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Purple Noodle
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While the filler criticism is valid, and I would very much appreciate some more interaction with the plot soon, I do still enjoy these build up chapters. I think a lot of the problems are the kind that can be dealt with after a solid round of editing—after going back and rereading, I've found there are sometimes several places in a chapter where points are repeated with a slight rephrasal of the same sentiment. There's a large amount of chaff that can safely be removed without affecting the reader's overall understanding of the situation, and that's without considering the amount of rehashing that happens every time a general overhaul occurs.
Now, while dealing with that would make an excellent read a truly great one, I feel like Roustabout appreciates a low-stakes environment where fixing every flaw isn't expected of him, based on the complete lack of an internet presence he has aside from this story. Having an audience this large does make that environment next to impossible to maintain, but I'd like to assure him that I, personally, am completely fine with this story not undergoing a round of revisions, and would like to stress that the chaff doesn't in any way make the work unreadable.
Now, while dealing with that would make an excellent read a truly great one, I feel like Roustabout appreciates a low-stakes environment where fixing every flaw isn't expected of him, based on the complete lack of an internet presence he has aside from this story. Having an audience this large does make that environment next to impossible to maintain, but I'd like to assure him that I, personally, am completely fine with this story not undergoing a round of revisions, and would like to stress that the chaff doesn't in any way make the work unreadable.
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