Threads Of Destiny(Eastern Fantasy, Sequel to Forge of Destiny)
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[X] Guttered Mind's Greed
All of you need to get your minds into the gutter.
All of you need to get your minds into the gutter.
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- Location
- THE EDGE OF THE WORLD
[X] Weight of Want
[X] Riches Unremembered and Unused
[X] Riches Unremembered and Unused
I have some trouble parsing several parts of the opening passage. It feels like there might be words or connecting blurbs missing? It's not clear what relevance higher cultivators have to the ideas she's discussing. Is she saying inspiring targets to greedily grasp for more/glory is an unreliable approach when powerful cultivators are thrown into the mix? Unsure what the sentence "She could certainly make it so." is referring to. And Shu Yue's response "Not the destructive end, one might think." isn't connecting in my brain very well.
I slept on it for a re-read, and it still doesn't read super clearly to me.
Also, long-delayed typo roundup spanning a number of updates, wherein I remain grateful that the in-built quote functions auto-include links you can click to navigate to the original post:
I'm not one to fixate on a project but…
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She was a statuesque woman with a sharp face, long, silky black hair, and her glittering green gown
[swapped a word with a comma]
Hey! I waited till we were away from the folks who might pick me up.
[typo]
Have a good evening, Baroness.
[capitalization]
without the influence of the Dreaming.
[capitalization]
But she supposed there was something
[de-capitalization]
She waved Meng Dan off. "Nope. They are wrong."
[capitalization]
The freshest of them were sickly and withered
[missing space]
million tons of water. It was a void
[missing space]
how to parasitize her victims' flesh
[missing possessive]
That was at least the professed purpose of the clan,
[missing word]
Finally, from the winding crevice like street, they emerged into something like a plaza, cramped and tight in still, buildings loomed up, twisted and jagged in the dark.
[trimmed repeat word]
Yes, that one she had not understood as well as she could…
[missing word]
its half-ghostly steel clove through his sword
[typo]
"Late, I suspect."
[missing quotation mark]
Honestly, its a bit mad that things are still so noisy
[typo]
for her simulacrum's visit
[possessive]
stepped right into the path of a spirit's hook
[missing word]
The short, blue-haired young woman whose workshop they had arrived at chewed her lower lip. Xiao Fen did not understand the purpose of the anxious charade. The calculating metallic gleam of the talisman eye in her scarred socket, and the near-intoxicating miasma of impurity and blood aspected qi rising from her shimmering gown like a cloud [???].
[Missing the conclusion of Xiao Fen's thought. Something to do with Li Suyin being dangerous, but it's left incomplete instead of stated, and doesn't trail off for dramatic effect either.]
"I was looking to test the strength of the warding and spatial infrastructure against common breaking techniques, as well as human testing the results of spatial displacement."
OR
"I was looking to test the strength of the warding and spatial infrastructure against common breaking techniques. As well as human testing the results of spatial displacement."
[comma/capitalization mixup]
the Duchess has shown there are so many fascinating avenues to take
[missing word]
"Got you again junior sister, I can't believe you actually fell for this prank. Are you sure you can watch Mei-mei's back?"
[missing quotation mark]
I would not deliberately hurt an uninvolved person just for a training exercise.
[typo]
Out there in the dim, cramped streets, a woman sat
[typo]
It was a humble thing, a simple stone spout which rained a trickle of cloudy grey water into the rippling basin below.
[comma added, typo]
twisted nightmare facsimile of the rootways
[typo]
I've glimpsed something of the Hui clans' cultivation.
[misplaced space]
- Location
- United States of America, Michigan
[X] Weight of Want
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WoW
ots refering to the choice not taken, but that could be clearer
The relevance is that higher-tier cultivators can make really big splashes if they decide to go all "death-or-glory."
When she says "her first idea," Ling Qi isn't thinking of the answer she just gave, but the alternative option she hasn't taken.
[X] Weight of Want
[X] Miser's Folly
[X] Budget Cuts
[X] Plucking the Purse Strings
I was iffy on Plucking Purse Strings, until i realized its musical connotations and the metaphor for " hearing the sound of the purse" as inspiring restraint.
[X] Miser's Folly
[X] Budget Cuts
[X] Plucking the Purse Strings
I was iffy on Plucking Purse Strings, until i realized its musical connotations and the metaphor for " hearing the sound of the purse" as inspiring restraint.
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[X] Plucking the Pursestrings
[X] Riches Unremembered and Unused
[X] Plucking the Pursestrings
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Please sir, may I have some Meows?
- Location
- Tempe, AZ
[X] Riches Unremembered and Unused