Transposition, or: Ship Happens [Worm/Aoki Hagane no Arpeggio | Arpeggio of Blue Steel]

I'd say Taylor unequivocally won

Actually, I'd also agree that this is pretty much a complete loss for Taylor. Not only do U & L achieve everything they were going for, with zero apparent repercussions, Taylor is forced to show extensive use of her abilities to an extremely wide audience, long before she wanted.

On the other hand, this isn't actually a problem. Taylor should lose sometimes. The only problem is if you intended the readers to see this as a win.

I'll also note that I did not pick up the emotional experience you were trying to impart. While reading, I thought Taylor seemed mostly bored and a little exasperated at being forced to do this, and from your comments, it sounded like you wanted her to be enjoying the fight.

Honestly, based on her complete lack of reaction after the fight, I assumed she had dialed down her emotions again without even realizing it.
 
Okay, this bothers me.

The plasma front isn't because of friction, it's because of compression. The ideal gas law says as you smush more and more gas into a smaller volume(or the same volume), pressure increases, causing a temperature increase. (PV=nRT, with R being the gas constant)

Sorry, but that's a misconception that really annoys me.

Yeah, I realized that a bit later, but forgot to change it. Oh well.
 
Seriously people this is Worm, you know the setting with localized temporal resets, bombs that turn all surrounding matter to glass, and a dimensionally locked organism that can move around somehow but still needs air to survive. The jet didn't give off a giant heat profile because it contained some tinker bullshit to prevent it from doing so, it isn't like that stretches disbelief further than all the other crap that happens in Worm.
 
Seriously people this is Worm, you know the setting with localized temporal resets, bombs that turn all surrounding matter to glass, and a dimensionally locked organism that can move around somehow but still needs air to survive. The jet didn't give off a giant heat profile because it contained some tinker bullshit to prevent it from doing so, it isn't like that stretches disbelief further than all the other crap that happens in Worm.

Except it's not Tinker bullshit, it's Fog bullshit. And that's another matter entirely, because Fog bullshit does a better job of pretending to play nice with physics.
 
I'll also note that I did not pick up the emotional experience you were trying to impart. While reading, I thought Taylor seemed mostly bored and a little exasperated at being forced to do this, and from your comments, it sounded like you wanted her to be enjoying the fight.

Honestly, based on her complete lack of reaction after the fight, I assumed she had dialed down her emotions again without even realizing it.
I have to agree with this. To me Taylor came across annoyed with Uber and Leet wrecking what was a great day with this stunt. She just wanted to kill the dragon and get out of the pocket dimension. Didn't really read anything that indicated Taylor was enjoying the fight at all.
 
That is true. Then the question becomes how much of her original 'programming' remains.
Probably all, but it doesn't matter. Shards move between entities all the time and I doubt they allow their shards to send off information to opposing Entities in the case of conflict, so there should be programming to prevent such occurrences. QA will probably just treat Broadcast as though it is a shard of an opposing entity and not send out the data.
 
Could it be possible to make the ship so air mostly goes through it instead of around it then?

Not and have it work.

However, a handwaved that works is "Fog dimensional dickery".

Look, what we need is a low CD and a small surface area to minimize compression, shock front, and thus sonic boom. Fog dickery that causes air to treat the ship as having a smaller drag area than it does is an acceptable handwave for story purposes.
 
Actually, I'd also agree that this is pretty much a complete loss for Taylor. Not only do U & L achieve everything they were going for, with zero apparent repercussions, Taylor is forced to show extensive use of her abilities to an extremely wide audience, long before she wanted.

On the other hand, this isn't actually a problem. Taylor should lose sometimes. The only problem is if you intended the readers to see this as a win.
I uh, did concede that point, and also noted that I was approaching it from a more fight-oriented perspective than such a general one.

There's also the problem that "winning" and "losing" often aren't so clear-cut, especially in a more realistic setting like Worm where (like with the Simurgh) winning can still be a loss. I'd say that in this, both Taylor and U&L (and their shadowy funder) came out ahead in the end. Taylor got her fight, U&L increased their viewership and did so in a way that didn't have them risking their necks, etc. Now, from the perspective of Taylor "defeating" U&L, yes, that was an objective she failed to achieve. She didn't catch them. Couldn't stop them. In fact, and this is something I want to make a point of, she was practically helpless. There will be some important reflection on that.

I'll also note that I did not pick up the emotional experience you were trying to impart. While reading, I thought Taylor seemed mostly bored and a little exasperated at being forced to do this, and from your comments, it sounded like you wanted her to be enjoying the fight.

Honestly, based on her complete lack of reaction after the fight, I assumed she had dialed down her emotions again without even realizing it.
Well, shit. It wasn't necessarily meant to be enjoyable, much the same way her Lung fight wasn't enjoyable. Still, it was meant to be satisfying to her in some degree once it was over, but I clearly screwed up with the last scene.
 
Actually, I'd also agree that this is pretty much a complete loss for Taylor. Not only do U & L achieve everything they were going for, with zero apparent repercussions, Taylor is forced to show extensive use of her abilities to an extremely wide audience, long before she wanted.

On the other hand, this isn't actually a problem. Taylor should lose sometimes. The only problem is if you intended the readers to see this as a win.

People are forgetting to include the nice piece of exotic alloy shaped as a sword that Taylor got as consolation price; Is a really nice new toy for fog!Taylor to do SCIENCE, and fog + SCIENCE are a truly terrifying combination, not a victory for Taylor but not a complete loss.
 
most or all, she only got another entity level user.
Probably all, but it doesn't matter. Shards move between entities all the time and I doubt they allow their shards to send off information to opposing Entities in the case of conflict, so there should be programming to prevent such occurrences. QA will probably just treat Broadcast as though it is a shard of an opposing entity and not send out the data.
Choose word very very poorly. Should have been "original 'priorities' remain".
But I do admit that you are probably right in that QA has changed owner.

Jack Slash is properly screwed isn't he if he appears in this fic. Siberian could be a problem thou. Taylor is substantially faster so it wouldn't be that much of a problem.
 
People are forgetting to include the nice piece of exotic alloy shaped as a sword that Taylor got as consolation price; Is a really nice new toy for fog!Taylor to do SCIENCE, and fog + SCIENCE are a truly terrifying combination, not a victory for Taylor but not a complete loss.
...correct me if I am wrong, but that was basically just a regular slab of metal until Taylor modified it. Which she could do to anything else she got her hands on and wanted to monkey with.

I will agree, though, that the latter half of this chapter was basically a drawn-out hype for seeing Uber and Leet get their just desserts, and then...well.
 
...correct me if I am wrong, but that was basically just a regular slab of metal until Taylor modified it. Which she could do to anything else she got her hands on and wanted to monkey with.

I will agree, though, that the latter half of this chapter was basically a drawn-out hype for seeing Uber and Leet get their just desserts, and then...well.

Nope, it was tinker-metal
 
I will agree, though, that the latter half of this chapter was basically a drawn-out hype for seeing Uber and Leet get their just desserts, and then...well.
Which in a way makes it more realistic. Because life does not have to follow narrative tropes with the bad guy stands over the hero cackling about how they have won, only to find out that the hero is about to kick their ass.

Instead they can be watching from the safety of their lair multiple miles away just in case the hero does win (and wants to really kick their ass for this stunt).
 
Which in a way makes it more realistic. Because life does not have to follow narrative tropes with the bad guy stands over the hero cackling about how they have won, only to find out that the hero is about to kick their ass.

Instead they can be watching from the safety of their lair multiple miles away just in case the hero does win (and wants to really kick their ass for this stunt).
I mean, I could point out that to set this up, they had to somehow either personally be nearby or get their equipment nearby, otherwise they're apparently capable of sucking individuals into a pocket dimension from pretty much anywhere in the city at will. They had to have been personally present, really, to speak and interact with Relentless to give her the sword, at least for a few minutes. It could also be indicated that, at least so far as I recall, the dragon was remarkably "organic" or non-technological in nature, which is well outside of Leet's normal bailiwick. Alternatively, you could try to float the idea that it's all somehow a simulation or tangible illusion, but at that point you're seriously reaching for plausibility.

And it's not like they could have prepared the ground ahead of time, since this had to have been set-up on with hours at best of preparation, given that Relentless does not (that we know of) have any set pattern of behavior that could be used to anticipate her location well ahead of time.

But the important thing is, if you're deliberately invoking tropes, it builds a certain expectation in your readers. Dashing those expectations, intentionally or otherwise, is not necessarily productive. Not necessarily wrong or bad either, but the reactions you get may not be what you want.

Case in point here, I think.

Personally speaking, I'm not really sure what the Leet and Uber encounter really added to the plot. It seems, in large part, there just for the action scene. There's no clear character development. No confrontation or interactions. It does not seem to contribute anything but to establish a set of "bad-ass credentials", for the most part.

Sure, you can see where there are potential hooks out of it. The duo's paymaster, the tinker-sword, or maybe public reactions to what Relentless is capable of. But none of those really require the scene as it plays out, and could easily have been fulfilled by alternate, less extravagant or drawn-out means.
 
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Okay, last few scenes have been mucked with. Tell me what you think.
 
I mean, I could point out that to set this up, they had to somehow either personally be nearby or get their equipment nearby, otherwise they're apparently capable of sucking individuals into a pocket dimension from pretty much anywhere in the city at will. They had to have been personally present, really, to speak and interact with Relentless to give her the sword, at least for a few minutes. It could also be indicated that, at least so far as I recall, the dragon was remarkably "organic" or non-technological in nature, which is well outside of Leet's normal bailiwick. Alternatively, you could try to float the idea that it's all somehow a simulation or tangible illusion, but at that point you're seriously reaching for plausibility.

And it's not like they could have prepared the ground ahead of time, since this had to have been set-up on with hours at best of preparation, given that Relentless does not (that we know of) have any set pattern of behavior that could be used to anticipate her location well ahead of time.

But the important thing is, if you're deliberately invoking tropes, it builds a certain expectation in your readers. Dashing those expectations, intentionally or otherwise, is not necessarily productive. Not necessarily wrong or bad either, but the reactions you get may not be what you want.

Case in point here, I think.

Personally speaking, I'm not really sure what the Leet and Uber encounter really added to the plot. It seems, in large part, there just for the action scene. There's no clear character development. No confrontation or interactions. It does not seem to contribute anything but to establish a set of "bad-ass credentials", for the most part.

Sure, you can see where there are potential hooks out of it. The duo's paymaster, the tinker-sword, or maybe public reactions to what Relentless is capable of. But none of those really require the scene as it plays out, and could easily have been fulfilled by alternate, less extravagant or drawn-out means.
They were there, at the beginning before they buggered off.
 
"You want a show!?" I yelled, knowing they could hear me. "I'll give you a show!"

If they wouldn't give me a tool to fight this thing, I'd make one.

I held the sword at my side, the blade pointed forward, perpendicular to me. Mindful of the way this would look, I clenched the hand holding the hilt tighter.

And I allowed my nanomachines to move away from my hand.

I intentionally kept them from being easily visible, having them emit light and glow like my sigils, a band of light that traveled down the blade, looking like it altered the blade as it did.

Where they passed, I played with the matter.

The metal was like nothing I'd seen before, and was extremely difficult to manipulate. From all appearances, it was even stronger than what was around my union core. It had a number of exotic effects and properties, so I'd need some time to really examine it if I wanted to replicate it—in the middle of fighting a dragon was not the time. Still, I could move around and re-bind the atoms with some effort, which is what I did.

Nop, it is a Tinker alloy, one she could even use to reinforce her union core if she wanted to, she just need time to properly digest it for later consumption.
 
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Hmm. How good a look at the shield and the pocket world did Relentless get; does she know enough to make her own exit and/or pocket world, or is that redundant with having a sideways in which to store antimatter?

Another thought crosses my mind; given storing antimatter sideways, can Taylor store a reserve of nanomaterial sideways of her human body, so she's not limited to just what's capable of fitting within the volume of her physical form?
 
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