prometheus110
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- Location
- La Ballena City Raft
- Pronouns
- He/Him
I should increase the bordergore next time. It'd be funny.
The Lords of Ruin -- Battletech/Killzone
- Thread starter prometheus110
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- Crossover
Omega-Chris
The Friendly Ghost
Will the map also get a Media treadmark because it's a image?
SneakyWalrus
Is the Water Free?
I can hear the grognards screaming through time at the bordergore of this map. I adore it immensely.
always_confused
Perpetually unwanted
- Location
- SEA
Hopefully LoR2 will reveal the Fire Mandrills as the true masterminds of the Universe, as they deserve to be.
Omega-Chris
The Friendly Ghost
Yea they have grown quite a bit during this quest there huge compared to the canon counterparts of this time. It's for that reason why that if the Capellans do try to pull something the Taurians will be pretty good in counter balancing them.
Ok this has been bouncing around my head for a while now I hope I make an enjoyable read for you guys now without further ado
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A glimpse of the future
Despite the outcry of shock and anger for the "destruction" of helghan not many gave a galnce at helghans former place in alpha centarys solar system, and over the comings years of civil war it faded away though the memory of helghan would remain. Was it because of this that the fragment made its way to Vecta?, partially. But more likely it was combination of laziness, the sheer unimpressive size and its trajectory of the fragment that made it possible ito make planetfall.
Much of its mass was burnt up in atmosphere, as it hurtaled towards the lush jungles of Vecta
until inevitably crashing down, although the location of the crash was most unusual, crashing down through the suffice rock into a small unassuming cave. there it would lay for hours undisturbed, motionless until………
"CRACK" "SPARK"
The fragment split open like and alien geode and out shown a sickly irradiated Green over the coming days it's light would continue to grow in intensity until suddenly and without warning it would stop…..
Only for it to return tenfold releasing a shockwave of pure irradiated energy vaporizing anything that moves and killing all nerby plant life, the sere magnitude of this power. Alerted all UCN sensors across the region alerting the armed forces of its existence
A full mobilization of local forces was ordered and the investigation would begin immediately. What they would fined would commence the greatest ceasefire in human history.
Inside the cave the light was almost at a comfortable level but the orgin of this green light would set anyone's animal instincts into a frenzy of fear and uncertainty. For what they would see would be best dicribed as jagged hole one would see if someone where to throw a rock through glass……..except the glass would be Reality itself there it's inside where if a. Swirling and shifting green pulsing, and undulating with irradiated energy. If one where to move past there instincts and for whatever's reason throw an object into the glowing hole in reality they would find that the object in question would vanish in flash of green light.
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In the equatorial jungles of Helghan in smaller cave in a similarly isolated place, there was another green glow and another large hole, in a flash of green there lay and object at its very edge the irradiated and slightly burnt but fully intact……………………………………..
The Second Extrasolar War left many scars and since those bloody months Years have passed and scar faded. The survivors of this war would soon find that all it took was a SPARK to ignite those scar into festering wounds anew.
View: https://youtu.be/wYgqdsEr4dA?si=UI5p2ZrRGVfiXcVs
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A glimpse of the future
Despite the outcry of shock and anger for the "destruction" of helghan not many gave a galnce at helghans former place in alpha centarys solar system, and over the comings years of civil war it faded away though the memory of helghan would remain. Was it because of this that the fragment made its way to Vecta?, partially. But more likely it was combination of laziness, the sheer unimpressive size and its trajectory of the fragment that made it possible ito make planetfall.
Much of its mass was burnt up in atmosphere, as it hurtaled towards the lush jungles of Vecta
until inevitably crashing down, although the location of the crash was most unusual, crashing down through the suffice rock into a small unassuming cave. there it would lay for hours undisturbed, motionless until………
"CRACK" "SPARK"
The fragment split open like and alien geode and out shown a sickly irradiated Green over the coming days it's light would continue to grow in intensity until suddenly and without warning it would stop…..
Only for it to return tenfold releasing a shockwave of pure irradiated energy vaporizing anything that moves and killing all nerby plant life, the sere magnitude of this power. Alerted all UCN sensors across the region alerting the armed forces of its existence
A full mobilization of local forces was ordered and the investigation would begin immediately. What they would fined would commence the greatest ceasefire in human history.
Inside the cave the light was almost at a comfortable level but the orgin of this green light would set anyone's animal instincts into a frenzy of fear and uncertainty. For what they would see would be best dicribed as jagged hole one would see if someone where to throw a rock through glass……..except the glass would be Reality itself there it's inside where if a. Swirling and shifting green pulsing, and undulating with irradiated energy. If one where to move past there instincts and for whatever's reason throw an object into the glowing hole in reality they would find that the object in question would vanish in flash of green light.
—————————————————————
In the equatorial jungles of Helghan in smaller cave in a similarly isolated place, there was another green glow and another large hole, in a flash of green there lay and object at its very edge the irradiated and slightly burnt but fully intact……………………………………..
The Second Extrasolar War left many scars and since those bloody months Years have passed and scar faded. The survivors of this war would soon find that all it took was a SPARK to ignite those scar into festering wounds anew.
View: https://youtu.be/wYgqdsEr4dA?si=UI5p2ZrRGVfiXcVs
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Omega-Chris
The Friendly Ghost
Oooh this looks interesting. A non-canon omake series covering a new contact between the Veckta and the Helghan Republic of 3051 maybe? I can only imagine the shock of Veckta of what Helghan has become and is a part off. And Veckta will likely also panic a bit because Helghan has vastly surpassed it in Military technology and if Helghan wanted to they could conquer Vekta in short order.
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Exactly it would be so interesting to see each sides reaction to this situation and to see old tempers flare, glad you like it,
Edit: to be clear this is a one shot I don't have the capacity for a sequel
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Happy 2025. 😀
- Location
- SEAsia
- Pronouns
- Thou
Is this an actual sentence (it's not) or the title? Please do some serious editing.
Why are there quotation marks on "trough"? Also, trough is where animals like horses eat or drink from.
The paragraph spacings and capitalizations also seem completely arbitrary.
Yeah Im not a fan of onomatopoeias. People who use them dont want to or are too lazy to be more imaginative in describing sounds.
jees man please cut me some slack this is my first time doing this I'm not a writer
I think you did fine for a first time, although it should be surface and not suffice. The use of onomatopoeia is actually rather interesting to me, and you have used it well to punctuate and emphasize the moment, by giving it its own line and separating that line with blank lines.
It is a little rough but it is a really good first attempt in my opinion.
- Location
- SEAsia
- Pronouns
- Thou
Your first time showed me your current skills as a writer. I have no reason to expect your 2nd time would be better without people pointing out your mistakes and offering corrections.
Like, you either didnt even bother proofreading, or you did proofread but didnt know where you went wrong. I am glad it wasnt just a lazy wall of text though.
Thank you for the compliment
yeah about the punctuation and some other stuff ADHD plus dyslexia and autism equals can't write for shit, have trouble spelling and not being able to properly structure my sentences lol. But hey thanks for the criticism it helps
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- Location
- SEAsia
- Pronouns
- Thou
That shouldnt matter. You post something, Ill post corrections. Just saying "oh you did fine" (which others have done and will do) just means someone else will likely repeat your mistakes. Positive reinforcement means shit without corrections you need to do better.
If there's anything ive learned working with disabilities or handicaps, it's that it's a poor excuse for quality work. Never settle for "okay" if you really want something.
And if you're writing despite the handicaps, well then you don't strike me as the type to settle for "okay".
Damn ok man no need to be mean about it
I get it. It's not an excuse it's an explanation
Omega-Chris
The Friendly Ghost
Some advice from someone who also has ADHD and Dyslexia (along with autisme) throw what you have written into a google doc which will pick out a lot of spelling or sentence building mistakes. Also continue to write and take criticism even if it's negate or a bit mean as that's the only way to continue to improve. However don't let that criticism rule you as that will cause you to write what others want instead of what you want.
Take it from me starting to write stuff isn't easy but the more you write and constructive criticism you accept the better you're writing becomes.
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Oh thanks for the advice and no I definitely appreciate the criticism.
- Location
- SEAsia
- Pronouns
- Thou
Ah, sorry if I sound mean. Kinda hard to nail the in-between of assertive and motivational.
No it's all good man and now that you mentione it yeah that sounds hard to nail down no worries. I'm sorry I took it the wrong way
Omega-Chris
The Friendly Ghost
I think they will start out diplomatically. Like for example should the Capellans begin eying up the Tikonov Free State and ORDI or another great house doesn't do anything ComStar could likely offer to assist in keeping their independence before slowly worming there way in and doing a Coup like we did to the Trinity League. After taking control of Tikonov they would likely continue spreading discord to nearby territories to make them willing to secede from their respective great house (basically using the strategy we have used for a large part of this quest). Growing there new nation ever more.
Personally I think this would be an interesting plot line for the sequel and a nice status quo upsetter as suddenly a new nation forms in the center of the Innersphere weakening the great houses. This new nation could be a powerful potential ally or a powerful potential thread which we have to navigate.
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- Location
- USA
Honestly I see potentially 3 wars coming about and my money is possibly gonna happen possibly in 3060s.
1. Cappellan Confederation Territory Reclamation which would be against Tikonov Free Republic, FWL and potentially the FedSun.
2. Another OutBack war breaking out against the FedSuns.
and finally 3. A war breaking out between ORDI and the FWL.
1. Cappellan Confederation Territory Reclamation which would be against Tikonov Free Republic, FWL and potentially the FedSun.
2. Another OutBack war breaking out against the FedSuns.
and finally 3. A war breaking out between ORDI and the FWL.