It seems that my intent didn't carry through in the vote. Because that was what I was going through, with one addition: proof. We don't just need to say "oh, we are also an inheritor of ancient power". We need to immediately and discerally prove that to an elder dragonblooded who a) almost certainly has social charms, and b) has no reason to trust us on the face of it - remember, we feel like an archdevil on vacation at first glance. Hence the use of the term exaltation (which Molly knows, and which Molly knows applies to dragonblooded too), and SCCP to carry on the intricacies of meaning.
Note that I am using an empathy excellency, not an etiquette one - it's meant to be an emotional appeal.
In terms of substance, I also offer more. Not just retreat to Sanctuary, which is admitting defeat and escaping the world - something which stubborn and prideful dragon's blood is unlikely to agree to easily, but also a place in the new world to come, and help in stocking the powers of their line.
I did edits to my vote (highlighted and underlined in the quote below):
It wasn't meant to be formal, which means I am a failure of a writer. And I feel that first impressions are super-important here. Which is why, if we make the claim, we need to immediately, in the same words, prove it beyond their very reasonable and ingrained doubts. We don't want them to think us lying.
On the substance of your vote - just Sanctuary offer is, I feel, a bad decision. Dragonblooded almost certainly have had the chance to retreat to NeverNever realms before. They are still stubbornly clinging to the world. Roaring their defiance to the inevitable, even as they dwindle down to nothing over uncontable generations. So, to make a good offer, we need to give them a way forward to glory, not just a way to gracefully admit defeat. Survival alone is not a good offer. We need to offer them life, the way to greatness again. Which is what I am trying to do. That's what "A place in the Age to come" part of my offer is about.
