Another aspect of the problem that might be there (or I'm imagining it) is that the two are kinda too similar. There are a lot of connections between the two and their experiences that could be pointed out - which makes the differences between them absolutely infuriating. "You've got everything else right, why don't you get this bit?!?" sort of thing.
 
The [we need a catchy name for the main cast] all floated in mid air, staring at the remains of what was once a major breach.
"Hey sis?"
"Yes...Koujirou"
"Why are the giant crocodile and giant alligator wrestling? I thought that they were friends!"
"They...aren't fighting."
"Oh...oh!"
...
"Hey Sandra?"
"Anna?"
"They seem to be cuddling rather enthusiastically."
"Um.."
"Wanna go cuddle like that?"
"Uh...they aren't cuddling."
"Oh...ah, I see-they're having sex."
Sandra was torn between blushing and dropping her jaw. She didn't know that Anna even knew the facts of life!
"Wanna go cuddle like that?"
Blushing won out.

Meanwhile, Shuri was cuddling the tsun out of Setsuna. The childhood friend was too busy with her grand plan to join Anna's harem to notice.


Another aspect of the problem that might be there (or I'm imagining it) is that the two are kinda too similar. There are a lot of connections between the two and their experiences that could be pointed out - which makes the differences between them absolutely infuriating. "You've got everything else right, why don't you get this bit?!?" sort of thing.
Well, there's also that Anna knows a lot more (still only a bit, but a lot when compare with "classified") about Shuri than Shuri might know about Anna. That could cause some misunderstandings.
 
Bit of ambigous syntax here, to clarify; friendly fire is expected in the first few times Valks do these, not everytime.
Adjusted it to clarify that.

And yeah, the thing is, @Interested Party, Shuri's got a large dose of self-and-everyone-else-loathing going on. Makes it hard for her to connect, and it's not like Anna even understands how to connect to people at all, right now.
 
Anna's Angels all floated in mid air, staring at the remains of what was once a major breach.
FTFY
"Hey sis?"
"Yes...Koujirou"
"Why are the giant crocodile and giant alligator wrestling? I thought that they were friends!"
"They...aren't fighting."
"Oh...oh!"
...
"Hey Sandra?"
"Anna?"
"They seem to be cuddling rather enthusiastically."
"Um.."
"Wanna go cuddle like that?"
"Uh...they aren't cuddling."
"Oh...ah, I see-they're having sex."
Sandra was torn between blushing and dropping her jaw. She didn't know that Anna even knew the facts of life!
"Wanna go cuddle like that?"
Blushing won out.

Meanwhile, Shuri was cuddling the tsun out of Setsuna. The childhood friend was too busy with her grand plan to join Anna's harem to notice.
This made me unbelievably happy.

On a side note, the hell were they watching?
 
In that case we must never ever explain the joke.
I devilishly agree.
The [we need a catchy name for the main cast] all floated in mid air, staring at the remains of what was once a major breach.
"Hey sis?"
"Yes...Koujirou"
"Why are the giant crocodile and giant alligator wrestling? I thought that they were friends!"
"They...aren't fighting."
"Oh...oh!"
...
"Hey Sandra?"
"Anna?"
"They seem to be cuddling rather enthusiastically."
"Um.."
"Wanna go cuddle like that?"
"Uh...they aren't cuddling."
"Oh...ah, I see-they're having sex."
Sandra was torn between blushing and dropping her jaw. She didn't know that Anna even knew the facts of life!
"Wanna go cuddle like that?"
Blushing won out.

Meanwhile, Shuri was cuddling the tsun out of Setsuna. The childhood friend was too busy with her grand plan to join Anna's harem to notice.



Well, there's also that Anna knows a lot more (still only a bit, but a lot when compare with "classified") about Shuri than Shuri might know about Anna. That could cause some misunderstandings.
Eh, still like the Pair of Aces, Queen High ship. But Cuddles FTW!

And now referring to the Anna-Shuri (friend)ship, I think that Sandra is the best way to go. Also it would be hilarious if we say something about Shuri's past with her not even knowing it! The reactions would be a funny read. :rofl::lol:rofl:
 
Florida and Australia mating.

Anyone who comes into this thread and sees only this post without any of the earlier context is going to be hilariously confused.
In that case we must never ever explain the joke.
Then why did you explain it?
@Interested Party , @Dark as Silver, swiftly delete those posts, that no being may understand it without acquiring the proper context by reading this thread first.
Sometimes I love you guys.
For the rest of the time, there's Florida.
 
@Avalanche, based on previous update schedules, basically indicating that half-ish of all update time delay has been editing if you speak the light of truth.
Anna
Anywho, I have, uh... three days until I leave for college. Move-in is the day after (move in is the eleventh). I have no idea what impact that will have on my ability to write omake, so... Hm.
Anna.
Hum.
Anna?
Must be time for an ultimatum/pronouncement/what do you call it when you like it so much you aren't willing to wait for the update any longer? Anna
Anna...
Well, I did eventually decide that if I was going to write another before the update, it was going to be Bellum. The idea has matured far enough from being too close to the next chapter that I'm comfortable with it. And Bellum is... a lot more comfortable to me than Mors was (cough Bellum has Anna and I don't have to do 3 hours of research cough) although I have no idea how that rates with Vae, because when I wrote Vae I was in a gorram fugue state the whole time. Mors was like 2k a day for three days plus 1.5k I'd written weeks beforehand... Vae was 3k in five hours and 1.5k in two the next morning... So... I probably don't have time to write all of Bellum... Because I don't have a Wednesday since I have to pack...
Anna!
*rubs chin*
Anna!?
Tentative schedule: nothing happens if somehow update before early afternoon CST tomorrow. Trial writing of Bellum tomorrow afternoon, we'll see what happens. I had thought I would be able to work on Mors in car on interstate, but I wasn't into it. If I end up liking Bellum enough... There might be something substantial Thursday evening. I probably have 0 time after Thursday for a couple days, because writing omake works me up rather than relaxing me, so I'm definitely not going to be doing much of it Friday and then the week after that is, uh... Pretty packed, I think.
Anna...?
If I somehow end up in the state I was in for Vae, then all bets are off and I'll probably be posting Wednesday evening or some shit. I mean, we were packing and leaving town for two weeks and I just got out of bed and wrote another 1.5k I was that into it, so, yeah.
ANNNNAAAAAAAAAAA
I can't decide if I want quest to update now or after I move in. Would be a hell of a send off, would be a hell of a way to burn an evening or two in dorm.
Get yourself packed and prepared. Relax and write (I hope you find writing relaxing) once you're settled in. Also, you should probably write a story or quest of your own, distract yourself from uh, your cravings.

Much as I would like to post updates as soon as I write them, having them delayed does give me opportunities to refine scenes, not to mention that you know, they're being edited in that time.
 
Get yourself packed and prepared. Relax and write (I hope you find writing relaxing) once you're settled in. Also, you should probably write a story or quest of your own, distract yourself from uh, your cravings.

Much as I would like to post updates as soon as I write them, having them delayed does give me opportunities to refine scenes, not to mention that you know, they're being edited in that time.

I'm not criticizing you in the least. I was pretty unhappy with how that line came out tbh XD

Editing is crazy important. There's a good reason I turned down your offer earlier, after all, the finished product is much better than the raw. What I really want to convey is actually the awestruck expression that my face put on when I realized that you were taking half as long as I had thought to write these things.

Some updates have been two freaking weeks apart. This guy I'm quoting right here, half of those two weeks is editing the raw. This is why we are so happy with this quest, this... this glorious bastard is spending as much time engineering all of the posts into the diamonds we know and love as he is writing them.

*glances at own previous post*

*whistles*

Sheeeeee-it, I REALLY didn't put that stuff into the right words, did I?

As for writing a quest of my own... I've toyed with the idea. The biggest reason I don't intend to is that I get a lot more enjoyment out of reading other people's work. The only reason I ever wrote Vae Victoria was that you managed to focus the daydreaming I do on and off while I'm working out on this quest for a good week and a half straight, and it eventually got out of hand. The only reason I ever wrote Mors Innocentia was that I was bored as fuck and I figured I might give omake another shot.

The only big reason I'm considering Bellum... It's got nothing to do with withdrawal. That's how I'm justifying it to myself, and I'm also using the wait for the update as a justification/motive for it. The reason I'm considering it, really? I feel intensely dissatisfied with Mors, and I want to satisfy myself. Vae Victoria was art; art I barely even understood I was creating. All the italics in Vae, all of them up to the scene with the barrier (the start of the addition from the morning after) were originally intended as emphasis. I never ever intended for them to come from Durga. The scene where the people were watching Anna VS AG-occupied Canada, that literally just sprung out of my head in the middle of the writing and yet it fit perfectly. The last scene, I didn't even know what was going on at all, somehow I ended up with poetic lines about angels blue and death. I had no fucking clue what I was writing, during either session. Shit, the evening, when I got done I was sweaty and tired and almost totally out of it. I didn't spare a glance at what I had written the whole time.

And then I posted it and it blew up.

That was when I stopped heading for bed, sat down, and read what I had written. "What the fuck? Is that Durga? Holy shit, this is good!"

Mors Innocentia was... Eh. Frankly I started it riding the high from Vae, put it down, picked it back up... The whole thing was researched to death and meticulously planned out.

I haven't really read it yet. But in my experience, when I write something and say to myself, "god, this doesn't work at all..."

Don't get me wrong, Mors has a lot going for it. But it's... There's whole plot lines in there that I would replace if I wrote it again, and that last scene made me want to slap myself it was so disjointed.

Perfectionist? Probably.

So, that's half of why I'm thinking about Bellum, more I guess. The other half is basically, "I have no idea what I might see next chapter and if it turns out to be inspiring I don't want two ideas in my head at once."

Hrm... /rant, go to gym Kai. Stop it with the rambling.

Edit: taking down last post. Not okay with some of the language I was using.
 
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Eh, if it comes, it'll comes.

I mean, this was probably the first quest i see have 13k words update. Even my fanfics doesn't go that long.
 
:confused:

Did I sound annoyed? I didn't mean to sound annoyed. Was just thinking (then talking) to myself really.

Well...

*reads avalanche post*

Nope, definitely not annoyed lol.

At the time, you sounded slightly annoyed to me, the guy who hadn't been getting a ton of sleep and was in the middle of reading light-hearted fluff at the time he glanced at the post -- and didn't even read it carefully >.>. So, you sounded slightly so to the guy without a fully functional brain XD

BUT!

What that made me to do was go back and read what I had actually written.

It was... Um...

Kakashi: "Worse than trash."

Yes, that.

Part of it is that I'm naturally shy-ish, usually. Part of it is that I'm sometimes concerned about what I'm posting here because I come here all the time even/especially when I'm really, really out of it. But...

For gods sake, if you ignore a bit if the rambling there was a bit where I was talking about ultimatums and update schedules! Yes, it was an "ultimatum" saying "if no post, I shall omake" but... Ultimatum. Update. Within a few lines of each other.

*shudders*

That's... It just was too far from the person I am / like to be. If that makes any sense. It was a mixture of attention seeking and rude, and I killed it with fire before feeding the ashes to Florida.

This thread is basically my home on SV/SB. I'll allow myself to ramble here, because people seem to be pretty understanding / okay with it. But I will not tolerate myself committing acts of Antagonism in here, whatever the circumstances, whatever the tone.
 
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Well...

*reads avalanche post*

Nope, definitely not annoyed lol.

At the time, you sounded slightly annoyed to me, the guy who hadn't been getting a ton of sleep and was in the middle of reading light-hearted fluff at the time he glanced at the post -- and didn't even read it carefully >.>. So, you sounded slightly so to the guy without a fully functional brain XD

BUT!

What that made me to do was go back and read what I had actually written.

It was... Um...

Kakashi: "Worse than trash."

Yes, that.

Part of it is that I'm naturally shy-ish, usually. Part of it is that I'm sometimes concerned about what I'm posting here because I come here all the time even/especially when I'm really, really out of it. But...

For gods sake, if you ignore a bit if the rambling there was a bit where I was talking about ultimatums and update schedules! Yes, it was an "ultimatum" saying "if no post, I shall omake" but... Ultimatum. Update. Within a few lines of each other.

*shudders*

That's... It just was too far from the person I am / like to be. If that makes any sense. It was a mixture of attention seeking and rude, and I killed it with fire before feeding the ashes to Florida.

This thread is basically my home on SV/SB. I'll allow myself to ramble here, because people seem to be pretty understanding / okay with it. But I will not tolerate myself committing acts of Antagonism in here, whatever the circumstances, whatever the tone.
Antagonism? ON BREAD-CHAN'S THREAD?!? THERE IS ONLY ONE THING FOR THIS!
 
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