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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Twelve)

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Darwin strikes again.

Maybe on this parallel people will finally learn not to poke metahumans who are way out of your weight class.
 
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Mr Zoat said:
Not that there's a coherent message coming form anywhere else.
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"Don't try that at home, kids. We may not like beating people unconscious and sending them to prison for the rest of their natural lives but we've got quite good at it now."
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I'm of the opinion that this should be gotten. I can understand it being "got" if that's in your personal vernacular, but "gotten" feels more right to me.


P.s. Good snip. Keep up the good work ;)

P.p.s. With OL on site, it's entirely possible that Queen Bee survived being torn in half. But seeing as he'd have to want to heal her, I can't see that being very likely.
 
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The next 3 are renegade and the next regular one is on the next day.

This is going to bug me for a few days because I really want to see the aftermath of all of this.
 
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He shouted -and again I'm sure you've already seen the footage- 'Treacherous witch!'."

"And then he tore her in half."
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Well. That's a thing.

Not tactically a very great thing to do, but I'm absolutely sure Wonder Woman appreciates his commitment to his word. Never mind the whole "destabilize a country" thing. Queen Bee just has shit luck with the whole 'survival' thing doensnt she?

Also, yay that Britain finally changed times, can finally read these when they're posted without staying up unreasonably late. Even if it sucks right now for Zoat.
 
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"I first met Teth Adom in Louisiana, as part of the team sent in to deal with the Injustice League. I'd known for some time that there was no way that there was no way either the wizard Shazam or the gods of ancient Kahndaq would have given super powers to someone like Doctor Theodore Adam-."
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Repeated a phrase there. Also I could swear I saw another typo but now I can't find it.
 
*sweatdrops* To be fair, she actually seemed to be a fairly savvy and well-educated person, she just suffers from extreme narcissism and an overabundance of confidence after always getting her way for a significant portion of her life.
 
Meh. Why didn't Paul just neutralize the thing with his aura?

I guess Queen Bee had to die for plot reasons, but I have to say that killing her before confirming her involvement was a major ball drop from Paul... again.
 
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I'd known for some time that there was no way that there was no way either the wizard Shazam or the gods of ancient Kahndaq would have given super powers to someone like Doctor Theodore Adam-
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Repeated

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But even though he would quite like to run the country, he doesn't have to force himself on them
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I think you want 'wouldn't'

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We built a detection system so that hopefully whoever it was won't be able to try it again, but we don't currently have any way to stop it.
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'able to' between 'be' and 'try'

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He knew as well as he did that Bialyan involvement seemed likely.
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I think you want 'I'

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Both myself and Wonder Woman accompanied him to her palace in Al-Qawiya, me because I was the one who defended Shiruta during the attack and Wonder Woman because one of her many abilities is the ability to tell when someone is lying to her
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'myself'

perhaps 'power'

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The Courage of Montu makes Teth Adom highly resistant to that sort of thing, something that I don't think she knew about
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'about' after 'knew'

Well, that was expected.
 
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Kerrus said:
It may have been for the miniature cliff hanger, but Paul used 'is' when referring to Beeana. Present tense. That suggests she's still alive.
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Well, if Paul was quick enough he could have saved her, but with all the stupidity going lately, it makes me doubtful he was on the game enough to save her, or do basic arithmetic.
 
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