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HOW THE FUCK AM I SUPPOSED TO SHOW THIS SHIT IN A SINGLE-PERSPECTIVE QUEST?​
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Maybe the grapevine needs a tweak? People go "holy shit team gear so badass" at us all the time; just turn that around a little bit, add the occasional aside like "my day went great, we went out yesterday, killed exactly the demons we expected to, smooth sailing. probably nothing compared to you badasses, but i can still take satisfaction in a job well done" or "I heard that X murderized evil MG Y on a scouting mission a few days ago" or we meet someone and Lucky says "I'm surprised you're still alive, that crazy stunt actually worked?" the way we see people talking about Solid Core. I think that part of the issue is that readers know the grapevine exists (because everybody knows about GEAR) but aren't hearing things from it about anybody else, leading them to conclude (wrongly?) that Solid Core is the only thing that the troops want to talk about.

Sorry to hear your day is going badly. Hope it gets better. :/
 
While I believe this argument itself is rather pointless as we have done this before, I would like to point out that to Nepgear things... probably look pretty bleak. As in, if she was human, she'd probably be in a despair spiral by now between the shit she's gone through and the bleakness of the (perceived) UL's future from her point of view.
 
I just figured it was all a long-form set-up for us to go full Khan/Ahab on Goddess Red when we get to that power level.

"Red, you believe I despise you.
You are wrong.
You task me.
You task me at every turn, you thwart my hopes and attempt to burn my dreams.
You tried to take the ones most precious to me, and managed to wound my heart and soul.
So I do not hate you.
I do not despise you.
I simply exist to cause you suffering, in any way that I can.
And now Goddess Red, sister of my sister, Savior of my sister.
Now I will take from you everything that you have tried to take form me"

Cue anime action scene.

(i failed to get the true Montalban flavour, but his speeches def. inspired this)
 
Vebyast said:
Maybe the grapevine needs a tweak? People go "holy shit team gear so badass" at us all the time; just turn that around a little bit, add the occasional aside like "my day went great, we went out yesterday, killed exactly the demons we expected to, smooth sailing. probably nothing compared to you badasses, but i can still take satisfaction in a job well done" or "I heard that X murderized evil MG Y on a scouting mission a few days ago" or we meet someone and Lucky says "I'm surprised you're still alive, that crazy stunt actually worked?" the way we see people talking about Solid Core. I think that part of the issue is that readers know the grapevine exists (because everybody knows about GEAR) but aren't hearing things from it about anybody else, leading them to conclude (wrongly?) that Solid Core is the only thing that the troops want to talk about.

Sorry to hear your day is going badly. Hope it gets better. :/
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I really like this idea!
 
Vebyast said:
Maybe the grapevine needs a tweak? People go "holy shit team gear so badass" at us all the time; just turn that around a little bit, add the occasional aside like "my day went great, we went out yesterday, killed exactly the demons we expected to, smooth sailing. probably nothing compared to you badasses, but i can still take satisfaction in a job well done" or "I heard that X murderized evil MG Y on a scouting mission a few days ago" or we meet someone and Lucky says "I'm surprised you're still alive, that crazy stunt actually worked?" the way we see people talking about Solid Core. I think that part of the issue is that readers know the grapevine exists (because everybody knows about GEAR) but aren't hearing things from it about anybody else, leading them to conclude (wrongly?) that Solid Core is the only thing worth talking about on base.
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The only problem I run into with this is that I'm not a good enough writer to realistically add something like this in. Whenever I've tried up to this point, it's always felt either too clunky to use, or breaks the narrative so thoroughly that re-reading it I almost skip over it automatically and thus remove it.

But, again, I'll see what I can do.

ShadowAngelBeta said:
While I believe this argument itself is rather pointless as we have done this before, I would like to point out that to Nepgear things... probably look pretty bleak. As in, if she was human, she'd probably be in a despair spiral by now between the shit she's gone through and the bleakness of the (perceived) UL's future from her point of view.
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This is the exact same situation that Goddess Red found herself in. But where Nepgear is holding steady, she caved.

Goddess Red switched sides because of this exact situation coming up.
 
Huh, well. If it makes you feel better crystal I think your doing a fine job with the villain faction in this quest. They likely suffer a hell of a lot of set backs, plus there major combat ability is generally swarm with mooks with low numbers of actual high powered units. But that's where red comes in with her mind slave undead magical girl army and spies.

Hell, I bet if it wasn't for red UD would have lost by now. Too bad she went and gone insane. :(

Magical girls really are the balance breakers in this war, aren't they?
 
Vanguard_D said:
So Nep is only keeping it together due to that both her and Sega already where kinda crazy even before being turned into MG's... That is reassuring, kinda, I hope.:confused:
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For a given definition of Crazy, yes.

crystalwatcher said:
On Nep Going The Way of Ni: Unlikely. It's not obvious, but I think it's about time to reveal this.

Nepgear doesn't quite think like a normal human.​

I'm not joking on this. Even under scrutiny, her thought processes are damn near indistinguishable from you or me, but when seen from the long view, it's obvious there's something different with her. There's a reason she's taking this long to finally break.
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It's a lot more in-depth than that, but not exactly wrong.
 
crystalwatcher said:
The only problem I run into with this is that I'm not a good enough writer to realistically add something like this in. Whenever I've tried up to this point, it's always felt either too clunky to use, or breaks the narrative so thoroughly that re-reading it I almost skip over it automatically and thus remove it.

But, again, I'll see what I can do.
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If you have problems with that, you could always just make it so that any instance of wandering around base is followed by a 'gossip dump', just random lines without context (probably mostly irrelevant stuff) which were heard while wandering around.
 
crystalwatcher said:
The only problem I run into with this is that I'm not a good enough writer to realistically add something like this in. Whenever I've tried up to this point, it's always felt either too clunky to use, or breaks the narrative so thoroughly that re-reading it I almost skip over it automatically and thus remove it.
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:oops: Forget I brought it up, then, sorry. :/
OverReactionGuy said:
Huh, well. If it makes you feel better crystal I think your doing a fine job with the villain faction in this quest. They likely suffer a hell of a lot of set backs, plus there major combat ability is generally swarm with mooks with low numbers of actual high powered units. But that's where red comes in with her mind slave undead magical girl army and spies.
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Agreed. It sounds like this is, if not a well-balanced war, then one that can at least claim to be not a curb stomp, looking at history and the ongoing strategy and how people are sort of feeling around camp.

justinkal said:
If you have problems with that, you could always just make it so that any instance of wandering around base is followed by a 'gossip dump', just random lines without context (probably mostly irrelevant stuff) which were heard while wandering around.
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Throw it into something like the Kaleidoscope? GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooOOOD MORNINGUNITEDLIGHT!
 
justinkal said:
If you have problems with that, you could always just make it so that any instance of wandering around base is followed by a 'gossip dump', just random lines without context (probably mostly irrelevant stuff) which were heard while wandering around.
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Vebyast said:
Throw it into something like the Kaleidoscope? GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooOOOD MORNINGUNITEDLIGHT!
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This sounds like a great idea. Great chance to not only give a better feel of how the War is going, but also a chance to fit in some more comedic things.
 
Nepgear and Team Gear could use the lighthearted moments while they can, before they get thrown into the next "what-could-possibly-go-wrong" mission.
 
OverReactionGuy said:
Huh, well. If it makes you feel better crystal I think your doing a fine job with the villain faction in this quest. They likely suffer a hell of a lot of set backs, plus there major combat ability is generally swarm with mooks with low numbers of actual high powered units. But that's where red comes in with her mind slave undead magical girl army and spies.

Hell, I bet if it wasn't for red UD would have lost by now. Too bad she went and gone insane. :(

Magical girls really are the balance breakers in this war, aren't they?
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I argee with Over on this quest crystal. You had done a fine job. And people, please stop bringing up anything that say UD is invisible or UD had a super advantage again. Crystal had made it clear that Nep is too low on the totem to know the general and overall picture of the war. We want to know we talk to Commands.

Crystal, I want to ask. Can we write in something like this for a vote:

[]The Victorious Dead (Operation: Soul Collector)
- Maria can give me a general update on what going on with the war?

The way we ask like this meant we are asking for a general update on the war front. Rather than complete details but fragment of information that give us an idea on how the war is going. Is this allow? And in IC, will there be enough time for this? I imagine flying from one battlefront to another would allow a catch up on latest going on the front.
 
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BoundaryPhantasm said:
Crystal, I want to ask. Can we write in something like this for a vote:

[]The Victorious Dead (Operation: Soul Collector)
- Maria can give me a general update on what going on with the war?

The way we ask like this meant we are asking for a general update on the war front. Rather than complete details but fragment of information that give us an idea on how the war is going. Is this allow?
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I feel fine allowing this.
 
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