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Brockton's Celestial Forge (Worm/Jumpchain)

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"Did, in some places, from what I heard. And that's just the public. People in cape circles, they know what that kind of effect means."
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Angel69 said:
What does this mean?
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"I have a mind-f*** tech and not afraid to use it".

People 'in the know' are aware that there were talks about a kill order, so it can be easily seen as a statement "you sign that, gloves are off, here is the proof". And it's from a cape with a reputation to hold his word.

Blasto got a presigned kill order "you make fertile monster, we release this". Apeiron from external point of view prevented a "you use a nuke, we release this" for himself (he was getting a presigned one as well). Because signing a kill order for Apeiron will effectively mean that Apeiron has no reason to hold back, and with global scale mind altering tech everybody desperately wants Apeiron to hold back. It also means "You think you can press? Well, I can do that too!", plus this counting as an "official unofficial confirmation" (that might be seen as an excuse to use the tech) and Apeiron making PRT clear this mess somewhat makes whole situation into a 'fun' Matrioshka. It also has a 'civilian' perception layer, 'legal' and 'psych profile' one, it might make PRT's analyst pull out their hair in frustration because things just don't add up, whatever 'psych profiles' they had seem useless now.

Apeiron's 'Title' technology is extremely terrifying. At the moment it is a biology-independent, precise effect that targets and expands specific name in deliberately noticeable manner. That's right next to Simurgh as a nightmare fuel as is, even if not harmful. But what if it can be subtle? Suddenly an artillery operator holding a fake order will think 'this is legitimate'. What if it isn't limited by target sleeping? Outright reprogramming or 'rigging' of people in their sleep. What if it isn't limited to couple words? Secrets aired to whole populations ruining governments and capes' civilian identities. Info dumps that teach how to build guns, break things or brew drugs or can start outright cults. Can it be tied to and replace images? A potent stranger effect, you no longer see Apeiron, you see a civilian, but Armsmaster looks exactly like Apeiron, he has a kill order. What if it doesn't need to be tied to specific things to trigger? Is it limited to information or can insert feelings? ...

And what will that system do if Apeiron dies? Will it insert gibberish on every word driving whole planet mad? Kill order is effectively out of the window until situation can be dealt with.
 
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"We have food and the plumbing's working." The girl gave him a defiant look and turned to Barrow Rose, who he had no doubt would fold the moment she was out of sight. "While I'm gone the monkey's in charge."
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I spit out my tea when I read that line. You know the wisdom in this group is a big problem if a homunculus a half vegetable simian brain is better than long standing members.
 
I like how everyone thinks they're the only/most sane one. Everyone is truly the hero (or good intentioned villain) of their own story, indeed.

Maybe Blasto can branch out, providing Sane Monkeys to all villains! After having tea and crumpets with all his favourite people at Somer's Rock, that is.

It'll be funny if Blasto and Apeiron starts talking shop and Blasto (maybe along with everyone else) realizes that Apeiron is by far the superior bio-tinker... but just haven't gotten around to doing much of it. Except working on himself, of course. I'm sure that will be very comforting (and make the "Apeiron is a Case-53" theory gain ground).

Thanks for the chapter, LordRoustabout - and don't worry about the pacing.
 
I think I have the perfect civilian name for fleet it should be "Carth Onasi" because of the character from knights of the old republic has the nickname of fleet it would be a fun and funny thing to name fleet.

LordRoustabout said:
botanical mining
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Pycnandra acuminata a real life example of Botanic mining in a way. There are also other plants that absorb metal bet this is the most well known.
 
I'm surprised people support Leet so much, he aided and abetted Bakuda's actions (and continues to do so), and so is indirectly responsible for a ton of suffering. I just want to see Apeiron finally tear down Bakuda and Leet, especially after all their preparation. I need some vindication after all the apparent OPness that Apeiron is supposed to have undergone, I'm hoping to see Leet and Bakuda pull out their trump cards and for Apeiron to just go, No, you.
 
n0mster said:
I'm surprised people support Leet so much, he aided and abetted Bakuda's actions (and continues to do so), and so is indirectly responsible for a ton of suffering. I just want to see Apeiron finally tear down Bakuda and Leet, especially after all their preparation. I need some vindication after all the apparent OPness that Apeiron is supposed to have undergone, I'm hoping to see Leet and Bakuda pull out their trump cards and for Apeiron to just go, No, you.
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Seeing as he just got Digistruct tech, the Game Grid is already a hard sell, but once he gets that one Moon-Cell Magitech perk it's basically completely done for. Not to mention him just hacking the shit out of the Game Grid's tech once he can connect to whatever control panel Leet will be using.
 
Classy and Glamorous are mutually exclusive in the manner you desire @Spidey_phd. What your post describes is flashy, tacky and loud. All of those are anathema to Classy conduct.
 
Spidey_phd said:
5) The Master's Touch: The meet-up at Somer's Rock seems to be expanding rapidly beyond canon's participants. Apeiron might need to enlarge and modify the bar in order to accommodate the additional attendees... incidentally transforming a dingy pub into the world's greatest bar. A speakeasy theme seems appropriate.
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5 all the way, with a portal open to the mech hangar where everything is getting armed and 150 misiles loaded on to a pair of boots.
 
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n0mster said:
I'm surprised people support Leet so much, he aided and abetted Bakuda's actions (and continues to do so), and so is indirectly responsible for a ton of suffering. I just want to see Apeiron finally tear down Bakuda and Leet, especially after all their preparation. I need some vindication after all the apparent OPness that Apeiron is supposed to have undergone, I'm hoping to see Leet and Bakuda pull out their trump cards and for Apeiron to just go, No, you.
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People love an underdog, and it seems a lot like everything and one is out after Leet. The law, the heroes, the bullshit that is Monkey Steel, his allies, even his own power.
 
I think you could try using more Interlude instead of the MC to further the story along. Or make a new rule that state that Interlude bypass the CF activation amount. Since the cycle of explain and get new power then explain is a major point in CF this should let you increase the pace and let you do more world building instead of CF theory crafting.
 
Oh no....March has gone proto-titan if I read that section right. That could mean that some damn nasty things are coming down the road.
 
After being reminded by the Damsel comment I realized that it is a bit odd that of the half dozen or so capes with annihilator powers in the world, three of them are in BB. If the rest of the world knew how tough Joe had become, then it would make more sense. However if you look at Joe's public fights, he has shown evidence of being tough, but not to that level. There is no reason for most people to be hunting down power sets like that, yet somehow we ended up with three of them in BB, though I admit that one is an OC. Its not to the point of being implausible, but something to be careful about. Considering how rare that power type is, having a bunch of them show up to threaten Joe, before it's even known to be needed, stretches SOD.
 
Vysirez said:
After being reminded by the Damsel comment I realized that it is a bit odd that of the half dozen or so capes with annihilator powers in the world, three of them are in BB. If the rest of the world knew how tough Joe had become, then it would make more sense. However if you look at Joe's public fights, he has shown evidence of being tough, but not to that level. There is no reason for most people to be hunting down power sets like that, yet somehow we ended up with three of them in BB, though I admit that one is an OC. Its not to the point of being implausible, but something to be careful about. Considering how rare that power type is, having a bunch of them show up to threaten Joe, before it's even known to be needed, stretches SOD.
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There are 4 of them in the bay, and I don't believe any of them are OCs. Flechette and March are cannon and a package deal, and Flechette was sent as a ward trade with NYC to get someone from a different department to hopefully have some diplomacy with Aspersion before... all the things happened just now. Scrub triggered in Brockton Bay, and is cannon, and DoD is cannon and the only one brought in specifiacly to be able to "deal" with Aperion so the Empire can deal with Aperion.
 
Vysirez said:
After being reminded by the Damsel comment I realized that it is a bit odd that of the half dozen or so capes with annihilator powers in the world, three of them are in BB. If the rest of the world knew how tough Joe had become, then it would make more sense. However if you look at Joe's public fights, he has shown evidence of being tough, but not to that level. There is no reason for most people to be hunting down power sets like that, yet somehow we ended up with three of them in BB, though I admit that one is an OC. Its not to the point of being implausible, but something to be careful about. Considering how rare that power type is, having a bunch of them show up to threaten Joe, before it's even known to be needed, stretches SOD.
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Who is the oc supposed to be March, Scrub and Damsel are all canon
 
This review is mostly for 57 Crunch Time. No chance to read the new chapter yet.
LordRoustabout said:
I sighed
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Aisha is having fun discussing his powers: Joe sighs
Aisha is having fun talking with clones: Joe sighs
Aisha or clones make witty marks: Joe sighs
Clones are having fun playing with new powers: Joe sighs
Joe gets a useful new power with few or no downsides: Joe sighs
Joe gets a 3rd power to generate objects from nothing: quote Joe "When it rains it pours."

I mean no offense to anyone who has to deal with depression in real life and there's no surprise a parahuman would have it, but it's made the story more difficult for me. I've got through Joe being slow to build, walls of introspection, hesitance, tendency to push things off, introvertedness and more. I somehow got through an arc that had a huge build up but no satisfactory close. But it's almost exhausting reading about someone who seems determined to be miserable and see the worst in things. You could give Joe the perfect answer to a problem and he'd still find a reason to agonize about it.

Depression isn't rare in Worm fics but this is another area where the pacing has in my opinion hurt things. With so little action and time passed in story, we've instead had this state of mind for a very large stretch of time and little to break it up. It makes sense that he wouldn't just "get better" (unless uses his powers) but that doesn't change how it's worked narratively or timewise.
lancelot said:
It is really starting to look like your taking each power and implying the worst psychological trauma possible. Meanwhile any power that effect your mental state in a positive manner is ignored.
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I don't think LR is actually doing this but it can certainly feel that way.
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"Okay." My duplicate said in good humor. "So, that's three ways to make temporary objects out of nothing?"
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'It's an opportunity." Replied the first from his interface with the computer core.
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'The effects of the power aren't actually detrimental in any way.' The first conveyed. 'In any situation where we aren't dealing with having it dropped on us right before a highly sensitive precisely planned project it would be a universal benefit. It is a universal benefit."
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The above is slightly mitigated by his clones being the complete opposite. I'm certain I'd have dropped the story if the clones (and probably Aisha) weren't in it and we only had the original Joe to read about.
 
Squamous Deity said:
Who is the OC? I count four annihilators (March, Flechette, Scrub and Damsel of Distress) and none of them are OCs.
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I thought Scrub was an OC, and I had forgotten about Flechette, so its actually worse then I had been thinking. Most of my worm knowledge comes from fanfic, the original story is too grim for my taste. Scrub isn't one that comes up a lot.
 
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Vysirez said:
After being reminded by the Damsel comment I realized that it is a bit odd that of the half dozen or so capes with annihilator powers in the world, three of them are in BB. If the rest of the world knew how tough Joe had become, then it would make more sense. However if you look at Joe's public fights, he has shown evidence of being tough, but not to that level. There is no reason for most people to be hunting down power sets like that, yet somehow we ended up with three of them in BB, though I admit that one is an OC. Its not to the point of being implausible, but something to be careful about. Considering how rare that power type is, having a bunch of them show up to threaten Joe, before it's even known to be needed, stretches SOD.
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by the time that a guy is fist-fighting with near-endbringer-level Lung, after Barely recovering from the ambush that destroyed all of his equipment, I think it's safe to presume that you're going to want Annihilator effects if you want to hurt said guy + the only one of the Annihilators who was sought out with the specific intent of threatening Apeiron was Damsel. The rest either came on their own for their own purposes (March), were transferred to the bay area for publicity reasons (Flechette) or triggered in the aftermath of the Unholy Hour (Scrub).
 
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