I would say you have that reversed, but in all likelihood Coffee and Shade might share a mutual addiction to each other.

Again, my Italian heritage was scoring points. I was pretty sure there was a set of ka-chink sounds coming from within the heart of poor Isabella, but what could I say?


Italian riajuus should just go die.

Haha wow, abandoned the thread when people calmed their tits. Is this a curse? Am I Seigi no Mikata: Online Edition?
 




Italian riajuus should just go die.

Haha wow, abandoned the thread when people calmed their tits. Is this a curse? Am I Seigi no Mikata: Online Edition?



Gas the Elves Race War Now

DEUS VULT you pointy untermensch!

We will retake ersatz animu Jerusalem for humanity!

/jk but HFY, tho
 
Now that I think of it, alchemist are a pretty powerful cheat.

You would not be able to alchemy copy a detonation lens nuclear device but you could conceivably do a simple ballistic detonation nuke like little boy.
 
By Gwyn's firey beard, its Souls Art Online all over again. Just minus user insanity in the story.
 
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So basically Henry is now a palacehousehusband? Damn, he can't even be a domestic engineer because the servants do all the work. Take this time before the elf meeting to corrupt teach your child to be a good man, Henry!
 
Something just occurred to me. Does Henry have a plan C, and if so does it involve taking the Windland's and whatever other ships he can get a hold of and just leaving Halk during an eclipse? Earth ho! From Shades other snips, the zombie one in particular, I firmly believe that him meeting his brother again would be a most entertaining event.

@shadenight123 So uh... any chance of this happening?
 
Lots of typos (of particular note: prologue, ch 44 and 91):
Prologue:
"Cattleya...and-" the Duke pondered, "Your father or mine?" he asked to his wife, who in turn looked down at the face of thesleepingcrying boy, and sighed.

"He has my father's nose," the Duchess said in a whisper, "And his lungs," she added with a wry smile. "I suppose 'Henry' would be a good fit?"

The crying, if possible, intensified. The blond haired child settled on the side of the bed, her hands on the mattress as she pulled herself up to gaze into the clean face of her sleeping baby sister, and into the red-faced one of her baby brother who didn't really seem interested in stopping his cries any time soon.

"Why is he crying so much?" she asked.
Not 100% sure that's what you were trying to say, but something needs to change - either that or gender.

Ch 1:
fumbling every now and then with a word

The reason I hadn't a book in my hands like Eleonore was that
Not 100% sure if this is actually wrong...
and had gone progressing further with time
Either 'gone' or 'progressed'.

Ch 2:
I had time to think of a few...tell me

Ch 3:
It didn't fill me with courage

Ch 4:
Even saying something trifling like 'thank you' was out of the question.

Ch 6:
she'd simply grow more suspicious and press the issue.

Ch 7:
I ended up receiving more lessons

Ch 12:
rather than wait for the morning

Ch 16:
I didn't know when tothe turn to Reconquista happened

"I'll write to you to make sure you are doing everything properly

Ch 17:
I invite you to not feel sick not in my presence
Think that reads better.

Ch 21:
Apparently, my first trip onto the library would be earlier than planned

Ch 25:
It usually does happen in the heat of battle-but I will not admit that I used such a crude method as fighting orcs.
? Not sure about that sentence.

Ch 26?:
went on in the physical part of the confrontation

Ch 28:
I clenched my fists, "You threw me to the wolves, father."
?
handles himself with care, all the times."

Ch 31:
Now, a manticore is an inherently intelligent and proud beast.

Ch 35:
I suppose there was a reason they found it needed to tackle a vicious to your runic name.

Ch 37:
Memorizing chants had me rewrite them a hundred time each

Thank the gods I hadn't needed to find out.

Ch 41:
"Help..." Anthoine's twitching form was a fuming mass of smoke and charred clothes

Ch 43:
or gone train my familiar to collect reagents

Ch 44:
This basically meant that I was bringing the gifts of half of the Tristain nobility to the party, the royalty and pretty much would also need to spend the next day discussing certain key points of the alliance between our two countries.
Ummm? Missing a bit?

Ch 46:
she would be in tears right right now.

Come on then, nobles! Whisper and murmur all you like!

"Perhaps so," I acquiesced, "still...I prefer to bide my time tonight.

Ch 48:
"The more you push an opponent in war, the worse his answers will become if he really wishes to win."

Ch 49:
"Shit." The next second, the blocks of iron hit my swordwand squarely and knocked it out off my hand.

Ch 50:
A duel happens once, but I am not so foolish as to think I'd defeat you at first,"

Ch 51:
Even though he was as big as a small dog, and his talons were sharp without a doubt, Karin didn't even flinch as she backhanded my familiar away

the dirt and the sweat mixing into grime all over my body.

Ch 52:
I swallowed nervously as I began to repeat them, filling my mind already starting to die a little at a time.
Feeling

Ch 53:
Then, unseen hands gripped at the trees that had been affected, and tore their branches, their trunks, their bark together like a childish baby would toy with dolls, and ripped them all apart.

Ch 57:
and as soon as I said that, I bowed and made to retreat only to swiftly allow my feint to work to its full potential by encircling in a hug from the back Karin for a brief instant,
Really clunky - maybe 'encircling Karin in a hug from behind'?

"Brother..." Louise whispered, "Did you...did you experiment with chants?" as she stared at me with wide eyes, I smiled in turn.

"Lulu...of course not," I said as I knelt in front of her, a hand on her shoulder. "Please don't even joke about it!" Of course, if by heresy she meant worshiping demons and Satan, then the answer was no. If she meant inventing new chants to get the plumbing of this place working, and the plants to bear fruits faster...then yes, oh hell yes if I was a heretic.
This doesn't seem right. Henry's referring to heresy in his internal monologue, but Louise doesn't mention heresy. Just chant experimentation, which...doesn't quite fit with the rest of the paragraph.

Ch 58:
Eleonore sighed, her eyes glazing over like a teenager in love

Ch 63:
Which included forks, and spoons, and no outwardly show of most of the basic human emotions needed to appear as a normal human.

Ch 68:
Uh, I wondered what other changes there had been during my absence.

Pleasantly chatting while enjoying the tea. Or the coffee.

Ch 73:
Still, I did mentally jolt down -and later would write down- that the current count was prone to withholding money from the Crown.

Ch 74:
input was the mage pouring wind elemental willpower into it, and the output was a small gust of wind and a levitation effect.

Now, to put this apparently innocuous figurine hidden in my pouch among the children born eaten by a minotaur or an orc...and then, obviously, make this hunt end.

Ch 78:
She was a good kid, but having to keep up appearances and thus suffer being dressed by other servants, keeping myself at the ready for every tiny wish she had, or try to smudge a bit of her pretentious self
Not entirely sure about this.

I had departed the Petite Troyes with enough coffee to last an army a month, so for me alone it would last be a year and even more

Honestly, even though I didn't need to make such a ceremony out of it, I had named them out of the four main winds used in my summoning. I had four companies of knights under my employment, the Audri, Sudri, Westri and Nordri knights, while the Gale and Maelstrom divisions were cavalry, and the Thunder and Lightning were musketeer corps.
Shouldn't that be 'naming ceremony' or similar? Since those have nothing to do with the summoning ceremony from memory.

She neared a hand to settle my slightly in disarray clothes, and then her lips twitched in a tiny smile.
Not sure about that word choice.

Your hurt me with your childish innocence and preferential treatment!

Ch 79:
Simply put, Tiffania was the young sister of Mathilda, and Mathilda was a renewed expert gardener for what concerned exotic plants.
Renown

Ch 81:
"You-We am angry with you,"
Possibly intentional?

"The messenger might have incurred in a snag somewhere along the line,"
Or something else.

Ch 91:
It was the only rank worthy of him

As the dragon and the knights flew away to a safe distance, the handkerchief fluttered in the air for a bit, and then, softly, landed on the ground after what felt like ages, but had been perhaps a minute or less. This gave the time for both parties

Whips of water rushed forth from the tip of Charles' wand with such strength
Missing things.

Ch 94:
"Lulu, my, my," I said as I smiled warmly, my precious little sister looking like some sort of candy wearing a light pink dress and holding herself upright.
Missing word (That's a guess.)

Ch 96:
thought your mother was a boy, a pretty boy-we decided we'd take him as a lover even before marrying, so one day, we invited him in our rooms and then decided to ravish-"

Ch 99:
The summoning circle-well, putting that down required a spell by itself, so it was obvious he'd need someone to chant the spell for him.

Ch 100:
"It was just a flesh wound," I said offhandedly, "I got by with worse," I added with a smile. "Didn't even feel it with all the alcohol in my body-funny story, but...the commoner in question, did she wake up?"

I winced as I stood to sit. "It's important to keep an eye on her-really important."
Also, why the new paragraph?

could she be a random Gallian? Or Germanian?

Ch 101:
"Then he can send me back! No, he should send me back!" Anne snarled, "Bring himme to that jerk! He stole my first kiss, it's only fair he pays it back tenfold!"
?

Ch 102:
"If it's the king, it's Royal Highness, if it's the princess, it's Royal highness or highness depending on your degree of amiability with her

Ch 108:
If anything or anyone dared to interrupt such a ceremony-if anyone dared to say but something that made my sister sad during this day-I'd murder them.

Men are not by their nature greedy. However, no one is really a man of sane and whole principles.

Staff of destruction here I come, right right where we started from.

Ch 110:
As I walked past them and through the hallways of the palace of Grand Troyes, my eyes briefly shared the vision of Raven's form, resting upon his perch on the Night Wind's mast with a dozen of small versions of himself perched all around it.

Ch 111:
There were other alchemists who were more than willing to take into examine the priming mechanism of the Zero Fighter's machineguns, recreating them with ease through the use of magic.

Ch 112:
Calming down a teenage girl from doing anything stupid a teenager girl wasn't that easy, unfortunately.

We were in one of the infirmaries used by the workers in case a work-related injury happened -I was a really good man, forcing them to wear helmets and stuff because I respected dutifully the construction laws of the future, even in a world where such trifling things were not needed since, broken a commoner, you could always buy another.
if a commoner broke?

Omake:
Now, I fully expect you to write back to me, thus I am leaving you with a means to do so.

"I don't see what brother finds of interesting in this-it's just a feathered creature..."
Of interest or interesting.

Ch 118:
but...perhaps he fears you will once the war starts.

Ch 121:
"Honestly, we do not know how to broach this argument.

Ch 125:
"Your highness! Your sister demands your presence!" her tone was pompous, and her arms moved wildly right and left.

Ch 135:
Then again, so was half of the army since they had heard of the explosion.
?

Ch 143:
while the Henrietta was by her left

Ch 146:
It was the moment when the on the other end of Albion, guns would begin a bombardment the likes of which would attract the army of Hawkins.

Ch 147:
The port city of Rosais had held a small garrison, bolstered due to the letter sent to them, but no waywhere near the full fighting force one could expect from an army.

Ch 149:
"We can leave Londinium and Dartanes to Albion's new government, and a strip toof land to allow communication and commerce between them," I added with a nod.

Omake:
The truth was that she hoped that just one more visit would be enough to calm her beloved's[/COLOR] heart, to make him see reason and once more becoming the smiling prince she knew he was.

Ch 162:
The men of my guard followed us a short distance away. Louise had gone to spend time with Henrietta after her first night had gone by -and where nothing had hopefully happened

my work ishas indeed mostly veered on the crafting of beautiful stone statues through the most holy research on the chants of past-"

Ch 164:
It could easily be snuffed out, but the point was that if they couldn't do anything to stop the enemy, they could still light the beacon while running away.

Ch 166:
It's a waste of time

his hair would have probably exploded in a hundred of different directions.

Also, Welcome to Hogwarts and Dark Wings both link to Dark Wings in your 'more info'

:mad: SV ate my formatting. Not doing that again, so...anything that's got no red should...(which isn't helpful).
 
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Chapter One Hundred and Sixty-Eight
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty-Eight

There was something cathartic in watching the Duchess Karin Desirée de la Valliere try her hardest, and fail miserably, to keep her mask of steel on her face as she bent down to look at the toddler and then calmly pull it up in her arms. Isabella wasn't present, and while in truth I shouldn't have been present to begin with -the state outright needed me- I could multi-task handling my meager state businesses and my parents' visit.

"He is adorable," Karin said with the same flat tone she would state a painting is beautiful. The fact she said that while squirming and trying her hardest to hide the desire to just snuggle the thing was evident. On his side, Pierre's namesake was simply laughing while twirling a mustache, his other hand holding on to a liquor as old as him, or perhaps even more. I had sworn, decades before, to return the favor of the liquor cabinet's key, and thus here we stood, both of us merrily watching Karin try her hardest, and failing miserably at that, to keep her stern facade on.

"Gu-gu," the child gurgled happily, and I could hear the sound of springs detonate within Karin as her arms trembled, her teeth biting down on her lower lip as she had to fight an inner battle of epic proportions with her willpower just to hold herself back from making funny faces at the child.

"I reckon it would be even funnier if we left mother alone," I muttered. "Would she go for the cheeks, I wonder?"

Karin's eyes twitched as she glanced in my direction. I simply smiled. "He is a happy baby," Karin said once more. "He definitely did not take the grumpy from you, Henry," she continued. "Your eyes, most certainly."

"Oh oh," Pierre laughed, taking a sip of liquor. "He has the dashing and roguish charms of his grandfather without a doubt-"

"Pierre, shut up," Karin said with a huff, "You'll make this Pierre cry," although that particular Pierre didn't seem prone to crying any time soon, Karin still rocked him gently back and forth, humming to make him quiet down.

Even in the magical world, using grandparents as a way to avoid having to hire a babysitter existed since ancient times. I wondered when Anne and Joseph were going to make an appearance, though honestly I hoped they would make it in a normal, non-heart attack-inducing way. I knew deep down I was having delusions, but I could still hope. For if a man does not hope, then why does he wake up in the morning?

Apparently to watch the bonfires signal the start of a war.

I stared at the thick columns of black smoke that rose from afar, their show a sign that I really should not have stayed in to sleep -but I hadn't been woken up. What followed was strangely out of touch. It was like I was moving in jelly, as if a camera was propped up in a corner of my vision, and I was a mere puppet of the events. What I did know was that the sole reason I wasn't aboard the Windland yet was that Isabella had preempted my decision and somewhat ensured the hardest spells would be used to keep me inside said rooms, rather than out of them.

So as I stopped slamming my fists against the hardened doors that had been locked from the outside, I turned my sights on the dresser and got myself dressed as fast as I could. There was no way I was letting them decide what to do without me, and if this meant blasting aside a wall, or a floor, then so be it. I was sure Isabella would relish rebuilding our bedroom. She had taken away my wand. She hadn't taken away my spare wand, hidden in my sleeve, because of course she hadn't thought about it.

I clenched the tool and snarled the spell, rather than merely chant it. "Rip!" the sizzling, shrieking winds pulsed and popped as they rushed forth with the billowing gales of a miniature hurricane, cracking and shattering the doors as they exploded outwardly, sending the five knights of the Western Parterre to fly back, their bodies hitting various parts of the wall opposite my door.

"Make way for the Prince," I hissed as I stepped outside, only for a cringing noise to emanate from the throats of an unlucky soldier, who was trembling like a leaf.

"H-Her r-royal highness-" the man pleaded, and he was literally crying as he said that, "wishes his highness to stay in-" he was simpering and crying, there were tears falling down his face. "Please your highness-please-don't make me do this."

I gave him a small nod, and then a blunt air hammer sent him to slam against the wall on the side. "Apologies," I said as I walked past his form dug into the wall, "But I am in a hurry."

Raven cawed from outside the windows, flapping his wings as I gave him a curt nod. "Let loose the crows of war," I spoke, lifting my left arm as my right thrust my spare wand forward to send flying a group of nervous knights of the Parterre who were trying to pacify me with their hands raised.

"Y-Your highness! Please-we have orders..." one croaked from the floor, "You cannot...leave..." he lifted his hand upwards, "The prince...cannot...leave..." his head fell down with a thud, but I was already past him.

Raven cawed, and flew off. His caws were loud enough that they made the windows of the palace rattle, murders of crows rising in the distance upon the treetops. My eyes snapped to a terrified servant, who was clutching on to his chest at my sight.

"Where is my wife?" I growled, and the servant babbled something about the throne room, and about an urgent meeting with the army staff. I was already past him, having given him a pat on his shoulder and a hasty thank you. The man fainted from the sheer honor, his eyes rolled back and tears of joy spreading through his face.

I didn't bother with it.

I admit, when the guards guarding the outside of the court room saw me coming, they did not plead mercy, nor cry. They did not even bother putting up a defense. They simply moved to the side and allowed me to kick the doors open.

"What is the meaning of this!?" I snarled with enough anger that the only one that didn't recoil in the courtroom was the throne, and that was mostly because with it being an object, it couldn't feel fear. My steps slammed down heavily on the ground as I trudged forth, the officers moving aside with shock clearly etched on their faces. Isabella had her fan out, and was clutching it in fright as General de Montpassant and General Bowood stood nearby, a table set to perhaps enunciate a plan of war.

I looked to the right, and then to the left. There wasn't a single person present in the room who didn't belong to my army. There wasn't a single officer there that I hadn't personally seen train at least once, or person that I hadn't talked with. Perhaps I did not remember all of their names, but I definitely knew them.

"H-Husband-" Isabella swallowed, "We are discussing-"

"The elves have come to wage war," I hissed, clenching both of my hands on the surface of the table, glancing down at the map that showed a crude depiction of the elvish navy advancing straight for Lutece. "Whatever their reasoning-they shall not find Gallia an easy prey," I bared my teeth. "What is the situation along the border? What of the Gendarmeries-"

"We lost the twentieth, your highness," General de Montpassant spoke. "Scouts managed to reach the thirteenth and give the alarm-all that stayed behind are presumed lost."

I swallowed. "Two hundred men."

"Yes, your highness," the General whispered. "The other Gendarmeries are pulling back, following orders they will make a first stand at the Rhone and Saone rivers of Lyonnes-"

I stared down at the map once more. "The villages along the way?"

"Evacuated," the General continued. "The fleets are being pulled into position, but your highness-" he steeled himself, "They will pass on our corpses before we will allow those filthy elves to step within the city of Lyonnes."

I placed a hand on the table, much to Isabella's held breath. "And they shall pass on mine too," I spoke firmly. I looked straight up at Isabella, who was shaking her head, her eyes wide and her entire self shaking like a leaf.

"No," she shrieked. "No. No-No-No!"

"Isa-"

"You are forbidden! You-arrest him! Bring him back into his chambers! No! No-" she stared as not a single man in the room rushed to obey her order, and as she clutched her fan tighter yet, she threw it in my direction. "What are you waiting for!? I'm your Queen!"

"Yes," I answered softly, with a slow nod and a small smile. "But I'm their Prince."

I turned my back on her, even though it honestly pained me to do so. "Henry! Henry don't you dare! Henry-you lot! You are all under arrest! I'll have you all executed for this! Don't you dare-" as Isabella screamed louder, I began to walk out of the court room.

"Pissed off wife is never a good thing to leave behind before war, your highness," General de Montpassant said with a chuckle as we marched down the hallway towards the courtyards of Lutece.

"Pissed off Queen also sounds like the unhealthy prospect, Remis," I replied.

"I fell from grace because I farted in the same room as the king," Remis replied with a snort. "Your highness thinks I care?"

"Please, don't tell me you delight my poor men with your farts while in the same room as them!" I mock-replied, my shoulders shaking as I inwardly began to chuckle.

"Those that deserve it," the General grumbled, "But still-prepping the Windland will take a few hours at least, your highness."

I hummed at that, "Very well-guess I'll do a swift tactical charge in the opposite direction. Men! Follow General Far-wait a moment, des Monts Passant, because farts pass through..." I began to laugh as the General laughed in turn, soon followed by the chorus of laughter that came from the rest of the officer staff as they moved past, and into the courtyards to then head for the Windland.

I stopped, took a deep breath, and then began to walk back.

I found Isabella exactly where I had left her, if on the floor, the crown of Gallia half bent against the nearby steps, and tears freely falling down her face. Her arms were around her knees, and in that moment-in that moment I realized that I wasn't looking at a Queen, but at a young woman who did not know what to do of her life.

She lifted her face when she saw me step inside the empty court room, desolated even of the servants.

"Isabella," I said.

"Still here?" she mumbled, "You forgot something?" she glanced at the crown, "If you want that, it's broken. Get yourself another."

"Are you sulking?" I remarked as I calmly made my way by her side, and sat down right next to her.

"A Queen doesn't sulk. Poor pitiful Isabella does," she scoffed. "Because poor pitiful Isabella is such a failure nobody wants to stay by her side. Her husband would rather be with commoners, fight wars, fight the elves-he would rather die next to his commoners, but when he wants something, oh he comes to poor pitiful Isabella who's so much in love that she'll do anything. Doesn't matter what it is. Doesn't matter what it isn't. She'll do it, yes, immediately your majesty. But when she wants something, when she wants her husband safe, a tiny thing, really, does she get it? No, no she doesn't. Poor pitiful Isabella can become Queen and have the crown and the scepter and have all of the fanciest things...but she can't keep her husband safe."

She sniffled, grabbed a handful of her sleeves' puffy silk inner linens and then blew her nose on them without a care in the world.

"Do you think I'm not scared?" I asked softly, glancing at her.

"Poor pitiful Isabella doesn't know," she sniffled. "She thought the world of her Henry, her beloved husband, but the world wasn't enough and it betrayed her, and now she's left with nothing. One day, even little Pierre will betray her, because if she loved her Henry so much-she can just imagine how much her little Pierre is going to hurt her. Like father too. Everyone poor pitiful Isabella loves ends up hurting her. She loved her mother so much she died the moment Isabella was born. That should have told her something," she clutched her legs. "It should have told her something."

"Isabella, stop talking of yourself in third person and look at me," I mumbled as I gingerly grabbed hold of her and pulled her firmly on my lap, much to her meager recalcitrant refusals. Her red puffy eyes looked at me, and I stared right back at them. "I am terrified." I placed my forehead against hers. "I am utterly shaking in my legs right now. I swear that every fiber of my body is telling me to take back my words, sit on the throne, and wait for news from the front line."

"Then why aren't you doing it!?" Isabella screamed, "Why aren't you staying here!?"

"Because I am a Square mage, Isabella," I murmured. "And it means I can do the difference. So-So I must go, because if that difference means victory over defeat, if it means success over failure-then I must go," I hugged her tightly. "Single men can make the difference, Isabella. On the fields of war, on the tides of battles-my men fight for crown and country...but if I refuse to surrender, then so will they. If I do not run, then neither will they. Isabella, this is the first time the elves launched an offensive, and for something other than Alhambra. Why? What is their purpose? I do not know," I chuckled softly. "I do not know. I am terrified. Terrified of not knowing this," I whispered. "But what scares me the most-it is of what might happen to you and Pierre," I gave her a light kiss on the side of the temple. "So I will fight. And the elves won't have me. And they will not have Lyonnes. And we will push them back. And then I will return to you a winner, my beloved, and I promise you-I won't make you cry again."

"That's a lie," Isabella murmured even as she smiled a bit, resting her head against my chest. "You are horrible at lying, Henry."

She giggled, and then deeply kissed me.

"As your Queen-I am ordering you and that bunch of misfit traitorous swines to return to me alive and victorious, Marshal of Gallia."

I smiled, and kissed her in return. "As your Marshal, I obey my Queen's orders, as your husband...we have a few hours, and the court room is empty~"

The rest, as they say, is best left to your imagination.
 
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