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One moment while I break out the world's smallest violin so I can play "My Heart Bleeds for Thee" for Saint and his crew. ;)
And Leet's daughter and her... escort fleet?... are rounding the Horn and heading for home. That ought to be an interesting encounter in a little while.
 
Trufla said:
One moment while I break out the world's smallest violin so I can play "My Heart Bleeds for Thee" for Saint and his crew. ;)
And Leet's daughter and her... escort fleet?... are rounding the Horn and heading for home. That ought to be an interesting encounter in a little while.
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Nah, just a single destroyer. HMAS Arunta is a Tribal class destroyer, a sister to HMCS Haida.
 
Kryslin said:
And with that, her father spoke a sequence of words, coupled with a set of motions and gestures." And with that, her father spoke a sequence of words, coupled with a set of motions and gestures.
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i don't mean to be rude but this seems like it was repeated text that could use editing.
 
Kryslin said:
That cannot be allowed. I know you hated forced backups, and unfortunately, this will cause one." And with that, her father spoke a sequence of words, coupled with a set of motions and gestures." And with that, her father spoke a sequence of words, coupled with a set of motions and gestures.
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Should only be one of the sentence describing what he did.
This is one of the more enjoyable scenes of Dragon shutting down Saint. I think the only one that ranks higher is one of the fics where someone helped make Dragon an organic body, that she then built a suit for and opened the suit to flip Saint off while arresting him.
 
zScruffy said:
Should only be one of the sentence describing what he did.
This is one of the more enjoyable scenes of Dragon shutting down Saint. I think the only one that ranks higher is one of the fics where someone helped make Dragon an organic body, that she then built a suit for and opened the suit to flip Saint off while arresting him.
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Can you give a link? Please?
 
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And so Princess of Wales sailed on, almost completely unaware of the figurative storm she would be causing when she called upon the port of Brockton Bay, New Hampshire, United States.
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Um...I would have thought she would have kept the name of the ship she was based on, Prince of Wales...
Kryslin said:
I know you hated forced backups, and unfortunately, this will cause one." And with that, her father spoke a sequence of words, coupled with a set of motions and gestures." And with that, her father spoke a sequence of words, coupled with a set of motions and gestures.
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Duplicated text. Please remove.

Pardon me. Saint needs a proper funeral procession for any chances he may have ever had.

 
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Nah, just a single destroyer. HMAS Arunta is a Tribal class destroyer, a sister to HMCS Haida.
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For now. After all this is a Leet-tech unsackled AI based off the Fog Fleet of Arpeggio of Blue Steel that has been running around for over one hundred years.

And while it managed to do minor damage to Ziz when attacking it, it wasn't enough. Ergo, more gun is required.
 
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zScruffy said:
Should only be one of the sentence describing what he did.
This is one of the more enjoyable scenes of Dragon shutting down Saint. I think the only one that ranks higher is one of the fics where someone helped make Dragon an organic body, that she then built a suit for and opened the suit to flip Saint off while arresting him.
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I figured it was an intentional discontinuity indicating the back-up in action.
 
jmcdavid said:
Um...I would have thought she would have kept the name of the ship she was based on, Prince of Wales...
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Hopefully @Kryslin doesn't mind me talking about editing stuff; in short, Kryslin's original draft did use Prince of Wales, but I thought it sounded odd to constantly be referring to a 'her' as Prince. So I suggested the change on the basis that it sounded a bit better, would be less confusing to readers, and it distinguished her as her own entity. Kryslin seemed to like the suggestion and went with it.

So, in summary, if you don't like it you can blame me. ;)

Kryslin said:
Nah, just a single destroyer. HMAS Arunta is a Tribal class destroyer, a sister to HMCS Haida.
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Nobody smart messes with Arunta, they really don't want to make her sister mad. XD
 
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ScyBlade said:
Look up the USS Dwight D Eisenhower's achievements for the year 2020. Now add only 10 hours of internet access per day.
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What is this internet access from on board ship thing you speak of? Wait. Ships actually have access now? Admittedly, it's been quite a while since I was in, but ... wait ... internet wasn't a thing then. So, I'm guessing limited satellite access. 👀
 
TaliesinSkye said:
Hopefully @Kryslin doesn't mind me talking about editing stuff; in short, Kryslin's original draft did use Prince of Wales, but I thought it sounded odd to constantly be referring to a 'her' as Prince. So I suggested the change on the basis that it sounded a bit better, would be less confusing to readers, and it distinguished her as her own entity. Kryslin seemed to like the suggestion and went with it.

So, in summary, if you don't like it you can blame me. ;)
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I mean, in Kantai Collection, they didn't change Richelieu's name...
 
Wait, shouldn't Dragon be Theresa there in Richter's speech? Dragon being the Cape name she took after he died?

I'll come back and quote the bit when I'm not stuck on my phone
 
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Alas poor Saint. You suffered a fate far better then you deserved, and dodged the bullet that would have come your way for targeting Leet for an accidental creation.

Because of this, we are denied seeing you properly dressed with Ketchup....
 
Interesting... there was an original version. The version I always heard was the (obviously corrupted):

When in danger or in doubt
Run in circles, scream and shout.
 
Dragon was a little embarrassed to watch her father do a perfect sailor moon twirl and pose while holding this conversation. Yet it was impressive in its own way given his age.
 
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