Threads Of Destiny(Eastern Fantasy, Sequel to Forge of Destiny)

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That time limit is what sells me, I wanted it after we'd secured our relations with the lake (and hopefully gotten some intel off of it as gossip) but this'll be good enough.

[X] Song of Snows
 
[X] Song of Snows

Kek. Ling Qi is going to blast through G5 and G6, having gotten all the prerequisites for G7 already. Per Yrs the single biggest reason most Greens don't make it to Cyan is the advanced insight bottleneck, and Qi's got all three before she even made it to G6.
 
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out away from the lakes
out away from the [lake/lakeside]

the distant flume's
the distant flumes

a voice to listen too
a voice to listen to

"Course you weren't. "You gonna be okay out here, uh… Clan head?"
"Course you weren't. You gonna be okay out here, uh… Clan head?"
(extra quotation mark in the middle)

under the creature's impassive gaze."
under the creature's impassive gaze.
(extra quotation mark at the end)

before it starters
before it starts

the beasts head
the beast's head

Her junior sisters could
Her junior sister could

little clouds over white
little clouds of white

from the sheeps muzzle
from the sheep's muzzle

I'm glad your enjoying this though.
I'm glad you're enjoying this though.

What'll you be up too
What'll you be up to

Well lets get his girl back to her group huh?"
Well, let's get this girl back to her group huh?

seat."I know it must have been even more drought when Lady Cai left for a few weeks.
seat. "I know it must have been even more fraught when Lady Cai left for a few weeks."
(missing space at the start, typo in the middle, missing quotation mark at the end)

leaning upon the railing of the balcony they were on the polished wood groaned.
leaning upon the railing of the balcony they were on. The polished wood groaned.

doesn;t it
doesn't it

solute
salute
 
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