So apparently I'm rereading this and doing a typo hunt.
the fact that sixteen hours of galloping would turn your body below the waste into pulp.
waste -> waist
to request that their coffers are reimbursement
reimbursement -> reimbursed
"And you're opinion on our target?"
you're -> your
We don't want whatever garrison she has their acting freely.
their -> there
he'd be wear the fighting's thickest
wear -> where
it's the Stirland Watch takes up a great deal of your attention.
Missing a "that" before "takes up".
missing a "few" before "holy icons".
The man was failed by sigmar
Missing capitalization on "Sigmar".
The founding of the Stirland Watch and it's expansion underground
This is the
one (well, if there are more I don't know of them) case where apostrophe-s isn't a possessive - "it's" -> "its"
A bustling staff of people who's job titles could be found nowhere but in a college
"who's" -> "whose" (for the same reason)
This enchantment is like construction of the barbarian shaman's time
I think this should be "shamans'", plural.
it's handle leaned against the table.
"it's" -> "its"
"who's" -> "whose"
genetic throwback to it's wolf ancestors
"it's"->"its"
Either way, in tribute to the lost Wolf and as, you suppose, a thank you to you for his victory over Stromfels.
This is a sentence fragment.
Emperor Mandred, who's death plunged the Empire into centuries of civil war
"who's"->"whose"
its only character now is that it has been given.
I would say "that which it has been given" but I can't say it's
wrong to say this.
the Underways current inhabitants
"Underways" -> "Underway's"
And its not only your mundane senses causing alarm,
"its" -> "it's". It's is "it is", its is "belonging to it". It's only pronouns that have this particular weirdness, but they
do.
While they had build up more than enough goodwill
"build" -> "built"
not to Dwarvern siege weapons or explosives
...Just find/replace "Swarvern" with "Dwarven".
Should this be "Familiar Obsession"?
so the combination practically unheard of?
"the combination is"
you reflect as you make your way up an mountain-length staircase
"up a mountain-length"
having cast quite a few spells and some quite tricky in a short amount of time.
That last bit...seems like it's missing a word somewhere. That, or it has too many.
From this distance an arrow is invisible, but a volley of thousands shouldn't be, but if the archers are firing they're not coordinated enough to form a volley, and the greenskin lines surge forward, now free of the lava and lightning that torments the Citadel.
This is a run-on sentence.
"traffics" -> "traffic"
"it's" -> "its"
"suiters" -> "suitors"
not marrying for love, and often never find it.
"find" -> "finding"
Did the King want to gauge the Princesses abilities
"Princesses" -> "Princess'"
He borrows Panoramia from the Halflings,
"borrows" -> "borrowed", I think.
one does not accomplish anything by simply hold Ulgu
"hold" -> "holding"
They're definitely unsmelted ore, but there's good metal there.
....Not a correction, but can I just say I love how the dwarfy metaphors just creep into the narration over time?
"Stirland thanks Karak Eight Peaks for it's intervention in this matter."
"it's" -> "its"
But the ego of Dwarven Grandmasters
I think this should be "ego" -> "egos".
din of a Skaven-on-Skaven battlefields
Either remove the "a" or depluralize "battlefields".
and No-Relation Reicthard and Dragomas
...I don't know
why I think this but I keep thinking that Reicthard needs another 'h' to be Reichthard.
Suns out, so we don't need it.
"Suns" -> "Sun's"
Kragg, who's scowl is only his default scowl,
"who's" -> "whose"
discipline and number are winning out
"number" -> "numbers"
cleaner than Clan Moudler
"Moudler" -> "Moulder"
less obviously riven by internal intrigue that Clan Skryre
"intrigue that" -> "intrigue than"
so as you continue to deliver results on that front, you could be an Ogre for all they cared.
I think this should probably be "so as long as you", not just "so as you"
"A this point" -> "At this point,"
what little he can see of it as it peaks out
"peaks" -> "peeks"
But while they have had their previous tasks backburnered, you are freed to return to your previous tasks.
...I'm not going to say anything is inherently wrong with this sentence, but it kind of stands out in a bad way.
Remove the comma after "Say".
A longed-wished-for child of a King
I think this should be "long-wished-for" or "longed-for".
with towers and crenellations stretching far into the sky until abrupty cutting off at the flattened peak.
"until abrupty cutting off" -> "until they abruptly cut off"
noting as you do that filing discretely into the courtyard, the handful of attendents that the Sacred Flame always has have been reinforced to an even score of White Wolves.
first off, "discretely" -> "discreetly" and "attendents" -> "attendants". second off, i'd consider restructuring the sentence - something like "noting as you do that the handful of attendants that the Sacred Flame always has have been reinforced, with an even score of White Wolves filing discreetly into the courtyard", but I can't say that I have a strong reason to do this other than "as it is it feels clunky".
have been received only enough attention
remove "been"
So it's near certain you're not going to get any straight answers from the Dwarves about the nature of Valaya's repelling of magical energies, so you go straight to experimentation.
This isn't
wrong but it is repetitive - consider changing "so you go" to "and you go"?
"It's quite exhilerating."
"exhilerating" -> "exhilarating"
But that had been a back in Ostermark
"had been a back" -> "had been back"
it was simply a matter of the Witch Hunters had
"had" -> "having"
the Sky God gifted the Kislev's ancestors with.
"gifted the Kislev's" -> "gifted Kislev's"
"Its going by the name of Cython,
First off, you used the wrong it(')s. Second off, wouldn't it be better to use "they"?
to satisfy your curiousity.
"curiousity" -> "curiosity"
There's no circumstance so bad that Dhar can't make worse.
"can't make worse" -> "can't make it worse"
"Forwarned" -> "Forewarned"
either disembark and unload and them reembark and reload
"them -> "then"
It couldn't have been any clearly demarcated if it had a checkpoint.
"have any clearly" -> "have been any more clearly" or "have been more clearly"
you don't have pigeonhole any more,
"have pigeonhole" -> "have a pigeonhole"
I think very much they would have preferred blackmail,
"think very much they would" -> "think they very much would"
Okay, now back to the present.
So, a thought: it possible that there is a reason that the Grand Count of Wissenland was not told about The conspiracy of Silence, even though it should be obvious that if someone should be told, it would be an EC.
... is it possible that no one tells him these things because everyone, other EC's to his own men, knows that there is no way he will not blabber it out at some point.
and we just told him some stuff without thinking about it...
opps?
Nah, he's been read in on
what it is, nobody explained to him
why it is in language plain enough for him to understand, I think.
As far as votes: I don't think I want to go near Heidi's offer with a ten-foot pole, to be honest, for many of the same reasons other people don't. Wish we could've gotten info on being Ranald's High Priest in Kislev, but I feel like that's still not our relationship. We're
not a priest, we're a champion. We go out and hit things. We don't really minister to the faithful.
Loremaster at Large appeals to me somewhat, enough that I think I might vote for it. Markgraf of "Eastern Stirland", similarly.
However, there's a whole bunch of stuff already on the ground to take care of vampires and weird stuff. The ability to take care of Skaven...I don't know whether it's just my not knowing any WHF lore but what's been laid out here, or if there's just really not any similar assets, but I get the feeling that there really
aren't high-quality anti-Skaven assets available for this. And there
is that warning from the Celestial Matriarch.
That said, I still find the Waystone project
really interesting. I want to poke the magic rocks. And get Kragg that seviroscope already.