Threads Of Destiny(Eastern Fantasy, Sequel to Forge of Destiny)

Voted best in category in the Users' Choice awards.
Turn 10: Arc 1-5
Which meant that the most effective thing Ling Qi could do would be to keep the barbarians' attention, for just a little longer. Ling Qi's eyes flicked upward, to where the Barbarian singer was turning, reorienting on Cai Renxiang as her saber met a fluid whip of impurity with the screaming hiss of a blazing coal being dropped into cold water.

In the cacophony of the ongoing battle, he didn't react to the scream of one more eagle. It was a mistake.

The notes of the man's song stumbled over one another as phantasmal talons seized him and his mount and flung him toward Ling Qi and her spirits. But Ling Qi was already dancing backward, a wordless pull on her connection to her spirits urging them to retreat with her toward the starstone. All around her, bestial phantoms rose, among and from the dancers of the revel, girt in rime and frost. Her gathering host yowled a challenge as they gathered around the stone, although at a distance, as those that drew too close broke down into shimmering lights and motes of frost. Above her, the song of her sword rang out as another barbarian was lost in the depths of the mist.

For a moment, the challenge stood in the Caldera as Ling Qi landed lightly beside her little brother.

Then the response came.

From above, a renewed song clashed with her Mist, wresting its grasp from her victims, and three bowstrings sounded, and three lightning bolts fell, stakes of sparking and snapping electricity slamming into the ground around her, forming a perfect triangle as lightning arced from one to the next.

Electrical current roared out, spilling to fill the whole of the area, and Ling Qi raised her hand. Three bells chimed as the lightning arced into her hand, her Three Moons chime drinking the field of lightning before it could finish coalescing.

Dozens of screaming and slicing arrows flew wild, striking phantoms and shadows, and dozens more Ling Qi wove between as they fell upon her through sheer chance, a frantic spinning dance made all the more desperate by the gathering power from across the cavern.

There was a crash and muffled boom as the fourth realm barbarian slammed Guan Zhi against the Caldera wall, grasping in his eagles talons. Rock cracked and splintered, letting in light as her commander was plowed through meters of volcanic stone.

The cry of her phantom eagle was drowned out by the furious screams of seven real eagles, and at her feet, powdered, sterile stone exploded into a cloud of chalky dust as the echoing noise shattered it into dust. Ling Qi felt a tightness in her ears, as if something was straining, ready to pop. Around her phantoms wavered on the verge of breaking apart.

But her winter did not recede. A warmth in her chest burned, and phantoms snapped back into solidity, The power of the Winter hearth refusing to be extinguished. Similarly, her next step carried her on the wind, and Ling Qi dissolved into whispers and shadow, slipping into the silent spaces between echoes to avoid the ear splitting wall of sound.

But even through the shriek, she could still feel the hum of bowstrings.

Zhengui let out a challenging bellow as he stepped in front of Hanyi and Ling Qi both, and bore the brunt of the volley. Two layers of roots and wood sprang up, only to be shattered in moments by screaming, slashing wind. His shell rocked as a dozen arrows and more battered into his side, and centimeter by centimeter his four stout legs dug furrows in the chalky stone as he was pushed backward. The boxy spikes of his shell shook and crumbled, bits and pieces of bone breaking and scattering, leaving their smooth edges jagged.

The last missile struck the hardest, a vortex of wind over a meter wide, a spinning drilling missile of wind that howled like a thousand clashing blades, fired from the bow of the strongest of the Twelve Stars retinue, striking his shell dead on, and Zhengui skidded backward a full meter.

But he didn't fall. His shell was cracked on the side that had faced the barbarians, a dozen tiny fractures surrounding a great bleeding wound surrounded by radiating cracks where the last arrow had struck. Blazing blood like liquid magma dribbled to the floor in hissing molten drops.

Ling Qi materialized in front of Zhengui, even as veins of green began to glow across his limbs, and the ash in the air started to shimmer, the next arrow that flew struck her and vanished without a ripple, and so did the next. Hanyi joined her, her song of cold and winter stealing momentum from incoming attacks as the cracks in Zhengui's shell healed ever so slowly.

To her right, Cai Renxiang was holding out well, the tendrils of light that formed her wings hissing and sizzling as they beat away droplets of impurity. Several glowing scars marked the Shishigui envoy's armor, but in turn, droplets of corruption stained Renxiang's luminosity, dimming her light where blackened droplets marked her, each one seeming to vibrate as they struggled to expand against her purifying light.

But they weren't being cleansed, they were being contained.

She was being pushed back.

Ling Qi grit her teeth as she took in the battlefield, and her eyes fell on the barbarian marked by her hoarfrost, already joining the others in drawing back his bow. Others were looking toward Cai Renxiang again. She had to keep attention on herself.

She raised her flute, and felt an arrow slice across her cheek as she met the wounded barbarians eyes. She called her sword and it shot downward like a falcon, its point diving for the barbarian singers throat, forcing him to canter back and deflect it with a shout. He wouldn't be able to defend his ally. She might not be able to touch him, but hurt as he was, she didn't need to. Her fingers danced, and her flute played silence.

She didn't look away, even as a second and a third arrow struck her gown, feeling like the strike of fists. He died as he crashed to the caldera floor and shattered.

The barbarians were swift in their reply. Once again, she dodged like the wind through a storm of missiles, but the barbarians were learning, just as she rematerialized, toes touching the floor, a vortex arrow came. Like the one that had nearly bored through Zhengui. Gritting her teeth, Ling Qi pulsed her qi, and the Black Mirror swallowed it.

There was a sharp report then, a singular, deafening noise of grinding shifting stone from the far side of the Caldera. A single crack, branching and split raced up the caldera wall from where Guan Zhi had been buried. Stones and pebbles burst out as the crack reached the rim.

The caldera wall broke apart in a roar of falling rock, uncounted tonnes of stone exploding outward around the flexing limbs of the furious woman. Over her head, a single boulder, perhaps half the size of the starstone, cracked and compressed inward, halving i's size, becoming a perfect black sphere. The remains of the wall shot toward it, as if dragged in by the earth. Even Ling Qi felt a harsh tug, planting her feet in the chalky dirt as her hair and gown alike whipped around her limbs, dragged toward the sphere.

...Well, perhaps she didn't need all the attention, Ling Qi thought faintly as the man with the starstone mask raised his blade, and the storm answered, a funnel of wind descending from the sky to armor him and his retinue, the churning wind burning with iridescent light.

Ling Qi forced her eyes away, and threw out her hands activating the Rippling Starless Shroud technique, dimming her surroundings under a shroud of liquid darkness that twinkled with faint frosty moonlight. She felt Cai Renxiang's qi flare in response, and the dark shroud that settled around her and her spirits gained an edge of burning radiance. Zhengui finally straightened up, flesh no longer visible beneath the hole in his shell as howling arrows bounced off his hide and flew wildly into the revel. The next sheet of lightning that erupted through their space sparked off of them, no more harmful than static. Her qi was starting to flag from all of these defenses.

Still, Ling Qi thought she might be forgetting…

Ling Qi saw the fading phantom of the suited bear that had seized the dancer fading away, its head cleft from it's shoulders. She spun, and blew a single high sharp note that cracked as it met a descending blade of green stone. The note went silent as it was sundered, and Ling Qi spun away into the revel, blinking meters away to let a laughing phantom made of rose petals and thorny vines be slashed apart in her place. The dancer did not have time to regret her miss before Zhengui's anger erupted beneath her feet in a column of magma. Out of the corner of her eye, she saw her own shadow twitch and felt a ripple through her qi, and spun in time to play a Hoarfrost Refrain right into the masked face of the second dancer. The dancer spasmed violently as her flesh blackened and cracked, and leaped away. Ling Qi began to turn to follow her, only to realize something else.

The ice woman was standing there, barely three meters away.

Ling Qi's phantoms turned to attack, but it was as if they were moving through molasses. Even so, the press of bodies should have harmed her, but claws struck her armored gown with the force of feathers, and fangs cracked and shattered where they bit down on her limbs. She looked through the revel as if it was not there, even as the elegy of the mist continued to swallow up barbarians above.

Zhengui saw her, and Zhen hissed out a warcry, striking as a blur. Ling Qi saw the woman's left hand, holding that ugly iron scepter twitch, and knew she wasn't going to be fast enough.

Then, the woman met her eyes, and she saw the swing aborted. The woman's right hand rose instead, and Zhen's striking fangs hit her palm and glanced off, his entire head and body jerking backwards as if he had been struck by something twice his size. Air rippled and Ling Qi felt the moisture in the air flash freeze behind her. The air rippled, and a wall of frost rose behind the woman, curving over their heads in a dome that met the Caldera wall, cutting them Zhengui and Hanyi… and Ling Qi noted conveniently, the other barbarians.

Then a second layer sprang up, glittering, cutting off her spirits from the fight too.

The woman took another step toward her, ignoring the grasping roots that withered and died around her feet before even touching flesh. The woman stared hard at her, and spoke something in a hard consonant heavy language, gesturing between her and the starstone with her scepter. It… there was something familiar about it though, it wasn't quite hill tribe speech, but there was something similar in it.

There was something about lineage. And uh? Something about aid, maybe??

Ling Qi sucked in a breath, feeling everything that was going on outside, the reinforcements were arriving at the rim, and the barbarian attention was being forced up by that and the now unchecked brawl between Cyans. Cai Renxiang was losing ground, and she could feel an ugly corrosion nipping at the edges of the girls' qi.

And there was a charge in the air, something dangerous in the storm above, something that made her instincts scream danger despite the feeling of their reinforcements coming over the rim, and the slightly more distant rise of Diao Gen's qi in the south.

Wall or no, Ling Qi could slip out of this cage, her revel was still active, but her mind flew back to the meeting and the words of the White Sky. They… didn't want any part of this right?

Try to communicate. Music can overcome many barriers, least of all language.

[] Tell her to leave if she doesn't want to face the empire.
[] Tell her to help if she's so interested in you, you can talk later.
[] You don't have time for this. Escape from the ice prison along with your spirit's via your revel and form up to receive your reinforcements.
[] Write In

Alright guys, I'm going to carefully open this up a little. Write Ins should be a single sentence, with no more than one clause. Remember you're trying to communicate a simple idea through music here, and you're also in the middle of a battlefield, you don't have time to spin off a whole paragraph even if you could.


Status:
Ling QI: Wounded, moderate Qi
Zhengui: Wounded,Poisoned, low qi
Hanyi: Lightly wounded, moderate qi
Cai Renxiang: Lightly wounded, high qi

Moratorium is going to be three hours total this time guys
 
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In the words of the greatest rapper of all time, ice ice baby.

Typos:
keep the barbarians attention
barbarians -> barbarians'
to -> too
it's -> its
three bowstring's sounded,
bowstring's -> bowstrings
dozen's -> dozens
eagles -> eagle's
Ling Qi felt something a tightness in her ears, as if something was straining, ready to pop.
Either the word "something" should be deleted or a colon or em dash should be added directly after it.
solidity, The power of
The -> the
The last missile struck the hardest, a vortex of wind over a meter wide, a spinning drilling missile of wind that howled like a thousand clashing blades, fired from the bow of the strongest of the Twelve Stars retinue, struck his shell dead on, and Zhengui skidded backward a full meter.
This sentence's structure is a bit messed up. There are two simple ways I can see fixing it: either change "struck his shell" to "striking his shell", or change the comma after "hardest" to a colon or em dash.
faced the barbarian a dozen tiny fractures
Needs a comma after barbarian.
as the cracks in Zhengui's shell, healed ever so slowly.
Delete the comma after shell
Other's were looking
Other's -> Others
it's -> its
rematerialized
it's -> its
that settled the around her
Delete "the"
spirit's -> spirits
it's -> its
girls -> girl's
 
[] I will gladly speak later with you, so long as you and yours depart before that which we cannot control chains both of us with bonds of unwanted enmity

Or something
 
Mmm, so. We want them to bail, and perhaps set up the opportunity for communications later.

Bailing does have the problem of our perimeter - but it sounds like the perimeter might have other problems now. If they stay around too long, our reinforcements will get here and it'll get even harder.

Asking for help seems very questionable. We don't have a relationship yet, and there's no real evidence that they want to be at war with the tribes. Indeed, they clearly already have diplomatic connections there that they don't have with us, so expecting them to turn and help us seems questionable af.

Escaping is valid ofc, but kinda feels like it wastes the narrative setup and opportunities here, so I'm not in favor.
 
I want to talk to her, but just agreeing for a help sounds like a trap. If she is at all like Zheqing it would be wise to keep some distance.
 
[ ] "No end save the last, sing until then, expression of joy arising from dance-of-leaning and shared peace-compassion-family, joyful melding and dissolving and dissonance and reconstruction is good pattern" [intent: This is a moment were through commonalty of beats and music, Ling Qi can express a her base desires and underlying perspectives, a chance to speak and open the possiblity of higher level talks.... Also might cause the higher level cultivator to decide to withdraw from this battle]

I am open to constructive criticism to this vote idea (I know I have not been keeping up with conversations and analysis of the different factions in play), however when worded as abstractly as it is when one tries to convey through music, an explanation of intent in to the QM in our vote seems worthwhile. Music can communicate more broadly, more deeply than words can, expansion needed in order to translate intent of the vote to meaning the QM takes from it.

Edit: Just noticed that my vote idea had "this is me" but no "this is what I want" in the song bit.
 
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Xulian would be sooo proud of Ling Qi standing in the middle of things, stealing ALL the thunder, and keeping all most of the attention on her. It's such a pity she's not here to see it :sad:
 
[] I will gladly speak later with you, so long as you and yours depart before that which we cannot control chains both of us with bonds of unwanted enmity
I think this option sounds good? I'm not necessarily that sure of what happened and who's who after Qi tried to yoink the plot rock.
 
I would suggest not trying to be clever with the write-ins here - our track record there has not been the best :p. Look at the preset votes - they're general goals not details. Identify the key points we want, and leave the execution to yrs.
 
[] Tell her to help if she's so interested in you, you can talk later.

Zeqing's names as we know them. [Winter's Muse, Songstress of Endings, **^%^]
Tantalizing with a name will give Frost Lady more to work with. Remember she's part of a delegation, if she has a boss, she has to give them a *reason* why she would assist a "stranger."

Heritage for Aid.
 
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The real question that defines what we should vote for is this: can the ice woman and the nomad she came with escape the trap?

The reason why this is the only thing that matters is simple: it defines whether should tell them to leave now, or tell them to aid us. If we believe they can successfully escape the trap then we should tell them to do so and meet us later so that we can have a proper conversation.

If they cannot escape the trap then we should tell them to help us in battle so that our fellow Imperials (also known as 'Those Damn Idiots We're Stuck With') don't kill them and ruin our diplomatic headway.

Everything else, and specially trying to explain complicated concepts like who we are, is a pointless waste of time that shouldn't be considered.
 
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