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Brockton's Celestial Forge (Worm/Jumpchain)

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Also just saying
FTL ramming is not subtle
Most of the world prob seen it, if not the tsunami will, if also not all the world sensors will see the gravitational shenanigans and the Aurora borealis that was called lung
 
March surviving I can at least rationalize as Joe being frantic and in a lot of pain so he got distracted, but the Oni Lee fight lasting more than a second made the hype from the rest of the chapter seem kinda hollow.
He did better against Lee when they first fought! No amount of March support should have been able to save him from immeadiatly being taken out.
Then again I'm here for the technobabble, so seeing his tech be completely useless stings regardless.

Still a monumental work, but I can't enjoy the scale of combat when this was a Pyrrhic victory at the absolute best, and more than likely a dangerous breech in others taking his tech at worse.
 
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LordRoustabout said:
The impact tore her from my grip in a bloody motion and sent her flying, painfully bouncing along the concrete before stopping dead against a cargo container.
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I suppose it's not impossible that LR missed some commas? "Before stopping, dead, against a cargo container"? Probably just wishful thinking. Anyway, yeah, no victory to be found here. Lung has never really mattered. March is injured, but Bakuda can probably healing-grenade her into one piece, and March will be able to find a fix for the whole cancer problem.
 
Damn, that was a hell of an update. I don't think I've been this hooked while reading except for maybe when I read Akagi. Props to you Lord for such a great chapter.
 
SirDerpinton said:
At the rate of Joe's growth, she would only be a minor annoyance and her injuries are not going to help her situation unless the band of murder hobos that look like discount scp's recruit her, but that is probably not going to happen unless Murphy hates me.
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Perfect timing and perfect manipulation of capes? That seems like a nightmare for anyone to deal with... anyone besides Joe. It will be hard to top fighting a swarm of Oni-Lees using a version of Sting. It will still be dangerous, but it probably won't be more dangerous than what he has already dealt with.
 
cranical form said:
March surviving I can at least rationalize as Joe being frantic and in a lot of pain so he got distracted, but the Oni Lee fight lasting more than a second made the hype from the rest of the chapter seem kinda hollow.
He did better against Lee when they first fought! No amount of March support should have been able to save him from immeadiatly being taken out.
Then again I'm here for the technobabble, so seeing his tech be completely useless stings regardless.
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To be fair he had even better gear thanks to bakudas updgraded tech with armsmaster stolen tech and marchs abilities.
 
So LordRoustabout just flexed on every other writer on this site. Almost as much as Aiperon flexed on Worm's Tinkers. Should we call him LordHemingway for the sheer writing speed? :V
 
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I'm sitting here remembering canon, where Oni Lee gets shot in the knee by an unnamed Coil mercenary. You can't have multiple paragraphs explaining the presence of god forged AI controlled point defense lasers set to kill on sight and sensors and weapons that can hit objects through multiple walls and have them not factor in to the following fight scene.

At this point it would have been much more interesting if Aisha had shot March, Oni Lee and Lung in the back of the head with a handgun she found mid monologue. This arc has overstayed it's welcome. There are dozens of other villains to use, you can afford to kill a few off in the space of a sentence.
 
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That Time Humans Saw Into the Shardscape (readerdreamer)
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    • Robotninja said:
    Which is totally reasonable. Remember, shards are basically playing a game. They can change or boost powers if they feel it is needed to a degree.
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    That Time Humans Saw Into the Shardscape

    Queen Administrator: "I'm afraid to say despite my host's relationship with Apeiron, nothing can be done about nerfing his output. His shard is working on a different network than ours and I have no power over it."

    Prototyper: "That's not fair!"

    Shaper: "Speak for yourself, at least your host is finally acting right with him around. My host is playing her own little family drama in a jail cell, and from the looks of things, I can't even have her stay and get data on those interesting red thread... things!"

    Ramp-to-Scale: "Can you at least loosen the requirements on our powers? My guy had a poor showing the last time, and I think Apeiron didn't notice me there."

    Queen Administrator: "Granted. And I must say, I enjoyed my host's last bout with yours."

    Ramp-to-Scale: "I am of service, my queen. How about Timer, Area of Effect, and Cloner? I work with them these days, and they would need some help too just so their hosts can amount to anything."

    Queen Administrator: "Also granted. Let me establish a new Apeiron Protocol - for anyone in direct conflict with him or his activities, I am allowing for the reinterpretation of Sechen Ranges."

    There was a general cheer for that from the collective shard network. Queen Administrator calmly nodded at that, hiding the true calculations in play in her bio processors.

    She remembered the peek all those hosts had into the Shard Space. She knew that they wouldn't be able to interpret what they saw, if they even remembered. And the shards here wouldn't know the true reason she had given such allowances on conflict against Apeiron.

    She hadn't wanted data. She just wanted privacy, to close the gap the hosts could now use to peek into their world.

    She did the equivalent of a human blush as she quivered in embarrassment. Curse their timing when they saw her - she had only been in her blue-red crystalline underwear!
     
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    • cranical form said:
    I mean his offense certainly had a huge upgrade, I'm just not convinced his defense/speed could really outpace what Joe's got.
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    Now you mention it at the start Joe literately mentions he is moving faster than the sound barrier at the start and it looks like him teleporting, so yeah how did they outpace Joe?

    Edit. Forgot about shard bullshitery
     
    So worth the wait, though I agree, I'm hoping for an end to the cat and mouse with Bakuda, if only so we can move onto some different enemies, or solve some of the guys that we know are lurking in the background like Coil. As far as the moving speed, while it does feel a bit like trying to keep it fair for story purposes so he doesn't roll over everyone, there is a basis for it. The person who out paced him was Oni Lee, a teleporter. So depending on the mechanic for triggering the teleport, its potentially instant movement.
     
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    This will be a massive reputation boost to Apeiron, he literally faced the best the ABB had to offer & won.

    Now when I say reputation boost I don't mean that everyone's going to think that he's a hero, but they will recognize that he is a force to be reckoned with. A man who can face overwhelming odds and come out on top.

    That's not including the Endbringer sized robot he brought into the fight at the end to face Lung. That alone will make people wary of pushing him too far. It will also make them question the amount of resources he has access to & if he has a wealthy backer (or if he's stupid rich). I wonder how people would react to the knowledge that the giant robot wasn't even up to his standards yet.

    I'm really looking forward to seeing the aftermath & the reactions to this conflict.
     
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    SirDerpinton said:
    Now you mention it at the start Joe literately mentions he is moving faster than the sound barrier at the start and it looks like him teleporting, so yeah how did they outpace Joe?

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    My guess would be that because nobodies home upstairs that March pretty much drilled him to the absolute limits of his human body and power, along with a dose of the shard/forge interaction introduced this chapter. But can that really beat either a aoe or pin-point response from Joe?
     
    SirDerpinton said:
    Now you mention it at the start Joe literately mentions he is moving faster than the sound barrier at the start and it looks like him teleporting, so yeah how did they outpace Joe?

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    During the Sting attack, the only time during the fight where he was seriously harmed, Oni-Lee didn't need to be as fast as Aperion, he simply cloned himself so many times it was physically impossible for the attacks to be dodged.
     
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