Isn't the entire idea of this vote to make Sasa shit herself with rage? Just doing it so that it spills over to Kyubey. Which... I'm not sure will work. We're implicitly setting ourselves against Kyubey here, and I imagine there's an outcome where he uses that to convince her that he's fighting a war against us and she uses her Wish to bad-end us. Or am I confusing it with a different proposal?Oh god that second red line's Sasa rage bait.
Why add lines that'll drive Sasa up the wall?
Honestly...I don't see what positive difference the second line makes, I guess? Like, it just seems like playing with fire given that this is Sasa, aka: Ms Insecurity triggertemper.
Even that's a bit arrogant. Remember that we want to be mysterious, but we don't want to be arrogant about how mysterious we are (which we kind of did by talking up how "complicated" our life is). That's why I phrased the vote the way I did; I wanted to make our life mysterious, but I also wanted it to seem like some of that mystery is unknown even to us, that we're kind of concerned about it. Eventually I'm planning on making the case that we're a victim of Incubator manipulation, that they're the reason we have no past and no ID. It even has the benefit of being technically true, which is the best kind of truth!
Even that's a bit arrogant. Remember that we want to be mysterious, but we don't want to be arrogant about how mysterious we are (which we kind of did by talking up how "complicated" our life is). That's why I phrased the vote the way I did; I wanted to make our life mysterious, but I also wanted it to seem like some of that mystery is unknown even to us, that we're kind of concerned about it. Eventually I'm planning on making the case that we're a victim of Incubator manipulation, that they're the reason we have no past and no ID. It even has the benefit of being technically true, which is the best kind of truth!
I refer you back to my vote:
Playing up mysterious victim rather than mysterious arrogant jerk.
but it's not as FUN
Specifically, I want to tell Sasa that we got into this meguca game because we were literally dying, that we have no memories and don't really know who we are, though we have suspicions, that we know that making a Wish is a shitty deal because the Incubators hide terrible things from the girls they're Contracting with, and that we're trying to prevent her from making a terrible mistake by dealing with the Incubators without knowing what she's getting into.
I'm not sure it needs to be. We're not a fumbling newbie; we're a victim, trying to prevent anyone else from being victimized like we are. Since we're not trying to sell a cover story (everything we're saying is true!), we don't need to work so hard on selling a lie.
We're trying to convince Sasa that we're a mysterious stranger who wants to talk to her about something, and admitting that yes we targeted her based on a profile. We play up our mysterious-ness by saying that as far as we know we don't have a real identity or name, and that if you can find one for us we'd be interested in seeing it.
"Arrogant moron" does not overlap with "flawless actress". Your plan will not work: it's a flimsy story, easy to break and hard to believe in the first place, and worst of all it's playing up Sabrina's arrogance and superiority to someone for whom arrogance and superiority are a trigger. Please, let's not go there; you're pretty much begging for Sasa to make a Wish spitefully targeting Sabrina in retribution.But if we can't pretend to be a Secret Agent of the TSAB, why am I even reading this story?
It's not like "arrogant moron" is an inaccurate summary of Sabrina's character anyway.
Get through this conversation in such a way as to a)get Sasa out of her canon mindset/contracting sitaution and/or b)get our foot in the door for a follow-up talk, and c)Not alienate her beyond conversation in the process.
What?
There's no towel to throw in, this conversation is already a failure.
