Just a minor detail like to complicate things because the kriff not
Remove the
like and add a 'why' between 'because' and 'the'
Democracy-class Dreadnoughts waiting in a nearby system
Technically this wrong but my brain keeps reading it as '
awaiting' for some reason.
enough starfighters the hangars of every warship whilst
Add a 'to fill' between 'starfighters' and 'the'
what sort of genetic modifications you had been given them
Either remove the 'been' or change '
given' to
giving
the High Council took all of that in their stride once
Remove
their
if said Supreme Chancellorbeing Darth Sidious made you more
Add a space between 'Chancellor' and 'being'
Sith Lord to dismiss his aides and bodyguards before surrendering him
him
self
"That is a lot of other clones on the planet around," says A-02-07004,
It should be
there and remove either 'on the planet' or 'around'
as five TX-130 Sabre-class Fighter Tank roll up and open fire
Tank
s
You jerk to the size so the blaster bolt hits your beskar
si
de
The last thoughts of Darth Sidious, Dark Lord of the Sith and Supreme Chancellor of the Galactic Republic, is that he cannot be dying to Senate Guard of all in people
Remove the
in
unfortunately lopsided towards older and more experience,
experience
d
Meanwhile this combined the lack of authority and legal backing
add a 'with' between 'combined' and 'the'
The Rim and Separatist factions have the opposite faction as they are
reaction
of the galaxy as these new revelations not only did this cause Chancellor Gunray's fragile reputation plummeted even further,
remove
did this, cause
d, to plummet
Supporting them was the Jedi Order and the Grand Army of the Republic and with Organa's Republic
add a comma between
Republic and
and 'Grand Army of the Republic, and with Organas Republic'
give the victory to the Jedi-aligned forces more often than now
no
t
Defeats turned into slatemates, draws into victories and victories into even greater triumph
s
ta
lemates, triumph
s
