Lights... Camera... ACTION!!: A Hollywood Quest

IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT
Hi Magoose here one of the guys helping Duke.

So we have some bad news.

The quest has been canceled as duke does not want to write it anymore.

I'm going to ask if I can take over for it, because I like this quest, and it would be a shame to kill it
TBF, Mags, you have been doing a lot of the heavylifting for the quest, so this will be in good hands. :)

To be clear to everyone, this is just me burning out on imagination of the quest, since my muse has been hitting me over the head a lot with so many different ideas that I just can't find myself too interested in this.

I'll still hang out here, though, since this still does have a sepcial place in my heart.

I'd like to thank you all for making this a wonderful experience while it lasted.

I'd also like to thank @Magoose, @Fluffy_serpent, and @Martin Noctis for doing so much to help prepare and write this quest. I couldn't have done it without you all. :D

I'll see you all around.

With so many regards, Duke William Of.
 
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Its both good and bad.

Mostly because, we have changed history, but the shield will be striking back

You will be choosing both a boon... and a bane of the USFL's success.

And oh boy, will they be great.

And make sense.
From everything Magoose said it seems like the USFL is roughly competitive with the NFL and holds an equal following due to all the stars aligning perfectly. Sure the hype may wane, but I'd say we've established some pretty strong fanbases.
Literally, everything that could have gone right for the league that could have gone right, did go right for the league.

The biggest thing is this: the legendary 83 draft, did not go to the NFL, as it was supposed too, because Carrie announced the league, and that meant two things: One, there was going to be a lot of money in the new USFL to play with, so they will get paid. Two... the NFL really screwed the pooch when it came to try to get... those players to come back for the draft.

The strike was the final nail in the coffin.


There was also the fact that the Leauge isn't a shitshow that is mismanaged and has ownership and coaches that give a fuck.

And, as much as you may hate him: Donald is an incredible hype man for the league. He's basically everything you want for a face of ownership. Loud, boisterous, determined to win, and a bit weird. Which was good for the soap opera of narratives that will get people invested in the league.

People like drama and stories, and he creates them on a daily basis.

And of course, Carries huge pockets that can finance several teams to make sure they will actually play the games. She is that rich after all. The Bodypillow Empire is the thing that can finance so much.

Especially when backed by other business ventures.

The fact the onfield product was very very good, compared to the strike-strickened NFL really helped with showing that they were legit.
I do have a plan where in the early 90s, the USFL expands to Canada thanks to the Montreal Canadian Football team dissolving which opens an opportunity for Carrie to promote a USFL team, which I'd go with the Montreal Owls. Normally it wouldn't work, but Montreal has no team, the league mostly has no conflicting dates with CFL, and Canada LOVES Bruce so this would be the exception compared to the NFL.
Leauge expansion won't happen till the mid 90's. Partially so that money can get into the league to build a warchest, so that there is history with the league...

And of course, to finally cement itself as either the little brother or equal to the NFL.

And the fun thing is, there is the potential for NFL players to play in the USFL while there at the same time...which can potentially cause problems.

And in my personal opinion: THE DRAFT WARS.
Mexico might take longer because the fanbase over there is nowhere close to the modern size. I'm also hoping that the butterflies lead the Castro regime to fall so we can have a Cuban team, would probably be the easiest country to do in Latin America.
...

I make no comment about that happening.
He did want to become the NFL Commissioner before becoming President, so here with him being super attached to the Generals as his team rather than just another business venture, he might strike into other New York or Jersey based teams. The Mets are changing ownership in '86, so there's a path for Trump to go into.
And thus, we start a new timeline... Trump is the master of Sports of New York city.

Hopefully he can buy the Knicks from Dolan.

He decides that politics are stupid, he wants to win, and he will do it by being the most beloved man in New York Sports... or at least the most obnoxious.
I unironically see this as an absolute win, although it's sad the Geese couldn't win straight out of the gate. Trump winning the first championship means he's now super invested in the USFL and won't try and have them compete directly with the NFL, since he already likely sees them as better in the current state. With him being super invested in football and having an avenue to indulge in his urges to be a winner, thus he'll likely get more invested in the world of sports, and hold little interest in politics because he wants to stay a sports winner.
Yep.

But hey he will still be mad that the O'Brian family are still able to beat him.

Also, something to know... You know his Atlantic City casino that he might found soon?

The Trump O'Brian negotiations:
D100 => 88

THe Jumping Whale might get the 5 star treatment. because Trump decided to keep his friends close... and his enemies closer.

And Joseph got payed a mint to agree to that.
 
Gettysburg The Killer Angels New
I am an unabashed history fan, and one Era I particularly love is the Civil War. So when I first watched Gettysburg, you can be assured that I became one of its biggest fans. Unfortunately, I have to admit that it has many flaws. Which is why I hope to make it much better with this Gettysburg pitch. So, angling for a late 80s release, I present to you all...



Gettysburg
The Killer Angels


Producer: Felix Graves
Writers: Felix Graves and Michael Shaara
Composer: Randy Edelman

Plot: Based on Michael Shaara's book The Killer Angels, this epic mini-series brings the most famous and arguably most important battle of the American Civil War to life.

  • Instead of a theatrical movie, Gettysburg is now a mini-series that has an episode dedicated to setting the stage for the battle and three episodes dedicated to each of the three days of the battle. Both so that there is better pacing and so that we get to see more of the amazing battle rather than just the three main parts the movie sticks to. While still loyal to the novel, it expands upon it.
  • While the mini-series is less Confederate apologetic and more directly shows their cause as wrong, it still portrays them as nuanced human beings.
  • The mini-series is more gory and realistic in the violence than IOTL while not being gratuitous.
  • The music is less cheesy and more subdued at times, with the music cutting out completely during the horror that was Pickett's Charge.
  • At the start of every episode, a narrator speaks of the current situation and gives a small recap of what happened the previous episode. All the while, Ashokan Farewell softly plays in the background.
  • As the end credits of the last episode begin to roll by–after Thomas and Joshua Chamberlain hug at the end of the battle and the fates of all the people at Gettysburg are revealed to the audience–we hear a crackly narration of the Gettysburg Address by the Narrator.
  • While there are still reenactors who act as extras, the United States Army is also asked if they can provide soldiers to act as additional extras.
Colonel Joshua L. Chamberlain: An idealistic college professor who joined the Union army and rose to command the 20th Maine Regiment, he is a calm, no-nonsense, and eloquent speaker of a man who also serves as the main point-of-view for the Union.

Played by: Jeff Daniels

Lieutenant Thomas Chamberlain: Chamberlain's younger and more excitable brother, he is eager to do right by his brother and serve the Union as best he can.

Played by: C. Thomas Howell

Private Buster Kilrain: A former Sergeant demoted to private due to striking a superior officer while drunk, he is a blunt and tough old soldier who has acted as Chamberlain's helper and support throughout the war. Kilrain is promoted back to Sergeant by Chamberlain after being severely wounded at Little Round Top, and he dies the next morning. He is also the only fictional character in the mini-series.

Played by: Kevin Conway

Colonel Strong Vincent: The commander of 3rd Brigade and Chamberlain's direct superior, he is a cool and humbly confident man who is determined to hold the line at all costs. He is badly wounded while fighting at Little Round Top.

Played by: Maxwell Caufield

Corporal Henry D. O'Brien: A demure and unassuming soldier is the 1st Minnesota Regiment, he and his regiment are both thrust into the desperate fray on both the second and third days of the battle in order to hold off the Confederates and buy time for the Union. Wounded during the third day, O'Brien will earn the Medal of Honor for his actions.

Played by: Sean Penn
Alternative: Eric Allan Kramer

Brigadier General John Buford: A gruff and cynical Kentucky man commanding the 1st Division of cavalry, he is determined to hold out on the First Day and delay the Confederates long enough for the rest of the Union Army to hold the high ground.

Played by: Sam Elliot

Brigadier General George Armstrong Custer: The bold, brash, and very talented commander of the Michigan Brigade, Custer is a cavalier and arrogant braggadocio who is eager to earn glory and honor to puff up his ego.

Played by: Brad Pitt
Alternative: Don Harvey

Major General George Gordon Meade: The commander of the Army of the Potomac, Meade is, though a temperamental and easily angered man who, a stalwart and hardened man who wishes to preserve the Union and defeat Lee's Army at the necessary cost.

Played by: James Caan
Alternative: Robert Redford

Major General John F. Reynolds: The most beloved and respected of the Corps Commanders in the Army of the Potomac, Reynolds is a reliable and bold man who doesn't hesitate when the time comes. He is killed in the first day of action by a Confederate sharpshooter.

Played by: John Rothman

Major General Daniel Sickles: The snide, arrogant, and not-as-smart-as-he-thinks political general of III Corps, Sickles is openly hostile to George Meade and believes himself superior to his commander. It is widely known that he murdered his wife's lover and pleaded temporary insanity to escape the consequences, the first example of such in history. His leg is sheared off by a cannonball on the second day, and he has to be carried off the battlefield.

Played by: Nick Nolte
Alternative: Barry Corbin

Major General Winfield Scott Hancock: A brave and agreeable man who commands II Corps, he hopes to see his old friend Lewis Armistead after the war, especially after the death of their friend John Reynolds on the first day. He is injured on the third day during Pickett's charge but refuses to be evacuated until after the engagement is decided.

Played by: Brian Mallon
Lt. General James Longstreet: Lee's old War Horse and commander of First Corps, Longstreet is a practical and defensive-minded man serves as the main Confederate point-of-view. He foresees the disaster that the Confederates are walking into but cannot persuade General Lee to listen to him.

Played by: Tom Berenger

General Robert E. Lee: The Commander of the Army of Northern Virginia, he is a stoic but emotional and humble yet arrogant man who has grown grey and weary over the course of the Civil War. He hopes to bring a decisive blow against the Union and bring the war to a close.

Played by: Martin Sheen
Alternative: Robert Duvall

Major General John Bell Hood: A brash and aggressive division commander in Longstreet's Corps, he advises Longstreet to let him go around Little Round Top but is denied due to General Lee's orders. He is grievously wounded during the fighting and lose his right arm as a result.

Played by: Matthew Modine
Alternative: Steve Buscemi

Major General George Pickett: A cavalier man and the epitome of a Southern Gentleman, Pickett commands a division in Longstreet's First Corps. Though he initially longs to get into the fight and prove his Southern honor, Pickett is broken by the aftermath of Pickett's Charge.

Played by: Stephen Lang

Brigadier General Lewis "Lo" Armistead: A commander of one of Pickett's brigades, he hopes to see a speedy end to the war and to see his old friend Winfield Scott Hancock one last time. He is wounded and captured during Pickett's Charge, the only one of the brigade commanders to have reached the stone wall.

Played by: Richard Jordan

Brigadier General Richard Garnett: A commander of one of Pickett's brigades, he is insecure about the accusations of cowardice laid on him by the deceased Stonewall Jackson, and as such, he is determined to prove his courage by riding into battle despite his injured leg. He is killed during Pickett's Charge, his body never being found.

Played by: Andrew Prine

Brigadier General James Kemper: The youngest of the brigade commander in Pickett's Division, Kemper is also the most politically-minded of them as he had served as the Speaker of the Virginia House of Delegates. He often debates and discusses the war with Lt. Colonel Fremantle. He is wounded during Pickett's Charge but is carried to safety by his men.

Played by: Dan Hedaya
Alternative: Royce D. Applegate

Major General J.E.B. Stuart: Lee's cavalier and pompous cavalry commander, he is missing for most of the days of Gettysburg, leading some of the men in Lee's Army to complain about his absence and inability to provide them intel. He is determined to redeem his honor and mistakes by his flanking attack on the Union rear on the third day of the battle.

Played by: Mel Gibson
Alternative: Joseph Fuqua

Henry Thomas Harrison: A Confederate spy and the prized agent of Longstreet, Harrison is a dramatic and flamboyant actor who reminisces about his time acting out Shakespeare. He is, however, insecure about his seeming lack of contribution to fighting, and he personally requests Longstreet to give him a musket so he can join Pickett's Charge.

Played by: Thomas Cooper Huckabee
The Narrator: A simple man dressed in simple clothes, he somberly walks around the Gettysburg National Cemetary and Gettysburg National Military Park and solemnly speaks of the events that have happened before.

Played by: Walter Cronkite

Lt. Colonel Arthur Fremantle: A British military officer who has traveled to see the Civil War from the South's perspective, he holds respect and sympathies for both sides, showing a neutral yet still biased perspective.

Played by: Stephen Fry

A/N: This took forever to write due to all the characters I had to write descriptions and find actors for.
 
I am an unabashed history fan, and one Era I particularly love is the Civil War. So when I first watched Gettysburg, you can be assured that I became one of its biggest fans. Unfortunately, I have to admit that it has many flaws. Which is why I hope to make it much better with this Gettysburg pitch. So, angling for a late 80s release, I present to you all...



Gettysburg
The Killer Angels

A/N: This took forever to write due to all the characters I had to write descriptions and find actors for.
This is one of my favorite civil war movies, even if I can see some clearly bias towards the south, but at least not as much as Gods and Generals was.

A suggestion If I may? I think this videos could also be of help on how the Mini-Series could be done, which arts could be emphasized, as well as some of the characterizations. Also, I think it should be around 5 to 6 episodes if we go with the one hour format, since the entire battle of Gettysburg is really something else.


View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?app=desktop&v=tAL9J4VCt84

View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cJtMa73kiyg

View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bWDM5DzMkRA

Perhaps they could be added in to the pitch as to what they could have been done as well? I'm just suggesting.
 
This is one of my favorite civil war movies, even if I can see some clearly bias towards the south, but at least not as much as Gods and Generals was.

A suggestion If I may? I think this videos could also be of help on how the Mini-Series could be done, which arts could be emphasized, as well as some of the characterizations. Also, I think it should be around 5 to 6 episodes if we go with the one hour format, since the entire battle of Gettysburg is really something else.


View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?app=desktop&v=tAL9J4VCt84

View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cJtMa73kiyg

View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bWDM5DzMkRA

Ah a fellow Atun-shei films enjoyer.

I too enjoy shitting on the lost cause on the internet.
 
@Kaiser Chris

Here are the rewards:

The Boons for the USFL

[]The Vibrant Fanbase (The teams have gotten their fanbases, and they will be loyal and slowly, slowly expanding.)

[]The TV Deals (The League has gotten a perfect set of TV deals from LucasTV, ABC, and CBS, which will make sure there are no blackouts for TV broadcasts in relation to ticket sales. All games will be on TV from the Start)

[]The Draft Wars (Every single years football draft, will be a blood bath where every time is trying to get more and more talent. And it turned a normal process, into the most exciting part of the off-season. Meaning people will be interested in the USFL)

The Banes:

[]The Shield Strikes back (While the Shield suffered a black eye, they will still be the NFL... and they will try their best to make the best product ever, and steal away fans with amazing stories and product.)

[]Expansion (The NFL will expand, and expand aggressively)

[]A Better Commissioner (A more forward-thinking commissioner will replace Pete Rozelle, a hand-picked one... who will make the league better)
 
Ah a fellow Atun-shei films enjoyer.

I too enjoy shitting on the lost cause on the internet.
I especially love his critic on Jackson and Gods and Generals, as well as the Witch Finder General series. His essay on John Brown was eye opening as well.

But frankly, I just enjoy seeing the Confederate Myth being debunked over and over again.
 
This is one of my favorite civil war movies, even if I can see some clearly bias towards the south, but at least not as much as Gods and Generals was.
Seeing Gods and Generals, it's no wonder why the bias exists... besides some really weird lines by the Confederates, I actually really like how nuanced the rest of the movie (Gettysburg) is. Armistead, Longstreet, Kilrain, and Chamberlain are my favorite characters in the whole movie. Every line Jeff Daniels says is gold, and I love how somewhat comedically blunt Longstreet can be at times. I also hope that Longstreet's blackened reputation is undone by this movie as it was in OTL; Early can go eat sand for his defamation of the far superior Longstreet.

I'm actually thinking of a sequel mini-series to Gettysburg, but instead of it being the mess of Gods and Generals, it would follow the Siege of Petersburg and the many events during that. The Battle of the Crater is a particular debacle I'd love to make an episode on.

A suggestion If I may? I think this videos could also be of help on how the Mini-Series could be done, which arts could be emphasized, as well as some of the characterizations. Also, I think it should be around 5 to 6 episodes if we go with the one hour format, since the entire battle of Gettysburg is really something else.
Ah, I see you too enjoy Atun-Shei. :) He's sometimes a bit too uncomfortable in terms of politics for me, but I sill really enjoy his work. I don't really have a specific frame of reference for the series, so it's a pick and choose what you want in terms of suggestions taken from Atun's videos.
 
Seeing Gods and Generals, it's no wonder why the bias exists... besides some really weird lines by the Confederates, I actually really like how nuanced the rest of the movie (Gettysburg) is. Armistead, Longstreet, Kilrain, and Chamberlain are my favorite characters in the whole movie. Every line Jeff Daniels says is gold, and I love how somewhat comedically blunt Longstreet can be at times. I also hope that Longstreet's blackened reputation is undone by this movie as it was in OTL; Early can go eat sand for his defamation of the far superior Longstreet.
I enjoyed Chamberlain and Armisted alright, ,though most of the other names flew by my head the first time I saw it. The ctors for those two roles stuck in my mind however.

Jubal Early is one of the most odious men to ever exist, and perhaps the one more responsible for the creation of the Confederate Myth. The man deserves nothing but contempt for his actions, and I agree with you that hopefully we can help Longstreet regain his reputatio and honor from what has clearly been a defamation campaign on his character.

In the end, the truth always comes to light, and so is the case for Early's fabrications.

I'm actually thinking of a sequel mini-series to Gettysburg, but instead of it being the mess of Gods and Generals, it would follow the Siege of Petersburg and the many events during that. The Battle of the Crater is a particular debacle I'd love to make an episode on.
If there is to be a sequel, we can always go with Shaara's The Last Full Measure. It gives, in my opinion, an amazing portrayal of Grant (if a bit too apologetic on Lee for my tastes) by not demonizing him nor elevating him to sainthood. He is a man put to do a job, and he does it. he stumbles sometimes, but at no point does he quit, and the men under him respect him for that.

God alone knows how we can portray Sherman, but I think we can find a way to do so.
Ah, I see you too enjoy Atun-Shei. :) He's sometimes a bit too uncomfortable in terms of politics for me, but I sill really enjoy his work. I don't really have a specific frame of reference for the series, so it's a pick and choose what you want in terms of suggestions taken from Atun's videos.
Yeah, I agree. He is still a good researcher though, and his history videos luckily tend to be more objective and with context than the others. I mean, at least he gives the quotes and cites from where he got his information, which we can check up.

I'd suggest his Civil War videos since they tend to be the more objective, and he does admit when he is being subjective there. There's also the one about John Brown, which I mentioned, that inspired me to make that Mini Series pitch about him.
 
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If there is to be a sequel, we can always go with Shaara's The Last Full Measure. It gives, in my opinion, an amazing portrayal of Grant (if a bit too apologetic on Lee for my tastes) by not demonizing him nor elevating him to sainthood. He is a man put to do a job, and he does it. he stumbles sometimes, but at no point does he quit, and the men under him respect him for that.
My problem is that if I want it to be a mini-series, The Last Full Measure is a bit too long for my tastes. I'd rather focus on one battle so that I can both show the nitty gritty and not ruin the pacing. Alternatively, we could do a Battle of Chickamauga mini-series and make sure George H. Thomas gets his overdue accolades.

There's also the one about John Brown, which I mentioned, that inspired me to make that Mini Series pitch about him.

View: https://youtu.be/fYpodBKYHy4?si=6kXzN1DKhqfR8ZoS
 
My problem is that if I want it to be a mini-series, The Last Full Measure is a bit too long for my tastes. I'd rather focus on one battle so that I can both show the nitty gritty and not ruin the pacing. Alternatively, we could do a Battle of Chickamauga mini-series and make sure George H. Thomas gets his overdue accolades.
I am in favor of it if only for the historical context. Thomas was a very private and humble man, but I think he would be okay with this if only to keep the hystorical record straight.

If you want a single battle, then we can do one of two; The Battle of Petersburg, or the Battle of Atlanta. Both show the realities of war, and both were crucial for the ending of the Confederacy and their foolish dreams.
No... just no.

For all that I can respect what the series was trying to do, it still does a disservice to John Brown by portraying him as "God's Angry Man", which he was, but there was more cold calculation behind his eyes than just outright zealotry.

...I did love that speech though. "For he is in the side of justice, and you are in the side of chains!" Goddamn, now that's an epic burn!
 
Ardmore Movie Pitch: The Last Voyage of the Demeter New
Finally! I've been working on this since October began! Sure, some other pitches came before it, but The Last Voyage of the Demeter was the one film I've been working for this month. And let me tell you, having gone all the way to the middle, and then seeing it be erased, forcing you to start from the beginning... it's not pretty, not at all.

When I first saw this movie, I remember thinking "Good premise, lousy execution". They had everything here to give us a truly claustrophobic horror film, and instead they give us what seems more like an Action-Adventure story that has heroes face the monster and defeat him or escape him. The ending where Dr. Clemens decides to hunt Dracula once more just seems antithetical to Horror in my opinion. Not to mention how the entire story just seemed too... modern. I mean, are we supposed to accept that only five people could steer a ship? That Dr. Clemens would have been so easily accepted (and yes, easily) by the crew? It just doesn't seem that believable is what I'm saying.

Now, for the story, I've taken inspiration from different sources; the movie Nosferatu: A Symphony of Horror by F. W. Murnau, the Marvel Comic Namor: The Depths by Peter Milligan and the videogame Captain Willie by Roblox are among them, along with different more claustrophobic films which I hope I've been able to properly use as basis for the film here. As an Ardmore Pitch, I hope that it can properly be used for one of the Halloween months.

Thus, I give you:

Ardmore Movie Pitch:
The Last Voyage of the Demeter


GENRE: Horror/Thriller/Mystery

SUBGENRE: Suspense/Fantasy/Supernatural

FORMAT: Movie

Set Up: An adaptation of "The Captain's Log", a chapter from the 1897 novel Dracula by Bram Stoker. It follows the doomed crew of the merchant ship Demeter who attempt to survive the treacherous ocean voyage from Transylvania to London while being stalked by a legendary vampire known as Dracula, all told from the point of view of the Ship's Doctor; Dr. Jean-Pierre Chevalier.

Director: Neil Jordan
Composer: James Newton Howard

In 1897, a Russian Schooner was chartered to carry private cargo, consisting of fifty wooden crates, from Romania to England.

When the ship arrived, it was derelict.

The framing of the story begins with the discovery of the Demeter wreckage of the coast of England, in Whitby on August 6, 1897. A couple of constables find the log, and begin reading the last entry, where a message about how they tried to stop it can be seen, as well as a plea to God that whoever finds the log is safe from "It" as well.

As the book is taken as evidence to investigate, the deputy holding it gives it a read from the beginning, the narration thus taking us to the actual story.

We begin by seeing Dr. Jean-Pierre Chevalier as he is treating a young woman in one of the villages in Bulgaria. On the outside, the population of the small village are listening to their wisemen as he claims the girl to be possessed by evil spirits, and they need to send her away from the village before it brings down the "wrath of the dragon". The people are beginning to be swayed when the Doctor makes its appearance, claims to have cured her, and then dismantles all the arguments the wisemen brings about, proving that all his arguments were nothing but a way to hide what He had done to the girl.

As he prepares to leave the village, he is approached by the grateful family for having aided their daughter. He replies in a cold manner, just asking for his payment, and then prepares to leave. He takes a ride with a carriage group on the way to Varna, where he is asked about what is a Frenchman doing in the rustic area of Bulgaria, though he ignores the question. Looking instead at the cargo on the carriage, which is revealed to be many crates, some of them with the symbol of a black dragon, which the carriage driver immediately covers when he sees the doctor looking at it in curiosity.

We then turn to the city of Varna, as the Demeter arrives in port. Captain Elliot is directing his men in the correct procedures to have the ship moor for the cargo, while also speaking with his First mate, Mr. Wojchek, to get him more men for the return trip to England. We then see a small montage as Mr. Wojchek goes looking through the slums, brothels, as well as sending messages to more veteran sailors about the need for a crew for the ship. Meanwhile, the carriage with the crates are arriving at the ship, with Dr. Chevalier looking at it consideringly.

At the same time, Mr. Wojchek arrives with the prospective crew, many strong men and some who had skills needed for the ship to be maintained. Captain Elliot inspects some, and dismisses others, but overall a good number of men are set to work on loading the goods into the ship; some Turkish cotton, 10 barrels of petroleum, and some private crates for London arriving from Romania. The Carriage driver and the men with him leave as soon as they receive their payment, but not before giving a final look at the captain and his men, and praying for them once they were some distance away.

As the men are loading the final crates in, Dr. Chevalier approaches the captain and offers his services for the ship, which the captain agrees to once learning that he is a doctor, not having one with them for a while, and with many of his previous crew needing some treatment at that. The deal made, Dr. Chevalier is given the tour by Olgaren, a Russian born member of the crew, a cheerful if somewhat superstitious man who leads him through the different rooms of the ship, and where his medical station will be. During the trip, Olgaren displays his superstitious beliefs which has Dr. Chevalier scoffing at him, mocking his "primitive beliefs" as he calls them, arguing that such thoughts at the dawn of a new century should be discarded. Both sides seem to be escalating into a real argument, but a commotion outside interrupts them.

When going out they find that one of the workers suffered an accident when one of the crates being lifted was accidentally let go. When questioning the man responsible, he answers angrily by pointing to the black dragon symbol, claiming that it is an omen of bad luck, as he has heard the stories associated with it, and he will have nothing to do with it. He returns the money given to him and angrily (as well as fearfully) leaves, with some of the more superstitious workers also leaving with him. Dr. Chevalier looks at them go, shaking his head, and retreating into his work station, where he starts preparing his tools and putting everything into place.

We see a small montage of the different sailors begin preparing the ship to set sail, showing the captain working on the Log, with a narration of what went on the day, as well as showing Mr. Wojchek setting the new tasks and chores to the new hands, as well as Olgaren whose job is to feed the animals and check on the rations for the crew. We see the cook, Joseph give a prayer to God for fair weather, as he, Mr. Wojchek, and the captain begins discussing the travel ahead, whether they will need to ration the meals, and if they would need to stop at different ports to resupply.

Through the rest of the week there seems to be a sense of routine going on the ship; Olgaren feeds the animals and checks on the supplies, meals are served on time and the crew talks and interacts, with Dr. Chevalier usually staying on his own side away from the others. One of the new hands, Abrams, decides to accompany him. A young man who's never gone that far from his village, this is the first time he was selected for a job and he is curious about the world beyond it. Dr. Chevalier usually tolerates his presence, giving a comment here and there, but that's usually enough for Abrams. The rest of the crew think him a snob or "too good for them", creating a barrier, yet nonetheless going to him with the many ailments that one would get while working on a ship.

Meanwhile, Captain Elliot is seen working on the route along Mr. Wojchek, with the former eventually deciding that with their current speed and food, they could very well move directly to London without the need to stop at any port. Mr. Wojchek feels that they should at least make a quick stop in Italy, but is eventually overruled.

During the nights, one of the older crewmembers, Petrofsky, is seen to be on night watch duty, when he starts hearing odd noises, almost like someone is walking fast through the halls. He calls out to anyone there, but there is no answer. The steps move faster as well when he approaches, almost as if they're running. Petrofsky follows it on a fast chase, never seeing anyone, until he arrives at the cargo area, with no one there. He turns back to his shift above deck. However, once gone, one of the crates with the black dragon symbol seems to slowly move, as the lid lifts a bit.

By the next week the routine once more is seen, though there seems to be a certain tension between the crew, leading to more fights and arguments. One day, on the mess hall, Petrofsky recounts of the mysterious loud steps he can hear at night to the rest of the crew, mentioning the rapid footsteps and their sudden disappearance. Olgaren suspects that it might be ghosts, but Dr. Chevalier laughs at the idea, which angers the crew and ask him to explain himself. Dr. Chevalier then explains how with the night time and the rapid movements, it must have clearly been rats moving about, and chides them for not keeping a cleaner environment. This has Petrofsky go up to him and grab him, angrily arguing that he could distinguish between rats and whatever that was, while Chevalier argued that he clearly couldn't if he was stupid enough to believe in ghosts. Petrofsky gets ready to punch his face in, but is stopped by Abrams, who moves to aid the doctor. Before the situation can escalate as tempers are short, Joseph intervenes, claiming that unless they want to go on half rations that they separate and go about their business. After a moment of tension, they do so.

The next night, Petrofsky hears the noises again, and tries to once more follow them, the darkness of the ship and the inner holds keeping him on his toes. The more he delves deep the more he can feel his heart pounding as he approaches the sounds, coming closer to him now as if ready to confront him. Petrofsky prepares himself, waiting in an intersection as the steps move closer and closer, then turns to attack... and is stopped when he sees Chevalier and Abrams, both as surprised to see him as well.

When they both confront each other, Abrams tries to stop them, with Dr. Chevalier mentioning how he planned to put an end to this "superstitious nonsense", yet before another fight can break out the stepping sounds re-appear, causing the doctor to agree that's not the sound rats make. The trio then begins moving through the ship, from hall to hall, the sounds once more taking them to the cargo area once more. This time however, they all decide to move in, looking through to find just what it is that is making the sound. As they split and each move through the different crates and cargo that the ship carries, a small sound catches Chevalier's attention, softly calling to the pair and having them take position with hand signals. They approach the crate that has a symbol of a black dragon in it. Chevalier has the other two nearby prepared to attack, he slowly moves to the lid, grabs it, and quickly throws it open... revealing a couple of stowaways; a mother and her small child.

Petrofsky is angry, nearly attacking the huddling pair, but both Abrams and Chevalier stop him, telling him that this is something that the captain needs to know. Looking at their emaciated state, Dr. Chevalier takes them under his custody to treat them for diseases while Abrams continues the patrol and Petrofsky, as the senior officer at the moment, goes to speak with the captain.

As they leave, no one notices another of the crates bearing the symbol of the black dragon slowly opening, what seems to be a huge nail peeking out.
While Dr. Chevalier takes care of the stowaways (who are later identified as Ana and her son, Luca) he finds that Ana, who is unconscious at the moment, is the most emaciated of both, while Luca seems to be somewhat livelier. the captain is speaking with both Petrofsky and Mr. Wojchek about how this happened, and what should be done. Mr. Wojchek says that they should just dump them in a port and be done with them, but the captain is still determined to remain on course without stopping. Petrofsky then argues that having women on board was just bad luck for the ship, and she should be thrown overboard immediately lest they suffer for it.

Dr. Chevalier argues against it, once more putting both of them at loggerheads. The captain stops the argument before it can escalate, arguing that he will not be sending the woman and child to die, but neither will he stop the ship in a port, but continue the mission directly to England. However, he gives punishment to both Dr. Chevalier and Petrofsky for their behavior; Petrofsky is to be on night watch duty for the rest of the week, and the rations for Ana are to come from Dr. Chevalier's own.

The routine then continues as before, with some changes now; we see Olgaren still feeding the animals, and the crew getting together to eat before going for their usual routine jobs in the ship, though now there is an addition as Luca begins interacting with them more, as well as with Dr. Chevalier who bonds with the kid, teaching him how to speak English so that he can communicate with others. Not with Olgaren though, as the man's superstitious nature has him keep his distance and be surly about their presence in the ship. Soon, the doctor and the crew grow fond of the kid, as he becomes a sort of mascot for them. Ana however remains on her quarters, speaking only in her tongue and being the more private out of everyone.

As time passes, during the final night of his shift, Petrofsky is seen walking through the deck above before moving below. As he walks through the claustrophobic halls he once more begins to hear the footsteps. He calls out to Luca telling him to go to bed, but the footsteps are still there. Petrofsky calls to Luca once more, but the footsteps move closer, as if taunting him. Losing his patience he moves towards them, calling to the kid but there is no answer back. The footsteps soon begin moving him even deeper into the ship, to the lowest area where a cabin lay closed. Petrofsky approaches the cabin, slowly as he can no longer hear the sound of footsteps. As his hand approaches the to open the door... he's startled as Luca appears behind him. Petrofsky is angry and scolds him, as he grabs him to take him up once more, Luca giving a final look at the door as he's dragged to his room.

The door has this aura of menace as a final shot of it is shown.

The next day, as Olgaren goes to feed the animals, he finds them all slaughtered.

When Dr. Chevalier is called to find the cause of the death, the crew begins wondering just what it is, with Mr. Wojchek being put to keep the crew calm, as Captain Elliot asks Olgaren just what he found. Olgaren recounts going to feed the animals and seeing them all killed, even the guard dog that guarded them had this horrible wound on his neck. He begins to grow agitated, thinking that this might be a curse for keeping the woman on board, demanding that she be thrown out overboard, but Dr. Chevalier rises to their defense, mentioning how the wounds on the animals could very well have been done by rats, or even by the dog itself having contracted rabies.

Captain Elliot demands that Dr. Chevalier finds the true reason as to why the animals died, and punished Olgaren lack of respect by having him take the night shift. As both sides follow orders, Mr. Wojchek tells the news to the crew who grows angry at the news, mainly because there would be no more meat in the menu for now. Captain Elliot, Mr. Wojchek and Joseph the cook gather together to see about their actions and if they will have enough. Joseph mentions that they might be stretching it, but they can arrive in England without stopping at port. Mr. Wojchek mentions it's too risky, and pointing at the map mentions how they could stop at one of the many ports in Spain before moving forward. The captain however refuses, revealing how the Demeter was not in a good fiscal situation, and if they are to keep the ship from being impounded and all out of a job, then they really needed to make it to England by August 6th.

The new routine is set, with the Crew now having to eat more sparingly, and tension brewing, as if waiting for the other shoe to drop.

At night, while Olgaren is angrily doing the night shift, Dr. Chevalier is in the doctor's quarters, investigating the bodies and trying to find any clues there. We switch between both of them as we see how Luca finds the doctor, and after a while remains at his side while he investigates. Meanwhile, Olgaren sees Ana as she is on the entrance below decks. He yells at her about her presence on the ship, trying to make her go away. She remains there, no matter how much Olgaren says, eventually smiling, which Olgaren takes as her mocking him. He moves angrily towards her as she moves back inside, leading him on a chase as he can only follow by the sound of her footsteps and last impressions of her turning corners, eventually only hearing the former.

As Dr. Chevalier sees the wounds on the neck, and finds how they seem to be too small for the animals to have caused it, or even the rats, but also compares it to some of his reference books of human bites, finding that they seem to have a closer match. Meanwhile, Olgaren is led to the very door that Petrofsky nearly entered. Once inside, he finds the room smaller than he expected, with darkness all around him, and feeling himself watched. We see the silhouette of something scurrying about, crawling and moving before we can have a clear view. Olgaren knows something is there, and now in panic slowly moves to the entrance once more. However, due to the darkness, he trips before he arrives, and in panic crawls and tries to draw himself in a hurry to the door, his hand catching the knob, before the creature jumps at him, cutting his throat and cries before they can be heard, only the sound of drinking can be heard, though the body can't be completely seen.
The next morning, Dr. Chevalier awakens to find the entire crew gathered together above deck, with Mr. Wojchek keeping most of them back from whatever is there. Pushing through, he finds the body of Olgaren, dead and with the same kind of wound on his neck that was found on some of the animals. Captain Elliot arrives and takes command, first asking who found the body first, revealing it to be Abrams, who was with Olgaren last night, looked for him but when he did not find him he thought he had gone back to his quarters. Eventually, as he saw the dawn, he was going to retreat and found the body there.

But he claims to have passed through the area twice, and he did not see it there before.

The crew becomes more restless before Mr. Wojchek dismisses them back to their chores for the day, most going reluctantly. The captain speaks with Mr. Wojchek about leading an investigation to find out what happened, with Dr. Chevalier offering his services as he will need to investigate the body as well. Mr. Wojchek includes Petrofsky as well, since it's better to have him included rather than keeping him out of the loop for him to cause trouble, his previous mutinous attitude being remembered.

Unknown to them, both Ana and Luca are looking at them from afar.

The group of Mr. Wojchek, Petrofsky and Dr. Chevalier begin their investigation, but the routine of the ship, what once had been a sign of normalcy and mundanity, now becomes a thing of suspicion and paranoia; meals are no longer boisterous or garrulous, but quiet affairs where many of the crew prefer to just eat their food and leave, or just sit in silence. Where before there would be noise or camaraderie, now it seems like only the closest of friends can stand being near each other, otherwise they do their work quickly and leave, looking at each other suspiciously. The rumors being spread around the ship has aided in creating the atmosphere; that there is a cannibal among them, a spirit, a siren, a monster, etc. Though attempts are made to stop said rumors, they just seem to propagate even more. During the nights, voices and sounds can be heard that just exacerbate everyone's paranoia.

Interviews are made to different members of the crew, but each give either useless information, or what they already knew. However, Abrams and Joseph mention new information that brings about a new paradigm. For Abrams, he mentions that during his night shift he could swear he heard sounds of footsteps, but when he went to check he found Luca and thought nothing more of it. For Joseph, he mentions that he's noticed there are no rats on the ship. There have not been any in a while now, which is a near impossibility. During the interview Abrams tries to keep a brave front, yet Joseph is clearly disturbed about what is going on, his hand remaining in his crucifix.

Dr. Chevalier seems to have found new energy in trying to disprove said rumors or getting to the bottom of the matter. On many occasions taking the lead in asking questions od coming up with theories. After a few days, he and Petrofsky are once more investigating Olgaren's body, which has begun to decompose, and is set to be thrown into the ocean. The ship is set to pass through the Gibraltar Straits and into open sea.

Both trade barbs with each other, airing their beliefs; Petrofsky mentions his childhood and how said beliefs, passed through generations of his family, became the basis of his world, how it worked. But Chevalier angrily expresses his belief in the rational, and disdaining the irrational, how Europe lately seems to prefer ghosts' stories or the supernatural over what is in front of them. He can't accept the idea that there is something beyond their comprehension, something that may have power over them.

The world is rational in his mind, and understanding it is the way to always be in control.

The ship moves to open seas, though no one notices it save for the Captain and Mr. Wojchek, who is now walking through the ship armed as part of the patrols organized. As he moves through the halls, he begins hearing voices from the crew. Thinking it odd, he follows them, but there is no one there. Soon, more voices are added, and he calls to them but there is no response. He is about to leave when he hears the voice of Olgaren. Surprised, he begins following it, calling out, going into a dark hall when he hears the voice right next to him. He stays still as a silhouette moves in the darkness around him, preparing his gun, and shooting when he feels it move, missing but illuminating part of the monster's body before it attacks him, the sounds of Mr. Wojchek's screaming alerting the crew.

Dr. Chevalier leads part of the group, but another group with crewmembers arrives first, and become the new victims after they see Mr. Wojchek's drained and mutilated body. One by one they are picked apart, even when they try to run, the monster's full body never fully seen. Dr. Chevalier arrives with Petrofsky and other crewmembers, and they see the monster's silhouette. They aim their guns and fire, hitting him, and making it flee. Dr. Chevalier then has a small breakdown at what he just saw, before being snapped out of it, with the crew taking the bodies above deck, and the captain being summoned.

The light of the morning arrives, and the ship is now far away from land. The only safe port now is in England.
The remaining crew are in full panic mode and on the verge of mutiny. Most of them have been killed, Mr. Wojchek and Olgaren have been killed, there is some... thing in the ship with them taking them down one after the other, and they just went to open seas, with no other safe port for miles around them. Many are just saying to abandon ship, but there are few lifeboats available, the captain wants to continue the voyage with stricter control, Dr. Chevalier is trying to rationalize what he saw with Petrofsky terrified but trying to keep him in the here and now.

Into this whole mess a single voice is heard.. "Dracula".

Though faint at first, Dr. Chevalier heard it, and he looks at the speaker; Luca, the small kid who is now looking at him and repeating the word, over and over again. Dr. Chevalier and Petrofsky have the entire room shut up, and hear Luca as he says "Dracula" once more. When the Captain asks what does it mean, Dr. Chevalier replies with the story; he's been in these areas for a long time, and heard about the superstitions of the locals about "Dracula". He though them nonsense, but seeing them now... he thinks bac on how he found Luca and his mother, the crate with the black Symbol, the emaciated state of her mother, their interactions... he then asks Luca if Dracula has a helper on the ship.

Luca nods.

Dr. Chevalier and the crew move towards the doctor's quarters, finding Ana there, calm as if nothing had happened, and not scared at all when pointed by guns. Dr. Chevalier asks her about the monster, and she at first says nothing. When Dr. Chevalier grows more irritated, she looks at them all, and smiles as she says how they all are going to die.


This is the last straw.


Petrofsky fires and kills her on the spot. Luca is shocked and cries, rushing to her mother, but held back by Dr, Chevalier. Captain Elliot scolds him, but Petrofsky is done with it all. They have a monster on the ship, and this can only be put on the head of the Captain and Dr. Chevalier. Thus, he begins a mutiny, taking them all captive, and then making new plans with the rest of the crew. The plan is simple, they are going to use Dr. Chevalier, the Captain and Luca as bait for the monster. He was hit after all, and fled from them, so that means he can be wounded and killed.

The three are put under guard into one of the rooms. Dr. Chevalier is keeping Luca calm, as the captain remains in shock. As they speak more about what will happen to them they are visited by Joseph, who tells them that he cannot condone the actions of the crew by leaving them as bait for that godless monster. He instead gives them a small knife to cut their bindings and tells them that he has put some provisions on the lifeboat. It might be a longshot, but it will give them a better chance than the thing out there.

The captain refuses however, since this is his ship and he still has a responsibility to it. He instead asks Joseph if he can get him his log to continue writing in it. Which he does.

Meanwhile, a storm begins brewing, rain falling on the ship as the preparations are complete.

At the time of night as they are all being taken to the side to serve as bait, Dr. Chevalier begins working on his bindings, while the rest of the crew wait in anticipation, hiding. The tension grows greater as Dr. Chevalier hurries to first cut the bindings in his hands before moving to cut the bindings on Luca. The crew notices this and warns him first before shooting once. Petrofsky stops them as they still need them alive. He takes men there to physically stop them, leaving a few alone.. which is what the monster wanted, launching his attack on the crewmembers, and beginning a pandemonium in the ship as now everyone is in panic.

During it, a wave hits the ship, causing the Luca, the Captain and Dr. Chevalier to be thrown down into the cargo area, only luck making sure they did not die. The captain got it worse though, his leg being broken and needing the help of both to move.

The storm makes it difficult to see, which the monster uses to its advantage. Men fire and try to hit it but either miss or hit somewhere non-threatening. Different fight scenes are shown, with the monster taking each and every one of them down, killing an eating them, sometimes not in that order. Both Dr. Chevalier and Luca finish cutting their bindings, along with the captain, and begin moving through the now deserted ship to reach above deck. They grab some of the discarded weapons and move to the lifeboat. The monster begins playing with them, using the sound of footsteps and mimicking the voices of their previous comrades (or in Luca's case their mother) as they have to move through claustrophobic halls, pointing their guns at places. The captain falls and tells them to go, since he never had any intentions to leave the ship. Dr. Chevalier gives him the gun they had, and leave him.

The Monster approaches the captain slowly, as the captain shoots at shadows, and keeps a brave front all the way until he finally sees the creature face to face, then being devoured as a row of sharp teeth rip through his throat.

Dr. Chevalier and Luca reach the lifeboat, and manage to get it on the water just in time as the monster had been about to reach them. They see from the lifeboat as the monster roars and runs around the deck, unable to enter the water, as the ship moves farther and farther away, their future uncertain, but alive for now.

The next day, the Demeter is silent, the dead all over different parts of it, and the Coast of England right in front of it, with Dracula safe inside its crate.
Dr. Jean-Pierre Chevalier: He is a doctor who was hired to attend to the crew in the Demeter. A rationalist who disdains old tales and superstition, he is challenged on his beliefs when during the trip back to England men and animals mysteriously die, and an apparition that should not exist proves to be true. He tends to dislike kids, though he forms a strong bond with Luca, adopting him in the end.

Played By: Jean Reno
Alternate: Gerard Depardieu

Captain Elliot: A strict Captain from England who keeps discipline and good behavior on the Demeter. Though an old man, his presence still inspires respect, his mind still sharp and keep. A firm follower of protocol, he makes changes to it during the final travel as he needs to make the ship solvent, which causes the beginning of the trials for the crew.

Played By: Donald Pleasance
Alternate: Peter Cushing

Dracula: The monster from Romanian myths, a creature that has no explanation and should not exist, yet still does. it needs to drink blood to sustain itself, and during the trip makes sure to hide his presence until the ship finally reaches open water. Though its body is not fully shown, there are still glimpses enough to see that it is suitably grotesque. It has no wings.

Played By: Peter Mayhew
Alternate: Anthony Daniels
Mr. Wojchek: He is the First Mate and second in Command in the Demeter. A man of few words, Mr. Wojchek makes himself known by his presence and aura of command. He tends to look after the wellbeing of the crew and handle most of the issues unless they directly need the captain's input. His death is the final straw that has the crew mutiny.

Played By: Jürgen Prochnow
Alternate: Dean Stockwell

Petrofsky: One of the senior crewmembers, a man who tends to be combative, and deeply mired into his superstitious beliefs. Though short tempered, he still mostly keeps himself together, until the death of Mr. Wojchek that is, when he finally snaps. He and Dr. Chevalier are always at odds, their beliefs making them natural enemies.

Played By: Paul Smith
Alternate: Klaus Hoffman

Ana: She is the mother of Luca and a village girl who was selected as a sacrifice/servant for Dracula. She is fully devoted to him, having fed him from her blood until found. When recovered she worked with Dracula to hide his presence and lure other unsuspecting crewmembers to him, until she was finally discovered, dropping her meek facade and mocking how they would all die.

Played By: Francesca Annis
Alternate: Barbara Sukowa

Luca: He is Ana's son, a young lively kid who was to be given as a sacrifice to Dracula until both he and his mother were discovered. He made friends with the crew and formed a bond with Dr. Chevalier, learning to speak the language from him. He was aware of Dracul and tried to help the crew from being eaten, but it was all for nothing, and eventually revealed what he could.

Played By: Christian Bale
Alternate: Sean Astin
Abrams: A young crewmember who's recently started his work in the Demeter. he has a great curiosity about the world, which has him gravitate to Dr. Chevalier. He's a somewhat nervous kid, and tends to follow the lead of those with more experience than him. He tries to face Dracula during the final fight, but is quickly defeated.

Played By: Kiefer Sutherland

Olgaren: He's one of the older crewmembers, yet also one of the lowest ranked. Somewhat dull, and impatient, he tends to prefer the company of the animals he takes care of, since they can't make fun of him or talk behind his back. After their death, he becomes even more angry, easily duped into following Ana to be killed by Dracula.

Played By: Otto Sander

Joseph: he is the cook of the ship, a senior and religious man who tries to stay out of anyone's way, and keep the peace in the ship. During the mutiny, he aids the prisoners by giving them the means to escape, but remains behind as he feels he should be punished along the rest of the crew for not having done more to stop either the monster or the mutiny.

Played By: Ernst Jacobi

A.N.: This pitch took me forever, and I think I'm going to stick with more lighthearted ones for a bit. It did not flow as easily as Tron 2.0 did, or the other ones that could be done in less than a week. Hopefully we can do something great with this film as soon as we can, since I don't want to have to look for the actors again, and I do feel that Christian Bale would make for one of the best characters that are included.
 
Good omake but disapointed that the Geese fell short but making the play-offs is a good sign. Personaly I find it more important to be consistently good than spending everything you have and mortgaging your future to get a cup, still I hope that the Geese get a cup some time soon. Also that section about the 'Flock' reminded me of the event where the Seahawk fans yelled so loud it registered as an earthquake, would be fun if the 'Flock' did that. Glad that Steve gets his time in the sun.

There must be a lot of frustration in the NFL about the success of the USFL, most likely about the draft that has been busted wide open. Now the draftees can play two teams against each other and waste a teams draft pick. I predict that after a while (after the USFL proves that it's here to stay) the NFL and USFL come to an agreement about the draft system though outright merger is still awhile away.

Really like the Trump scene. Frankly if Trump stayed on TV I would have liked him.
 
The Last Voyage of the Demeter
One of the best adaptations of The Voyage of the Demeter was Moffat's 2020 Dracula interpretation for the BBC.

That show was intensely flawed and went completely off the rails at the end of the same episode I'm praising, and had already had its wheels start to fly off at the end of the episode before, but the way Dracula played with his food psychologically as he presented the front of charming Count before slowly isolating and killing his victims, playing with his food was amazing, I still remember the elderly countess dancing with him as she slowly realises he's the same count she saw the night her mother died and starts putting the pieces together before starting to quietly beg.

Of course your characterisation here is more in line with the 2023 movie, a monster flick, but you still get across the terror and sense of futility and eventual defeat as Dracula comes closer and closer to England with the survivors being just that, survivors, not heroes, not able to stop what's coming…

Good work
 
One of the best adaptations of The Voyage of the Demeter was Moffat's 2020 Dracula interpretation for the BBC.

That show was intensely flawed and went completely off the rails at the end of the same episode I'm praising, and had already had its wheels start to fly off at the end of the episode before, but the way Dracula played with his food psychologically as he presented the front of charming Count before slowly isolating and killing his victims, playing with his food was amazing, I still remember the elderly countess dancing with him as she slowly realises he's the same count she saw the night her mother died and starts putting the pieces together before starting to quietly beg.
Not going to lie, that sounds freaking awesome! Psychologicall torturing one's victims is one of the signs of great horror in my opinion, whether it's done intentionally or unintentionally.

Never heard of the adaptation though, perhaps I should give it a look
Of course your characterisation here is more in line with the 2023 movie, a monster flick, but you still get across the terror and sense of futility and eventual defeat as Dracula comes closer and closer to England with the survivors being just that, survivors, not heroes, not able to stop what's coming…

Good work
Thank you, that's one of the things which I felt the otiginal film missed. That the Demeter never had anyone who could stand up to Dracula at all, and if they had a victory, it would be because he wanted them to think that to better play with his food. I wanted to show the fear of the unknown, as well as the slowly breaking down of the regular routine of the ship, bringing paranoia and distrust among the crew. And in the end, we are left with only a couple of survivors who now we don't know if they'll even make it to the next day.
 
perhaps I should give it a look
Oh it's brilliant…

For the first 4/5ths of the first two episodes.

When I say the end of episode one goes off the rails, I mean it.

And episode two is worse.

After a haunting build up where Jonathan Harker relates the tale of his time in Dracula's castle to a nun, including one horrific scene where Dracula blatantly brings a screaming crying baby into the castle to eat and gaslights an increasingly frantic and weakened Harker that 'There's no baby' as he walks by him, Harker collapsing into tears as he feels he's going insane…we end the episode finding out the Nun is actually Van Helsing and she's brought Mina Murray with her to see Harker. Dracula then attacks the Nunnery only for it to be revealed Harker was actually a reanimated corpse and dead the entire time.

In episode two after seeing Dracula slowly work his way down through the Crew of the Demeter, preying on their insecurities and fears and killing them one by one as he taunts and mocks them as he devours them after breaking them…it turns out he spared Nun Van Helsing for some reason? And she escapes, and helps the remaining Crew fight back, and Dracula ends up with his coffin going into the ocean, he however climbs out after breaking free and strides triumphantly into the beach of England…only for a Helicopter to fly overhead, him having been trapped underwater until the modern day.

Watch the first two episodes and stop watching when Mina reveals herself in the first and when Dracula's coffin falls into the ocean in the second and skip the third entirely.
 
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Oh it's brilliant…

For the first 4/5ths of the first two episodes.

When I say the end of episode one goes off the rails, I mean it.

And episode two is worse.

After a haunting build up where Jonathan Harker relates the tale of his time in Dracula's castle to a nun, including one horrific scene where Dracula blatantly brings a screaming crying baby into the castle to eat and gaslights an increasingly frantic and weakened Harker that 'There's no baby' as he walks by him, Harker collapsing into tears as he feels he's going insane…
Well, this doesn't seem to ba-
we end the episode finding out the Nun is actually Van Helsing
... what?
and she's brought Mina Murray with her to see Harker.
...No seriously, Wha-?
Dracula then attacks the Nunnery only for it to be revealed Harker was actually a reanimated corpse and dead the entire time.
Fuck, am I dreaming now?!
In episode two after seeing Dracula slowly work his way down through the Crew of the Demeter, preying on their insecurities and fears and killing them one by one as he taunts and mocks them as he devours them after breaking them…
Okay, good. We're back on more sensible territory. Now, I'm su-
it turns out he spared Nun Van Helsing for some reason?
... I feel like I've felt this before. Have I felt this before?
And she escapes, and helps the remaining Crew fight back,
... Oh God, I've felt this way before!
and Dracula ends up with his coffin going into the ocean, he however climbs out after breaking free and strides triumphantly into the beach of England…only for a Helicopter to fly overhead, him having been trapped underwater until the modern day.
... This shit's too surreal, am I on drugs?
Watch the first two episodes and stop watching when Mina reveals herself in the first and when Dracula's coffin falls into the ocean in the second and skip the third entirely.
Dude, after what you just told me, I think I better skip the entire ordeal if I don't want my perception of Dracula to be tainted.

And I've watched "Dracula: Dead and loving it"
 
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Finally! I've been working on this since October began! Sure, some other pitches came before it, but The Last Voyage of the Demeter was the one film I've been working for this month. And let me tell you, having gone all the way to the middle, and then seeing it be erased, forcing you to start from the beginning... it's not pretty, not at all.
Seeing as how that happened to me with Undertale, I know exactly how you feel. It's such an absolute shit feeling, I remember I felt like throwing up when I lost my script. I'm glad to see that you were able to make it through in the end and the pitch was able to be completed.
 
If it makes you feel worse episode 3 is the last 5th of both episodes for its entire run dialled up by 10.
It does make me feel worse. Goddammit Moffat!
Seeing as how that happened to me with Undertale, I know exactly how you feel. It's such an absolute shit feeling, I remember I felt like throwing up when I lost my script. I'm glad to see that you were able to make it through in the end and the pitch was able to be completed.
Thanks, glad to know someone else understands.
 
On the Gettysburg pitch, I also hope that it gives Meade the very overdue credit he needs. He took command of the Army of the Potomac three days before the Battle of Gettysburg, and the Corps of the Army were spread out all over the place. In three days, Meade had to gather all these Corps, march on Gettysburg, and decisively defeat Robert E. Lee. And he did all of that. And though some say he should've pursued Lee, I present to you the AoTP: An exhausted, battered, and mauled Army with little to no ammunition, supplies, and food left. Let me ask you, how precisely were they supposed to keep on fighting in this state?

Not to mention his pre-army commander conduct was just superb. At the Battle of Frederickburg, Meade's division broke through Stonewall Jackson's lines all by itself, and they could have kept on pushing if FRANKLIN HAD BOTHERED TO SUPPORT THEM!! BUT NOOOOOOOOOOO, HE JUST HAD TO BE AS CAUTIOUS AS MCCLELLAN, AND POOR OLD MEADE HAD TO RETREAT WITH HIS GAINS LOST AS SOON AS THEY WERE MADE. I SWEAR, HALF THE UNION GENERALS WERE TOO BUSY WITH THEIR NOSES STUCK UP THEIR BUTTHOLES TO D9 DECENT JOBS!!!

Anyways, for the Battle of Chickamauga miniseries, I've found the perfect main Union PoV. May I introduce you all to the "Russian Thunderbolt" John B. Turchin, his birth name being Ivan Vasilyevich Turchaninov. Born a Russian noble, he was a military intelligence colonel in the Russian Imperial Army and a personal staff officer to Tsar Alexander II. He then emigrated to the United States in 1856 and spent time as both a farmer and a railroad official before the Civil War broke out. He volunteered to join the army and received a commission as a Colonel. He would garner controversy and scandal in 1862, however, when he allowed a regiment of his to ransack the Albama town of Athens after civilians fired upon his men as they retreated from the the earlier. He was court-martialed and found guilty on all counts before being sentenced to a dishonorable discharge. However, before he was to be thrown out of the army, his wife Nadine intervened. A character in of herself (and another main character I hope to introduce in the miniseries), she–dubbed Madame Turchin by the troops–went along with him during his service in the Union Army and sometimes even took surrogate command of his men when he was unavailable. She also heavily document the battles of Chickamauga and Missionary Ridge, making her the only female diarist of those battles. She raised up a storm in Washington D.C., and soon, Lincoln himself intervened on Turchin's behalf, promoting him to Brigadier General and effectively nullifying the court-martial against Turchin. During the Battle of Chickamauga, he lead his brigade on two separate charges on separate days that both saved the Union Army from total collapse. He would continue to serve until 1864 when he resigned due to heatstroke suffered.

All in all, he was an absolute mad lad! So of course, the Lost Causers slandered him to all hell like they did with Grant and Longstreet. Hopefully, the Chickamauga miniseries I might pitch gets him the fame he deserves.
 
So this might seem really weird and out of field but I must ask, has anyone played or is attached to Front Mission? I recently got into a manga adaptation of it, and long story short I had a bad time as it had awful writing and was really gross with weird sex stuff. Though for those who don't know, apparently this was really out of left field creatively as the franchise is normally RTS mecha strategy games.

Out of intrigue from what was a strong start before it went downhill, I was very disappointed with what I found in a really bland with crap nation names and worldbuilding and a bizarre story as the "evil" faction is a terrorist organization who wants to end the warmongering superstates and wants the westphalian system back.

Reason I bring this up is because Front MIssion is a Square Enix franchise, and since Square no longer exists, I plan to replace Front Mission with what is basically a cross between Gundam and Ace Combat with the setting being an entirely ficitonal world so there isn't a setting where the Americans are cartoonish villains and also play around with our cultural butterflies. Also I want to purge the memories of that awful manga.
 
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