[x] The Shadow That Speaks
Leadership, Performance, Etiquette, all sounds nice for non-threatening behaviour?Just keep in mind the social for that one is very much 'commanding your servants with dread threats'.
Leadership, Performance, Etiquette, all sounds nice for non-threatening behaviour?
We are not subtle or emphatic, but we are not exactly a blunt intrument either.
Good enough.Leadership is for people who are already your minions. Performance is if you want to move people to your side with some kind of grand song, literally sound the charge or dance into the fray slaughtering your enemies artistically. Etiquette would work wonders on the few beings the wold be future ruler of Hell would think of as something like equals. It's those damn squishy morals that fall though the cracks... and they should be careful of that since there is boiling oil, maggots and nuclear fire down there.
It has good social in some areas. For the most part though it's pretty mediocre, and Molly's not a facepuncher.
This is a run-on sentence, it would be best if you break it down.It should have been scary, it should have been disgusting, the sound of its pulsing blood all about you... but it wasn't, it was comforting, like when you and Rosie had taken blankets to the tree house to sleep up there when you had been little and you had told scary stories to each other, and read books under the covers for the atmosphere, pretending you were like Marry Shelly and Lord Byron.
Run on sentence, same as above.The thought worms its way into your thoughts like a maggot, if you had been smart enough, if you had been clever enough, if someone anyone had told you how it was supposed to work, but they hadn't, they hadn't and now you were here making deals, listening to the heartbeat of the demon, slow yet somehow you know infinitely quick.
There should punctuation between "you" and "it". I would also go back and revise this paragraph and the one before it. Reminding someone that you have a name only works if you've already introduced yourself, which he has not. Having Molly ask it later makes the flow of the chapter a little awkward."I have a name mistress," the prim vice rang in her thoughts. "Demon makes for a poor signifies since it carries implications of wanting to harm you it always makes me start and twist around in a knot, not that being twisted in a knot can't be a perfectly acceptable thing at the right time but..."
She has never been a brawler before.Molly is not a brawler and never has been. Her strength is subtlety and precision, and her failure was the result of fundamentally clumsy manipulation. Therefore, go with the option that makes Molly better at social.
Demon Weapons
The Shintai is equipped with deadly armaments such as claws, fangs, or horns. Its Brawl attacks inflict Strength + 2 lethal damage. Alternately, the Shintai appears bearing a terrible demonic weapon capable of inflicting Strength + 2 lethal damage with Melee attacks.
The Crown of Glory
The Infernal may touch a wicked spirit that has submitted itself utterly to her authority, spend 1 Essence, and transform it into a suit of ghastly armor that looks like it was made by butchering the spirit and using its hide and bones as construction materials, giving her +2 soak dice. She also manifests a melee or ranged weapon befitting the spirit's nature, such as a scythe studded with fangs or a pistol that fires flesh-devouring insects instead of bullets (this weapon has normal traits for a weapon of its type, save that its damage is aggravated). The armor and weapon reconstitute themselves back into the spirit at the end of the scene (or sooner if the Infernal wills it so), but the spirit is ever-after tied to the Infernal from that point onwards until it is destroyed or she willingly releases it from its compact. When she spends 1 Essence, or at no cost while her anima is flaring, she may reflexively summon the spirit to her side from wherever it may be in the cosmos and instantly transform it into her panoply once more.
I don't feel fully comfortable with zero Academics, since we still have our regular life to deal with.
The reason I gave Molly a dot in drive in all the options presented is that I recalled she could drive in canon by this point, now you are free not to give her that, but that means 'demon ate my ability to drive' is something you will have to deal with
Crown of Glory is very cool, just keep in mind that you need to dominate some kind of evil spirit and twist it to your will, if you do so openly it will change how people look at you and there are also questions of how Molly will justify it to herself. Not that she cannot do it, to be clear, just keep that in mind as well. This is not Skull Crusher the Tremendously Cool riding around creation on his spiked Leviathan, it is Molly Carpenter.
[X] August Witchblade Princess
I don't feel fully comfortable with zero Academics, since we still have our regular life to deal with.
But on the other hand, simply having high INT stat should be enough for regular school.