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Equalist said:
ehhh... i though story had perfect amount of seriousnes ham and crack but Valerie i think was a mistake as a character she doubles the amount of crack in the story and it's feels too much now. Serious elements are still there but more and more random crack ass elements and characters slowly introduced and i think its starts to mess with pacing and a feel of the story, with every few chapters things get even more random and there is more wtf moments beyond a good joke.
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Nah, not really. Maybe the eye-spy-thingy was a bit much, but if she has some how triggered while near Armmaster then it could explain how she cramped so much stuff into it. The rest was pretty tame. Now Tech just needs to groom guide her into the right path.
 
This is why I love this story. It's more than just a well-written wish fulfillment of utilizing fictional tech, and it's even more than the sociopathic Tinker of Fiction being led on a semi-stable path by others: it's other people growing, struggling, learning. Taylor and the other members of Heavy Gear have had their own journeys.

This is new, but I can't say that I mind. It's nice.
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I'm pretty sure they've hugged before, so is it more the surprise nature of the embrace?

Equalist said:
ehhh... i though story had perfect amount of seriousnes ham and crack but Valerie i think was a mistake as a character she doubles the amount of crack in the story and it's feels too much now. Serious elements are still there but more and more random crack ass elements and characters slowly introduced and i think its starts to mess with pacing and a feel of the story, with every few chapters things get even more random and there is more wtf moments beyond a good joke.
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I mean, I personally think that while I'm not interested in her due to just liking other, more established elements and characters, what she represents makes sense.
 
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For some reason, Valerie's situation reminds me a lot of what Bonesaw was like prior to the Slaughterhouse 9 ruining everything. Almost makes me wonder when that particular shoe is due to drop. I'd guess that that'll occur when she gets announced. At that point, I'm sure the other members of the 9 will want to go for Brockton Bay, no matter what Jack says. I'm sure Bonesaw will want "an older brother, an older sister, and a younger sister!" (retch)
 
Guestman said:
For some reason, Valerie's situation reminds me a lot of what Bonesaw was like prior to the Slaughterhouse 9 ruining everything. Almost makes me wonder when that particular shoe is due to drop. I'd guess that that'll occur when she gets announced. At that point, I'm sure the other members of the 9 will want to go for Brockton Bay, no matter what Jack says. I'm sure Bonesaw will want "an older brother, an older sister, and a younger sister!" (retch)
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You think Jack would want to stay away?
 
EVA-Saiyajin said:
You think Jack would want to stay away?
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Jack might be confident in his own "skill", which is actually just his shard cheating behind the scenes. IIRC though, the Protoss crystals Peter uses in all his tech fuck with shard comms, which might counter Broadcast. And even if it doesn't The Fight and the Blades are connected to no shards and are not under the direct control of a parahuman.
 
I loved to see again that relationship between Peter and Taylor. It was very nice having him calling Taylor sis sometimes in the past so any bonding time it's a good thing... and by the goddess, they deserve that a lot.
 
Will Glen say yet another phrase?

Something about Merchandising? 20 times base is not enough!

Will Pete suggest oiling the chair?
 
Excellent chapter as always. Although the last line made me laugh out loud.

Poliamida said:
"Ah, Heavy Gear, I was expecting you," Glen Chambers greets us with a cat on his lap.
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I could totally see the dread head of the Parahuman Response Team pulling the Bond villain intro. Before anyone jumps on me about Glen not being the leader, he is their go to public relations guy, and you can't spell PRT without PR (Bad Joke is Bad)
 
Sebazu said:
This one was just 5k ... wow, those are going to be heavy, arent they?
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You have no idea. In more ways than one.
Equalist said:
ehhh... i though story had perfect amount of seriousnes ham and crack but Valerie i think was a mistake as a character she doubles the amount of crack in the story and it's feels too much now. Serious elements are still there but more and more random crack ass elements and characters slowly introduced and i think its starts to mess with pacing and a feel of the story, with every few chapters things get even more random and there is more wtf moments beyond a good joke.
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My intention for including her wasn't just for 'hilarious hijinks' but for something more intentional: I want Peter to find himself in the role of a teacher. I want him in a situation where caring for another human being isn't just about building a lot of OP tinkertech and gifting it to them, but to actually guide them. I have big plans for her that I trust you will like once it all gets revealed.

There's also another reason for her introduction that I hope gets clarified once the next planned interlude rolls around.
Guestman said:
I'm sure Bonesaw will want "an older brother, an older sister, and a younger sister!" (retch)
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You are, in fact, 100% correct. Extra points if she can roll all of them into 1.
 
Poliamida said:
idea of bolding the new
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building
Poliamida said:
miniature Poppy-Buster
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What's that?
Poliamida said:
botter me,
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bother? bottle?
Poliamida said:
At first glance, the place would seem empty, but even if my visor hadn't told me the opposite it'd be easy to notice that the leather chair is turned back to the windows and that there are a pair of broad arms peeking from each side.

With a screeching noise of metal not having been oiled in decades, the chair turns around.

"Ah, Heavy Gear, I was expecting you," Glen Chambers greets us with a cat on his lap.
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Glenn you magnificent genius!
 
Doccer said:
What's that?
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The Poppy-Buster, which is actually spelt Poppibuster and is an Artificial Rare Blade from Xenoblade Chronicles 2, if memory serves, is/was the giant suit of power armor that Peter could enter inside of and full immerse himself into the Zerg hivemind. He observed through Newt and The Fight's eyes I believe, perhaps whilst they were sparring or something? But he wanted to hide away inside it at one point to escape from having to deal with reality. It was first mentioned in Chapter 46 and in Chapter 52 was when Peter upgraded it with Zerg technology to link to human biology.

Edit: Yes, I just went back and confirmed that Peter also witnessed the Turrets playing DnD, or Test Chambers and Monsters, before seeing the Newt vs The Fight spar, with The Fight having her new Poppi Mk2 body, and he spoke with them.
 
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This chapter was good. While Valerie was a bit ~~eh for me, I do understand what she represents and am interested to see how she plays out if the Slaughterhouse shows up.

I can kinda imagine a spiderman meme moment with them both pointing at each other.


The conversation with Taylor and Peter was good and well due. It was nice to see Brockton recovering. Getting things we know as the reader out and clear in the air between the two of them was good to see. I mean look at it, it is two people talking things out and growing as a result. Do you know how hard that kink is to find?

Poliamida said:
"Ah, Heavy Gear, I was expecting you," Glen Chambers greets us with a cat on his lap.
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All that said, this was a great moment to cap the chapter off with.

It was a happy go lucky kind of chapter, and honestly that makes me scared.
 
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