Some more stuff from the current reread. I started with quotes I noted, but after writing down my thoughts I reorganized things a bit, so they're not full in order.
Also,
@Boney if I track down the vote, will you copy them into the coresponding update? It kind of bothers me not to see the winning plan.
Thoughts on writing
The first, at catching sight of someone in the robes and hat of a wizard, ran right out screaming. Okay, then.
Mathilde has gotten that sort of reaction fairly rarely, all told. Part is that she became Mathilde, Important Person (and also a wizard); part is that she publicly did cool things, wizardly. And part is where she hangs out nowadays. I do feel even so that if Boney were to write this scene again, it wouldn't go quite this way. I think it wouldn't be quite this extreme, and if it was extreme it wouldn't quite go this way.
I think one part is that Boney's relationship to the world has changed, because however familiar he was before this quest, nearly seven years (coming up in 12 days) of working and thinking about it would've deepened it a lot. It's more real now than it was at when it began.
But I do think it's also reflective of Boney as a writer. In some ways, it's changed remarkably little. Even across a pretty broad span, you can see the similarities (partly because Boney wasn't a fresh story teller). But there's obviously changes too. The structure in the modern quest is different. Slower, for one. Which has disadvantages, I do the faster pacing. But it also has advantages, and one of them is that individual scenes get more focus. There's more introspection, but also more consideration of the broader context.
As I mentioned, I don't think this scene would play out the same way today. More thought to where that reaction comes from, what it means for the people who react, and who are reacted to. How Mathilde lives with it, and how she can use it. I'm going to broadly gesture at Pratchett here, because thinking about this got me thinking about how he does that sort of societal examination. And also because everyone benefits from the occasional reminder those books exist, and there's at least one of them for which it's been long enough for a reread.
Anyway, partly that's also the character of Mathilde. She doesn't have the experience to ponder those questions yet. She's also too learning to swim in the deep waters to worry about the currents. No matter how useful those are to getting somewhere, you first need to make sure your lungs don't fill with water. And that's a really interesting character arc you don't see often (it requires a pretty broad span of time and words). I wondered to what degree that was planned, but after some thought I think it wasn't, but there's really not much else it could've gone. Credit here is more for the execution of portraying that really well, than the idea itself.
Incidentally, it really is neat to see early Mathilde again. She really is quite different. Modern Mathilde is a veteran, and while she's still often unsure or improvising, she's also got a well honed toolbelt and the experience with those tools that she can be confident she'll have a fitting tool, and be able to pick it. She's unsure in that she's waiting for more information, not in that she doesn't know what to do with it.
Now, it's always dangerous to diagnose a writer through their work (the Beginner's Guide stuck with me on that). "Boney has changed as a writer and now prefers more in-depth, considering/examinatory scenes at slower pace" is kind of hard to show if you only have a single work, and more so because I'm not sure how I'd show that even just for the work itself. But it's my impression (and let me note at this will apply whenever something like this comes up).
However, I do have the great advantage that the author is around, who can actually say. So, Boney, do you feel like you're style has changed in this regard? Where have the million words and seven years of DL brought you?
Game system
[HOW MUCH DO THE REST OF THEM KNOW?: Rolls, 64, 44, 6, 34.]
[DO YOU BELIEVE THAT THIRD GUY: Req 60, Intrigue, 99+12=111. No. No you do not.]
I think this is interesting because the spy gets created by the roll, as the action is happening. These days, I think the existence of the spy would've been settled beforehand, when the whole thing was set up. But then, this is a brand new quest, and winning votes still had single digit counts. I don't think anyone expected 16k pages and a million words here, so the sensible investment to set things up is different. Also, at the start you always have to invent a lot, that's another factor.
Still, I think these days Boney would've settled to existence and identity of a spy like this before the roll came out. To paraphrase, if you set up a mystery you have to know the answer.
[WALL SCONCES: Req ??, Intrigue, 28+12=40. It was like that when I got here.]
[PROTRUDING BRICKS: Req ??, Intrigue, 62+12=74. Could adventure novels have lied to me?]
[ANYTHING ELSE?: Req ??, ??, 3+??= oh dear.]
[APPROPRIATE LEVEL OF CAUTION: Higher is better, Intrigue, 3+12=15. No caution shown. Seriously, you should stop reading adventure novels.]
[ROLL TO NOT GET EATEN: Req 40, Martial, 58+7=65. You succeed at not getting eaten.]
[ROLL TO MAKE HIM EAT STEEL: Req 40, Martial, 15+7=22. Nothing's getting eaten.]
Quoted this because the description here is just funny, and it's an example of how the modern way of doing things is overal better, some things are lost too. And not just funny result descriptions, other stuff too.
You can write in a report here, allowing you to either make yourself look good, underplay the importance of something that went wrong, curry favour with someone else present, or to massage the facts to fit an agenda of yours. Otherwise, you will be judged on results alone. How horrible. Please try to keep it punchy - your Elector Count is a man of action.
I'm not alone on this, but I do kind of want to get back to this. It was a cool idea, and remains so, and there isn't any quest ongoing I'm aware of that does it. Obviously it doesn't make sense for Mathilde right now, but reading this again actually really pushed SM for me so Mathilde could sit on the Emperor's council and we could have that sort of gameplay again.
Though even then, it wouldn't be quite the same, since moderm Mathilde is a power in her own right, and has more than proven herself. But it could capture the general vibe.
[VISITING THE WATCHMEN: Automatic success because Greatswords.]
[READING THE RECORDS: Req 50, Learning, 39+13=52. A long and hard-fought battle.]
[VISITING THE CARTER'S GUILD: Automatic success because Greatswords.]
[HUNTING JOHAN: Req 40, Intrigue, 68+12=80. Fish in a barrel.]
[INTERROGATING JOHAN: Req 40, Intrigue, 75+12=87. Singing like a bird.]
I think this is an interesting glimpse in how Boney gets to the results. Consider the task(s) required, estimate how hard it is given Mathilde and circumstances (the two auto passes are intersting in this regard), then roll and interpret the results. Rince and repeat
Though I don't know if there's still hard pass/fail requirements for most things.
[HOW MUCH DOES HE KNOW: Roll, 46. Snippets and tidbits.]
[HOW MUCH DOES HE SAY: Req 40, 37. Failure avoided only because you rolled so well riding your shadowhorse.]
This is interesting because I don't believe nowadays you'd see a roll fall below the threshold but get a pass anyway. Though it might just be early formating not being settled, and you'd either have a reduction of the requirement, or a bonus to the roll.
Plot related
Prepare a report on the abilities and relationships of Stirland's diplomat. Encode it using the cipher you have been given. A rider will arrive at the castle in three months time; give them the report.
So, this is something I don't understand. Why would they need a report on Anton, the one guy they'd already have information on since he's from the previous administration? A way to verify her information, since they can compare it to what they already have? That would make sense, actually.
And then, at long, long last, you have it. Just under a year before the previous Elector Count's death.
This is pretty brutal if you think about it. They carted that stuff out over a year before Alberich did his ritual (incidentally, did you already decide he was a chaos cultist back then Boney?). It really shows how little control he had, that they could pull it off, were willing to risk it, and Alberich either didn't know or felt there was nothing he could do about it.
Or hell, it might not even have happened under Alberich, I don't actually remember how long he was in control before that he went to the warp. Either way, awful situation to find yourself in.
Misc
the familiar scent of papyrus
I noticed this, because I don't think papyrus would grow in the empire, and as an export it would be rather expensive. Better than parchement, which is hilariously pricey, but I don't think it would be cheap. Also, papyrus isn't really suited to the books and such we see. IRL, you'd already have paper* being the main thing in the comparable time period, for around 200+ years if you take the empire to be around 1500s level. Possibly quite a bit longer, since dwarfs would be quite interested in properly writing things down**.
It could be poetic license, but referencing the scent makes me think this is to the specific thing.
*Not quite modern paper made of wood, but paper made from cloth rags, which except for wool would already be plant fibers made flexible. Wooden pulp actually dates back, like a startling amount of the modern world, to the 1800s.
**Fun fact: One difference of paper vs parchement is that ink soaks in, so you can't change what's written later. Bad for reuse, very useful for government documents. That's one reason paper was pushed in the islamicate context by the rulers, it was supposed to help against tax fraud.
Better clean the... whatever that was... off you, because it's time for the ceremony. Thankfully your normal grey robes count as formal dress, because otherwise you wouldn't have a thing to wear.
Mathilde's tradition of only ever wearing grey robes begins. It will be a decade before she changes her grey robes to slightly fancier grey robes and soon after get forcibly further fancified. With silk, a second robe change might come soon. If we plot this, we can expect a further ten years from now that she will have a different grey robe every day.... which isn't that unusual, having a different outfit every day.
But in another ten, she'll have a differnt robe every second! .... which isn't actually that implausible with grey marks.
Jokes are hard.
you'd thought to change into something a little less attention-getting than your usual robes
Though at this point she's still wearing other things if need be.
[HOW GOOD A HOME DO YOU FIND?: Roll, Diplomacy+Ranald's Blessing, 87+9+20=116. Well, then.]
The first "Well, then"
Iconic.