A Sword Without a Hilt: A Song of Ice and Fire/D&D 3.5 Crossover
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@DragonParadox
Can we use Greater Sealed Life from the Spiritualist class?
Even if we can't get to the victims we should be able to use it offensively if it's a drain effect.
Affected creatures can't transfer damage to or from another, such as through shield other, a spiritualist's life bond, or a summoner's life link.
Can we use Greater Sealed Life from the Spiritualist class?
Even if we can't get to the victims we should be able to use it offensively if it's a drain effect.
Affected creatures can't transfer damage to or from another, such as through shield other, a spiritualist's life bond, or a summoner's life link.
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Boy, are you in for a hell of a ride.
Needs to build up resistance, tho.
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Thanks for the feedback everyone it has been very helpful.
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Slipped into first person.
Extra "the".
This bit is weird, I initially thought he wouldn't let the monster's deaths go unavenged. Should probably finish with them stalking the city for months without their knowledge, as it goes well with the initial "be wary", the "these things are dangerous/sneaky" goes unsaid but clearly heard.
I would give for advice, besides what's already said:
1) It's sometimes repetitive. You often say things like "he was serious about this, as he had brought in help to deal with this". Instead of saying "when he entered the room, he saw that", you could say "entering the room, he saw that" or "he could see the Maester was serious about this, having brought in outside help [to deal with it]."
2) The dialogue is somewhat stilted. Build up the scene some more.
3) Somewhat related to 2, but you could use some extra verbs and adverbs here and there. "A mighty thrust", "a hefty blow", "fast as a viper, he strikes", "darkness loomed beyond the pooled light of their lanterns", "he furiously stomped on the chittering masses", "his gaze sharpened as he leaned forward, drawing the other's attentions to his next words."
In general, describe and qualify how and what people are doing, as to better paint the scene, you get me? Flesh things out, otherwise it feels rushed and disconnected.
Instead of going blow-for-blow in a somewhat repetitive fashion, try to condense things. Roll the combat while jotting down the rolls to help you keep track of what happened, and then build a narrative around the results. For example, while Ser Richard can land four attacks in a round, he often decapitates or disembowels foes "in a single strike", even as sometimes he "rains blows down upon the demon".
It's very, very hard to pull a blow-by-blow battle scene. If you want to do it, I recommend reading Cornwell's Saxon Chronicles, as you all but feel the mud on your boots and the blood on your face as you struggle mightily upon the shield wall, swords flashing and axes biting, the screams of the dying only drowned by the dim of battle.
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What a bright deduction. Too bad, something wicked comes the next chapters.
...Daeron.
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For a moment I thought you were talking about our (completely intentional and perfectly timed) confrontation with Glowdude.
But then, then I remembered who the real enemies are.
And we still don't know what's up with that witch who supposedly controlled them.
You have my sword!
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egoo
Totally Not Creating Problems Where None Existed
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10207 pages in, we have produced a lot of hilarious posts.
What is the funniest thing posted in the thread, people?
In my opinion it's Azel's amazing way to resolve a squabble between France and Germany: "I'll meet you in Belgium".
Second place goes to whoever first thought of the Aurane-meter.
What is the funniest thing posted in the thread, people?
In my opinion it's Azel's amazing way to resolve a squabble between France and Germany: "I'll meet you in Belgium".
Second place goes to whoever first thought of the Aurane-meter.
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egoo
Totally Not Creating Problems Where None Existed
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The Old Gods are training.
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- Germany
Are you sure it is a good idea to encourage me to do more shitposting?
Also, there has been a great many good memes that are all but forgotten by now.
- the Demon Brothel / Whorsthouse
- using Wisps as nightlights by stuffing them in a fishbowl
- Bob The Huecuva
- using dead enemies as sock-puppets
etc.
That's not very likely...
*rolls for it*
*sees nat 20*
It seems the dice are with you. Yes you can.
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On that note, I haven't seen @das_slash for quite a while here...
This. Just... This.
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That's actually a joke stolen from Order of the Stick, right?
Oooh, I loved the rap battle with Grey Worm. DP was writing a great social combat, then suddenly someone said "rap battle" and the thread utterly lost the mood but made everything a million times better. Great stuff there, whoever thought of it.