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Ugolino said:
@Muramasa

...Pushing? It asks if she wants to keep talking about it and specifies what to tell her if so, as opposed to leaving things open-ended by dropping a tidbit. That's not pushing at all. Redundancy is fine, but it covers something important by reinforcing that the secrets have nothing to with us staying with her.

It's not waiting so much as failing to specify an approach or dialogue at all. If Firn salvages a post out of that oneliner, it'll be in spite of the write-in, not because of it.
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Dude, Firn already said it's fine with a short update.

Chill out, pal. :)
 
Ugolino said:
...Which is why we have the vote specify exactly what to tell her if she presses on the secrets. Even the version with that part removed covers things a lot better than the oneliner because it reassures Mami.

He also said it's not preferred.
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Mmm... fair enough. But the point is... don't make a fuss for it.

Anyway, maybe add some light topics if Mami doesn't ask?
 
Ugolino said:
...Pushing? It asks if she wants to keep talking about it and specifies what to tell her if so, as opposed to leaving things open-ended by dropping a tidbit. That's not pushing at all. Redundancy is fine, but it covers something important by reinforcing that the secrets have nothing to with us staying with her.
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Ugolino said:
[x]See if she'll let you change the subject to something happier. Does she want to keep talking about it?
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No, this reads as pushing her to not talk about it. If you're really interested in just asking go with Gadjo's suggestion:
Gadjo said:
[] I know this is a lot to hear right now, Mami. Do you want to hear some of the lighter stuff tonight, or do you want to just relax? For now, I'm okay with either.
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Aranfan said:
Clearly we must pad the vote out with science to do behind the couch where Mami can't see.
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That'd still make for a better vote than a single line...

Torgamous said:
No, this reads as pushing her to not talk about it. If you're really interested in just asking go with Gadjo's suggestion:
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[x]Some of it's pretty bad, Mami. I won't lie. Some of it is just...strange. Things I can't really explain, or that don't make sense to me right now. But none of it's something that'd make me leave...and I think things will get better.
[x]Ask about her.
[x] I know this is a lot to hear right now, Mami. Do you want to hear some of it tonight, or do you want to just relax? I'm okay with either.
-[x]Just talk about light-hearted things. Whatever Mami wants to bring up.
-[x]If she seems to be doing okay and wants to know...
--[X] I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.
--[X] I also know a lot of things, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you: languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
 
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Eh.

[x]Some of it's pretty bad, Mami. I won't lie. Some of it is just...strange. Things I can't really explain, or that don't make sense to me right now. But none of it's something that'd make me leave...and I think things will get better.
[x]Ask about her.
[x] I know this is a lot to hear right now, Mami. Do you want to hear some of it tonight, or do you want to just relax? I'm okay with either.
-[x] Just talk about light-hearted things or whatever Mami wants to bring up.

Still don't like the wording on the self bomb line.
 
[x]Some of it's pretty bad, Mami. I won't lie. Some of it is just...strange. Things I can't really explain, or that don't make sense to me right now. But none of it's something that'd make me leave...and I think things will get better.
[x]Ask about her.
[x] I know this is a lot to hear right now, Mami. Do you want to hear some of it tonight, or do you want to just relax? I'm okay with either.
-[x]Just talk about light-hearted things. Whatever Mami wants to bring up.
-[x]If she seems to be doing okay and wants to know...
[x] To start with: I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
[x] This and other things made me come to the conlusion that I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.

Edit: Guilop makes a good point
 
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Maybe reverse the order to lead in with the knowledge and then say we were created with it? Might soften the blow a bit. Changed a bit of the wording as well:

[] To start with: I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
[] This and other things made me come to the conlusion that I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.
 
Eh, I trust Firn not to fuck us with the short vote.

He did stop us from making that awning after all. :V

[X] Higure
 
Guilop said:
Maybe reverse the order to lead in with the knowledge and then say we were created with it? Might soften the blow a bit. Changed a bit of the wording as well:

[] To start with: I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
[] This and other things made me come to the conlusion that I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.
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Works, yeah.

[x]Some of it's pretty bad, Mami. I won't lie. Some of it is just...strange. Things I can't really explain, or that don't make sense to me right now. But none of it's something that'd make me leave...and I think things will get better.
[x]Ask about her.
[x] I know this is a lot to hear right now, Mami. Do you want to hear some of it tonight, or do you want to just relax? I'm okay with either.
-[x]Just talk about light-hearted things. Whatever Mami wants to bring up.
-[x]If she seems to be doing okay and wants to know...
[x]About the weird stuff...I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
[x] This and other things made me come to the conclusion that I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.
 
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It's kind of just now hitting me how completely bizarre this is going to seem to Mami. She's sitting there thinking:

Oh god is she going to leave me? Did she join the Yakuza while I was at school? They convinced her that the best way to help people was to join a gang didn't they! What if she's thinking of dating Sakara? Is she keeping secrets for Oriko about what Kirika has done to people!? What did she do!

Then we come in with the big reveal

Hey guess what, I'm a magical construct created specifically to make the lives of magical girls easier! I know Farsi! And Hebrew, and like 26 other languages! Plus I know all kinds of stuff about everything. Like structural mechanics of builds! I can do that apparently.

[Mami BSOD]
 
Guilop said:
Maybe reverse the order to lead in with the knowledge and then say we were created with it? Might soften the blow a bit. Changed a bit of the wording as well:

[] To start with: I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
[] This and other things made me come to the conlusion that I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.
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This is why I reversed the order earlier.

Still, I'm happy with the current version.

[x]Some of it's pretty bad, Mami. I won't lie. Some of it is just...strange. Things I can't really explain, or that don't make sense to me right now. But none of it's something that'd make me leave...and I think things will get better.
[x]Ask about her.
[x] I know this is a lot to hear right now, Mami. Do you want to hear some of it tonight, or do you want to just relax? I'm okay with either.
-[x]Just talk about light-hearted things. Whatever Mami wants to bring up.
-[x]If she seems to be doing okay and wants to know...
[x] To start with: I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
[x] This and other things made me come to the conclusion that I'm only 8 days old. Pretty sure, anyway. No, I don't think I have amnesia, anymore. I literally don't have a past prior to last Sunday. I don't know where I'm from or how I got here, but I think that before then...I didn't exist.

Just a typo correction
 
This is stupid. If you want to tell her about our origins and our non-meta-knowledge, fine. But we cannot frame it as a follow-up to a question about "how bad is it?". It makes us seem extremely trite, like there's some kind of terrible thing lurking about knowing mundane things or being 8 days old.

I have problems with the first half too, but they dive straight into witchbomb territory so I'm not sure I should express them.
 
Except that it's framed as telling her things in general?

The first one we can't really get around saying that some of it's bad without flat out lying.
 
SynchronizedWritersBlock said:
This is stupid. If you want to tell her about our origins and our non-meta-knowledge, fine. But we cannot frame it as a follow-up to a question about "how bad is it?". It makes us seem extremely trite, like there's some kind of terrible thing lurking about knowing mundane things or being 8 days old.

I have problems with the first half too, but they dive straight into witchbomb territory so I'm not sure I should express them.
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Your posts would be more helpful with suggestions on improving the vote. Not just criticizing the current vote.
 
Not unless we make it clear that the "knowledge thing" or self-bomb is one of the "not-bad" secrets, just one of the weird ones.

Which looking at the current vote, yea, it doesn't seem like it does. That probably should be fixed.
 
techsy730 said:
Not unless we make it clear that the "knowledge thing" or self-bomb is one of the "not-bad" secrets, just one of the weird ones.

Which looking at the current vote, yea, it doesn't seem like it does. That probably should be fixed.
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[]About the weird stuff...I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
 
Ugolino said:
[]About the weird stuff...I know a lot more things than I should, and not just the stuff that I need to tell you, but also more mundane things like languages, math, science, strategy, medicine, the magic system, and so much more, are all stuffed inside my head. That's what I meant by things that don't make sense.
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Seems reasonable
 
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