What should your focus for the rest of the Quest be?


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Scheduled vote count started by HeroCooky on May 29, 2024 at 9:45 AM, finished with 23 posts and 22 votes.
 
614.M42 - I Said So
With a hum in their throat and the smile of an average joyous human on their face, the pilgrim began to walk back to the path to the tomb...

"Why are you smiling?"

And stopped. Looking to the left, where the voice had come from, the pilgrim saw nothing before looking down to see a tiny human female child stare back, big curious eyes set in a face that blended into that look that all cattle to the Greater Powers seemed to have when blinded to its brilliance.

"Go away," the pilgrim said and continued walking on.

"Why?" The child said, walking with them, a skip in her steps with her plain robe fluttering about by her hands deliberately swishing against it.

"Because I said so," the pilgrim replied, looking around for any parents or guardians or whoever this child belonged to.

"Why?" The child replied once more, stopping a step after the pilgrim stopped, looking up at them with bright eyes, rocking back and forth on her heels with her hands behind her back. "You look grumpy. Aren't you happy to visit the island?"

"I am happy. Where are your parents?" The pilgrim said, annoyance slowly turning into ire as they saw nobody here to witness the two of them...

"Away. Why do you have sharp teeth?" She spoke, and the pilgrim stopped looking around, focusing on the child with laser-like precision, suspicion, and plans erupting within their mind as a hand snaked near their concealed weapon. "My mother says that people with stuff like sharp teeth aren't fully people anymore. My other mom says that she means they had their genitals removed," she giggled at the word 'genitals,' looking around with a face the epitome of a child speaking a bad word that they shouldn't say. "Do you still have yours?"

"Do you even know what that word means," the pilgrim asked idly, grasping the knife with their hand as places to store the body began to appear within their mind...nine days over there, two weeks yonder, an hour if left right here...

"Nope!" she said, popping the 'p' as she began to skip around the pilgrim, looking around with bored interest. The pilgrim began to unsheate the knife...and a servo-skull emerged from the foliage above, floating over them, its eyes set on scanning equipment and the various plants in the area.

"Drone," the pilgrim said with mild annoyance and forceful calm, returning the knife to its sheat, paths to getting away and returning to the mission settling within their mind. "Aid the child and return it to its parents."

The girl, however, hopped to the servo-skull. "Hey, mister skulls, what are genitals?" she asked, waving at the servo-skill, which panned its gaze to the child waving below it. Looking at the pilgrim, it looked at the child once more.

+++01001110 01101111 00101110+++ And floated away at high speeds.

"Man, skrzt to you too," the girl said, sticking its tongue out with an added 'bleh!' before turning around, skipping after the pilgrim that had begun to hurry away, catching up in no time. "Why are you in such a hurry?" She asked, looking at the pilgrim that began to analyse the surroundings for spots to dump her body again.

"I wish to see the tomb, and you annoy me."

"Why?"

"Your incessant questions are rousing my ire. Cease and leave."

"Why?"

"I will stab you."

"Why?"

The pilgrim stopped, having found a spot for the body. A hand once more reached for the knife.



Choose One [1] of each Category:
(6-Hour Moratorium)
[] (Hero)
(The Yeeni Occultist / The Nervous Mutant / The Kil'drabi Pilgrim)
[] (Occurrence)
(Distract / Mislead / Disclose)
 
You need to build the tension slowly in any narrative. I think disclose should be last, since that's presumably when this guy goes loud.

Let's get him nice and pissed, then lead him in the wrong direction and thinking about the wrong things before that happens.

I'm in for either distract or mislead, with the occultist on the former and the pilgrim on the latter.
 
Does... does he not realize the narrative portents of going to visit the tomb of the prophet of a warp entity called the 'Star Child' whose narrative is bound up in ideas of childlike innocence, where said entity is explicitly described as being genderless, or perhaps all genders, or no genders, and the first person he runs into is an unaccompanied child whose parents are 'away'.

Like this doesnt feel very subtle to me, but he seems to be missing all the flags waving in his face.
 
Does... does he not realize the narrative portents of going to visit the tomb of the prophet of a warp entity called the 'Star Child' whose narrative is bound up in ideas of childlike innocence, where said entity is explicitly described as being genderless, or perhaps all genders, or no genders, and the first person he runs into is an unaccompanied child whose parents are 'away'.

Like this doesnt feel very subtle to me, but he seems to be missing all the flags waving in his face.
You say that like a Chaos Lord would actually take the time to learn and internalize portions of a Religion they intend to destroy
 
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