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Branding the geezer didn't seem necessary. Not with that level of hate anyway.

He's not wrong. This guy getting free would likely kill them all. Paul's already planning to kill most of them anyway though.

It's not like he was personally experimenting on the dude or something. He's just concern with having his station ripped to shreds when he lets a super powerful prisoner out.

Just say something to assure him that you can probably talk him down (play up the fact that you're the same race) and that you won't let him out of the telepathy-inhibitor unless you're sure he's stable.

Worst case, you might have to brand Cap Comet to stop him from losing his shit. That's a little bit less good PR for the princesses, but hopefully you can talk him around and get him calm enough that after removing the brand he's still be stable.

edit: I guess it depends on how painful being used as a living battery is.
 
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Branding the geezer didn't seem necessary. Not with that level of hate anyway.

He's not wrong. This guy getting free would likely kill them all. Paul's already planning to kill most of them anyway though.

It's not like he was personally experimenting on the dude or something. He's just concern with having his station ripped to shreds when he lets a super powerful prisoner out.

Just say something to assure him that you can probably talk him down (play up the fact that you're the same race) and that you won't let him out of the telepathy-inhibitor unless you're sure he's stable.

Worst case, you might have to brand Cap Comet to stop him from losing his shit. That's a little bit less good PR for the princesses, but hopefully you can talk him around and get him calm enough that after removing the brand he's still be stable.

edit: I guess it depends on how painful being used as a living battery is.

Thing is...even with all of that. Paul's gonna Paul.

Think about the few things in his time in Universe 16 and what has really pissed him off. He's been pretty brutal with every single one. With Comet here, not only is he Human, a Hero, and going through something that clearly offends OL (Which in and of itself is a bad thing to do.)but he's also got important history that could further the goal Paul is working towards with the two Princesses.

The guy has a legit concern no doubt. But all Paul wants is for him to shut up and do as he's told.

When you think about it, a big part of Paul's effectiveness as an orange lantern is his inability to accept the universe NOT working how he wants it. But beyond just powering his ring constructs, I can't help but think it also drives his actions. Like setting up all those deals with the pirates when he first got to Vega. Sometimes I wonder how much control/free will Paul even has, or if, in a weird way, he isn't just...well mind controlling himself.
 
Considering the alternative is trying to maintain continuity with the Writers screwing everything up?

It's a full time job. Jonni DC retired after getting killed by Darkseid, apparently getting killed by aliens in silly outfits isn't in her contract.

Then the Architects of Reality took over, but were defeated by Team 13, who objected to being erased from continuity. Well except for Traci 13, because she's half Asian, and the Nazi gorilla vampire, because the Architects thought he was cool, as long as he was willing to be called Primaul.

I'm not holding my breath that Traci will mention being on a team consisting of a pirate ghost, a caveboy who speaks French, an angsty vampire, a typhoid Mary from the future, a Nazi gorilla vampire, and her father in YJ season 3.

"Oh, this reminds me of when I fought Mt Rushmore on a pirate ghost ship," Traci says as the rest of the Team just blinks at her.
 
Going off of the wiki articles, Captain Comet in the comics has rebuilt his body via the power of his mind after dying once. So, he may not need OL to rebuild his body. He's also had a fling with Starfire in the comics, but that doesn't mean as much as it used to.
 
Going off of the wiki articles, Captain Comet in the comics has rebuilt his body via the power of his mind after dying once. So, he may not need OL to rebuild his body. He's also had a fling with Starfire in the comics, but that doesn't mean as much as it used to.


That was actually fairly out of character for him.
 
Considering the alternative is trying to maintain continuity with the Writers screwing everything up?
Hmmm, excellent point, thought I should also point out that several of the Time Tailors appear to resemble Grant Morrison, a writer himself.

The entity known as "The Writer" is also likely a member of their clandestine order, if not THE Time Tailor itself.
"It seems that your recent travails remain largely unnoticed. Pirates are staying calm and the Citadel isn't doing much of anything. Oh, my word, this region used to be a lot quieter. There's some lovely music coming out of-."

"What are you… Doing?"

"Getting out and about for the first time in three billion years. I've already reviewed everything on the database you gave me." She looks me in the eyes. "You know that party trick some AIs like to do to show off to organic creatures; processing a few hundred lines of communication all at the same time?"

"The AIs I've met have been patterned after Humans."

"Ah. Well, one of the many things we Maltus-originating groups can do is process data in a similar way. Not multi-threading so much as multifaceted awareness. We're rather clever, you see."

"So you just..?"

"Checked out the entire region, yes.
You know, on a later date, Paul should probably broker a deal between the Pantheons of Earth and the Maltusians.

Pure supernatural beings, unbound by MANY if not ALL mortal limitations of flesh and mind, have to literally split themselves into new gods, (like the Olympians did), just to process a whole bunch of faith of over several millions, (about 56.8 million in the Roman Empire, 25 BC), while physical beings like the Maltusians can process a WHOLE BUNCH of info in galactic region, almost instantaneously.

Them gods need to learn some new tricks, if you don't mind me saying so.
 
Headhunting (part 26)
27th July
06:22 GMT


"Mister Blake?"

I'm standing outside of the cage, the systems around me now near-silent. The golden energy which old Earth and Tamaranian records show to be the visible effect of his telekinesis is crackling less frequently, though the apparently random spurts are still earthing themselves in the frame. The power is being diverted into capacitors, so if Emperor Damyn had any plans for his defence he better hope he has enough batteries. The device the Psions were using to encourage Mister Blake to lash out lies in pieces on the floor. In the unlikely event that I decide to study it there are backups, but at the moment I'm more concerned with the man himself.

"Mister Blake?"

I can see colours inside him. I can see the shallow rising and falling of his chest. He's alive at least. But I can't scan deeper than his skin. As far as I and the elder Citadelian know everything that would suppress my ring has been turned off, save for the frame and the suspension field. If I can't scan him then he's the one stopping me. A self-protection reflex? Sounds plausible. Ah heck, I wish I'd asked Alan more about him. How his abilities work. Yes, asking him about other superheroes he knew well seemed logical and there was no real reason to go back to a man who he didn't know all that well and who hadn't been on Earth for over fifty years. Still…

"Mister Blake? Are you with us?"

His eyes are blank, lifeless, his pupils pointing at the floor and not tracking anything I wave in his line of sight. So, choice is: leave him and join the princesses, keep trying to get his attention, or remove the cage.

"Orange Lantern Two Eight One Four to Princess Komand'r."

An image of her head appears above my ring. "Two thousand eight hundred and fourteen what?"

"
It's the number of the Sector I come from. Since I can't say my name and since there's more than one Orange Lantern now. Power should be down now. Any trouble?"

"A few traps, clever in nature, foolish in utilisation. A few soldiers, hopelessly outmatched. We should have control of command in minutes. Will you be joining us when we kill the Emperor?"


Branding him.. might be better. I'm confident that my ring can bypass whatever security the Citadel has once I can directly access the components… "Seen any Psions?"

"Not yet. I'm looking forward to that."

"
We need their knowledge, Komand'r. Don't do anything rash."

"I do know how to assimilate."


Yes, she does. And I'm sure that gaining the knowledge of a top level evil scientist won't have any negative effect on her mental state at all. Or encourage her in unfortunate directions. "I'll be with you as soon as I can. Two Eight One Four out."

I lower my ring and take an x-ionised knife out of subspace. Okay, let's… Let's assume that he wakes up. What's the thing most likely to encourage him to respond positively -or at least rationally- to my presence. His parents died before he left, his sister Edna died in nineteen sixty one… Shit, he probably doesn't know-. Wait a second. He was born in the thirties. He'd have been a teenager during the Second World War. I could use Alan's voice or a hologram-. No, he's a telepath, that wouldn't work-.

Oh, just get on with it.

I reinforce my environmental shield, add telepathy defence constructs (not enough to keep him out, but strong enough that he probably won't be able to reflexively kill me) and stab the part of the frame closest to me with the knife. Lights go out over a chunk of the frame, so hopefully it isn'turk-urk-urk!

**[Ships drifting in the void as flame flares through holes in their hulls, then goes out as the spilling atmosphere is consumed.]**

I'm slammed back against the wall of the chamber as the frame explodes in a flare of gold-white energy!

**[The first rank accelerates to a sprint as fast as their bulk allows, firing shots at any Citadelian not with us. The second rank advances behind them at a walk and the rear rank uses their power armour to leap up, firing while in the air.]**

Part of the wall melts as the suspension field generator superheats the metal around it and falls out in a pile of slag. Mister Blake grasps his own body in a white/gold aura, his eyes glowing the same colours.

**[Gold/white light around me as my ship accelerates away from Earth.]**

**[Oh shit, opening fire with everything!

"Did you dare think I was not prepared to die for my cause as well?!"]**

Crushing pressure across my body! I'm being held together by my environmental shield, but he can crush harder than I can resist! Why did he have to access that memory?!

**[A living room, Nabu's voice over the radio explaining that the aura keeping the All Star Squadron out of Europe has collapsed.]**

And you couldn't just have been fixated on Diana like every other teenaged boy? I mean, okay, her old costume was a bit frumpy-.

**["Commodore Amalak, Mister Jarko, may I make a suggestion?"

Jarko waves his left arm languidly. "By all means."]**

There were perfectly good reasons why-.

**[Two old style Tamaranian navy vessels fly through space towards the Citadelian ships protecting a convoy of slave transports. The Citadelians fire, their gravity distortion waves being stopped dead by a gold/white energy field.]**

**It's to your credit, but minimising violence and allowing a transition to a more peaceful-.**

**
[A snort of agreement. "Throwing in that axe thing was a great idea. Can't stop playing with it. Like my daughter with a new doll." Another snort. "He wants me to ask if you want to make this a regular thing."]**

With an effort I force my mind to jump tracks.

**["My intention is to absolutely abolish the ownership of sentient beings in Vega, but for now…" I gesture towards a nearby building. "Please, avail yourselves of the facilities."]**

**
[King Myand'r greets the returning slaves in person, embracing his daughters before moving on to the others.]**

**
Mister Blake, I'm trying to free you!**

**
[I nod, getting to my feet. He shifts forward to the edge of his chair and gets his feet directly under him before rising. "I'll see you.. when I.. see you, I suppose."

He nods, holding out his right hand. I step toward him and wrap my arms around his chest. "I'm sorry I couldn't do better."

He puts his arms around my back. "Just don't ever stop trying."]**

"Urff."

Mister Blake lurches slightly in the air, his eyes now directly focusing on me.

**How long?**

**You've been here for about forty years. We're about to capture the control deck and-.**

The pressure around me vanishes and the glow around him intensifies.

**Then this is forty years overdue.**

There's a flare of light, and he's gone.
 
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I seem to recall Paul having said something to Komand'r about prolonged imprisonment and trauma impacting humans differently than Tamaranians.
 
Will admit kinda hard to keep track of who's thoughts are who's sometimes especially with the orange quotes.
He nods, holding out his right hand. I step toward him and wrap my arms around his chest. "I'm sorry I couldn't do better."

He puts his arms around my back. "Just don't ever stop trying."]**
What is this from? OL's or Blake's memories?
 
**You've been here for about forty years. We're about to capture the control deck and-.**

The pressure around me vanishes and the glow around him intensifies.

**Then this is forty years overdue.**

There's a flare of light, and he's gone.

oh dear. hopefully, he's going to be willing to let OL do his plan, there are enough ships that even without the citadel complex they could be a serious threat.
 
The formatting for this is confusing. There is a lot of punctuation to keep track of. Maybe use a different font for activated memories? Something that makes them a bit more distinct.
 
Yet again, Zoat's stylistic choice for how he does dialogue makes it incredibly difficult to tell who is speaking.

I'm sure this is, of course, intentional this time. That confusion is supposed to be there. But like, I had no idea who the violet text was referring to.
 
Yet again, Zoat's stylistic choice for how he does dialogue makes it incredibly difficult to tell who is speaking.

I'm sure this is, of course, intentional this time. That confusion is supposed to be there. But like, I had no idea who the violet text was referring to.
This.
Alan nods. "I… You've told me your reasons. I don't.. like it, but then I don't much like what Nabu did either. You… Planning on leaving the planet now?"

"I've got three more stops, but… Yes, after that."

"You told me that you wanted to be a super hero so you could make the world better, not just stop it getting worse. With Nabu, I guess that you did what you had to. But that sort of thing… That's not what you set out to do."

"No, it isn't."

"When you get out there…" He looks up at the sky for a moment. "Which are you planning to do more of?"

"Starting the Corps is building, but the Corps will probably be mostly used to make war with the Reach… Destroying the Citadel Complex is killing, but I want to help their victims rebuild afterwards. I haven't… I want to build, but there are so many… Really horrible things out there… I'm not sure that it's an efficient use of… Me."

"No. No. Don't think about it like that. Don't give up on what makes you you. In three months, you can come back and talk it through with me and with Diana. Help you out some."

I nod, getting to my feet. He shifts forward to the edge of his chair and gets his feet directly under him before rising. "I'll see you.. when I.. see you, I suppose."

He nods, holding out his right hand. I step toward him and wrap my arms around his chest. "I'm sorry I couldn't do better."

He puts his arms around my back. "Just don't ever stop trying."
 
I have no idea what the fuck was going on there. What the hell was that punctuation and formatting?

EDIT: Zoat, just use italics to indicate memories/flashbacks, here. It would make things vastly easier to comprehend immediately.
 
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