Yes.
Also probably Alexandria too, or at least the first to get a reaction that isn't contempt.
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Brockton's Celestial Forge (Worm/Jumpchain)
- Thread starter LordRoustabout
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Also probably Alexandria too, or at least the first to get a reaction that isn't contempt.
Im actually interested in introducing dust to taylors insect. Like how graphene laced water can improve a spiders silk by five times. I wonder if a few generations of insects getting trace amount of dust can modify her bugs. Also would gears of war creatures be controlable by taylor? Several of them are buglike.
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Im not suggesting causing infections but if blasto creates a force like the locus could taylor subvert them?
Also i im curious how things will go after leviathan. The arc where the yndersiders stepped up and took territory was a good arc. With aperions help the undersiders could "hire" him for repairs lol
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Im not suggesting causing infections but if blasto creates a force like the locus could taylor subvert them?
Also i im curious how things will go after leviathan. The arc where the yndersiders stepped up and took territory was a good arc. With aperions help the undersiders could "hire" him for repairs lol
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- Location
- usa
He needs to build her a bee-gun that shoots bees.
I think both the preamble and addendum were great, some of the best (really gave it the "canon worm interlude" feel. albeit truncated). Whoever applied the term "banality of evil" to Leet hit the mark.
I think we basically had a case of "double buildup" but I won't belabor that point since it's been made. At least we now have the contours of the capabilities of the nanobots and the Aisha suit is well on its way.
Interested to see what March is planning. Unfortunately, her ominous comments don't sound so ominous when, in the span of the same chapter, not only is Apeiron making god-level nanomachinery, he triggered with the powers of Hugo Boss, Gisele Bundchen and a memetic anime lech
I think we basically had a case of "double buildup" but I won't belabor that point since it's been made. At least we now have the contours of the capabilities of the nanobots and the Aisha suit is well on its way.
Interested to see what March is planning. Unfortunately, her ominous comments don't sound so ominous when, in the span of the same chapter, not only is Apeiron making god-level nanomachinery, he triggered with the powers of Hugo Boss, Gisele Bundchen and a memetic anime lech
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- Location
- Philippines
C53s: "One of us! One of us!" (Shown in a dramatically appropriate moment)
Congrats you now have an inventory system
.Or as I see it as a sentai weapon summoning sequence since after you use it dramatically the scene freezes and you get a close up of the weapon and the attack name.
MaimakteriAnn
(Verified Sleepy)
- Location
- Enormous And Round Terran Homeworld
- Pronouns
- She/Her/Dr
No gravity dust in the sole to allow wall walking or double jumping? Garment missed an opportunity to work with dust thread?
- Location
- Odessa
Thanks for the update.
Constantly evolving nanites... Is it time to redefine S-level threat rating?
Constantly evolving fiber clothing... It is synergizing with bugs! We have a code Apeiron! I repeat, code Apeiron! We need to evacuate the City now!
Add constantly evolving implant and constantly evolving aura-gear.
P. S.
Leet: Using my awesome time-space emiter I briefly sped up time for your equipment and aged it by 5 thousand years! How do you feel now, with your equipment failing you with you inside?
Apeiron's bike was now silent and looked positively ancient, Apeiron's suit was practically ozing sand and dust.
Apeiron: And you made it exclude everything organic specifically so that I wouldn't break the effect?
Leet: Yes, it was hard to exclude everything living, but I couldn't risk you breaking the field up from inside by shooting your doom laser into my direction.
Apeiron nodded: Yeah, makes sense.
Uber: Um... Leet, something is wrong.
The sand was dramatically falling, there was dust in the air, but suit itself stayed in one piece. Apeiron brushed off a bit of dust from his bike with his finger, the next moment the bike Woke Up. A wave of dust flew into every direction. Engine roared. And it was not previous roar of powerful machine, it was a blood chilling roar of an ancient beast that was woken from the slumber and about to show why it's a bad idea to mess with it.
Leet: You are bullshitting us, showing a thought front, you equipment is about to fall apart!
Apeiron: Sorry guys, but at minimum, I build to last.
Apeiron leveled his, now ancient, pistol and shot. What previously was merely draining the shield now pierced through Leets shield and through Space-Time device's support. But before device could fall Apeiron's suit lit up with grey lines and device flew into Apeiron's hand.
Apeiron: Sorry, but I'm taking it. Would be stupid of me to ignore such a power booster.
Technopathic demigod and AIs in an augmented reality, what can go wrong?
Aisha is getting an artificial 'symphogear', what does it make her?
Constantly evolving 'throne'... That's intimidating!
Constantly evolving nanites... Is it time to redefine S-level threat rating?
Constantly evolving fiber clothing... It is synergizing with bugs! We have a code Apeiron! I repeat, code Apeiron! We need to evacuate the City now!
Add constantly evolving implant and constantly evolving aura-gear.
P. S.
Leet: Using my awesome time-space emiter I briefly sped up time for your equipment and aged it by 5 thousand years! How do you feel now, with your equipment failing you with you inside?
Apeiron's bike was now silent and looked positively ancient, Apeiron's suit was practically ozing sand and dust.
Apeiron: And you made it exclude everything organic specifically so that I wouldn't break the effect?
Leet: Yes, it was hard to exclude everything living, but I couldn't risk you breaking the field up from inside by shooting your doom laser into my direction.
Apeiron nodded: Yeah, makes sense.
Uber: Um... Leet, something is wrong.
The sand was dramatically falling, there was dust in the air, but suit itself stayed in one piece. Apeiron brushed off a bit of dust from his bike with his finger, the next moment the bike Woke Up. A wave of dust flew into every direction. Engine roared. And it was not previous roar of powerful machine, it was a blood chilling roar of an ancient beast that was woken from the slumber and about to show why it's a bad idea to mess with it.
Leet: You are bullshitting us, showing a thought front, you equipment is about to fall apart!
Apeiron: Sorry guys, but at minimum, I build to last.
Apeiron leveled his, now ancient, pistol and shot. What previously was merely draining the shield now pierced through Leets shield and through Space-Time device's support. But before device could fall Apeiron's suit lit up with grey lines and device flew into Apeiron's hand.
Apeiron: Sorry, but I'm taking it. Would be stupid of me to ignore such a power booster.
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- Location
- wethersfield,ct
Ok. Wow. I'll just focus on the preamble for the moment, seriously though, wow.
First, I liked how the villains aren't just sitting around here, they've got their own plans, and are plotting around the (possible) plans of everyone else.
Second, I'm not sure if what you did was intentional, but you took the most common, prolific fanon about Uber & Leet, and reversed them, with believable reasoning the whole way.
Fanon usually has Leet as the one getting angry, pushing the boundaries of common sense/acceptability.
It's generally Leet who doesn't mind civilians getting hurt for their shows, Leet who is/was petty and jealous of other Tinkers.
You showed us a Leet who is too soft for real villainy, but managed to hide it behind his equipment failures, Leet who's moral compass was still working, but was easily led...a Leet who was content with other Tinkers being better than him.
And then you pulled back the curtain, and it was really Uber behind that downhill momentum. And the comment that just made that fit perfectly, was the mention of Uber taking on so many roles in their company. He poured as much of himself into it as Leet, and that need to be capable at so many different jobs seems to have influenced, if not caused, his own trigger.
And then there's March, who from all appearances (and this could be my own issues here, I admit) is gaslighting Leet, maybe Uber too.
She had most of their minions cut loose, replaced with people she and Uber vetted, she has Leet running on absolute minimum sleep (wait, 9 hours every 42
, that's a little less than half what most people get, and not all at once either, yeesh) and has him jumping to and from different types of scenarios, keeping him on a mental rollercoaster.And who could be coming from New York? March was always semi-obsessed with powers and trigger events, has her look into the Magitech engine given her a shift in focus?
That would be easy to miss too, with March acting like a cat playing with a box of mice, watching them run the patterns she wants them to.
Great chapter all around, but that preamble really changed how Uber and Leet appear, in this story at least.
- Location
- Brazil, Minas gerais
As someone that like the descriptions.
*putting a meme of masterchef cooking appreciation here*^^
Also I liked that leet seems to be the less stupid of the two here. And some of Uber actions looking like were made to give him more control in their working relationship.
Still both of them are stupid and evil. But at last leet acknowledged that he could had being great.
Anyway since this whole chapter was inside the lab. With only degree of interactions (the AI use of the internet and the armor talk). I guess that when he got out it will be a major success.
Also Joe finally have update his chip. Good to him give how much he fear that. Now I am curious if he had it improved as much as possible or as little as possible.
Anyway since the attack happened in the very suspicious forest. I guess the attack in the city is imminent.
I admit that will be funny to me is the attack is already late because is awaiting a trigger (joe) that is not present. But I guess it will a bait he can't refuse. Like burning more buildings and offering sweet, sweet data for the all the thinkers powers that probably can even call a 'truce' (more of who backstab harder and faster and which order) to collect new data.
And the lab is now self updating to some degree. The 'kids' can now evolve with less supervision and with the clones update the hardware. And the lab does have capacity of production without joe with even good quality. Just not divine lvls. Still Quantity have a quality of it own. Which probably will help when some S/A rank truce is requested by the PRT and limitations are reduced.
Hum what more?
Oh. Like the people already comment the parahuman forum will be very pleased with songs. And probably continue to speculate that the more art Joe put in a single object the better it become. So music and posture make even else raise in a spiral of better and better techs.
One of the things leet said that I liked. Was the combo of AI/Joe/waifu (or Ai/waifu/garment ^^ there no such thing like laifu). Make one feels like the storm/spider man/ titan...fighting a the mightiest storm/ iron spider man with cosmic cube/ original Chaos.
And that can cause some interesting effects. Like the PRT (not the capes) fighting him and later the same with the protectorate in order to raise moral in the nation...
...I mean we had done fake fights, false flags and etc for far stupid reasons in real life in the centuries.
Anyway many thanks for the update. I already hoped to ,when the MC create temporary buildings, that will make accord change the city he does his operations
*putting a meme of masterchef cooking appreciation here*^^
Also I liked that leet seems to be the less stupid of the two here. And some of Uber actions looking like were made to give him more control in their working relationship.
Still both of them are stupid and evil. But at last leet acknowledged that he could had being great.
Anyway since this whole chapter was inside the lab. With only degree of interactions (the AI use of the internet and the armor talk). I guess that when he got out it will be a major success.
Also Joe finally have update his chip. Good to him give how much he fear that. Now I am curious if he had it improved as much as possible or as little as possible.
Anyway since the attack happened in the very suspicious forest. I guess the attack in the city is imminent.
I admit that will be funny to me is the attack is already late because is awaiting a trigger (joe) that is not present. But I guess it will a bait he can't refuse. Like burning more buildings and offering sweet, sweet data for the all the thinkers powers that probably can even call a 'truce' (more of who backstab harder and faster and which order) to collect new data.
And the lab is now self updating to some degree. The 'kids' can now evolve with less supervision and with the clones update the hardware. And the lab does have capacity of production without joe with even good quality. Just not divine lvls. Still Quantity have a quality of it own. Which probably will help when some S/A rank truce is requested by the PRT and limitations are reduced.
Hum what more?
Oh. Like the people already comment the parahuman forum will be very pleased with songs. And probably continue to speculate that the more art Joe put in a single object the better it become. So music and posture make even else raise in a spiral of better and better techs.
One of the things leet said that I liked. Was the combo of AI/Joe/waifu (or Ai/waifu/garment ^^ there no such thing like laifu). Make one feels like the storm/spider man/ titan...fighting a the mightiest storm/ iron spider man with cosmic cube/ original Chaos.
And that can cause some interesting effects. Like the PRT (not the capes) fighting him and later the same with the protectorate in order to raise moral in the nation...
...I mean we had done fake fights, false flags and etc for far stupid reasons in real life in the centuries.
Anyway many thanks for the update. I already hoped to ,when the MC create temporary buildings, that will make accord change the city he does his operations
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Hey she might fight smart. At the very least she will have decent stealth and armor so that is already better than Robin.
2 things; One March doesn't have a good read on Joe (especially after 100K words of build up), and two one of her super moves is "I quit." Whenever things start getting too hot she just up and leaves her patsies. Which might happen somewhat soon by the look of things. She even had U&L drag in Blasto to make things an even bigger problem.
The Leet interlude was a sobering look into what a high level unrestricted thinker can do. Dance puppets, dance!
The exploration of how Leet would manage his power was really cool. If you know that stuff is going to fail it makes sense to do risk and failure analysis. It even makes a sort of sense if paired with his specialty of prototype or experimental tech.
Though it did feel like stuff got repeated a bit in the chapter. Some form last chapter and some from this one.
- Pronouns
- He
I will admit with everyone that although i really like the chapter (especially leets interlude) i do think the techno building and babble went a bit to long with not to much happening. I think Lord is compensating for prep chapters cause he confirmed that next chapter the battles will start and was using the word count to have the opportunities to roll any good perks, so at least we can get exited for the fight that is coming soon.
Also on the perks, i will be honest i am a bit disappointed that most perks were just fashion and we didn't get any knowledge perks or game changer perks, but i am happy joe got the bayonetta perk. The internet will go crazy when seeing apeiron Pose and do sexy innuendos that i think the internet is gonna discover early what is simping and simp for Apeiron.
Also on the perks, i will be honest i am a bit disappointed that most perks were just fashion and we didn't get any knowledge perks or game changer perks, but i am happy joe got the bayonetta perk. The internet will go crazy when seeing apeiron Pose and do sexy innuendos that i think the internet is gonna discover early what is simping and simp for Apeiron.
- Location
- Brazil, Minas gerais
So you are telling me that her move is like 'jojo za warudo'? And Joe had just got a lot of Jojo anime shenanigans
More like when the best time is to walk off and leave someone else holding the bag.So you are telling me that her move is like 'jojo za warudo'? And Joe had just got a lot of Jojo anime shenanigans
The leet pre-amble was, by far, the best backstory I've heard about him. It makes sense of his powers, Uber's powers, the video game focus...
Seriously, this was my favorite part of the entire chapter.
Also, as people have previously mentioned, the constant redux of "this was reinforced by X list of powers" probably dragged the quality of the rest of the chapter down. It's to the point where multiple paragraphs are being mentioned to explain how this new thing is better than the old thing, because x-factors are all working on it. Not too bad once or twice, but every chapter contains multiple mentions of it, and... it compounds quickly.
There were... quite a few spelling mistakes. I'm considering going back and finding them, but... it's 30k words. That takes time...
Edit: Corrections Ho! @LordRoustabout
In reverse order, cuz that's how I like to double check spelling mistakes!
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MaimakteriAnn
(Verified Sleepy)
- Location
- Enormous And Round Terran Homeworld
- Pronouns
- She/Her/Dr
Nevermind, that is covered. Just like eight pages later. And kinda handwaved with uncharacteristic lack of detail tbh. Keeping the dust patterns undefined so you can pull out effects as the plot demands.
That aside - this chapter was sooooo satisfying. You've finally got things done that youve needed to get done for 10+ chapters.
I look forward to the next scene of interactions with characters outside joe's ingroup. Combat or socialising with the undersiders or debating his morality with the PRT, I dont care what, im just ready for some scenes of interaction.
First of all, pipe down you whipersnappers. If anything is worth saying, then it is worth taking a very long time to say. While these things could have been explained over 3,000 words rather than 30,000... would you really have preferred that? I could see this cut in half, but part of the pleasure in reading LORD's writing is in the moment-by-moment descriptions of his thoughts, processes, and what he is seeing.
Also many people are complaining about the fact that this was a build-up chapter, but LORD said that next chapter was going to be a combat chapter. So rather that 'Build-up' this could have been call 'Prelude to War' or something. You can see how he is referencing the weapon techs that he is planning on using (the non-lethal ones from 40K), he described his rebuilt costume and Garment's (we will be seeing them in those soon), he finally took care of things he's been putting off (like the shield and his implant) and he built that mantic energy conductor system which will improve itself over time.
I am so exited to see Joe out and ready (and confident enough, did you hear him? He feels confident!) and willing to go out and kick some ass! Honestly he's probably been powerful enough to defeat all of his opponents since the Bakuda fight, but has been scared, now he is like 20x as powerful and can flirt his opponents to into making mistakes. He can totally get Oni Lee with that!
How are people not seeing all of the implications being put into this chapter? I'm happy with this chapter.
Also many people are complaining about the fact that this was a build-up chapter, but LORD said that next chapter was going to be a combat chapter. So rather that 'Build-up' this could have been call 'Prelude to War' or something. You can see how he is referencing the weapon techs that he is planning on using (the non-lethal ones from 40K), he described his rebuilt costume and Garment's (we will be seeing them in those soon), he finally took care of things he's been putting off (like the shield and his implant) and he built that mantic energy conductor system which will improve itself over time.
I am so exited to see Joe out and ready (and confident enough, did you hear him? He feels confident!) and willing to go out and kick some ass! Honestly he's probably been powerful enough to defeat all of his opponents since the Bakuda fight, but has been scared, now he is like 20x as powerful and can flirt his opponents to into making mistakes. He can totally get Oni Lee with that!
How are people not seeing all of the implications being put into this chapter? I'm happy with this chapter.
So long as next chapter isn't another build up and he invalidates everything done in this one, but I don't think LORD will do that.
For those complaining about the wordiness without advancing plot, I direct your attention to one of Mr. Jordan's published books from the Wheel of Time series (about book seven, if I remember correctly). If an average novel is approximately 220 pages of story and about 150k words, this used 1100+ (I forget the exact count, it's been a while) standard format paperback pages to advance plot development less than a day and primarily focus on world building and scenario setting. Compared to that, this is not really that much of an imposition, nor does it compare too unfavorably to pacing of other popular Worm fanfics on this forum.
Can it be cut down some? Absolutely. Should it? While a valid critique, you would lose a significant amount of context and "texture" from the story to do so.
While the episodic nature seriously cuts back on the setting immersion, doing a quick summary of upgrades might leave more readers significantly lost as to the equipment situation in the next action scene. It would also lose on the character reaction/sympathy setup of "*&(#Q! Now I have to rebuild my things. AGAIN!"
That said, I would say a decent compromise in position might be to allow charge buildup be waived during technobabble explanations unless explaining them in-story to another character (i.e. Survey as a weak possibility, or any other "main" character in Joe's association).
Can it be cut down some? Absolutely. Should it? While a valid critique, you would lose a significant amount of context and "texture" from the story to do so.
While the episodic nature seriously cuts back on the setting immersion, doing a quick summary of upgrades might leave more readers significantly lost as to the equipment situation in the next action scene. It would also lose on the character reaction/sympathy setup of "*&(#Q! Now I have to rebuild my things. AGAIN!"
That said, I would say a decent compromise in position might be to allow charge buildup be waived during technobabble explanations unless explaining them in-story to another character (i.e. Survey as a weak possibility, or any other "main" character in Joe's association).
- Pronouns
- He/Him
Based on my research via the discord Lord has said the next battle is next chapter.
- Location
- Sweden
Yes. Yes I would. Then the remaining 27k words could be actual plot development.
Crake
I AM THE STORM THAT IS APPROACHING
- Location
- USA
I don't know what you guys are smoking. I just want a build up chapter that leads into another build-up chapter, which incidentally is just a set up for a bunch of stuff getting destroyed off-screen while Joe is looking somewhere else, turning the next chapter into a REBUILD-up chapter, only better, more Apeiron, much tech, wow, so villain! Quarantine and make the city angry because they are depriving them of FREE UTILITIES!
The horror!
The horror!
Something that occurs to me: Dragon does a bunch of calculations to try to seem human in her movements. When she confronts Joe and he starts Jojo-posing at her, she'll be able to analyze what he's doing and pose right back at him.
The PHO shipping will be legendary.
Meanwhile, since Garment has his knowledge, she can combine her fashion sense and her newfound understanding of JoJo posing to communicate through 'body' language more effectively than ever. When she meets Papa Laborne, she'll be able to be the classiest dame ever, and he'll want Aisha to take lessons from her in comportment. Given that she also has the 'distracting flirt' knowledge now, I have to wonder if she'll use it whenever Joe objects to a design.
Should Joe offer to teach Taylor a stripped-down version, by which I mean all the '15 is too young for that kind of body language' stuff is removed, so that she can read other people better and better pose to project what she wants as well?
I hope his implant upgrade will allow the Laboritorium to communicate with him better. I hope he'll work out an interface that gives him better communication with Tetra, so that Survey can't just force "I'm Daddy's favorite daughter" by virtue of being the one who can talk to Joe.
The PHO shipping will be legendary.
Meanwhile, since Garment has his knowledge, she can combine her fashion sense and her newfound understanding of JoJo posing to communicate through 'body' language more effectively than ever. When she meets Papa Laborne, she'll be able to be the classiest dame ever, and he'll want Aisha to take lessons from her in comportment. Given that she also has the 'distracting flirt' knowledge now, I have to wonder if she'll use it whenever Joe objects to a design.
Should Joe offer to teach Taylor a stripped-down version, by which I mean all the '15 is too young for that kind of body language' stuff is removed, so that she can read other people better and better pose to project what she wants as well?
I hope his implant upgrade will allow the Laboritorium to communicate with him better. I hope he'll work out an interface that gives him better communication with Tetra, so that Survey can't just force "I'm Daddy's favorite daughter" by virtue of being the one who can talk to Joe.
- Location
- Dhaka, Bangladesh
A little follow up, here hold this:
also the Swat Kats OP in all its 80s glory
Lmao y'all be complaining about repetitiveness just be grateful Lord even writes this weekly behemoth for our enjoyment for free. While I sympathise with just wanting Joe to get out there and do stuff, how about we don't just mindless complain and try to keep things positive?
Victory3114
College student, avid reader, and novice writer
- Location
- US
I'm personally fine with the expansion and additional techno-speak, but I'm just thinking that with this level of build up I'm expecting a very satisfying victory to pay off for it, else all this previous tinkering would feel a bit meaningless.
But once that victory comes, it'll be immensely satisfying to read.
But once that victory comes, it'll be immensely satisfying to read.