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2) That is just amazingly stupid, Larfreeze has been staying in his cave for literally thousands of years so it wouldn't be surprising that he would be more than a legend. If people heard rumors then you would expect the governent to investigate things thoroughly instead of be stupid enough to bomb every place for the equivilent of a big foot sighting. If some random drunks said they saw the beast you'd think they would rationally send someone to check it out and make sure. That includes talking to said person to make sure it isn't a misunderstanding. Even then pissing off someone on Larfreezes level is a stupid idea and the super weapons should only be used if you failed to negotiate or convince him to go back to his cave.
Except that a few months ago, OL accidentally kicked that particular hornets' nest, remember? Truggs stole his ring, he invoked the Ophidian to conjure it back, he accidentally used too much power and got an image of all of Larfleeze's rings being pulled out of Okaara?

"Spring in Blume", remember? Larfleeze sending out Construct Lanterns to find all those missing rings? The GLC being on alert about roving Orange Light undead? Did you assume the systems closest to the epicenter of Farfleeze's freakout would have missed all that?

If the Vega Systems don't know and fear the Beast of Okaara, then it's because somebody came by and erased their memories of the last few months.
 
Except that a few months ago, OL accidentally kicked that particular hornets' nest, remember? Truggs stole his ring, he invoked the Ophidian to conjure it back, he accidentally used too much power and got an image of all of Larfleeze's rings being pulled out of Okaara?

"Spring in Blume", remember? Larfleeze sending out Construct Lanterns to find all those missing rings? The GLC being on alert about roving Orange Light undead? Did you assume the systems closest to the epicenter of Farfleeze's freakout would have missed all that?

If the Vega Systems don't know and fear the Beast of Okaara, then it's because somebody came by and erased their memories of the last few months.

And how many people actually saw those? There is literally entire worlds and Larfreeze could sense his rings with a very large range through his lantern construct. Would the governments even be willing to admit that the Beast is real or actually about?
 
You do remember that one update where OL was getting training from senior Leaguers on how to manage nonpowered criminals in a South American city, right? Him and the other members of the Team being trained in various elements of situational awareness and tactics was rather A Thing in the story, even if it was mostly relegated to the status of a very minor subplot.
This is probably the best point so far about why Paul should be significantly less oblivious. It's possible that - by shutting off all of his translation functions and not knowing the local body language - he didn't get the secondary indicators that this is 'fleeing' instead of 'parade'.
But that's the sort of thing he should generally get right with translation on and being aware that it's a thing; rapidly vacating the premises has a limited number of causes but very few of them are good.
 
And how many people actually saw those? There is literally entire worlds and Larfreeze could sense his rings with a very large range through his lantern construct. Would the governments even be willing to admit that the Beast is real or actually about?
Well, apparently everyone in this bar recognized the symbol of the Orange Lantern Corps on sight, and the bartender called it the Beast's mark, so apparently either the Beast has been a known factor in the Vega Systems (possibly through the Psions, who must have lost an expeditionary force or two, or even just the Guardians telling the local warlords that if anybody fucks with Larfleeze, then the deal that keeps the GLC out of their territory is off and a lot of people are going to die) or the rampage of him and his Construct Lanterns throughout the galaxy got primetime slots on extraterrestrial news networks. Either seems plausible.

PS: his name is Larfleeze, with two Ls.
 
The alien nanites have scry wards. Duh.

A well earned funny rating for that one.

What I find especially funny about it is that it's actually possible

1) During the Genesis event, Resurrection Man was captured but the blood test couldn't find the nanites. So either the godwave made them cease to exist for a while, or they have a stealth mode. Or I suppose Mitch resurrected with the power to make his nanites invisible to blood tests

2) The tektite powered alien ape the Warp Child uses his reality altering powers to give the beat down to the entire JLA, including Kyle. So the tektite aliens are one of the few groups in DC franchise who can go <cough cough> when someone talks about the lantern rings being the epitope of weapons technology
 
Say you, there is literally nothing shown to imply that they get this kind of training in canon or this story. Superheroes are usually volunteers who just happen to have powers. I would assume that they would just assume that heroes would just use common sense.
I don't buy that argument at all

Don't you think that Robin doesn't get this training from batman, and that both batman and robin shouldn't have noticed after a year that Paul is painfully oblivious.

Why would you train someone to better use their powers in combat without teaching them when to use said powers. It's just like how martial art classes in our society has a lot of focus on reading a situation and preventing violent confrontaions in the first place they don't just go "now I've taught you every thing you need to win most fights 1v1! And remember if you ever get into a potential fight, don't run away or diffuse the situation like a pussy. A real (wo)man of power never backs down from a fight! You're libs are offically classified as a weapon now use them!"
 
Change "they think Paul is the Beast of Okaara" to "they noticed he has an Orange Lantern Ring and those have been causing a LOT of trouble ever since thousands went flying out of Larfleeze's cave."
This is also true. According to Word of Zoat, they know of the 'Beast of Okaara' in Legend, and a Cave where people go in and don't some out. That means if strictly true, they shouldn't know what he looks like. If he came out infrequently in antiquity or some people did get away there would be a really old, possibly vague description. Before the ring thing, Someone knowledgeable in lore might associate the Orange Glow and the symbol with the Beast, but would more likely consider OL like those Satanists who emulate the Devil, not the Devil himself. After the Ringsplosion coming from the cave, followed by the Construct hunt, him being a Ring Bearer is more likely.

Then again, the people who decided he was the Beast were drunks in a bar. That should count for something. More rational people might conclude the fast that this does not feel like the Apocalypse happening right now points against it really being the Beast. And the Thanagarians adhere to the Hawkwoman school of Diplomacy. People are running away from him, so he is a bad guy and you can beat up and not get in trouble. They probably don't even really know who or what the Beast of Okaara is supposed to be.
 
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People your forgetting the Fact that with in the Last Year the Beast sent out a Swarm of Orange Constructs. The Whole of Vega know he exists now.
 
Vega, Baby (part 4)
10th July
15:11 GMT -5


One by one I deposit the ceramic tankards down in front of my new drinking buddies. "I've really got no idea what you people see in this stuff."

The larger of the two Thanagarian men shakes his head as he raises the mug to his lips and… Sucks down one of the worms sticking out of the froth. "Pff. Aliens."

I sit down next to him, slurping up a small amount of my own green and.. slightly gelatinous drink. It tastes a little like… Some sort of flower..? It's not unpleasant, at least. My other new companions are setting their tankards back down, having necked about half of the volume in what I can only assume is some sort of competition.

The woman opposite me narrows her pupils and pulls her wings back slightly, Thanagarian body language for 'you have my full attention'. She has short-cropped white hair and a tanned skin I don't usually associate with Thanagarians. "Not The Beast, huh?"

"I assure you that Larfleeze would not respond to an attack by buying a round."

"Larfleeze, is it?" The only Thanagarian still wearing her Hawk-helm makes a sort of hissing noise. Thanagarian for mild derision. "I hope the Beast of Okaara would put up more of a fight than you did."

"I derive no particular pleasure from combat." I shrug-. Then realise that they probably aren't familiar with the gesture. "So while I could probably neutralise you all without causing you lasting harm-."

The man next to me twists his head to look me full on, his mouth slightly open and his wings slightly… Raised? Hunched? Disbelief. Even if they're mostly humanoid, their body language is different enough that I'd be lost without the ring translating it for me. "Yeah? You and what army?"

Orange filaments flicker around the room, depositing Praexis Demons in their wake.

"That army." His mouth closes, and the rings tell me that his expression is one of wary respect. Two of his colleagues have their hands on the hafts of their weapons, releasing them only after I dismiss the Demons. "Seriously. Don't go after Larfleeze. You'll be killed, converted into orange constructs, enslaved and then he'll know everything you do."

The blonde woman -and I can't believe that hair is regulation length- looks away for a moment, before giving me her full attention. Irritation. "And are we to believe that you have nothing to do with him?"

"I've never met him. Though… I am probably responsible for his recent.. activity. He doesn't like sharing the orange light." And… My drink is finished. I half turn, waving the glass at the bartender. "Something else..?"

He reaches for a bottle of something pink. "Coming right up!"

I return my attention to the Thanagarians. "I've… I know that Thanagarians sometimes have… Curious attitudes to personal protective equipment, but-."

The other Thanagarian man bows his head slightly, wings extending slightly over his shoulders. "We were at a party when the emergency alert came in. We didn't have time to do much more than grab our weapons."

I nod. "Good response time. Considering." I frown. "Wait, why are you on alert here? Thanagar doesn't-."

The white haired woman makes a sort of flicking gesture with her right hand. "We're not soldiers. We're mercenaries. With all the visitors they're having, the planet's government decided they needed a few more peace officers around the place. Our flight got assigned to Raggashoon."

The big chap thumps his tankard down. "Yeah, lucky us. It's all fun and games now, but you can bet things are going to heat up when the negotiations finish."

"Sorry, I-." The bartender puts my new drink down in front of me, "Oh, thank you." I look around the table, eyebrows raised. "I didn't think to ask your names?"

Blonde topknot turns her head slightly aside. Too many possible meanings to readily translate. "You didn't give us yours, either."

"Do you have a universal translator?"

White hair nods. "We all have translators. We couldn't possibly-."

"No." I lean forward slightly. "Universal translators. The super-advanced ones that can handle any mode of communication."

Big guy exhales sharply. "On our pay? Why, what's it matter?"

"I can't say my name, but I've got it written on a card. In English, which you can't read." And which can't be written phonetically in any modern Thanagarian languages. I make a dismissive gesture with my right hand. "Orange Lantern Two Eight One Four at your service."

"You're a Lantern?" / "There are other colours-?"

Helmet and thin man glance at each other, then narrow their eyes and incline their heads slightly.

"I'm Olio!" The big Thanagarian taps me on the back of the head with the… Wrist, of his left wing then points with his left arm. "Olio Thux. That's Rayn Kral and Skalla Kol." The two glaring at each other. From where he's pointing I think that Rayn Kral is the male one. "Corla Tavo." Topknot. "And our flight leader-" A squad leader rank with no direct equivalent. "-Tarra Karn."

I raise my now half-empty glass in a toast, then bow my head and create construct-wings on my back. I fan them back, underside facing towards the floor.

Flight Leader Karn pulls her head back. Surprise. "You know our body language."

"Universal translator." I let the wings fade. "And yes-" I lay my hands on the table, palms upwards and ring sigils on display. "-they do come in other colours."

Ms Tavo smiles, a less friendly gesture amongst Thanagarians than it is amongst Humans. "How about that."

Mister Kral tilts his head to the left slightly. "So, the Beast of Okaara-"

"Who isn't me."

"-is just a Lantern. I mean, yeah, Lanterns are powerful, but… They're not that powerful."

"Larfleeze is an ancient and quite insane Lantern who draws his power directly from the Orange Central Power Battery. He's much more-."

Ms Karn gives me her full attention. "There's a Central Power Battery on Okaara?"

"Yes."

Olio nods. "Ancient and powerful whatever, that's probably worth taking the risk. Any power rings down there?"

"Dozens at least. Possibly hundreds. But you should understand… Larfleeze has taken all comers for as long as there has been sentient life in the Vega Systems. And not just locals; the orange light reaches out to the greediest beings in this universe. It draws them to Okaara. They challenge him, those people most in tune with the light he wields, and he always wins. Sure, it's tempting… But do you really think you're that good? Do you want to risk it when the penalty for losing isn't merely death, but your soul bound in eternal servitude?"

I look around the circle again, and none of them meet my eyes.

"So. You said something about a negotiation?"

"Yeah." Olio taps his tankard on the table, then upends it. Empty. "But that's a two drink question."
 
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Ahh paul. Thinking diplomatically with booze. Awesome.

They might be New 52 characters, but that doesn't mean they didn't exist in Universe 16, just that their stories don't.
 
10th July
15:11 GMT -5

Alright, I take back any negative things I may have thought about the last update. I kinda assumed this entire thing was going to start off with OL making a big scene and proving how "badass" he is. I've been reading some, well, let's just call them less than stellar SI stories lately. Don't know why I assumed this would be like those, I already know this is one of the best out there in terms of writing quality. Great to see this went the way it did, it's much better than I thought it would.

So, how did the situation lead to them sharing a drink anyway? What actually happened after the shock grenades went off?
 
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I'm... Choosing to believe that they existed before that, but never made it onto the page.

Considering that the only other option would be an neigh endless parade of original characters (who would then need to be fleshed out) I say you made the right choice. Hell, feel free to plunder other intellectual properties if needed. Using existing characters, regardless of their place in DC canon, is an excellent way to shorthand in a lot of fleshed out characters without having to worry that they will dilute your own story.

Edit: At this point I has resolved to insist that the inclusion of "neigh" and "plunder other intellectual properties" are both present as part of a subtle joke.

Curse your misleading lack of red lines spellcheck.
 
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Considering that the only other option would be an neigh endless parade of original characters (who would then need to be fleshed out) I say you made the right choice. Hell, feel free to plunder other intellectual properties if needed. Using existing characters, regardless of their place in DC canon, is an excellent way to shorthand in a lot of fleshed out characters without having to worry that they will dilute your own story.
Sunset is over in Grayven's team, not Paul's. :V
 
Thank you, corrected.
So, how did the situation lead to them sharing a drink anyway? What actually happened after the shock grenades went off?
Shock grenades of the type they were using wouldn't work against most Lanterns. Some combination of the SI dodging them and holding up his hands while the bartender shouted that it was a mistake persuaded them to stop attacking long enough to get the whole story.
 
Okay, surprise cordial talk is really fun. They seem pretty chill, and I can appreciate that.

Tarra Karn seemed like a lot of things when I read Ion, but chill and sensible was not one of them.

EDIT: Then again, chill for a Thanagarian...

Upon rereading Ion, she comes across as more reasonable than I remembered. Mea culpa.
 
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Well. That deescalated quickly. Good to see that not all of the New 52 was completely horrible; merely the vast majority of it. Speaking of, which version of Kommand'r will you be using in your story? From that one snippet from way back, it sounds like she got taken alongside Koriand'r in this version of events.
 
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