Changed to "these gods". I want to make sure that no Septon claims that this was the Sevens doing.The first "they" is ambiguous (Seven or King?). Is that deliberate?
Otherwise I suggest saying "nothing was done".
Changed it to "the innocent".others must not ->innocent do not/will not
push the alchemist guild = sinners thing?
We might need a Wish to get a body first though...This is ruseful on a level that fills me with bees dancing.
Mmm. Always feels good to start my day with alliteration.
Also. If she has powerful mage friends great! We can ressurection them.
--[X] "Treachery had grown among those tasked to protect this city. In the very shadows of the Seven, darkness grew, yet those gods did nothing." // 24 words
--[X] "But we saw the Guild cavort with the pit, and now they and they alone have paid the price, so that the innocent will not." // 25 words
Beta-ing is always welcome.Modified slightly for flow, you don't have to use it, but the tenses and stuff seem important. Hope you don't mind.
The arrogance here is
We regularly have plans exceeding 1,000 words, so we can honestly say that votes in this thread deserve a beta-reader.[X] Azel
The arrogance here isbeautifuldevilish. Forget the update: the plan itself is worthy of a beta!
Yes. I want her reaction both before and after the announcement.Question @Azel the first part states to gauge Lana's reaction to see if she's grieving. If it does seem like she is are we still going ahead with the Decrees?
Gotcha. I was just wondering if doing this if she's grieving will cause problems from her in the future.Yes. I want her reaction both before and after the announcement.
That makes it easier for us to judge if it's worth to say something to her directly or if we should just leave.
@DragonParadox double interlude combo? I think this vote might be open for a while.
I mean... The threads eyeing another fair maiden.
@DragonParadox, in case you need it, here's everything I've managed to collect on Wyla.I'm currently working on getting Wyla's character sheet into a postable shape. Speaking of here is a custom feat that should go a long way to explaining her social competence.
Child of the Secret City: Born to an aristocratic Braavosi family you have always excelled in social graces, whether they be at court or in the arena of trade and finance. Bluff, Diplomacy and Sense motive are always class skills for you. Gain +1 competence bonus to each. Can only be taken at first level