Crystalwatcher's Magical Girl Quest!

I would expect that the Wolkenritter would only be one growth affinity below Hayate (if at all) rather than two tiers below her. That or have way more experience. At the very least, I would expect Vita to have significantly more Health than Hayate (but roughly the same Resilience). Hayate is primarily a ranged fighter, so she's supposed to be pretty squishy, but Vita is almost exclusively a melee fighter and is especially prone to continuing on even with severe wounds.

Even if they had the same growth affinity, Hayate would still be far more powerful due to the sheer potential offered by Collect and Use.

Maybe also add in that pyramid shaped barrier that Vita uses, the one that lets people enter but doesn't let people leave (from the first episode of A's)?

Also, maybe rework Vita's self-boost spells so that instead of being self-boosts with N/A for Base Damage and Magic Modifier, the spells are actual attacks with formats like "Base Damage: Caster's Base Damage * X", where X is some value that increases as the spell's level increases? The current format makes the benefit of level ups rather ambiguous. On the other hand, there have been examples of spells and abilities that don't have a level at all, so that's also an option.

It could also be that I'm rather biased, because I'd love to see a spar or fight between expies of Vita and Blanc (who is probably Judgement Drive), because they're so damn similar, and that would require them to be of comparable power.
 
(Unified Light) Magical Girl Modest Librarian

Nodoka Miyazaki
Stats

Health: 300
Base Damage: 15
Base Resilience: 90
Magic Modifier: 60

Affinity: Library | Mind | Myth Maker
Weapon


Comptina Daemonia

Level 1
Attacks Per Turn: 1
Affinities: Mind
Ability: Reveal Identity
Spells

Name Demand
Modest Librarian points at a foe and discovers their name.
Level 2
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier:N/A
Affinity: Mind


Diarum Ejus
Modest Librarian reads the mind of nearby individuals whose name she knows.
Level 7
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Mind


Abilities

Dungeoneer
Modest Librarian gets a bonus on detecting traps and avoiding them when they go off.

Plunder
Modest Librarian can disarm and equip an enemy's weapon.





Second Negima expy.

EDIT:^ Those are fair points. I'll see what I can do.
 
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If anyone's curious, I wound up altering the profiles I made for Kaiserin der Toten and Monarch Butterfly. I figured that I had made Kaiserin too strong for her level: too high health, resilience, and damage. The new version is better suited for a Myth tier girl. As for Monarch, I just decided that she had too many abilities for a girl whose just starting out.
 
Magical Girl Wounded Warrioress
"Warrioress" is not a word. Warrior is unisex, use that.

Can we just stop with the darn expies? For goodness sakes, people, come up with some of your own.
What Makuta said, and, well... I tend to get attached to OCs I make, and if I make one specifically for this and it turns out it's not good enough, that'd be significantly more disappointing than if an expy sheet gets turned down.
 
Can we just stop with the darn expies? For goodness sakes, people, come up with some of your own.

Fine then!
(Independant) Magical Girl Charming Beauty

Mary Sue
Stats

Health: 2,000
Base Damage: 1,000
Base Resilience: 1,000
Magic Modifier: 500

Affinity: Perfection| Victory| Epic
Weapon

Magical Love Heart
Level 1
Attacks Per Turn: 2
Affinities: Victory
Ability: Unstoppable
Spells

Purification Ray
-If Purification Ray would damage the target's Health negate all remaining damage and change the target's affiliation to (Mary Sue).
Level 1
Base Damage: 1,111
Magic Modifier: 1,000
Affinity: Perfection
Ability: Judgement
Abilities

Flight (Boosted):
Level 2
-Charming Beauty is able to fly about 10mph. (Charming Beauty is capable of creating magical platforms mid-air that she is capable of pushing off of, or using to arrest her movement when necessary.)

Inspirational Leadership:
Level N/A
-If Charming Beauty would be killed/incapacitated by an attack her nearest ally dives in to take the blow for her, negating all damage Charming Beauty would otherwise suffer.



Okay here is a serious original Magical Girl
(Unified Light) Magical Girl Murder


Raven Hall

Stats

Health: 75
Base Damage: 70
Base Resilience: 25
Magic Modifier: 30

Affinity: Horror| Life | Legend Maker
Weapon

Furious Beak
Level 1
Attacks Per Turn: 1
Affinities: Horror
Ability: Murder
Spells

Burning Flight
-A murder of flaming crows descend from the sky and fly into their targets before exploding.
Level 1
Base Damage: 100
Magic Modifier: 100
Affinity: Life
Ability: Danmaku | Quadra-Magic
Abilities

Flight:
Level 5
-Magical Girl Murder is able to fly about 40mph.

Animal Soul:
Level N/a
-When killed Magical Girl Murder's body explodes into a murder of crows. Should any crow escape the battlefield alive it will seek out the nearest place Magical Girl Murder considered safe and begin resurrecting her. The more crows safely make it to this location the faster she resurrects.
 
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Flight:
Level 5
-Charming Beauty is able to fly about 40mph.

Animal Soul:
Level N/a
-When killed Magical Girl Murder's body explodes into a murder of crows. Should any crow escape the battlefield alive it will seek out the nearest place Magical Girl Murder considered safe and begin resurrecting her. The more crows safely make it to this location the faster she resurrects.
I think you mean murder.
 
Can we just stop with the darn expies? For goodness sakes, people, come up with some of your own.

Expies are kind of a built in feature of the quest, with most of the canon magical girls being expies and the QM was asking for expies fro early in the quest. I'm just trying to fit the tone. I'm perfectly capable of creating OCs though as some here can confirm. If you want, I can make some OCs.

"Warrioress" is not a word. Warrior is unisex, use that.

I'm kind of using it for historical reasons as it's usually what her title is translated as, despite warrior being unisex in English. Still, it can be changed anyway.
 
MOTHERFU- *Runs really fast*

*sticks his head back in the thread* Okay, okay, I kid. But seriously, that sheet has more fridge horror than the second one you posted. I, for one, would be very happy to see her get insta-gibbed by Ichi.

And on an distantly related note, more possible upgrades for Nanoha, Fate, and Hayate, if their Expy's ever show up.

Nanoha:
Target Rich Environment:
Everything is a target. Raging Heart has simply learned to track them all. Track everything in visual range travelling at speeds up to Mach 5.

Fate:
Riot Drive Ignition:
Destined Lightning collapses Bardiche Assault into two short swords, enabling Sonic Form for the duration and then doubling the number of attacks per turn.

Master Skill:

Spend three attacks to nullify an enemy action.

Hayate:
Practitioner:
Can create and upgrade spells.

Tome of the Night Sky:
Magical Girl Night Sky's greatest asset outside of combat. Her Tome is an automatically updating archive containing information on every spell that Night Sky has collected or created. Additionally allows Night Sky to create, modify, and upgrade spells with any affinity she has collected.

Definately Not a Melee Weapon:

Shwertkreuz is not a melee weapon. Reduce base damage by 50% and nullify all abilities when Night Sky is in melee combat.
 
Nice upgrades. Speaking of that, I just updated Vita's sheet.

Now to make some OCs I guess.
 
(Unified Light) Magical Girl Fluffy Puff

Aria Hepburn
Stats

Health: 1,500
Base Damage: 25
Base Resilience: 50
Magic Modifier: 200

Affinity: Tranquility | Cloud | Legend Maker
Weapon


Avgifernei

Level 1
Attacks Per Turn: 2
Affinities: Cloud
Ability: Unstoppable
Spells

Fogbank
Fluffy Puff fills the area with blinding fog.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier:N/A
Affinity: Cloud
Ability: Blind

Cushioning
Fluffy Puff creates a wall of cloud. All enemies who pass through are slowed and all attacks that pass through have their damage halved.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud
Ability: Slow

Soft Bedding
Fluffy Puff creates a small cloud. Any ally that sits on the cloud gains regeneration and resistance to mind spells.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud | Tranquility
Ability: Boost All

Cloud Form
Fluffy Puff becomes as intangible as cloud. She loses benefit of her resilience, but takes half damage from all attacks
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud | Tranquility
Ability: Boost Self

Knockout Gas
Fluffy Puff produces a cloud that fills the surrounding area and causes all who breathe it in to fall asleep.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud | Tranquility
Ability: Sleep

Abilities

Flight
Level 1

Unrestrainable
Fluffy Puff cannot be bound, imprisoned or otherwise prevented from moving





So! An OC! Wanted something slightly silly and very much a peaceful support unit.

I made a list of affinities if anyone has a request for one they'd like to see next.

  • traps
  • Home
  • Doors
  • Keys
  • Data
  • Emotion
  • Savagery
  • Games
  • Toys
  • Breakfast
  • Clouds
  • Rainbows
  • Gold
  • Fragrance
  • Ceilings
  • Caves
  • Decay
  • Restoration
  • Travel
  • Stubbornness
  • Gravity
  • Atom
  • Numbers
  • Symbol
  • Paper
  • Height
  • Storage
  • Sun
  • Moon
  • Metamorphosis
  • Progression
  • Roads
  • Connection
  • Gifts
  • Wrapping
  • Decoration
  • Mud
  • Toes
  • Spikes
  • Entertainment
  • Wigs
  • Distance
 
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Why can't we just let this thread die untill an update arrives and not flood the thread with more OC's?
It's called thread conversation. It births omakes. Omakes influence the quest. Those are an important quest mechanic, because Anastasia witnesses them.
Because the QM specifically asked for and encouraged idea sharing.

EDIT:^It's his thread. it's up to him to decide how he wants to run it.
Yeah, he asked for it, but just grabbing lists of anime characters, turning them into girls, and then giving them vaguely related names feels more like you're just writing an obituary than anything else...
(Unified Light) Magical Girl Fluffy Puff

Aria Hepburn
Stats

Health: 1,500
Base Damage: 25
Base Resilience: 50
Magic Modifier: 200

Affinity: Tranquility | Cloud | Legend Maker
Weapon


Avgifernei

Level 1
Attacks Per Turn: 2
Affinities: Cloud
Ability: Unstoppable
Spells

Fogbank
Fluffy Puff fills the area with blinding fog.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier:N/A
Affinity: Cloud


Cushioning
Fluffy Puff creates a wall of cloud. All enemies who pass through are slowed and all attacks that pass through have their damage halved.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud

Soft Bedding
Fluffy Puff creates a small cloud. Any ally that sits on the cloud gains regeneration and resistance to mind spells.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud | Tranquility
Ability: Boost All

Cloud Form
Fluffy Puff becomes as intangible as cloud. She loses benefit of her resilience, but takes alf damage from all attacks
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinity: Cloud | Tranquility
Ability: Boost Self

Abilities

Flight
Level 1

Unrestrainable
Fluffy Puff cannot be bound, imprisoned or otherwise prevented from oving





So! An OC! Wanted something slightly silly and very much a peaceful support unit.

I made a list of affinities if anyone has a request for one they'd like to see next.

  • traps
  • Home
  • Doors
  • Keys
  • Data
  • Emotion
  • Savagery
  • Games
  • Toys
  • Breakfast
  • Clouds
  • Rainbows
  • Gold
  • Fragrance
  • Ceilings
  • Caves
  • Decay
  • Restoration
  • Travel
  • Stubbornness
  • Gravity
  • Atom
  • Numbers
  • Symbol
  • Paper
  • Height
  • Storage
  • Sun
  • Moon
  • Metamorphosis
  • Progression
  • Roads
  • Connection
  • Gifts
  • Wrapping
  • Decoration
  • Mud
  • Toes
  • Spikes
  • Entertainment
  • Wigs
  • Distance
Yay! Fluffy!
 
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(Unified Light) Magical Girl Pink Blossom

Yuuki Yuuna
Stats

Health: 3,000
Base Damage: 250 (875)
Base Resilience: 500 (1750)
Magic Modifier: 350

Affinity: Flower | Faith | Epic
Weapon

Blooming Will
Level 5
Attacks Per Turn: 4
Affinities: Flower
Ability: Interceptor
Spells

Mankai
(???)
Sacrafice health and recieve (Health Sacraficed x 10) boost to all stats. May choose to permenately cripple self to multiple the boost by 10 once more.

Gain actual Flight of eual rank to Enhanced Jumping for the duration.
Base Damage: N/A
Magic Modifier: N/A
Affinities: Flower | Faith
Abilities: Boost Self

Abilities

Enhanced Jumping
Level 4
Is able to jump extreme distances, but otherwise cannot fly or change heading mid-flight


Flower Power
Multiply all stats by (Magic Modifier/100)

Indomitable Will
(???)
Pink Blossom cannot truly die as long as her Will remains unbroken. Unless sacrificed via Mankai, any crippling effects will heal eventually and in the case of disintegration or extreme loss of body mass (in which case her body will scatter into Sakura Blossoms) she will awake one month later under the nearest Sakura Tree.


... Yeah, not happy with this. I want to stay true to the character without making her ridiculous, but... *Thinks on the in orbit battle they had once* ...yeah. The last ability I'm shaky on especially, but this is an expy of the character who successfully told the gods to shut-up, sit-down, and stop hurting her friends on Will power alone. She's kind of bullshit.

I figure a drawback of Flower Power might be making her unable to learn other spells, but that seems like too heavy of a drawback, and making Flower Power stronger seems out of hand.

I'm shaky on her affinities overall as well, but it seems to fit. Will or Growth might be more appropriate though.

And the affinities and abilities on her weapons as well. Not sure what to put there, but since its her main everything, I feel like it'd have more to it.
 
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That Yuki Yuna sheet makes me tempted to make a sheet for a Symphogear character (all of whom would undoubtedly have Song as one of their affinities).
 
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