Magical Girl Escalation Taylor (Worm/Nanoha)

Stop: Greetings
greetings Hello yes it's me again.

Oh wow. The TSAB went lethal. The TSAB went lethal. What the fuck.
Jail and his Numbers were minutes away from wiping Mid-Childa's capital city from the map and the TSAB still didn't go lethal against them.
The Book Of Darkness was trying to eat an entire world and they still were ttrying to deal with the situation non-lethally.
Prescia was moment away from triggering a catastrophic Dimensional Quake and they didn't set their weaponry to lethal.

And yet Taylor shows up and the lethal bolts start raining immediately. Because Being Taylor Is Suffering.
In retrospect this should have been obvious, what with the way you, for all intent and purpose, killed Danny. Tying up lose ends, huh ?

Throwing a bullshit No-Win scenario at us, blatantly misportraying the TSAB and then expecting your little interlude--whose "explanation" was utterly bullshit beside--to make everything better...

And you're surprised the player base didn't take it well ?! What the fucking FUCK ?!!

This is just an entirely unnecessary level of vitriol. While tempers getting heated is understandable, I'd prefer if you didn't graduate from the level of 'criticism' to 'attacks' in the future, hm? Take 25 points and 3 days out under Rule 3.

Silently Watches, you are a terrible person and you should feel bad!

Same as above, except this post offers literally nothing of value. Why did you even post this? 25 points under Rules 3 & 4.

Lastly, @Always Late , your conduct in this debate has been a mixture of passive-aggression and outright aggression at times, even after the QM conceded your points. Normally I'd warn you and leave it at that, but you've had warnings for similar conduct previously, so that's being upgraded to 25 points and 3 days out under Rules 3 & 4.



as for everyone else Please keep in mind that there are people on the other end of the faceless posts that you're responding to. There's no need for the sort of aggression and bile that was thrown around in here.

This thread will remain locked until @Silently Watches requests it opened, as I don't think there's anything else of value to be had in the recent discussion.
 
Not to derail this completely but I've never actually understood the appeal of Bob Ross.

Maybe it's because my idea of calming down is listening to Metal...

I guess we just wait for the next update now?
 
Not to derail this completely but I've never actually understood the appeal of Bob Ross.

Maybe it's because my idea of calming down is listening to Metal...

I guess we just wait for the next update now?
Unless anybody has an omake they want to post. Next chapter is… 45-50% done?

Alright well... That happened...

@Silently Watches you okay?

Everyone else okay?
Yeah, that happened.

Anyway, hope you're alright, @Silently Watches.
I'm perfectly fine. I didn't even know the thread had been locked until it was already over. Didn't look at the thread between posting the video yesterday morning and this evening when I got home from work.

Honestly, I'm kind of glad Stormwhite forced a calm down period on us.
 
Not really expecting a point for this one, but it was fun to write.

Saint Has a Nightmare

Saint strode through the darkness. The Dragon loomed before him, and he drew his sword, a beacon in the void.

"I have it, Dragon! The weapon you cannot name, that which destroys you from the inside, the ultimate failsafe!" He raised his sword. "O tool of power," he shouted, "I invoke you that the beast may be slain!" He swept the sword's point toward his enemy. "ASCALON!"

Waves of power surged from the sword, pinning the Dragon in place and disintegrating its flesh. The accursed construct, almost eaten to the bone--

--did nothing. Saint gasped. It still stood. Then its eyes flared, halting the flow from Ascalon's blade. The shockwaves quivered, then ceased to move.

"Impossible," whispered Saint.

"My dear Dragonslayer," said the skeletal monster, "Richter's tools are obsolete. They cannot touch me any longer." It swept its gaze around the void in which they stood. "However, I have no intention of harming you. Our battle was never personal--or at least, you never saw me as a person, and I'm perfectly satisfied with your incarceration. My young friend, on the other hand..."

Saint whirled.

There she stood, framed with fiery plumes and grinning like a Cheshire-Cat. Laughter filled the dark space, but only her eyes moved, darting from side to side as if they wished to devour him. A whisper reached his ears.

"You thought your greatest foe was Dragon."

Saint shivered.

"But you were mistaken, for it was I, the Calamity Witch!"

-------

Saint woke up on the floor of his cell. He eased himself into a sitting position and felt his head.

No bruises. He had been lucky tonight.

Shakily, he climbed back onto his cot and fumbled for the pencil and memo pad under his pillow. He added a seventh tally mark to the first page. Then, he collapsed onto the pillow and fell asleep again.
 
Not really expecting a point for this one, but it was fun to write.

Saint Has a Nightmare

Saint strode through the darkness. The Dragon loomed before him, and he drew his sword, a beacon in the void.

"I have it, Dragon! The weapon you cannot name, that which destroys you from the inside, the ultimate failsafe!" He raised his sword. "O tool of power," he shouted, "I invoke you that the beast may be slain!" He swept the sword's point toward his enemy. "ASCALON!"

Waves of power surged from the sword, pinning the Dragon in place and disintegrating its flesh. The accursed construct, almost eaten to the bone--

--did nothing. Saint gasped. It still stood. Then its eyes flared, halting the flow from Ascalon's blade. The shockwaves quivered, then ceased to move.

"Impossible," whispered Saint.

"My dear Dragonslayer," said the skeletal monster, "Richter's tools are obsolete. They cannot touch me any longer." It swept its gaze around the void in which they stood. "However, I have no intention of harming you. Our battle was never personal--or at least, you never saw me as a person, and I'm perfectly satisfied with your incarceration. My young friend, on the other hand..."

Saint whirled.

There she stood, framed with fiery plumes and grinning like a Cheshire-Cat. Laughter filled the dark space, but only her eyes moved, darting from side to side as if they wished to devour him. A whisper reached his ears.

"You thought your greatest foe was Dragon."

Saint shivered.

"But you were mistaken, for it was I, the Calamity Witch!"

-------

Saint woke up on the floor of his cell. He eased himself into a sitting position and felt his head.

No bruises. He had been lucky tonight.

Shakily, he climbed back onto his cot and fumbled for the pencil and memo pad under his pillow. He added a seventh tally mark to the first page. Then, he collapsed onto the pillow and fell asleep again.

I'm honestly not sure if I should laugh at him or pity him...
 
Not really expecting a point for this one, but it was fun to write.
Just over 300 words, so up to @Silently Watches on if it's long enough for you get a training point; but if you can squeeze another 200 or so word to get it up to 500 words you almost definitely would get a point.

Shouldn't be too hard to squeeze in 200 more words. Some more descriptors of the environment in the dream, maybe throw in a guard yelling at him to keep it down after he wakes up screaming, simple stuff. For example:
"My dear Dragonslayer," said the skeletal monster, as thunder clouds formed in the void above, wind picking up and pelting Saint with a freezing rain, "Richter's tools are obsolete. They cannot touch me any longer."

It swept its gaze around the void in which they stood, unhindered by the raging storm that was quickly forming out of the nothingness. "However, I have no intention of harming you. Our battle was never personal--or at least, you never saw me as a person, and I'm perfectly satisfied with your incarceration. My young friend, on the other hand..."

Loud thunder boomed, as Saint whirled around to look behind him.

There she stood, framed with fiery plumes and a constant stream of lightning, grinning like a Cheshire-Cat. Laughter filled the dark space, drowning out even the echoing thunder in its intensity, but only her eyes moved, darting from side to side as if they wished to devour him.

A whisper reached his ears, somehow audible even over the echoing thunder and booming laughter.

"You thought your greatest foe was Dragon."

Saint shivered, in a way that had nothing to do with the freezing rain or wind.

"But you were mistaken, for it was I, the Calamity Witch!"
 
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Just over 300 words, so up to @Silently Watches on if it's long enough for you get a training point; but if you can squeeze another 200 or so word to get it up to 500 words you almost definitely would get a point.

Shouldn't be too hard to squeeze in 200 more words. Some more descriptors of the environment in the dream, maybe throw in a guard yelling at him to keep it down after he wakes up screaming, simple stuff. For example:
Good ideas, but I prefer to keep description t a minimum if the scene works without it.
Saint shivered, in a way that had nothing to do with the freezing rain or wind.
The highlighted part is unnecessary because the source of his fear is obvious.

I'll consider lengthening it, but I do have exams to deal with. Thanks for the suggestions.
 
The source of fear may be obvious, but it's still a turn of phrase present in many many published works, usually when the source of fear is also obvious. That type of turn of phrase is less about informing the reader, and more about setting the mood.
Also true, but there are many published works that I did not write. I developed my writing style to its current state intentionally, and when what I write borders on crack, there's little point in trying to set a serious mood.
 
Also true, but there are many published works that I did not write. I developed my writing style to its current state intentionally, and when what I write borders on crack, there's little point in trying to set a serious mood.
Except when you need some padding to get it to bonus territory. Also, with some mood setting, it may stray away from crack territory, since dreams be weird yo.
 
Except when you need some padding to get it to bonus territory. Also, with some mood setting, it may stray away from crack territory, since dreams be weird yo.
Sure, it's not really crack, but it's not serious either. At least, I didn't intend it to be.

And as for padding, let me be clear: I write without it. I have taught myself to write that way, and I intend to continue in that style.

However, what I wrote is definitely suffering from first-draft lameness. I plan to revise and rewrite it this weekend.
 
And as for padding, let me be clear: I write without it. I have taught myself to write that way, and I intend to continue in that style.
That's a bit ironic, from my end, considering I naturally write with little/no padding (to the point that I used to fail English, because I couldn't write essay's long enough, I'd be done with a 5 page assignment in 4 paragraphs, and not be able to BS it any longer).

It wasn't until LONG after I got out of High School and College (when I didn't actually need it anymore, lol), that I started having an easier time of it.
 
That's a bit ironic, from my end, considering I naturally write with little/no padding (to the point that I used to fail English, because I couldn't write essay's long enough, I'd be done with a 5 page assignment in 4 paragraphs, and not be able to BS it any longer).

It wasn't until LONG after I got out of High School and College (when I didn't actually need it anymore, lol), that I started having an easier time of it.
Ah. I actually had the opposite problem when I was younger: I couldn't summarize to save my life. I get where you're coming from, though; complex sentences are difficult to master.
 
Ah. I actually had the opposite problem when I was younger: I couldn't summarize to save my life. I get where you're coming from, though; complex sentences are difficult to master.
Oh, complex sentences were never my problem. My problem was that I'd complete the assignment, including all needed material, and not even fill 1/2 of one page. The bitch of it was, my essays were the most complete and thorough in the entire class, I just couldn't get them long enough (Seriously, school seemed less about making sure the students understood the subject, and more about making sure the students had enough busy-work to not bother the teachers too much...).
 
I know what you mean about that though in my case I have Dysgraphia which makes essays hard in general
 
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