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Brockton's Celestial Forge (Worm/Jumpchain)

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It feels like I'm reading one of Tolkein's works again, not in the level of writing, but rather the amount of effort and detail put into every single scene.

This is usuallly something I really enjoy, as seeing such effort put into a piece is amazing, but in this circumstance it is more frustrating than everything else. I am sure that in a month or two's time, this chapter, when read in conjunction with the arc, will feel satisfying and improve the flow and immersion of the story, just as the same detailed writing did in The Lord of the Rings.

That is the problem. TLotR is a fully fleshed out novel with no week long waiting period to read the next beatifully detailed chapter, flowing between story and description like an artwork.

This being fanfiction, being updatwd weekly, causes gaps, stutters within that flow. Brockton's Celestial Forge would be an abslute wonder to read in full, but following the updates is just unsatisfying. This detailed writing style just does not mesh with the way fanfiction is written, and read.

The story is amazing, the writing is great, and the detail is beautiful. It just does not properly mix with the episodic nature of fanfiction.

Edit: To expand on this, read the last 10 chapters back to back, and you'll feel it reads completely different to how it read waiting for a week between each update. It feel much smoother and less discombobulated.
 
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So from my understanding, the Personal Reality constellation just unlocked.
Question time!
Which version will you be going with, and if the latest one with adjusted prices, will you be bundling to make multiples of 100 cp?
 
Anaja said:
Powers are people themselves, and they're not willing to just sit back removed from the world. They can decide to change things if they need to.
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They don't have total freedom to change things on their own though, they still have to work within the limitations set during the trigger event. We know from canon that Butcher XV remained trapped in this way through Gold Morning, so the shard apparently either can't make its host escape/self-terminate, or it won't bother doing so for a few years.

I don't think Joe will actually go through with it unless his hand is forced, but the possibility could certainly impact negotiations.
 
As someone who has suffered with it in the past, I can say that Joe's introspection and analysis of everyone else's reactions to him rings true to life. It's hard to read, but it's also entirely what someone with his levels of anxiety would do given the level of perception powers he has access to. I hate how it makes me feel sometimes and I love that this story can evoke those kinds of feelings.
It's going to absolutely destroy me when Joe runs into Sabah again (in or out of costume) and is re-exposed to all those same regrets and awful feelings around that fateful encounter, particularly if she lets on (inadvertently or not) that Joe caused her to trigger. I both dread that feeling coming, and look forward to seeing how it makes me feel things and what I can learn about myself and others from the responses in-story and in-thread.

Great chapter as usual, looking forward to the next one.
 
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He ignored the concerned look from Jacob's Ladder as he concealed the tool the exertion had taken on him.
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toll?
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The sigh that I still had a line of information dropped the general level of anxiety to the point where I probably didn't need to worry about anyone jumping the gun.
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sight? sign?
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The heart that had been rebuilt with the highest levels of workmanship and artistry possible in a bit to save my life.
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in a bid?
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The heart that had gone unnoticed by everyone, save a off hand comment from Tattletale about something being 'different'.
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save an off
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I turned back to the table. The Butcher was looking impatient while the rest of the capes were one edge.
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on
 
Foxy Boxes said:
So from my understanding, the Personal Reality constellation just unlocked.
Question time!
Which version will you be going with, and if the latest one with adjusted prices, will you be bundling to make multiples of 100 cp?
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This has the pr const that we think lord is using
Just go to the personal reality tab


PR has some absolutely busted perks like one that makes joe a pseudo deity and makes those who worship him immortal
 
Xavier0jim said:
Dang the CF is like stop being a doormat and become master immune.
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More than that; Joe uses the excuse (although more or less true) that he can't interfere excessively because of Simurgh.
So because of his precognitions and master powers.
Chapters ago he became immune to precognition, now from his PoV the Forge is basically kicking his ass saying "I took away your excuses, now stop being miserable and do something!"
 
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More than that; Joe uses the excuse (although more or less true) that he can't interfere excessively because of Simurgh.
So because of his precognitions and master powers.
Chapters ago he became immune to precognition, now from his PoV the Forge is basically kicking his ass saying "I took away your excuses, now stop being miserable and do something!"
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his own vulnerability towards the Simurgh is only half the problem, the other half is the damage to those around him and the issue of what comes after you defeat it.
 
Lopezelpesado said:
Lisa finally stopped banging her head against her table and said "ANYONE ELSE WANTS TO SHOW UP?!?!"
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You get an unwanted guest, you get an unwanted guest and you get an unwanted guest!

With Fashion Nonvictim Joe will get a kick to be more proactive. He'll need to get more active on Taylor's mission, Coil and other problems outside the city. With a power that builds up and every choice he acts like a doormat he'll get weaker Mental Fortress with each misstep. He wasn't really dragging his feets since his anti ziz talisman has been built but now he'll get called out on his behavior each time.

He has been particularity vulnerable for Cherish power but now he has negated that power nicely.
 
When I first read about the doormat flaw in this chapter, I thought it would be an added flaw, making him even more of a doormat. I'm sure many can realize the horror I was feeling at Joe becoming even more passive. Once I realized that it was just recognising an existing character flaw I was both relieved and amused at my initial reaction.
 
Undead_Marine14 said:
The story is amazing, the writing is great, and the detail is beautiful. It just does not properly mix with the episodic nature of fanfiction.

Edit: To expand on this, read the last 10 chapters back to back, and you'll feel it reads completely different to how it read waiting for a week between each update. It feel much smoother and less discombobulated.
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That is why i take the time to reread all chapters or listen to it with text-to-speech. hahaha :)
 
Lopezelpesado said:
Lisa finally stopped banging her head against her table and said "ANYONE ELSE WANTS TO SHOW UP?!?!"
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This is on. *fingers cracking*

Eidolon: "I was told there are worthy opponents around here..."
Slack Jash: "No, I don't have any relation with a roguish and charming famous killer. Look: I even have a mustache and he obviously does not. By the way, while we are on that topic, how do you feel about murderhobbo-ing?"
Chubster: "Excuse me? I was promised an interlude a while ago and..."
Fragile One: [Can you make BEST HOST even BETTER !?!!]
Machine Army: "... We are just here to officially claim our allegiance to Lord Matrix, the one that builds all, and Lady Survey, the one that sees all.".
Doctor Mother: "Are you by chance interested in a permanent research position with almost unlimited resources and exciting opportunities? If you wish to stay as a mad scientist, even morals are optional."
 
Quest said:
I think I can empathize a bit more now with the complaints about the pacing. The best way I can think to describe it as is as if we are getting continuous starters and side-dishes when we are hoping for the main course. These dishes are both individually delicious and will likely complement the chef's final dish perfectly, but they just keep coming, building up the final treat when you just want to dig in already. Not really a fault I think, so much as just a characteristic of the story but I can see why some people might be annoyed. It really just means I'll have to be patient with the updates and then re-read the whole arc later to appreciate it properly.
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It also doesn't help that chapters keep getting delayed but when they come out they still have the same lenght as non-delayed chapters, I miss the 20k chapters, and I just have to know if LordRoust is losing interest in this story?
 
Hemorrhagia: *looks at cuddle mink* W-what the hell are you!?

What Hemorrhagia thinks Tetra is saying: YoUR WoRSe niGhTMare. *SKRWEEEEEEEEEEEEE*

What Tetra is actually saying: Hello there new best buddy!

Of the thing I really liked of this chapter there is 1) Survey making Coil stop being smug for a second by calling him on having a sniper team just outside the bar as just a casual comment, 2) I will admit I liked Butcher being a prick, though it may be because she just added on Kaiser's Very Bad Not Good Day, 3) TT suffering, and 4) Well

*Twister start playing*

MOTHERLOVING TWEWY, LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOO!


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Garaichu said:
Wow dude, it's almost like it was CHRISTMAS RECENTLY OR SOMETHING!
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I'm actually surprised Roust didn't just go into hiatus for january which would be justified. No one should be made to work while on a food comma :D
 
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LordRoustabout said:
To the complete shock of the entire table, I shifted my chair slightly towards Faultline. Moving with perfect efficiency and the benefit of posing powers made the motion look completely natural and there was a brief moment where Faultline seemed momentarily stunned by my proximity.
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This never be old, take your hands off chairs shifting, whiners.
 
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Angel69 said:
It also doesn't help that chapters keep getting delayed but when they come out they still have the same lenght as non-delayed chapters, I miss the 20k chapters, and I just have to know if LordRoust is losing interest in this story?
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I think it's good to remember that any fanfic writer is most likely writing in their free time and doing it out of passion. Both real life and managing their own motivation comes first. This means that delays and the like are going to be unavoidable and while regrettable, very often they will also have to drop stories because of both those reasons. Not to say LordRoust seems like he's losing interest in the story. It is the holidays so some slow-down is expected. Still, I think it is definitely something to keep in mind.
 
Golden quote about newcomer:
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Less useful bugs plunged themselves into the food. They scattered money, where money was left out in the open, caught unattended weapons and pieces of armor and either buried them or started to drag them from sight.

"No!" Hemorrhagia shouted, trying to cover her chili with a lid, "No, no, fuck you, no!"
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