217 counting Xs... Plus the last line, which is, idk, 30? 35?
I get my word counts by just copying the vote itself into a different reply box and reading the word count that results. If I do it before I X it in, the -[] stuff doesn't add to the word count.

Your word count is 276.
 
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I'm just concerned "timelines" is too close to loops. That's the whole reasoning.
The problem with metaknowledge is it's not real. You're describing something that exists in Sabrina's head instead of something that exists in realty. Discussing the Law of Cycles as something that actually exists requires accepting at least three timelines that Homura's loops have nothing to do with (Origin, rebellion, PMAS), and from there its ability to operate across timelines is why Sabrina thought it didn't exist rather than just being elsewhere and why even if it doesn't exist it can still exist.

Call it alternate universes or whatever if "timeline" is too spicy for you, but you need to be clear that you're discussing a real physically existing thing.
 
Here's an alternate way to explain the Law of Cycles that covers the overall threat scale without getting bogged down in secrets and mechanics. We could just go full mythological.

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If anyone outside this bubble learns what I am about to tell you, the world could literally end.

The same way I woke up knowing about Soul Gems and other secrets of Kyubey's system, I woke knowing that, in some worlds I hoped would never come to be, there would come to exist three goddesses born from one powerful wish.

One would be a goddess of hope with white feathered wings who sacrifices herself to ensure Witches can never be born.
One would be a goddess of despair filled with all the suffering of every unborn Witch who battles against the goddess of hope forever.
One would be a goddess of love with black feathered wings who hates herself and calls herself the Devil.

The goddess of hope would be known to Magical Girls as the Law of Cycles. She made sure there were no Witches in the world. Magical Girls instead fought new monsters called Wraiths. Whenever a Magical Girl fell, she was taken by the Law of Cycles to act as her angels.

The Law of Cycles was broken by the goddess of love in an attempt to save her from her duty. This is why she hates herself.

The goddesses of hope and love were originally human. In breaking the Law of Cycles, the goddess of love made a fragment of her human again, erased her memory, and locked her in a beautiful world that would be her gilded cage. If she ever learned what she was, she would rejoin with the Law of Cycles and return to her duty.

In this world, Witches exist. Wraiths don't. And the humans who would become the goddesses of hope and love are still in the mortal world.

I don't know what that means. Maybe this is "before" that happened, though for beings like them, concepts like "before" and "after" aren't entirely coherent. Maybe this is "after" and something broke the goddess of love the same way she broke the goddess of hope.

I do know that if either of the humans who would become these goddesses learn any of this, it risks them rejoining with their respective godheads, becoming possessed by their other selves, and generally ceasing to exist as the people I know and care about. And of course, the universe might well unravel and be remade by whichever goddess reawakened. They've both done it before.

The Feathers from Oriko's visions, and the one that appeared outside my Barrier when Sayaka was attacked look exactly like those of the goddess of love. But none of what Feathers is doing makes sense if she's the goddess of love. She hated what happened so much she broke the universe trying to undo it. She's the last person I would expect to do anything "because destiny says so".

Evidence I've collected since waking up in the alley says I'm related to the goddesses of hope and love in some way I don't fully understand. I amuse myself with the idea that I'm their daughter. Among other things, my Grief Wings look exactly like a pair of wings the goddess of love had at one point before she got her black feathered wings. I've only just today learned, while in a weird Labyrinth that messed with everyone's appearances, that my wings are always there, and using my Grief just "paints" them, making them visible and tangible.

The "missing fragment" could well be me, or it could be either of the two girls who would become the goddesses of hope and love. The "she" who is searching could be any of the three goddesses. The goddess of hope searching for the missing fragment of herself to reunite with it. The goddess of love searching for the missing fragment to lock it back in its proper cage. The goddess of despair searching for the missing fragment to continue the battle.

So, Oriko, in light of that, do you think you could ask some follow up questions on that first answer you got and maybe get us a few more specifics?
 
I get my word counts by just copying the vote itself into a different reply box and reading the word count that results. If I do it before I X it in, the -[] stuff doesn't add to the word count.

Your word count is 276.



Oh, the last line is 68 chars ;-;

And...

The problem with metaknowledge is it's not real. You're describing something that exists in Sabrina's head instead of something that exists in realty. Discussing the Law of Cycles as something that actually exists requires accepting at least three timelines that Homura's loops have nothing to do with (Origin, rebellion, PMAS), and from there its ability to operate across timelines is why Sabrina thought it didn't exist rather than just being elsewhere and why even if it doesn't exist it can still exist.

Call it alternate universes or whatever if "timeline" is too spicy for you, but you need to be clear that you're discussing a real physically existing thing.

*Snaps fingers* because IT ACTUALLY HAPPENED IN THE PAST and we've just established that. Okay DUH, fixing.

Word count is hovering just around 300 in this version, and frankly... Don't care. It's one thing when it's 300 words of different actions, I think, and one thing when it's "yea there's paragraphs in here, but each one is literally just one paragraph of explanation because this shit is complicated." Like explaining isofields and memory suppression w/rt LoC fragments is 30 words, but it doesn't inflate IC at all. 's still 30 words IC.

[X] There's going to be a disclosure here which cannot escape isolation. Anybody unwilling to bear that should either leave temporarily or plan to memory magic themselves afterwards.

[X] The existence of the Law of Cycles implies the existence of at least two past rewrites of the universe, before it came to exist as it does today. You have some knowledge of what was, before that.
-[X] In a previous universe, that witch was involved with Sayaka but didn't kill her.
-[X] The Law of Cycles is a benevolent Goddess, a Heaven, a collection of meguca souls, a law of reality, the activities of those, and the collective whole of those things. "Fragments" is a term that has previously seen use to describe individual souls parted from the Law, but might be ambiguous.
--[X] You had believed the Law did not presently exist, as one of its major functions is the annihilation of all witches.
---[X] A previous universe had a second Goddess associated with black feathers who was responsible for *a* breaking of the Law, though not necessarily *this* breaking. You wouldn't call her malevolent, but she probably would have a personal grudge against Mikuni Oriko. The universe being rewritten wouldn't have phased her -- it's entirely possible that she's out there somewhere.
-[X] In the previous universe, "fragments" have been hidden from observers with isolation fields or by suppressing the fragments' memories so that they're not aware of being part of the Law.
-[X] Kyubey has, in the previous universe, attempted to control, subvert, and or destroy the Law of Cycles. It strongly prefers the existence of witches.
--[X] Improper dissemination of this information may lead to a rewrite of the universe, or worse. You do not believe you existed in prior versions of the universe. *Nothing* leaves this group of people, plus Kazumi. Not to Constellation. Not to Mitakihara.

I do think this fully explicates our situation while maintaining precise infosec over exactly what we don't want to publish (mostly names). Then, I'd look to explore questions and ideas in next vote with everyone brought up to speed.
 
If we're going to go ahead and start disclosing this information I think we should plan to have a second conversation with just us and Oriko after we're done using Umika's powers where we tell her and Kirika the whole story. Right now they're the only people we can actually tell the full details without omitting stuff

It also might be a good idea to phrase whatever we say right now such that Oriko can figure out the identities of the people involved with all of her extra context and use that to inform any questions she wants to ask. Maybe something like a very brief summary of how such a goddess came to exist which will be enough for her to pattern match to Madoka and Homura (Though this has tradeoffs. We really don't want anyone going on a wild goose chase because we mentioned these goddesses were once human)

[] The law of cycles was originally a human. In the universe before she ascended, a girl who loved her made a wish for her sake which had the inadvertent side effect of giving her magical potential beyond any other human in history. After understanding the cruelty of the magical girl system she used that potential to wish to bring all magical girls salvation with her own hands, rewriting the universe, erasing herself from history, and becoming a goddess in the process
 
Minor point. The isolation was Kyubey's tech. It wasn't something intrinsic to Madokami or her angels. It was something she was sneaking past.

I would imagine that anything capable of hiding anyone from the Law of Cycles could hide them from Homucifer too, though. Like. I'll fully admit, the isofield wasn't used to hide a fragment. But I think it's fairly obvious that it could be.

...

Maybe I should change that line. The suggestion that an isofield could be used for that... Next vote...?

Hm.

[] The law of cycles was originally a human. In the universe before she ascended, a girl who loved her made a wish for her sake which had the inadvertent side effect of giving her magical potential beyond any other human in history. After understanding the cruelty of the magical girl system she used that potential to wish to bring all magical girls salvation with her own hands, rewriting the universe, erasing herself from history, and becoming a goddess in the process

Considered something in this vein but discarded it. Already at 300 words.
 
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Minor point. The isolation was Kyubey's tech. It wasn't something intrinsic to Madokami or her angels. It was something she was sneaking past.
by Wraith Arc cannon, the insolation field is Homura's pocket dimension magic.

so like, if we were to jump into her shield, would fate get rewritten again like when we were in our barrier?\

and more importantly, would we find something or someone hiding in there?

there's only one way to find out.
 
by Wraith Arc cannon, the insolation field is Homura's pocket dimension magic.

so like, if we were to jump into her shield, would fate get rewritten again like when we were in our barrier?\

and more importantly, would we find something or someone hiding in there?

there's only one way to find out.

Good thing we have no good reasons to try this.
 
[X] Nerevar

I was initially concerned that the mention of timeline stuff would implicate Homura, but given they only know she stops time (which they already know about since I believe much of Constellation joined in the time-stop attack on Iowa Group), they most likely will latch on to it being that her magic 'stops' the change back. The brevity of the explanation and the fact that it'd take a big leap to guess her true power from this, much less how that relates to how she is possibly involved means this isn't any more dangerous than what we've said so far vis-a-vis disclosure of Homu-time.

EDIT: Unfortunately I don't think any explanation of us being connected to the two is possible without all but outing Homura and Madoka as the prime suspects to anyone who knows that Oriko said we have karmic connections to them. Also saying we know and care about who they are now heavily implies if not outright states that someone we are in regular contact with in the immediate Mitakihara area is them, probably resulting in it being very possible to deduce for Mami, and anyone else in the holy Quintet who hears about this.
 
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This is a great fan novel about Puella Magi Madoka Magica. Can I translate it into Chinese and publish it on bilibili? and the author and this link will be declared on the first page. @Firnagzen
 
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So, here's another way we might approach disclosure:


[] I have a suspect in mind who has black feathers.
-[] Elaborating involves the biggest, most dangerous secret I know. If I tell you, it can't leave this bubble.
-[] Erasing your memories after this talk may not be a bad idea.

[] The universe was destroyed and remade twice at least.
-[] Once by a powerful Wish to erase all witches before they were born, which resulted in the girl who made that wish paradoxing herself out of existence and becoming an atemporal goddess known as the Law of Cycles.
-[] The second time by the one girl who remembered the first girl tapping into the power of love to tear the human the first person had once been out of the Law of Cycles. The second girl had black feathers.

[] If Feathers is that second girl, what she's doing doesn't make sense.
-[] She's gone out of her way to try to save Sayaka's life in the past, and when a version of Sayaka tried to kill her for breaking the Law of Cycles, she just erased her memory of it instead of killing her.
-[] As for Oriko, before they became gods, a version of Oriko foresaw the first girl ending the world and set about trying to kill her in order to save the world from that threat. I can see why the second girl might want Oriko dead, but if she wants that, why wait?

[] Both girls are currently people living their lives seemingly with no memory of being gods
-[] Either of those girls learning any of this could turn them back into gods and get the universe rewritten again.

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I think the main reason Kaizuki's vote isn't working for me is that trying to explain Homufer without even mentioning love as her primary motivation and the source of her power isn't really explaining Homufer at all.
 
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[X] Kaizuki

At the moment I like this vote the best: I feel like it communicates most of the things that need to be said, and I think it does the best job of avoiding implicating Madoka or Homura. My biggest concern left in that regard is that mentioning Homucifer's grudge against Oriko will implicate Homura.

Here's some change suggestions to get across more information that I think is unproblematic and/or important, as well as hopefully fixing the Oriko thing:

[X] The existence of the Law of Cycles implies the existence of at least two past rewrites of the universe, before it came to exist as it does today and it started existing with the first. You have some knowledge of what was, before that.
Felt like there was an unnecessary line there, and I see no reason not to be more specific on what happened in which iteration of the universe.
-[X] In a previous universe the pre-Law universe, that witch was involved with Sayaka but didn't kill her. didn't kill Sayaka, but Sayaka did die shortly after fighting it.
Again, more specificity on what happened in which iteration. And a bit more specificity on what "involved with Sayaka" means.
--[X] You had believed the Law did not presently exist, as one of its major functions is the annihilation of all witches, and this universe strongly resembles the pre-Law universe.
This does add some more words, but... I do feel like this is a very important thing to mention.
---[X] A previous universe The second rewrite of the universe had a second Goddess associated with black feathers who was responsible for *a* breaking of the Law, though not necessarily *this* breaking. You wouldn't call her malevolent, but she probably would have a personal grudge against Mikuni dislike Oriko. The universe being rewritten wouldn't have phased her -- it's entirely possible that she's out there somewhere.
More specificity, again. And replacing the "personal grudge" with "dislike", which is more vague and carries far less connotation of there being a history there, implicating Homura less.
-[X] In the previous universes, "fragments" have been hidden from observers the Law with isolation fields or by suppressing the fragments' memories so that they're not aware of being part of the Law, and have had their powers suppressed through suppressing their memories of being part of the Law.

-[X] Kyubey has, in the previous universes, attempted to control, subvert, and or destroy the Law of Cycles. It strongly prefers the existence of witches.
Actually removing some universe-specificity here, because you can't really pin either of these things down as happening only in Homucifer-reality.

Also specified that the isolation fields were to hide fragments from the Law, and that the memory suppression was to suppress their powers.

EDIT: Actually, wait, is that line about fragments being hidden from observers with isolation fields/memory suppression strikes me as not entirely accurate? That might need some work.

EDIT2: Added fix to the fragments thing.

EDIT3: Also, I reckon we should add a mention of Homucifer's memory manipulation powers in this vote. It'd direct people's attention further away from Homura, and it may be very relevant for our own memory mysteries, as well as with the Feathers situation.
 
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I do know that if either of the humans who would become these goddesses learn any of this, it risks them rejoining with their respective godheads, becoming possessed by their other selves, and generally ceasing to exist as the people I know and care about. And of course, the universe might well unravel and be remade by whichever goddess reawakened. They've both done it before.
"If either of them learn this, it risks connecting them to these atemporal existences, which their other selves will take as an excuse to move in and rearrange the cosmic furniture."

deadpan stares

"Changing the Songtrack of the Spheres to their liking."

deadpan intensifies
 
Oops I tripped and accidentally wrote my own vote mostly based on Kaizuki's but with more information, reorganized with less wordcount, and some other changes. (i've put a spoiler with all the differences at the end)

[X] Emphasize that the information you're about to disclose cannot escape isolation without your say-so, not even to Constellation or Mitakihara. The wrong parties learning of it could result in the universe being rewritten or worse. Anybody unwilling to bear that should either leave temporarily or plan to remove their memories afterwards.

[X] Reality has been rewritten at least twice.
-[X] You have no knowledge of you existing in prior versions of reality.
-[X] Pre-rewrite reality strongly resembled this one, but the Law of Cycles did not exist.
--[X] In pre-rewrite reality, that witch didn't kill Sayaka, but Sayaka died shortly after fighting it.

-[X] First rewrite reality had the Law of Cycles, which is a benevolent Goddess, a Heaven, a collection of meguca souls, a law of reality, the activities of those, and the collective whole of those things.
--[X] One major function is the annihilation of all Witches, so you hoped you were in a diverged pre-rewrite reality.
---[X] Kyubey attempted to subvert and/or destroy the Law of Cycles in that reality, because it wants Witches to exist.

-[X] Second rewrite reality had a second Goddess responsible for a not-necessarily-related fragmentation of the Law, which she sustained using memory manipulation powers.
--[X] "Fragment" is a term that has previously seen use to describe individual souls parted from the Law.
---[X] "Fragments" have previously been hidden from the Law through isolation fields, and have had their powers suppressed through suppressing their memories of being part of the Law.
--[X] The second Goddess is associated with black feathers seemingly exactly like these, but you're not sure she's the source of the problems.
---[X] Not malevolent and not a fan of fate, so course-correcting it to kill Sayaka seems out of character.
---[X] Would probably dislike Oriko, though.

- Reorganized and moved stuff around to where I thought it was most appropriate
- Put all the warning stuff at the start and removed it from the end, including the 'risking reality rewrite' stuff
- Removed the thing of telling Kazumi, its something we could bring up later if we want
- Emphasized us as having the final say-so and authority on sharing any of this information

- More specificity about what happened in which iteration of reality
- Added mention of pre-rewrite reality strongly resembling this one
- Specified that we thought EDIT: hoped we were in a diverged pre-rewrite reality, not just one where the Law of Cycles wasn't a thing.

- Added mention of Homucifer's memory manipulation powers, hopefully leading people away from thinking about Homura and possibly being very relevant now for Feathers stuff and/or our own Memory Mysteries.
- Fixed the fragments information to be more accurate
- Added that Homucifer's feathers are seemingly exactly like the ones we're dealing with now, as well as reasons we're not certain about her actually being the source of the problems
- Changed Homucifer having a grudge against Oriko to merely probably disliking her, to avoid the implication of there being a history which could lead back to Homura
 
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[X] Kaizuki

At the moment I like this vote the best: I feel like it communicates most of the things that need to be said, and I think it does the best job of avoiding implicating Madoka or Homura. My biggest concern left in that regard is that mentioning Homucifer's grudge against Oriko will implicate Homura.

Here's some change suggestions to get across more information that I think is unproblematic and/or important, as well as hopefully fixing the Oriko thing:

Felt like there was an unnecessary line there, and I see no reason not to be more specific on what happened in which iteration of the universe.

Again, more specificity on what happened in which iteration. And a bit more specificity on what "involved with Sayaka" means.

This does add some more words, but... I do feel like this is a very important thing to mention.

More specificity, again. And replacing the "personal grudge" with "dislike", which is more vague and carries far less connotation of there being a history there, implicating Homura less.

Actually removing some universe-specificity here, because you can't really pin either of these things down as happening only in Homucifer-reality.

Also specified that the isolation fields were to hide fragments from the Law, and that the memory suppression was to suppress their powers.

EDIT: Actually, wait, is that line about fragments being hidden from observers with isolation fields/memory suppression strikes me as not entirely accurate? That might need some work.

EDIT2: Added fix to the fragments thing.

EDIT3: Also, I reckon we should add a mention of Homucifer's memory manipulation powers in this vote. It'd direct people's attention further away from Homura, and it may be very relevant for our own memory mysteries, as well as with the Feathers situation.

So. First off: the grudge. Understand, I'm never naming Homucifer here. If you think we should add a line to not name Homucifer by the name, I'm down. Because of that, it should be impossible to connect the Grudge and Homura and Feathers. Nobody alive knows of Oriko having ever tried to attack Madoka, since it never happened in this universe.

The grudge is crucial. We are here to examine, initially, threat to Mikuni Oriko, and momentarily that is probably going to expand to a mission of examining what can be done to identify, obstruct, and or hide people from feathers. That the black feathers Goddess has a personal issue with Mikuni Oriko is *critical* to contextualizing why the Goddess might kill Oriko and not someone else. Otherwise, the logical conclusion is that Oriko has a relationship with the other mentioned interest of the Goddess, which is the Law fragment.

I am leery of ascribing specific powers in general to Homucifer beyond "probable cosmic potence." That she has displayed memory magic is not even a fact, you can't prove that it wasn't soul magic or reality manipulation. If you suggested to me that Homucifer could do something, regardless of what it was, I would nod my head 9.9 times in ten.

The isofield/memory suppression line is not entirely accurate. However, I think it is both *ultra relevant* and *not significantly misleading.* The use of an isolation field to hide Homura from the Law *strongly* implies that isofields can be more broadly used to hide just about anything even from beings of Goddess-tier power. On the other hand, memory suppression of Law fragments... I would argue it's a mandatory mention but perhaps it could be presented in a very slightly different context.

The universe issue. You're assuming there have been only two rewrites, Lynn, and that an "original" is clearly identifiable. It's not an unfounded assumption, but it's one I don't think is material to us, because implications-wise it seems to do little except alter wordings.

Regards Kazumi, it literally came up instantly in these last updates -- I think it is certainly relevant to Umika.
 
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-[] There was extensive evidence in a previous universe that "fragments" might be hidden from observers with isolation fields, or by suppressing the fragments' memories so that they're not aware of being part of the Law.

Perhaps this is more suitable? The goal here is to proffer relevant information to the group. Knowing what I do, I think thread's instant reaction to "there's a LoC fragment" would be "well it has its memories suppressed." And thread's instant reaction to "how do you hide a LoC fragments from Homucifer" -- either memory suppression is good enough or you need an isofield. Those are the only canon elements that would offer any explanation. Alternatives would require, uh, novel scenarios.
 
So. First off: the grudge. Understand, I'm never naming Homucifer here. If you think we should add a line to not name Homucifer by the name, I'm down. Because of that, it should be impossible to connect the Grudge and Homura and Feathers.
Oh, yeah, I wasn't expecting us to name Homucifer.
The grudge is crucial. We are here to examine, initially, threat to Mikuni Oriko, and momentarily that is probably going to expand to a mission of examining what can be done to identify, obstruct, and or hide people from feathers. That the black feathers Goddess has a personal issue with Mikuni Oriko is *critical* to contextualizing why the Goddess might kill Oriko and not someone else. Otherwise, the logical conclusion is that Oriko has a relationship with the other mentioned interest of the Goddess, which is the Law fragment.
That's fair - I'll add that back to my own vote.
I am leery of ascribing specific powers in general to Homucifer beyond "probable cosmic potence." That she has displayed memory magic is not even a fact, you can't prove that it wasn't soul magic or reality manipulation. If you suggested to me that Homucifer could do something, regardless of what it was, I would nod my head 9.9 times in ten.
My understanding is that Homura's Wish powers in the Law of Cycles universe were actually memory manipulation - though I suppose that's Wraith Arc stuff, so that might not be PMAS canon?

I am pretty confident that what she did was memory manipulation, though, so maybe I'll just change "memory manipulation powers" to "memory manipulation".
The isofield/memory suppression line is not entirely accurate. However, I think it is both *ultra relevant* and *not significantly misleading.* The use of an isolation field to hide Homura from the Law *strongly* implies that isofields can be more broadly used to hide just about anything even from beings of Goddess-tier power. On the other hand, memory suppression of Law fragments... I would argue it's a mandatory mention but perhaps it could be presented in a very slightly different context.
Yeah, I'm not suggesting to not mention those things. I think it's better to say "isofields were used to hide Fragments from the Law" now and then later bring up the implication of "so isofields can probably hide just about anything even from Goddess-tier beings", though, rather than presenting outright inaccurate information.

And the memory suppression bit just struck me as outright wrong/misleading.
The universe issue. You're assuming there have been only two rewrites, Lynn, and that an "original" is clearly identifiable. It's not an unfounded assumption, but it's one I don't think is material to us, because implications-wise it seems to do little except alter wordings.
I haven't actually assumed there have been only two rewrites, I guess it might've come across that way because I'm only talking about the rewrites that we know about?

I'm not really sure what you're objecting to here - I'm mostly just saying there's no reason not to be specific about the rewrites we remember and what happened in which rewrite.
 
I'm line by lining this, it's impossible for me to work on it effectively otherwise. I have some changes to make to my vote, I'll edit this post with those momentarily. Comments are internal to the quote... That's probably really bad habit, but I'm not up to fixing it better rn. At least it should be readable?

Oops I tripped and accidentally wrote my own vote mostly based on Kaizuki's but with more information, reorganized with less wordcount, and some other changes. (i've put a spoiler with all the differences at the end)

[X] Emphasize that the information you're about to disclose cannot escape isolation without your say-so, not even to Constellation or Mitakihara. The wrong parties learning of it could result in the universe being rewritten or worse. Anybody unwilling to bear that should either leave temporarily or plan to remove their memories afterwards.

"Your say so" is bad language, we're not a queen. I'm dancing around that myself, I recognize the temptation.

[X] Reality has been rewritten at least twice.

This is a reasonable shortening of my vote and I approve of it, I should adopt this.

-[X] You have no knowledge of you existing in prior versions of reality.



-[X] Pre-rewrite reality strongly resembled this one, but the Law of Cycles did not exist.


--[X] In pre-rewrite reality, that witch didn't kill Sayaka, but Sayaka died shortly after fighting it.

The change here doesn't seem to add any value, to me. No need to specify which reality. "This witch had a relationship to Sayaka in previous universe, which might well be a factor in why it happened with her here, you suppose."

-[X] First rewrite reality had the Law of Cycles, which is a benevolent Goddess, a Heaven, a collection of meguca souls, a law of reality, the activities of those, and the collective whole of those things.
--[X] One major function is the annihilation of all Witches, so you hoped you were in a diverged pre-rewrite reality.
---[X] Kyubey attempted to subvert and/or destroy the Law of Cycles in that reality, because it wants Witches to exist.

I see no benefit in the changes here. The language about realities gets a tad confusing when you start saying "*that* reality."

-[X] Second rewrite reality had a second Goddess responsible for a not-necessarily-related fragmentation of the Law, which she sustained using memory manipulation powers.
--[X] "Fragment" is a term that has previously seen use to describe individual souls parted from the Law.
---[X] "Fragments" have previously been hidden from the Law through isolation fields, and have had their powers suppressed through suppressing their memories of being part of the Law.

"Second rewrite reality" is US RIGHT NOW in theory. It's not a previous universe any more, necessarily. So, as is, this is... Bad. I would strongly argue that the black feathers goddess existed in FIRST rewrite reality, and again, might easily have survived the transition.

--[X] The second Goddess is associated with black feathers seemingly exactly like these, but you're not sure she's the source of the problems.
---[X] Not malevolent and not a fan of fate, so course-correcting it to kill Sayaka seems out of character.
---[X] Would probably dislike Oriko, though.

No comment.
 
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