where he'd cut a kunoichi jōnin's head off with a thrust of his kunai that went completely through her neck.

There were more moments after that. Most of those moments were full of terror, and all of them were full of exhaustion. Shikigami-sensei had driven them mercilessly.

"Zabuza-sama will be on our trail as soon as the escapees reach Mist," he said. "He moves like the wind and is the most skilled tracker I've ever seen. We must move faster."

Getting such a large group through the Konoha patrols was terrifying. They managed only because one of the chūnin was a falconer, and his hawk could scout ahead. It wasn't enough; they managed to avoid actually being seen, but the patrols found their trail somehow. The former Mist nin reached the swamp barely an hour ahead of their pursuers.

The excitement hadn't stopped there, though. The swamp was overflowing with chakra, and life had adapted to it. The first alligator to attack had surged out of the water, clapping its jaws as it came for Akabane Izumi, the jōnin guarding the left flank. A blast of wind chakra flew from the animal's jaws and sliced Izumi's leg off at the thigh. An instant later, the lightning-fast predator clamped onto the screaming jōnin's torso and vanished under the water.

The swamp was waist-deep on the adults, chest-deep for the genin. The bottom was mud, and there were frequent deep spots where a person could lose their footing and fall out of their depth. Everyōne who could waterwalk wanted to, but Shikigami-sensei allowed only a small group up at a time, not wanting everyōne to be drained of chakra at once. Soon enough, everyōne was soaked and exhausted. Many were bleeding and pale from where chakra leeches had stealthily clamped on to exposed skin and siphoned them nearly dry.

They lost six genin and another chūnin in the first hour—two more gator attacks before they learned to spot the sort of places the gators would lie in wait. A small water burst under the surface would alarm the creatures enough to make them give away their position. Chakra-enhanced alligators were the apex predators of the swamp, but against experienced ninja? They were meat.

The next three gators were met with killing jutsu; after that, the rest stayed clear. No one was entirely comfortable with the level of intelligence that suggested.

Less than two minutes after the last gator attack, a clump of innocent-looking reeds suddenly lashed out at one of the chūnin, sticking into Morobuni-san's neck and pulling him in. His genin reacted immediately, cutting the reeds, but the wounds were too severe. The two medic-nin, Fu and his apprentice Hotaru, had done all they could, but Morobuni bled out in seconds.

Shikigami-sensei ordered Fu to water-walk and took Hotaru onto his own back. It was important to keep the two of them alive, he said, detailing three chūnin to protect Fu. Despite the precautions, Fu was dead thirty minutes later; a lilly pad two full yards from his path suddenly turned itself inside out, exposing barb-like spines that it fired into his chest and face. He was dead before he hit the water. After that, any lily pad that came in sight was reconnoitered with some ninja wire and a kunai.

The first night they'd found a clump of trees rising from the water and slept high. In the morning, two of the genin were dead, covered in insect bites and completely exsanguinated. They'd never made a sound.

By the time the group reached the island in the center of the swamp they were down to twenty-seven survivors, all of them wounded and so exhausted they were barely able to keep on their feet. Fortunately, there was a cave in which they could all fit. The island was large and solid, an upthrust of igneous rock with sandstone inclusions; the igneous rock gave a firm foundation and the limestone made for plenty of interconnected caves. Not all easily navigable—the water got in everywhere, and many of the passages were low—but there was room.

"Eat some ration bars and then sleep," Shikigami-sensei said to the group, once the cave had been declared animal-free and a fire was started. "Three watches, one team each. I'll take first." He waved to Hazō and the other two and moved for the mouth of the cave. The three genin lined up without being told, one knee down and their backs to the outside so that Shikigami-sensei could see the entire arc behind them while he spoke.

"The three of you are a scratch team," he said. "You were not put together by a bunch of limp-wristed Academy bureaucrats in the city because you had the right grades. You were put together by me, the toughest bastard for a hundred miles, because you are survivors. You survived the Bloody Mist Academy, the harshest gods-damned ninja school on this or any other planet. You survived a close-range battle between a dozen jōnin. You survived a grueling race across enemy territory, hounded by the forces of the most powerful ninja village in existence. You survived this murderous fucking swamp, which killed experienced jōnin in the blink of an eye. Now you are my genin and you will by every god continue to survive, or I will kill you myself. Are we crystal clear on that point?"

"Sensei! Yes, sensei!" the three chorused, their voices carefully lowered in respect for the night.

"Good," he said with a firm nod. "Now, we don't have time for bullshit, and I won't put up with it. There's no D-rank time wasters here to let you 'develop your interpersonal connections' and all that crap. You will work as a team from this moment on. You will cover each other's backs. You will eat, sleep, and train together. You will be, at every moment, so close to one another that you're smelling what the other two had for breakfast. And If anything happens to one of you, I will literally tear strips off the other two, so you had better look out for each other. Are we clear?!"

"Sensei! Yes, sensei!"

"Good. Now, there's a hell of a lot to do. We've got enough trail rations for two weeks, we've got plenty of water"âhe gestured wryly at the swampâ"and we've got shelter. The trail rations are going to get mighty old mighty fast; we're going to need to scout, hunt, gather, and trade. We need more firewood, and lots of it; I only had enough in my scroll for a couple nights. Medicine, clothing, money, maps, rope, building supplies, tools...a thousand things.

"Fortunately, we came through the swamp the hard way; it's only a couple of hours to get to dry land if you head that way"âhe pointed off into the darknessâ"and there should be a lumber town another two hours on from there. We've got six teams; tomorrow is a rest day, but the following morning I'm going to send two teams out hunting and two to go into town. The other two will stay here and train their asses off; we need to turn you all into jōnin as fast as can be done and I intend to work you into the ground to make that happen. For tonight, though, we need to make sure we don't get eaten by surprise. Let me show you a trick. Grab some of those rocks." He waved at the scree pile to the left, where a long-ago slide brought down everything from pebbles to rocks the size of a person's head.

The mouth of the cave was perhaps six feet wide; it went in a few feet, then dog-legged sharply to the left before opening out into a larger space. It was nearly the perfect camp site, as the dog-leg would catch most of the light from a fire, as well as render the cave more defensible. It was at the edge of the island, about twenty feet from the water's edge and only barely above the water level. The ground was strewn with sand and gravel and devoid of plant life.

Shikigami-sensei directed the genin to build two cairns of rocks, one to the left and one to the right of the cave mouth, both about halfway to the water's edge. The first step was to lay a bed of gravel, then an explosive tag, then pile more rocks and gravel and sand on top.

"The bedding keeps the tag from getting wet and ruined by ground water," the jōnin explained. "The stuff you put on top keeps it from getting wet from rain or condensation. More importantly, when you set the tag off, all the crap you piled on top blasts outwards and turns everything in the area into mulch. Now, since that includes us, we'll need a couple hides, one on either side of the cave."

It took half an hour of sweaty, grunting labor to pile enough rocks up to make a blast shield that sensei was happy with. By the time they finished, all three genin were exhausted.

"My turn," Shikigami-sensei said. He snapped his fingers and half a dozen water clones rose up from the swamp. They promptly begin collecting rocks and piling them up on the other side of the cave mouth.

"Here's a lesson for you," Shikigami-sensei said. "When you're given a task, check all your assumptions and examine all your assets. You could have asked me to make clones and then you wouldn't have been so sweaty."

Fortunately for Shikigami-sensei, none of the genin had yet mastered the ancient art of the Bloody Mist Technique: River's Dragon Dance of Doom, more commonly known as "kill-you-with-my-brain no jutsu". They gave it their absolute best effort, though.

The jōnin laughed. "That's the spirit. Now, I know you haven't had any time to talk while we've been on the run. Sit down in that hide and talk. Find out who you are and what you can do. Figure out how you're going to fight together most efficiently. And figure out which of the missions you think you'd be best suited for—scout and hunt, or scout and trade. I won't promise you'll get what you want, but it's a good exercise in tactical analysis. You can't stay in and train; you're my students and I can't afford to seem like I'm showing favoritism. Don't worry, me and my friends here will keep watch."

The three genin bowed respectfully and retreated to their assigned position, settling in to talk as ordered.
 
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Chapter 1.1: Pillow Talk
Chapter 1.1: Pillow Talk

The three genin were struggling to stay awake by the time the next team came out to take watch. Gratefully, they handed over the duty and stumbled to their bedrolls.

Just as he was pulling his blanket over himself, eager to bid goodbye to the last of this miserable day, Hazō's attention was caught by a whispered conversation between two chūnin sharing a bedroll a few yards away.

"They wouldn't really send Captain Zabuza after us, would they?" Ueda said fearfully. The man was built like an oxcart — at least six foot eight, massive shoulders, and a chest that Hazō would have had to stretch to reach around. Despite his imposing presence, the chūnin seemed honestly frightened at the thought of the Demon Swordsman coming after them. "I mean...they'd be losing a ton of money taking him off missions, right? And besides, they wouldn't give him permission to go into Fire. It could start a war...right?"

Saito Kaho was the exact opposite of her bedmate's physique: tiny, willowy...a very stupid person might have said 'delicate'. She laughed, running her fingers vigorously through her long black hair to loosen it from its carefully out-the-way battle-ready updo.

"Come on, lover, you know this," she said, combing her fingers through it to get out as many of the snarls as she could. "He's the Captain of the missing-nin hunter squads. He doesn't go on missions, he just collects heads for the bounties. Most missing-nin who last more than ten minutes are big enough news that their home village has a major price on their heads. And no, they wouldn't give him permission to enter Fire, but he'd do it anyway. And the Mizukage knows that, and Captain Zabuza knows that he knows and so on down all the ridiculous numbers of layers those two think at. If Captain Zabuza gets overly enthusiastic chasing a bounty, violates someone else's turf and gets caught at it..well, he can probably just say 'yes, but...missing-nin bounty!' and it's fine."

Whatever the opposite of 'reassured' was, Ueda was that. "But if they didn't buy it, he'd start a war!"

Saito leaned up so that she could kiss him gently. "I love you, ox," she said, cupping his cheek. "But you really need to stop hoping against hope and just accept what is. If Captain Zabuza gets in trouble, the Mizukage can complain that Fire got overly aggressive and killed off a licensed missing-nin hunter in pursuit of his duties. And if Fire gets too snappish about it, the Mizukage can say that Captain Zabuza exceeded his authority and went rogue, disregarding the very strict orders that he'd been given to not violate any other nation's territorial boundaries."

Ueda started to say something else, but Saito silenced him with a kiss, molding her entire body into him in a gesture of love, reassurance, and comfort that lacked lustful fervor only because both parties were too tired and too frightened to do more than wrap themselves around each other and fall into dreams.

Hazō pulled his own blankets up with an unhappy frown; for a moment he worried that he wouldn't be able to sleep with these new concerns chasing themselves around inside his head. Almost before he finished the thought he was tumbling down through layers of dreams into the sodden sleep of a young boy who had been running on the very last dregs of his energy for days.
 
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Chapter 2a: Hunter/Hunted
Chapter 2: Hunter/Hunted

Hazō scanned his surroundings as he trudged through the waist-deep water of the swamp.

"3D vision," Shikigami-sensei had explained when they'd asked him for tips. "Forget to look up, and the bats will suck you dry. Forget to look down, and the alligators will tear off your legs. Forget to look to the sides, and the jumping leeches will lunge from the trees and eat your face."

Even so, Hazō felt that he'd made the right choice in convincing his teammates to go scouting within the swamp, rather than to attempt to trade at the nearest town. Wakahisa Noburi, the short, stout boy on his left, never shut up, and if he grated on the villagers' nerves half as much as he did on Hazō's, they'd be chased out with torches and pitchforks. Mori Keiko, the slim, waifish girl on his right, wasn't so bad, but she didn't speak unless spoken to, and that did not suggest highly-developed social skills. Of course, Hazō himself wasn't one to talk, in multiple senses.

The other thing that Shikigami-sensei had emphasised was the need to stay aware of trees and dry ground, because if they couldn't get out of the water at short notice, they were as good as dead. Water walking would help against some things, like the lurker mandibles snapping up out of the mud, but it wouldn't get them far against the water snakes or the razorfish.

Of course, water walking was another of Hazō's weaknesses. It was a technique seemingly designed as a counter to the way he preferred to learn, requiring constant adaptation to a shifting environment, and given all those manual labour D-rank missions, it wasn't like he'd had much opportunity to practise either. In the end, he'd swallowed his pride and asked Mori to help him, but she told him that it would take days at best to get a new skill developed to the level of casual use.

But if there was one thing that cheered him up, it was the awareness that he was now effectively team leader, and the team was following his plan. Mori had never been in the running, of course, and while Wakahisa talked a good game, in the end he had shrunk away from the responsibility. It felt odd to lead others like this, but it wasn't a bad feeling.

The harsh cry of some distant bird brought Hazō's conscious attention back to his surroundings, and he realised to his dismay that Wakahisa was still talking.

"I'm just saying, if we stay here either this place will kill us by attrition, or the Mist hunter-nin will catch up with us, or Leaf will scrape together a patrol with the right skills to come in and hunt us down. The Leaf clans have lived in the Fire Country for centuries, there's no way there isn't one with swamp survival know-how."

"All right," Hazō patiently replied, "so what would you do if you were Shikigami-sensei?"

"I'd negotiate with Leaf, duh. Between the twenty-seven of us, we must have enough valuable information to trade for our safety. We could even offer to—"

"The day I was assigned to this mission, my grandfather came to see me," Mori cut in, in a slightly distant, flat voice that sounded like she was reading from a book. "He was ex-ANBU, and after he congratulated me, he offered me some advice that he said every genin heading into hostile territory ought to know."

The two boys were all ears.

"The most effective means is an exploding tag placed here," she indicated a spot near her solar plexus. "There is little time for pain, and the damage prevents the enemy from dissecting your remains for village secrets. But exploding tags have a time delay, and require activation, so the enemy can stop you. Therefore the most reliable means is to sever the carotid artery with a kunai. If you make a movement like this, you will bypass the thick neck muscles and inflict a deep, broad cut. In the final moments, try to fall so that your body cannot be retrieved before you bleed out.

"If you are captured, do not bother attempting to bite out your tongue. Even if you hit the lingual artery, it heals before you can lose enough blood. The exception is if the torturers have destroyed your ability to write. A genin who cannot speak or write is usually too much trouble to keep interrogating, and they will promptly execute you. If your hands have been kept intact, you should instead—"

Part of Hazō was uncomfortable, while part of him was taking notes since this was valuable information. Wakahisa, on the other hand...

"Mori, stop. Just stop."

"She's right," Hazō said. "Jōnin are valuable enough that they might have room to negotiate, but genin like us would only be a liability to Leaf. We could be spies. We could be saboteurs. We could be bait to make Leaf violate the missing-nin exchange treaties. There is no scenario in which our group surrenders to Leaf and the three of us are left alive."

"There has to be something," Wakahisa insisted. "We could hire ourselves out as black ops, give them ninja with plausible deniability. We need allies if we're going to survive, and we're a group of tough fighters with a lot to offer."

"I was going to be in Logistics & Support," Mori said dully. "It is the Mori speciality. I was assigned to be Sumie-sensei's assistant. I was not expected to enter live combat outside an emergency.

"Then Sumie-sensei died. I watched it happen. She was standing still, looking so peaceful. Then Gorō-sensei put his hand through her chest. I could see the realisation in her eyes as the genjutsu broke, and then they simply went blank and she fell."

Wakahisa moved to put a hand on her shoulder. "Mori, I –"

Mori slapped it away with a quick, sharp movement. Then her eyes seemed to focus.

"Sorry!"

She looked down at the muddy water, and took a few long breaths.

"I am fine. I apologise for distracting you two from the mission. That was foolish. I am fine."

Hazō wanted to be sympathetic, but honestly, they'd all been through the same thing, and the middle of a killer swamp where everything was out to get them was not the best place to get emotional. If he hadn't kept paying attention to the environment, all sorts of things could have gone wrong.​
-o-​

They'd managed to cover a fair amount of ground since then, most of it in silence, and the blank map Shikigami-sensei had given them was slowly filling up. Topographic features, static hazards, natural resources, good sites for fallback positions and hidden caches… Shikigami-sensei would be pleased.

The hunting part was not going so well. There had been some raised ridges with what Wakahisa thought were deer trails, but the team had neither the knowledge nor the materials to set proper snares, and given that the local deer were probably three metres tall and breathed fire, no one wanted to try taking them on in a straight fight. So they had gone back to Plan A, which was to say fishing.

When prompted, Mori had offered some suggestions to improve Hazō's original scheme, such as placing the watcher on top of rather than behind the rock face, because a lot of local creatures would hunt by scent or chakra sense, and so line of sight would be far more valuable to the ninja than to their quarry. Hazō had also asked Shikigami-sensei for safe fishing advice, and ended up making a reinforced fishing rod out of a hefty tree branch, a metal hook and some ninja wire, with tree frogs for bait. Any creature capable of breaking the rod was probably too dangerous to tangle with in the first place, while anything else would be trapped and in pain, and easier to kill.

Or that was the theory. In practice, their catch for the day had amounted to the following:​
  • One balloon-shaped fish which rapidly extended two-foot-long spikes whenever they got near, even when dead.​
  • Three water snakes of various sizes, two probably venomous and one constricting.​
  • Two potentially (but unconfirmedly) edible fish.​
  • One member of a school of very small piranha-like predators with many teeth and dubious nutritional value.​
  • A luminous green… thing… which they all agreed had to be inedible.​
  • A huge eel which was less caught and more choked to death on the fishing rod after tearing the entire thing out of Hazō's hands and swallowing it whole.​
They decided to cut their losses at the last one.

Wakahisa sorted the catch to figure out what to take home while Mori kept watch on their surroundings. Hazō went down to extract the hook and ninja wire, and assess the eel for potential edibility. He was just bending down, when…​
Velorien threw 4 100-faced dice. Reason: Mori (Awareness) Total: 151
10 10 2 2 96 96 43 43
Velorien threw 3 100-faced dice. Reason: Bad Things Total: 105
25 25 71 71 9 9
 
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Chapter 2b: Hunter/Hunted
"Out of the water! Now!"

Hazō sent an immediate burst of chakra into his feet, leaping out to the rock face and barely making it out of the water before the jaws of the monster alligator closed around the space where he'd been.

"Well," he said, adrenaline running through his veins, "I guess we have dinner."​
Velorien threw 4 100-faced dice. Reason: Mori (Weapons) Total: 244
64 64 98 98 59 59 23 23
Velorien threw 3 100-faced dice. Reason: Alligator Total: 73
15 15 2 2 56 56
Velorien threw 2 100-faced dice. Reason: Wakahisa Total: 154
84 84 70 70
 
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Chapter 2c: Hunter/Hunted
Before the alligator could recover from its failure and make its getaway, Mori and Wakahisa's flurry of kunai struck its enormous face, making it thrash in pain for the few seconds it took for Wakahisa to deploy his Water Whip and asphyxiate it.

After enough strangulation to make sure the crocodile was very definitely dead, plus kunai through both eyes in case it changed its mind, the group was left only with the difficulty of carrying their catch home. The corpse took all three of them to lift, and promised a slow journey. They would have to make good time to make it back to the base before sunset – and sunset meant reduced visibility and vampire bats.​

As the team was cresting a ridge on their way back, Mori stopped them. "I missed it before, but look. Do those fallen trees not look like they could be a concealed shelter?"

"No, they don't," Wakahisa quickly replied. "It's just your imagination. And anyway, we need to hurry. We can report this to the jōnin and they can decide whether to send someone out to investigate."

"We are here to scout and identify threats and objects of interest," Mori said. "That is either a threat or an object of interest, and if it is a threat and we leave it, there may be catastrophic consequences."

Both of them looked to Hazō.

[X] Investigate the shelter (?)
[X] Head back to base
Write-ins accepted.

Voting closes on Saturday the 19th, 9 am Pacific Standard Time
 
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Chapter 3: Nightfall
[Reminder: Your teammate Noburi's last name is Wakahisa. Your teammate Keiko's last name is Mori.]


Walking in a swamp is hard.

Walking in a swamp where everything wants to eat you is very hard.

Walking in a swamp where everything wants to eat you while carrying a 5-meter-long, 600 kg alligator corpse that tends to tip over with almost vindictive frequency… well, that was the sort of thing where everyone could agree you were having a bad day and you deserved a cookie and a bit of a lie-in.

The whole experience was a misery. There were bugs the size of kunai—well, not literally, but it seemed like it—buzzing everywhere, and they all seemed to think that lightly-poached-by-the-sun genin was a tasty treat.

Hazō cursed and swatted at the latest flying monstrosity that had just delivered a stinging bite on the back of his neck. The motion destabilized his grip on the alligator and the thing promptly twisted out of his hands, sending all three genin into the muck.

Aside from Hazō's muffled "Sorry", none of them said anything as they got themselves straightened up again, the swamp water brushed out of their eyes, and the alligator hoisted overhead. None of them had the energy; they'd been burning chakra to deadlift more than their combined body weight worth of dead meat and carry it overhead. They stopped every twenty minutes to refill their chakra reserves by drinking from Wakahisa's cask. During the rest breaks they would work their fingers to shake out the cramps, and wipe the mud out of the blisters they were getting from where the 'gator's rough, scaly hide had been slowly sanding away their skin.

They'd tried floating the corpse and pushing it along like a raft, but that hadn't worked well; it didn't float evenly, so it tended to roll lazily over while yawing to the side. On top of that there were enough shallow spots, reeds, and snags that it had become easier just to carry the damn thing overhead.

They'd noted the location of the strange maybe-a-shelter-maybe-not on their map but headed home without investigating. Hazō was carrying the head of the gator, Mori was on the tail, and Noburi was in the middle. Each had their own threat axis to watch: Hazō was responsible for the 180-degree forward arc, Mori had right and rear, Wakahisa had left and rear. Both of the other two genin had stabbed kunai into the gator corpse and used ninja-wire to fasten their signal mirrors to them so they could see behind themselves without turning around. Under the circumstances it was the best they could do, but none of them were terribly sanguine about their ability to spot attacks from behind. Wakahisa had volunteered to maintain a continuous, low-level chakra drain so as to be aware of nearby sources. Mori and Hazō thought it was more than worth having their chakra slowly leeched away in order to get even a moment's extra warning.

This area of the swamp was "hilly", the underwater topography varying a great deal. There were strips of ground where the water was only ankle deep, but one step to the side the bottom was ten feet down. Generally, the high ground had reeds or grasses growing on it, and there would be a mat of rotting vegetation alongside it. Of course, then there were the reeds, grasses, and mats that took up station out in the middle of a random patch of deep bog just so they could trick people. That didn't make finding the high ground any easier. Mori had pointed out, in a voice that was already exhausted, that the reeds were hollow and the dead-and-dried-out ones would make excellent tinder, as they stayed upright and really did dry. The two boys had nodded, not wasting the energy to talk, collected a few stalks as samples, and shuffled on past.

They had found a very high ridge that ran in the direction they wanted to go, and had eagerly scrambled up atop it. With the water barely over the toes of their shoes, they were making excellent time when Hazō...

"Rolz.org" said:
Hazō; Awareness:
sum 3 1D100 => 51 ; 89 ; 65 ; total=205

Enemy; Stealth :
sum 4 1D100 => 35 ; 47 ; 56 ; 52 ; total=190

...saw the mat of dead reeds in the water beside them shift in his peripheral vision.

They'd seen similar things throughout the day. A fly would land on the surface, causing ripples. An amphibian would blink and twist its head. Small motions, not of any particular significance. To his dying day, Hazō would never know why exactly he knew this one was different, but he found himself instinctively throwing himself backwards, sending all three genin tipping off the high ground to the left, into the water on the side opposite where the monstrosity was rearing up.

It was eight feet long, massive—blubber and muscle both—and covered in fur so matted and caked in mud that it became ersatz armor. It moved too fast for Hazō to consciously sort out what he was seeing; there was no time for processing or thinking, just for smooth and carefully-drilled action, the power of his family's blood singing through him as the world became slow and smooth, his awareness expanding to integrate everything around him, imaginary lines drawing themselves through space to define a series of form-fitting tunnels down which his body could be propelled. The fight played out in his head in a series of flashes:

"Rolz.org" said:
Hazō; Taijutsu
sum 6 1D100 => 60 ; 70 ; 76 ; 95 ; 54 ; 99 ; total=454
(NB: 4 from skill +1 bloodline +1 chakra)

Spiderbear; Natural Weapons
sum 6 1D100 => 60 ; 49 ; 74 ; 39 ; 85 ; 29 ; total=336

Result
(454-336) / (6+6)^0.65 = 24


  • Enemy's speed too great; activate boost; lightning/fire surging in veins, body burning with speed/power; enemy assaulting team—KILL!
  • Disemboweling strike inbound from enemy's left-second leg; leap backwards, spilling gator and team into water but avoiding strike
  • Chest-deep water is suboptimal combat environment. Pull-up back onto high ground, roll to feet
  • Ranged attack from mouthparts—sticky rope??; sway to side
  • Hurl kunai? No, enemy too fast, chelicerae too heavily armored. Must close
  • Crouch/pivot around overhead strike from right-front leg
  • Peripheral awareness: spark of light on enemy's forepaw; jump before paw lands; yes, discharge flash indicates Lightning Element shock delivered through water
  • Note cries of teammates for later
  • Drive kunai into enemy ankle joint to incapacitate leg. Maintain grip, allow self to be carried forward as leg withdraws
  • Strike incoming from right; kip up, twist
  • Strike incoming from left; release grip on kunai, drop
  • Cat-twist / pike to land three-point on enemy's back
  • Strike!

Hazō blinked and the world came back. As always, it seemed faded and bland after the thrumming speed and power of chakra boost. The bear...spider...spiderbear…thing was collapsed in the water under him, all eight legs twitching furiously but uselessly; Hazō's kunai strike had severed the spinal cord and cut off all contact between the primary brain and the limbs. Apparently there were sufficient reflex centers to maintain some movement, but nothing like enough to be a threat.

Just to be sure, he stabbed his kunai into its brain a few times, then into the shoulder joints, then into the brain a few more times. The skull was so thick that the tip of his kunai chipped off, but he kept punching it in again and again until the skull was in fragments, the brain had splashed, and the legs were not moving at all.

The spiderbear's Lightning Element attack had been powerful enough that, had Hazō been in the water when the attack hit near him, he probably would have died on the spot. Fortunately, Noburi and Keiko had been far enough away that they'd only been stunned. Hazō helped them climb back up onto the high ground and the three of them surveyed the kill.

"What does it eat?" Mori asked.

"Us, it thought," Hazō said.

She rolled her eyes. "Normally, I mean. A predator this size must need an incredible number of calories to maintain the speed it displayed. Clearly, it is an ambush predator, which will save it considerable energy, but the question still stands."

"Does it matter?" Hazō asked. "It's dead."

"Yes," Mori said. "But there is a piece missing here. We have seen too many apex predators and not enough game for them to feed on. There may be considerably more fish than we saw, but evolution equipped this monster to take down large prey, not the occasional watersnake. One explanation would be that there is something deeper in the swamp that has recently arrived and is dangerous enough that it has been driving apex predators out of their normal hunting ranges."

Hazō didn't say anything and carefully kept his eyes on the body he'd killed. When he'd poured chakra through himself, spending it profligately in the face of an otherwise-overwhelming foe, he had briefly been a god. Now, he was back in his mortal body again, and facing the letdown that came with that. It was so small, so slow, being merely human. He'd needed to be more to deal with the spiderbear, and still the battle hadn't been as easy as it must have looked from the outside. The creature had been so fast; a little more speed on its part, a little more clumsiness on Hazō's, and it would have been him lying there in the water, his brain spread out over ten square feet. And now there was something worse?

He sighed. Well, that was what a team was for; this time, he'd been fast enough to cover for them. The next time, when "worse" showed up, they'd cover for him, or the three of them would take it on together.

Mori waited for him to respond; when he didn't she started fidgeting. "It...might be something else, of course," she finally said. "That was only the first thought that came to mind. There are other possibilities. It could be that—"

Hazō waved her to silence. "Let's talk about it back at base," he said. He paused for a moment, then turned back. "Noburi, I need some water, please; I had to burn chakra to take that thing down."

See? Covering each other's weaknesses. They could do this.

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An hour after they left the site of their battle, the team was slogging through thigh-deep mud with the gator held above their heads. Hazō stumbled on a root but caught himself; he was about to warn his companions about its presence when he noticed the snake up ahead.

It was just coming into sight, twisting sinuously back and forth at the surface of the water; he couldn't see the far end of it, but there must have been at least twenty meters of its bright red, shiny body in sight already. It was wiggling sidewinder-style across the surface towards them at a human's slow walking speed. Without even thinking he pulled out a kunai, clipped it to a coil of ninja wire, and hurled it unerringly at the snake, severing it just behind the head...at which point the "snake" dissolved into a swarm of millipedes the size of Hazō's pinky. They'd been traveling in a nose-to-tail chain, and when the kunai severed that chain the millipedes burst apart and shifted gears from "gentle mosey" to "pants-wettingly fast charge".

At Hazō's yell, Wakahisa and Mori grabbed their non-waterwalking teammate under the arms and leaped up onto the surface of the water, putting a dozen yards between themselves and the insectile horde. Fortunately, the bugs weren't interested in the genin; they swarmed up onto the alligator corpse and started feasting. It was an eerily coordinated pavane; an insect would jam its pincer-equipped head into one of the wounds made by the genin's weapons, tear a gobbet of flesh out, and then step aside to let the next one have a turn.

The former Mist-nin watched the disgusting yet oddly hypnotic process for a full minute before Mori observed, "We should probably put a stop to that."

"Yeah," said Hazō. Pause. "Any idea how? I'm not going over there."

In practice it turned out to be simple. Tedious and time-consuming, but simple. Wakahisa manifested his Water Whip and used it to crush the bugs. It would have been unworkably slow but for two things: the bugs liked to cluster together, and they couldn't breathe water. They had a natural water-walking ability, but sufficient impact would disrupt it and push them under, at which point they would drown in under a minute. Wakahisa must have killed hundreds of the creatures, but the majority of them just left. The bugs simply had enough to eat, connected with some other bugs, and went off in another long, twisting "snake."

By the time the creatures had left and the genin had carefully inspected the corpse to make sure there were no millipedes inside it having an after-dinner snack, forty minutes had passed and the sun was stumbling heavy-footed towards the horizon like an exhausted laborer heading home for the night.

"On the bright side, the corpse is lighter now," Wakahisa said, clearly forcing himself to sound cheerful. It was true; the millipedes had eaten easily two hundred pounds of meat before departing.

"Unfortunately, we lost forty minutes," Mori said. "We are not going to get back before dark if we carry the alligator."

Mori and Wakahisa both turned and looked expectantly at Hazō.

Inwardly, Hazō cursed. Leadership was a mixed bag; the authority was nice, but having to make decisions that could get them all killed was stressful.





Time to vote!

Vote #1, what to do in story?:

-[] Dump the gator and run back to base, hopefully beating the sunset?
-[] Keep the gator and go as fast as you can, knowing that you'll be in the dark for at least half an hour before you get there?
-[] Something else?

Voting closes Wednesday, 2015 December 23, at 12pm UTC. Velorien is writing the next post.

Vote #2, what to do out of story?:

In this post, I had Hazō burn some chakra to fight the spiderbear. On the one hand, GMs shouldn't blithely burn up player resources. On the other, y'all needed the boost, I was confident you would have voted for it, and it didn't actually damage your resources because Gatorade-guy was there. Also, it let me fit in a Watsonian description of chakra usage. So:

-[] OY! GMs! Keep yer grubby mitts off our stuff!
-[] Hey, you guys feel absolutely free to use our stuff as long as you're nice about it!

Keep in mind that we won't do it every time, so you should really make a policy for this.




EDIT: Congratulations on your shiny new 15 XP!
 
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Chapter 4: Blood in the Water

"Blood in the water!"

That might have been the first time Hazō had heard Inoue-sensei swear while sober. The diminutive redhead stared in awe at the collection of dagger-like claws and teeth that the genin had dumped unceremoniously (well, exhaustedly) at her feet.

"You're telling me you personally stripped these from an alligator. Just so we're clear, that's one of those giant killer alligators that can swallow kids like you whole, right? And not, say, some stray lizard that happened to be crawling by?"

The genin nodded. Trying to get useful materials out of the alligator in a hurry had not been easy, especially with the awareness that the sun was setting and they could be minutes away from death at the proboscises of a pack of venom gliders. But this reaction almost made the experience worthwhile.

"And you three killed it all by yourselves, on your first trip out?"

The genin nodded again.

"Well," Inoue-sensei took a step forward into Hazō's personal space, "come on, details. You can't leave a girl hanging after presenting her with trophies like that!"

Hazō exchanged brief glances with the other two. They'd taken some time and effort to craft their report after Wakahisa had brought up the idea that the jōnin wouldn't be too impressed with a tale of desperate improvised tactics and a ninja nearly getting eaten.

"I played the role of bait within a controlled environment in order to lure the alligator from concealment. As soon as Mori located and identified the target from her vantage point, the three of us exploited our terrain advantage to disable it with a combined kunai barrage, and then Wakahisa finished it off with the Water Whip Technique before it had a chance to recover. Making the judgement call that bringing the alligator back with us was not viable, we harvested its most immediately useful parts and retreated."

"Nice job. Mako would be so proud of you," Inoue-sensei reached out to ruffle Hazō's hair. Hazō reflexively tried to dodge, but when the three-year-running female jōnin CQC champion wants your hair ruffled, your hair gets ruffled.

"Who is Mako, Inoue-sensei?" Mori asked.

"Little Hazō's jōnin instructor," Inoue-sensei explained. "She and I go way back—"

She blinked.

"Went way back."

Her bouncy demeanour deflated a little.

"All right, kids. Seeing how close you've cut it time-wise, you must have plenty else to report. Get to it."

-o-​

"A pity you didn't bring back the spiderbear thing too. Ichimaru would have had a field day dissecting it. That eel sure is a beauty, though. Anyway, you'll have to summarise all this again at tonight's general meeting, but I'm going to ask you to leave out the part about the shelter, OK? I'll make sure the rest of Command knows about it myself. Actually, that goes for your apex predator theories too. We don't want any overreactions."

So there was a "Command" now? Hazō filed this thought away for later reflection.

Inoue-sensei turned away. "Shirogane! Get this stuff to materials storage for me!"

The genin shuffled their feet, waiting to be dismissed.

"Oh, right, you guys are still here."

"Inoue-sensei," Hazō asked, "how did the other teams do?"

Inoue-sensei gave a proud smile. "Not as well as my little Hazō, that's for sure."

Hazō began to reflexively squirm in embarrassment, and only managed to catch himself in time as he realised this would only make him look more like a kid.

"Team Yamaguchi were on scouting duty. They've managed to bring back some very detailed maps of the area, and they found a type of smokeless wood that practically had Shikigami doing a little jig. They came back without any injuries to speak of, and we think we managed to flush the toxins out of their systems before any permanent damage was done. Team Shinra, on scouting and hunting duty, weren't so lucky. It wasn't until they were stopped by the sentry on their way back that they realised there were only two of them. Even now, they can't remember losing Misaka."

Suddenly, the inside of the cave felt a lot colder.

"On the plus side," Inoue-sensei continued as if nothing was wrong, "Team Uchida completed their mission of scouting out the village with only one major encounter—a run-in with parasitic slimes which they survived unscathed. They report a community of a few hundred rice farmers, with the main body of the village surrounded by a heavy-duty palisade with watch towers and traps scattered over a wide area, presumably for the wildlife. You'll hear the full report tonight. In the meantime..."

Inoue-sensei's expression faded to neutral. She studied the genin's faces slowly and with an uncomfortable level of intensity, as if trying to see through the ninjutsu disguises they weren't using.

"Wakahisa, Hazō, you're relieved. Go play cards or something until the general meeting. Mori, you're coming with me."

The two boys watched as Mori meekly, and somewhat anxiously, followed Inoue-sensei into the depths of the cave.

"So, uh, any idea what that was about?" Wakahisa asked the second they were out of earshot.

Hazō considered Inoue-sensei. Mist knew her as a top-class genjutsu specialist with a preference for infiltration and seduction missions (even though every single one involved having to dye long, red hair) and an improbable gift for close quarters combat. To this list Hazō could add limitless energy, a cast-iron liver, complete obliviousness to personal boundaries and a disturbing fondness for gossip. Quite frankly, though Inoue-sensei wasn't a bad person as such, he wouldn't want to see anyone left alone with her, much less a helpless innocent like Mori. However, if the alternative was getting in Inoue-sensei's way himself...

"I think we'd better leave it," he told Wakahisa. "Do not meddle in the affairs of genjutsu users, for they are creative, and don't mind breaking their toys.

"She told me that once, after I pointed out a couple of issues with her stance."

Wakahisa bit his lip, and did not press the issue.

-o-​

"...while you were staring down the throat of that eel like it had swallowed your house keys!"

"Well, maybe if you'd maintained line of sight like you were supposed to, instead of playing with dead fish, I wouldn't have ended up -"

The voices bouncing off the walls and ceiling of the small chamber Team Kurosawa had been assigned for sleeping quarters cut off instantly as Mori walked in. Her movements were slow and slightly sluggish. She hadn't been at the general meeting (although Inoue-sensei had been), or at dinner afterwards.

The boys watched their teammate as if she were an exploding tag with the delay counting down.

"Uh, Mori?" Wakahisa finally asked as he settled back down onto his bedroll. "What did Inoue-sensei want with you?"

"That is private," Mori said flatly.

Then, without any further comment, she leaned over and began to sort through her pack in preparation for bed.

A few minutes later, after everyone had settled down to sleep, they heard her voice in the darkness. "I apologise. That was not meant to sound so harsh. I do not always know what I will sound like when I speak."

A pause.

"Inoue-sensei said to tell you that if... if you ever feel like you are breaking, go speak to her. She can help."

-o-​

The next couple of days went by peacefully. Team Kurosawa was alternating between guard duty and downtime, with Hazō fitting training in between bursts of rapid reproduction of swamp maps. Shikigami-sensei (who'd had his own mix of congratulations and "how the hell could you be so suicidally stupid" to offer), had taken to the idea like a 600 kg ravenous killing machine to water, though he'd asked Hazō to mark their location with a hazard symbol instead of a cave symbol in case of interception. He'd also saluted Hazō's decision to invest his limited training time in learning water walking from Mori, and advised them to spend some of the rest on grasping the basic principles of hunting, with input from the more experienced jōnin to show them the ropes, the snares and the kunai traps.

Meanwhile, the cave hideout was beginning to take shape, with Earth Element digging and Water Element draining coming together to create something that increasingly resembled a living environment. One of the chūnin had even managed to extract the pulsing chakra bladders from the luminous green things genin teams were fishing up, each bladder generating several days' worth of sinister green light before being ruined by decay.

But nothing peaceful lasts forever.

"All right, you three," Shikigami-sensei announced, "time for you to get off your asses. As you know, Team Ueda is still in intensive care, and Hotaru says we're running low on basic medical supplies. Seeing as our real medic's dead, we're not about to go harvesting medicinal plants from the swamp, which means somebody has to go get what we need from the village. That somebody is you. Sneak in and steal them, or disguise yourselves and go trade, and either way, don't screw up."

"Why us?" Hazō asked. "Given how badly things could go wrong, isn't this a chūnin job?"

"It would be if we could spare the chūnin," Shikigami-sensei said. "But we can't spare them today, and Hotaru needs the stuff on this list yesterday. You've shown good judgement and survival skills, and I'm trusting you to pull this off without getting anyone killed or attracting attention. Don't be afraid to retreat if you're forced to—but above all, don't let me down.

"Maehara's Acting Quartermaster after what happened to Shinagawa, and he has orders to give you the supplies you need—conditional on you convincing me that you have a good use for them. So I'll give you twenty minutes to discuss, and then I'll hear you out.

"What's your plan?"

[] Sneak in like ninja and take what you need
[] Infiltrate like ninja and trade for what you need

Write-ins accepted.

Voting closes on Saturday the 26th, 9 am Pacific Standard Time
 
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