With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Twelve)

ThrawnCA · Feb 26, 2018

Um...two Lanterns and a martial arts expert with x-ionised knives, vs zombies controlled by someone 'clever' enough to have them knock on the door?

There is a smell of curbstomp in the air...

Mr Zoat said:
he could exposed

he could have exposed

its face...his mouth

Gender disagreement (remainder of paragraph uses male, further paragraphs neuter).

bands of energy surrounding

bands of energy surround

old-person-making-out-of-date reference

old-person-making-out-of-date-reference

and hold it up

and holds it up

random_npc · Feb 26, 2018

Mr Zoat said:
"Unless my parents were keeping really quiet about the whole 'supervillainy' thing, yes."

statistically speaking, the odds are somewhat in favor of that being the case.

Ganurath · Feb 26, 2018

Mr Zoat said:
Jade smiles at him as he leaves the room, then turns to me with her eyes slightly wide. "I thought you said he was a Green Lantern."

So, making Jade feel hopeful is like making a persuasive pitch to Lex Luthor, or intimidating Orvas Dren?

LazySloth13 · Feb 26, 2018

So from the in story links the Grundymen look like they could be connected to someone from Witch World, where Klarion came from before becoming a Lord of Chaos, so either someone who was close to Klarion is out for revenge personally or someone in the Light managed to trick or convince someone to take revenge on Paul for killing Klarion.

It's also sad and funny seeing Jade freak out by feeling Hope but maybe some time spent fighting with her pseudo in-law could help break the ice on how her Paul started their relationship and where it could possibly lead to, it's also great seeing Alan adapt to his ring by using it to heal others.

Vaermina · Feb 26, 2018

Mr Zoat said:
I looks at her with a completely serious expression. "Oh no."

I think that should be "look" and the "with a" should be removed entirely.

HanEmpire · Feb 26, 2018

Vaermina said:
I think that should be "look" and the "with a" should be removed entirely.

Why remove the "with a" part? That's Paul being serious.

Mr Zoat · Feb 26, 2018

ThrawnCA said:
he could have exposed
Gender disagreement (remainder of paragraph uses male, further paragraphs neuter).
bands of energy surround
old-person-making-out-of-date-reference
and holds it up

Thank you, corrected.

Vaermina said:
I think that should be "look" and the "with a" should be removed entirely.

Half right.

Pizza · Feb 26, 2018

What an adorable family.

Also, somehow I don't see these guys having a plan for anti-grav constructs. My personal favorite constructs to use against big brutish beaters.

King of Frost · Feb 26, 2018

ThrawnCA said:
Um...two Lanterns and a martial arts expert with x-ionised knives, vs zombies controlled by someone 'clever' enough to have them knock on the door?

If these are the "get bitten and you turn into a zombie" kind of zombies then that would have actually been a very intelligent move.

If they're not those kind of zombies, then yeah pretty stupid move, I'm almost thinking it was someone trying to kill Alan. Someone who thinks he's just a somewhat harmless old man.

Vaermina · Feb 26, 2018

HanEmpire said:
Why remove the "with a" part? That's Paul being serious.

Because that would read like he was looking at her with an expression instead of giving her a look of seriousness while making the statement.

Mr Zoat said:
Half right.

Wait really?

Ganurath · Feb 26, 2018

Vaermina said:
Wait really?

Yep. "I look at her completely serious expression." speaks of her face, while "I look at her with a completely serious expression." speaks of his. Zoat was doing the latter.

Vaermina · Feb 26, 2018

Ganurath said:
Yep. "I look at her completely serious expression." speaks of her face, while "I look at her with a completely serious expression." speaks of his. Zoat was doing the latter.

I know... I changed it that way because it made more sense grammatically that he was looking at Jade's completely serious expression when making the response then looking at her with an expression.

Ganurath · Feb 26, 2018

Vaermina said:
I know... I changed it that way because it made more sense grammatically that he was looking at Jade's completely serious expression when making the response then looking at her with an expression.

Her expression had already been described in the second line, so it'd be redundant to do so again if it hadn't changed. Paul's expression changing in response to the new information from Jade, on the other hand...

TheLastOne · Feb 26, 2018

King of Frost said:
If these are the "get bitten and you turn into a zombie" kind of zombies then that would have actually been a very intelligent move.

If they're not those kind of zombies, then yeah pretty stupid move, I'm almost thinking it was someone trying to kill Alan. Someone who thinks he's just a somewhat harmless old man.

Eh, he's Blue now, and zombies make me think of the Black Light, which we've fought incarnations of before this point.

Oh I am slain! · Feb 26, 2018

Excellent, a job applicant! A bit gimmicky to start with a surprise practical demonstration, but definitely shows initiative.

These zombies wouldn't pass as living, though. I don't think Paul should hire this necromancer.

Navi-Hank · Feb 26, 2018

ThrawnCA said:
There is a smell of curbstomp in the air...

Ah, one of my favorite smells

Marcus.D.Basterd · Feb 26, 2018

Pizza said:
What an adorable family.

Also, somehow I don't see these guys having a plan for anti-grav constructs. My personal favorite constructs to use against big brutish beaters.

Oh yeah, that's fun.

King of Frost said:
If these are the "get bitten and you turn into a zombie" kind of zombies then that would have actually been a very intelligent move.

If they're not those kind of zombies, then yeah pretty stupid move, I'm almost thinking it was someone trying to kill Alan. Someone who thinks he's just a somewhat harmless old man.

If it was something like the "vampires" from The Strain, with a projecting stinger, it would work even better.

Edit: i mean, if a necromancer is going to make their own zombies manually then it's just good engineering to take out all the unneeded parts, and if you're going to have all that space then you may as well fill it with tools to be better at what you are going to use them for.

Removed · Feb 26, 2018

Mr Zoat said:
Half right.

...better than Vaermina normally manages...

ThrawnCA · Feb 26, 2018

Ah, good to see the back of the Star Conquerors... figuratively speaking, of course.

Mr Zoat said:
a good college to

a good college for

Mr Zoat said:
; yes.

, yes.

I am telling you;

I am telling you:

Mr Zoat said:
honest, Mister Grayven;

honest, Mister Grayven:

stack of papers rise... and float

stack of papers rises... and floats

protestant right

Protestant right

Mr Zoat said:
set of lights come

set of lights comes

cardboard outer spirals open

outer cardboard spirals open

Mr Zoat said:
to walks away

to walk away

had already lectured

has already lectured

Mr Zoat said:
right hands

"both hands" or "her right hand"

Mr Zoat said:
faced pressed

face pressed

Linn

Is this intentional because Miss Shimmer doesn't know enough English?

Mr Zoat said:
probably going to be seeing a little more of each other, certainly.

Definitely might be an inconsistency there.

Mr Zoat said:
getting'

gettin'

for long time

for a long time

Mr Zoat said:
wretched hive of villainy

What about scum?

Mr Zoat said:
up besides me

up beside me

too quiet for me to make out

Surely not if he wanted to hear it.

they're both about as strong as Canis

That reminds me, I don't recall him ever offering to augment Zatanna? She could become an un-squishy wizard, or even more dangerous, effectively have Time Stop at will without the prohibition on direct attacks.

up in to

up into

Mr Zoat said:
I've been reluctant to use angel feather tipped arrows

Uh oh, the pointy stick launcher has got inside his head...

effort on her face have

efforts on her face have

Mr Zoat said:
their Human form

their Human forms

Mr Zoat said:
use this submarine back

take this submarine back

Mr Zoat said:
arms man's

armsman's

all you got, abomination!

all you got, abomination?!

Mr Zoat said:
Sandra give me

Sandra gives me

Mr Zoat said:
to rest of

to rest on

Mr Zoat said:
dropping the guns which

dropping the guns, which

Mr Zoat said:
another thing coming

another think coming

shower of bricks mark

shower of bricks marks

Mr Zoat said:
has three components;

has three components:

Mr Zoat said:
follows Richard and I

follows Richard and me

Maxx Crowley · Feb 26, 2018

RichardWhereat said:
Primary school

And which one is that?

Avernus · Feb 26, 2018

Mr Zoat said:
"You had a very different childhood to me, didn't you?"

"than", since she's American-raised.

shepsquared · Feb 26, 2018

Maxx Crowley said:
And which one is that?

Prep to Year 6?

Pinklestia · Feb 26, 2018

Emerald Oracle said:
Methinks Savage is unhappy one of his greatest foes yet lives, and has been reborn greater than ever before. I could be wrong, it might be someone else, but this says Vandal Savage to me. It's not complicated enough for Per Degaton.

Savage prefers science over magic. As seen when he was mad because of a nanotech virus and used nazi super science weapons to go on a rampage.

If it was him, the guys would be Frank Jrs.

Maxx Crowley · Feb 26, 2018

shepsquared said:
Prep to Year 6?

Oh, Elementary. Yes, it had a library, but was rather limited on the mythology as I remember. Just one greek one that I took out so many times the librarian gave it to me.

shepsquared · Feb 26, 2018

Maxx Crowley said:
Oh, Elementary. Yes, it had a library, but was rather limited on the mythology as I remember. Just one greek one that I took out so many times the librarian gave it to me.

I picked it up by playing age of mythology and looking on the internet and in the library

With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Twelve)

Carbon-based biped

Literal Enthusiast

Delicious

Dedicated ragequitter

Everybody's just people.

Literal Enthusiast

Literal Enthusiast

Person of impeccable tastes (for destruction)

Wynaut?

[hopefully a] journeyman rationalist.

Carbon-based biped

Abomination

Erratic Aussie

Erratic Aussie