In Nuclear Fire
- Thread starter Poliamida
- Start date
- Location
- Czech Republic
I know its pedantic, but it should be trillions.
For example human body is made out of around 30 trillion cells.
Fullofholes
Riddled with bullets
"You have heard of "Elf in the shelf"... Prepare for "Wolfgirl in the poster!"" — Glen Chambers, I think.
LostArchivist
Sane, unfortunately.
- Location
- The State of Confusion
paws
Although it'd be funny if his hands turned into nubby chess pieces.
Renick
you've known him for longer than I have
Excuse me, that was legitimately self-defense. And not their fault.
Although no one really likes you anymore when "not your fault" happens more than twice...
Anyone sane would be trying to run at this point, yes...
That is a hilarious image. It'd be scary, but the text completely ruins that and makes it silly.
ExploerTM
Ruin has found you at last!
- Location
- Russia, Perm
- Pronouns
- He/Him/His
Streets of Brockton Bay, ten minutes later:
Tech-Priest running for dear life: "Noooooo, Glenn, don't turn me into marketable plushie!"
Glenn on Army's bike chasing him with Hero's last creation in hand: "Haha PR goes brrrrrrr!"
- Location
- Canada
Go back to school is it. Would that school have Sophia Hess? Last time I checked the PRT were holding doing their jobs and prosecuting her over the Hebert's heads to try and get cooperation.
I have to agree. The arguments and worries were so stupid it's hard to take seriously. Peter would happily Tinker all day in a lab no one is going to casually see him in, and despite Danny's mutterings he's not going to suddenly become social. The PRT already unmasked him but that's their own fault. As far as shifts in public lives, their city was attacked by an Endbringer. Survived or not, the bulk of the population is going to have changed in some way, it's not going to surprise anyone if a child decides to get homeschooled or suddenly act differently. They were making a big deal out of nothing, again.
She's 17. Get over it.
- Location
- Salt Lake City, UT, USA
And contains roughly 39 trillion cells of living non-human organisms.
Aurora Raven
(Verified Bird)
- Location
- Surrey, UK
- Pronouns
- She/Her
That's pretty much the definition of young lady.
Aeoniam
Tauren Historian
- Location
- Thunderbluff, Mulgore
Completely agree. That was something that didn't make sense and it just plain bothered me. Mostly the fact that Peter just thought that that made sense and then completely ignored it.
Renick is being hysterical, not without reason, but way out of line. Yeah, it was a problematic situation, but the overreaction is creating more problems for him than not. He wants to make Heavy Gear more amenable to the PRT before they have to take hostile actions, making a problem out of the situation that the kids can solve by themselves is just making it harder on himself. Peter even said it outright that he wants to brag, after being cooperative from the start. C'mon, it's free
Now, on a meta sense, every other character is sounding absolutely as themselves, but Renick (alongside some characters on the way they're reacting to him) sullies the narrative with the way he is acting. He is a plot device for drama, which makes sense, but he's being overplayed and it's really messing with the overall internal coherence of the scenes.*
And the worst thing is that I still like the story. I'm interested on where it's going. I'm just concerned on how it's happening. I hope I'm not being mean about it, because Peter genuinely is my favorite tinker in Worm fanfiction. Unless I'm in the mood for undiluted crack, then it's definitely Addy. Sorry not sorry.
*By "overall internal coherence of the scenes" I specifically mean how the narrative leads to a point in-story, as a narrative does, but with the tendency to nonsensically take a flimsy excuse of an argument and letting the scene progress without addressing it. It could also be an action or whatever, but I'm being specific to this story. It's a thing that happens with an worrying frequency here, sometimes once per chapter. That's bad. The best solution to that is to try and sound said arguments out a bit, as critically as possible. Vague, yeah, but that's the best I can think right now.
P.S.: I just noticed that this is fanfiction. I should be ashamed of myself for asking too much. And I am! Poliamida's story is good, it just makes me want to help make it better. There are problems, but I do remember reading some official publications that are way worse than this.
Lightwavers
Purple Noodle
- Pronouns
- they/them
Renick's probably under quite a lot of stress. I'd cut him a bit of slack for overreacting, especially when it's not really overreacting when suddenly informed an already quite threatening Tinker just became a self-modifying weapon of mass destruction that can break out of the containment specifically meant for him and in his eyes is treating this all way too flippantly.
On another note, Coil got offed, right? But did his entire organization get dismantled with him? It's been a while, but if someone else took up his mantle the PRT could still have some of his moles.
On another note, Coil got offed, right? But did his entire organization get dismantled with him? It's been a while, but if someone else took up his mantle the PRT could still have some of his moles.
I enjoyed this chapter. The end of the last one honestly had me a little ~~ but that is just because of how such major changes usually get handled or go down in a story. I am glad I waited before making any major judgements.
I do look forward to seeing what Glenn's Answer to all this is. It should be a good one.
As for Rencick's take and the 'silliness' of having them back in school, I see him as a man that is desperate to exert a bit of control in the situation in order to keep a manic like Tagg out of Brockton and to establish some level of non-parahuman control of the situation under a governmental purview from a federal agency.
Telling kids to go to school is a easy out for exerting that control.
I do look forward to seeing what Glenn's Answer to all this is. It should be a good one.
As for Rencick's take and the 'silliness' of having them back in school, I see him as a man that is desperate to exert a bit of control in the situation in order to keep a manic like Tagg out of Brockton and to establish some level of non-parahuman control of the situation under a governmental purview from a federal agency.
Telling kids to go to school is a easy out for exerting that control.
Aeoniam
Tauren Historian
- Location
- Thunderbluff, Mulgore
Yeah, fair. But at the same time, he didn't know that when he put everybody on jail and started going on tirades. Now he should be getting angrier, not before discovering that. Accidental self furryfication/sex-change is leagues less worrisome than Eagleton 2: Sentient Boogaloo.
Coil, who sadly now suffers from a terminal case of dead thanks to Tats, and his organization got dismantled hard. He got directorship, and then he got un-directored quite publicly. His organization is kaput, what was left was asset-wise was taken over by Tattletale and what wasn't taken was exposed to the public. His moles and everything are gone from our happy tale.
EddBlackheart
Blunted Edge Lord
- Location
- Between Mind and Matter, Dream and Reality.
I don't think he died. Didn't he just get arrested?
Poliamida
(Verified Heavy Molecule)
- Location
- Beyond the Stars
Once again I have to thank Raiseth for helping me craft a better image of a character I have so many troubles fully understanding.
Dragon's issue is that she always felt isolated, she fears that she'll never 'belong' and that people will abandon her the moment they find out what she truly is (and all this on top of all the restrictions she has). When she sees someone like Peter, who actively tries to separate himself from humanity, she sees someone actively trying to reach a state that for her is hell.
Like Raiseth put it "She doesn't understand why someone would value their form over the ability to connect with others, while Peter cannot fathom why someone would sacrifice their freedom of expression to engage with humans."
Peter, or Tech-Priest. As was stablished this chapter, he's fine being called that for as long as he doesn't become a hive mind.
Indeed it is.
Would tentacles be such a thing in Bet considering that Anime never became mainstream? I can still see them being disturbed by them though.
No, no, you're completely correct. I'll fix that later.
The lawsuit already went through, the Heberts and the PRT reached and agreement shortly after the Leviathan battle and Shadow Stalker was already displaced from The Wards.
Look at this from Renick's perspective. He's in the very unique position where he's trying juggle multiple responsibilities and expectations. Brockton Bay became internationally famous after the defeat of Leviathan, several governments from around the world are using it as a symbol of hope, so by every account it needs to remain strong. The top brass of the PRT needs that they remain in control because if an independant cape team suddenly decide not to listen to them any longer, and then defeat them, this will break the PRT's immage and may encourage several other teams to do the same and suddenly they will have a civil war in their hands as parahumans starts breaking America apart into their personal kingdoms. Cauldron is being Cauldron, enough said. And on top of that, everyone and their grandmother knows that Tech Priest is quickly becoming the most famous cape in the world, and it's only a matter of time before kidnapping and assassination attempts are carried out that may turn parts of the city into craters.
And all this because of a group of teenagers with far too much power in their hands and no wisdom to use it properly.
Renick is trying to play nice and keep Heavy Gear from rocking the boat, is trying to organize joint patrols, and even welcomes them for joint projects. Then Heavy Gear torpedoes in a very public way one of the most famous hero teams around, remains completely oblivious to the dangers of tinkertech, and then Tech-Priest hacks their computers and uses their resources to turn himself into 'something' that not even their best tinker can fully understand. Is the thing that Tech-Priest turned himself into dangerous? Is it contagious? What if he snaps and decides that every human should be forcefuly upgraded? He doesn't know, and can't even do much about it because he understands that antagonizing HG would be a disaster. He's scared because he's progressively losing control and realizes that the Bay may be turning into a powder keg far bigger than the one that Piggott had to deal with. And the only reason why it hasn't exploded yet is because the members of HG aren't, as Dragon put it, actively malicious.
Renick would be more than happy is he could just force all of them into the Wards, transfer them outside the city, and turn this entire mess into someone else's problem, but it's fairly clear that won't be possible.
The issue of school and secret identities is just the surface, below that he wants to make sure that HG remains willing to play ball because he wants to be able to point at that and say (in great part to himself) 'see? they are listening to me, there's nothing to fear'.
That fact that he didn't know what the 'thing' that suddenly popped up in the middle of the base was, was the reason why he did it. He needed to at least make sure that it wasn't dangerous or the result of an enemy
He's alive, but got arrested and transfered outside the city.
- Location
- Chile
Well, they have been a thing long before anime even existed.
Tentacle erotica - Wikipedia
- Location
- So near, yet so far
In other words; he is making a big deal out of something that's not "that" big a deal so that he can force them into a "little" compliance. Which is likely the part that has most chances of exploding into his face. Well, without Glen at least.
Incidentally, this reminds me of my favorite Glenn part is from a fanfic where Taylor is a Dead Space necromorph. The part he interviews her and sets the limits of her public persona/uniform is epic and, shows this badass guy routinely deals with people whose trigger trauma keeps them half a step away from going murderhobo and starting with going postal on him. In-person, in their face.
Can i have the link? Sounds intresting.
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- So near, yet so far
All Things Devoured (Worm/DeadSpace)
[X]Recommend a mentor: Assault It took almost a minute for the laughter to die down, and when it did, it did so awkwardly and with a limp. Assault mimed wiping tears from his eyes, then slowly grew still as he watched the worried expression on Miss Militia’s face remain unchanged. “Wait...
forums.spacebattles.com
It's very short and unfinished, unfortunately. Also, it's from the same guy who wrote Constellations which is weird in that tone of feel-good story and horror story is so far from one another.
Grosstoad
Birdbrain - Dick - Rules-Lawyer - Creeper
Wasn't it more of a story-heavy Quest? Unreliable narrating MC?
I can so very much identify with that...
I understand that gender identity is important to other people, but I can't quite manage to care about my own...
- Pronouns
- It
Wait. You aren't a transhumanist? I would never have known. I am a very much a transhumanist and, at least for me, you got the characterization down perfectly.
So that's analogues to muscle, connective, and glandular tissue respectively while nervous tissue would just be folded into the glandular analogues since modulating energy currents would render nerves somewhat redundant right?
To be fair though it's not like avoiding that particular dynamic and/or method of engagement with others is unreasonable. At least in the short-term I mean.
Yeah should really integrate some better equipment into that thing at some point...All of these functions and not enough interfacing is gon'a be trouble.
It'd probably be easier to connect to the transformative device instead to get those blueprints.
I imagine that, being nanobots, he could probably detach the specks of that stuff from each individual part of himself for long enough to change them according to his desires.
Now that's unreasonable. Even those first few medical mecha-Zerg wouldn't have been able to mess up badly enough to do that.
Bitch that ain't even true if confinement could prevent him from being dangerous.
At first I was wondering what law turning yourself into a mythological being would be breaking but then I remembered that Parahumans exist and they probably had to implement a law against specifically that at some point.
I feel like portals would have been the more elegant solution there but there is a certain artistry to making a door like that.
Did she forget that she was wearing a helmet or something?
He could also get a secondary, or that might be tertiary, identity as a Case 53 while using a telepresence android, possibly even one primarily incorporating living tissue, to maintain his regular identity while he's figuring out how to do it himself. That would nicely avoid problems like requiring contact avoidance The Illusion to maintain it.
Should really spy on some random gangs or groups or something out of town with her, possibly via a bunch of drones from a couch stolen from Max while eating triple-chocolate ice-cream, to see how many can be made to fall apart in the most spectacular ways with the fewest text messages.
You know it occurs to me that disguising ones-self as a doggo would probably actually work pretty well. Nobody suspects the dog of being a parahuman. It actually seems like a pretty big oversight come to think of it.
A bit of upgraded combat instinct is hardly a bad thing. For people other then whoever's trying to get into combat with anyone who has them I mean.
I'm sure that Peter would be willing to sell lots of bodies.
People seem to think that Tagg getting into a position of authority would be a bad thing. I personally think that it would be a wonderful employment opportunity. The PRT getting pitted against Heavy Gear would, especially with the Flesh Loom greatly raising the margin for error in what can be called "sub-lethal", drive a great number of PRT Agents to look for alternative employment and I bet that Heavy Gear would have some positions open for such individuals.
Relatedly Peter should totally set up a community center or something at some point. Some place where socialization can happen. Maybe set up a few projectors and set up a out-doors cinema? Or a few arcade machines? I'm sort of imagining that a few Mecha-Zerg would temporarily reconfigure into these things to pull it off by the way. No reason not to have them serve as public resources when not being used for a specific task you know.
Oh yeah absolutely. Tentacles have been lewd since before animation was a thing. There's historical artwork of that shit.
It's not as though things can end worse then they were before HG came in and solved everything for everyone. Like you want to seem impotent then being unable to arrest The Merchants is a good way to show off how impotent you are.
Now selfish is another thing entirely. To look selfish you should find the people that are making things better for everyone, and in the course of doing so making things awkward for you, and try to prevent them from doing exactly that.
I would like to recommend the subreddit "wholesomenosleep" for some stories that are both.All Things Devoured (Worm/DeadSpace)
[X]Recommend a mentor: Assault It took almost a minute for the laughter to die down, and when it did, it did so awkwardly and with a limp. Assault mimed wiping tears from his eyes, then slowly grew still as he watched the worried expression on Miss Militia’s face remain unchanged. “Wait...
It's very short and unfinished, unfortunately. Also, it's from the same guy who wrote Constellations which is weird in that tone of feel-good story and horror story is so far from one another.
I suspect that it has a lot to do with how people tie up a lot of their identity with their community/tribe.
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Peter is not acting the most stable here, but he is too important to alienate or imprison. He made something that killed an Endbringer and something that can revive the dead. Even one of those would be enough to make him almost untouchable.
If Saint acts against him, he will die.
If Saint acts against him, he will die.