Nah, it went beyond that; the time freeze is simply the rough
timing as opposed to the end-all issue, although I do consider its existence a mistake all on its own. The issues were incidents I like to think I've now learned from as opposed to ongoing problems, although pointing out the existence of a few is what will hopefully
keep them from being ongoing problems. For example, narratively sidelining Nanoha: She
did help Jade a bunch during timeskips, but that wasn't exactly shown onscreen. That'll probably stick around for a bit longer since she's a bit of a workaholic and now she has an impending deadline, but it can be avoided now that someone pointed it out.
The OOC handling of the Sidhe "Family" vote was another notable recent incident. Yes,
Jade's view of the subject is a little screwed up, IMO.
but
vetoing it
during execution instead of
warning during voting was my fault.
QMing is a learning experience, but longer quests inevitably run into the problem of
having learning experiences be a thing. Ones that haven't gone on as long and were made later can attract new readers without worrying as much about past mistakes while older and longer ones continue to have them pose problems for new readers. Related (edited into first post yesterday):
Fair warning for new readers: I, as a QM, made several major mistakes across the course of this quest. Feedback helps me learn from them and avoid repeating said mistakes, but I'm told a few major ones continue to make new readers drop this story years after they were made. Despite those, the tone of the story gets progressively lighter until I'm told the difference is "like night and day." If you can push past those — skipping chapters if you feel you need to — I don't think you'll find any ramps next to those particular shark tanks in future chapters.
That being said, I really do appreciate feedback. If something makes you drop the story, even if it's just simple boredom? Feel free to PM me about it. I won't bite your head off.
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