I don't suppose Rachel has considered wearing some sort of poncho or loose robe over her evil looking trenchcoat?
Gestalt, A Worm x PMMM Faux-quest
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Kell of Snow
Verified TinTin enjoyer
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Welp. I guess we're abandoning the timeline.
We gotta find someone to wish it out of existence, it's the only way to be sure.
- Location
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Fargo even mention that and has a somewhat coherent explanation about it from a character funny enough.
Kkutlord
Prince of Breath
- Location
- Indianapolis, Indiana
Well, Magical Girls do tend to form strong bonds with each other and rarely reveal their Magical Girl life to others. So logically it makes more sense they'd be attracted to others who could understand, and Tuxedo Mask from Sailor Moon is like the only Mysterious Protector I can immediately recall dating one of his Magical Girls. There's rarely any major male characters in a Magical Girl show, and even then most male love interests tend to be in the know like Syaoran from Cardcaptor.
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It's that explanation. But the character also cynically compares to "prison gay" phenonenon implying she saw being a meguca is like being sent to jail. ..only to happen in the exact age where those girls "solidifies" their sexuality.
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Dalek Ix
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Taking a break from writing today, so feel free to give me your questions and impressions so far!
She has done that in the past; however, doing so runs into problems when she gets into a Witch's barrier. Normal clothes aren't really made with the punishment a Witch Hunt can bring in mind, and enchanting a poncho to be strong enough to do so will just leave Rachel wearing a poncho that matches the rest of her costume. Which kinda defeats the purpose.
While the Witchbomb is known amongst some veterans, actually disseminating the knowledge to other magical girls is a lot harder than you'd think.
Knowing that you're gonna end up as an insane, grief-stricken nightmare who, in the best case scenario, will be hunted down by your successor before you get the chance to harm someone you care about is not conductive to one's mental health and it takes a not-inconsiderable amount of mental fortitude to survive that. In other words, an infohazard.
Because of the risks involved, girls who do know tend to be very, very careful with that information.
I mean, you're in an enviroment where 100% of your peers are female, your relationship with them is a matter of life and death, and you're at the age where you're starting to figure out which way you swing and which trees you're barking up, so to speak.
But yeah, the PM community does have a somewhat disproportionate amount of lesbians and bisexuals, although how much of that is coincidence, magic, natural selection, the Incubator having a laugh, or a lack of options is a matter of occasionally-violent debate. Straight Magical Girls do exist, though. Sarah is one, for the record (and, being herself, likes to poke fun at her "rarity").
"I'm an honorary cryptid, actually!"
She has done that in the past; however, doing so runs into problems when she gets into a Witch's barrier. Normal clothes aren't really made with the punishment a Witch Hunt can bring in mind, and enchanting a poncho to be strong enough to do so will just leave Rachel wearing a poncho that matches the rest of her costume. Which kinda defeats the purpose.
While the Witchbomb is known amongst some veterans, actually disseminating the knowledge to other magical girls is a lot harder than you'd think.
Knowing that you're gonna end up as an insane, grief-stricken nightmare who, in the best case scenario, will be hunted down by your successor before you get the chance to harm someone you care about is not conductive to one's mental health and it takes a not-inconsiderable amount of mental fortitude to survive that. In other words, an infohazard.
Because of the risks involved, girls who do know tend to be very, very careful with that information.
I mean, you're in an enviroment where 100% of your peers are female, your relationship with them is a matter of life and death, and you're at the age where you're starting to figure out which way you swing and which trees you're barking up, so to speak.
But yeah, the PM community does have a somewhat disproportionate amount of lesbians and bisexuals, although how much of that is coincidence, magic, natural selection, the Incubator having a laugh, or a lack of options is a matter of occasionally-violent debate. Straight Magical Girls do exist, though. Sarah is one, for the record (and, being herself, likes to poke fun at her "rarity").
"I'm an honorary cryptid, actually!"
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Kkutlord
Prince of Breath
- Location
- Indianapolis, Indiana
Good thing Taylor hasn't Contracted yet, and really knowing about the Witchbomb is a big deal for any Potential. If only for moral reasons, wouldn't a decent person tell a Potential that? I get some are indifferent or actively want more Witches, but I figure someone would be willing to tell Taylor.
Realistically there probably are Magical Boys out there, or some particularly insightful Meguca realized the extremely low Magical Boy population before Contracting. We know they can literally create life with their Wish, and there absolutely had to be some girls who went "I wish for the perfect boyfriend".
Though ultimately runs into the base problem that the population of male supernatural beings would be even lower and less connected than Meguca proper. That and most Meguca would probably be too indifferent even if they knew they could make an artificial boyfriend.
MWKillKenny84
Lurking from the Trauma Switch.
- Location
- Vado Ligure
I suspect all the factors combined, but chiefly the Lack Of Options one.
TheOmnimercurial
Dragon Bard
- Location
- UK
I'm loving this Fic so damn much!
Dalek Ix
Verified Dalek
The problem with the bolded line of reasoning is that, by virtue of mathematics, most Witches will come from Familiars, rather than from Magical Girls. And since it takes at least some time between contracting and falling, there's a non-zero chance that the contracted girl will become your competition.
And as for telling Taylor, that runs into the not-insignificant problem of "what if she tells Rachel?"
Wishing for "the perfect boyfriend" is surprisingly more common than you'd think. Of course, the result can vary wildly depending on the circumstances, the potential of the contractee, their wording and intent, and so on, but they have a certain reputation.
If only there was a bunch of superpowered boys around.
The male ENE Wards all simultaneously wake up in cold sweat.
Thank you! I won't pretend the blistering update schedule I gave myself hasn't given me a workout, but reading the comments from everyone here and on SB is what keeps me going; be it praise, criticism, insights or discussion.
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In which Sarah finds her phone.
Dalek Ix
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[X] Be Sarah
But why wouldn't you be Sarah? Hm?
Anyway, Rachel's little request wasn't too hard to fulfull; just make sure The Terrible Trio didn't go up to the roof before school let out. While this would normally put you in the line of fire of one Emma Barnes, she'd seemed quite content to, as far as she was concerned, leave her victims on the roof, smiling every time a teacher called their names and nobody answered.
Which was perfectly normal behaviour from her.
<<Sarah? Anything on your end? School should be out by now.>>
<<Nope! Scopes are clear or whatever and Emma hasn't even tried going up to gloat at you, who are totally still up on the roof and being frozen and miserable. Got my stuff?>>
<<Yeah, yeah...>>
Which brings you to right now; still inside the school. Your "friends" are headed for their respective homes, and you stayed behind because you lost your phone somewhere (you accepted their condolences with due graciousness). Your parents, meanwhile, have just gotten a text that you'll be hanging out with some friends of yours, and will be coming back a little later.
You slip your phone into your jeans pocket, and stand very still, listening to the sounds of Winslow High emptying from your hiding spot in one of the second floor classrooms. Lieing to your "friends" is easy; part of the play-acting, almost, that is coming to school as a Magical Girl. On the other hand, telling Kyuubey Truths to your parents is just this side of acceptable as far as you're concerned.
You open the door a crack and peer through. Nobody is approaching the starway leading up to the roof. You'd ran ahead of the pack, somewhat, meaning it would be a little bit before- Aha~!
Emma Barnes struts into view, flanked by Sophia and Madison. Madison makes a move to go towards the roof access, but none of the others follow after her. She stops, confused. Emma and Sophia come to a halt a moment afterwards, and although you can't hear it from here, you can imagine the redhead asking her less menacing lackey what, exactly, she thinks she's doing. Madison responds, but Emma cuts her off sharply. Sophia says something.
You watch, thoroughly entertained.
Eventually, Emma snaps something at Madison, and storms off, an unfathomable look to her face. Sophia doesn't immediately follow, first telling Madison something. Madison hesitates, and a look flashes through her face.
Uh-oh.
<<That being said,>> you send in Rachel's direction, <<I think Madison might give it a try.>>
<<Fffffffffuck me, we're on our way!>>
Madison is hesitating. She's glancing between the roof access and where the other two vanished to. Torn between social pressure and not letting two of her classmates freeze to death!
Hah.
You steady yourself, put on the most vapid, clueless, cheerfully happy expression in your arsenal, and burst out of the room, raising your phone like it's the olympic flame.
"FOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOUND IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIT~!"
Madison shrieks, jumping a foot into the air. She rounds on you, face flush with rage when she sees who it is.
"Sarah, you stupid bimbo!" she snaps at you, who is too busy making a little victory dance at having "found" your phone, "What are you even-?"
"Found my phone~!" you clarify, presenting said device, and beaming at her as brightly as the sun.
"... Congratulations," Madison deadpans. You smile, as if she meant it. You open your mouth, intent on giving her a volley of vapid, empty-headed comments about how lucky you are that nobody stole your phone, but are (fortunately for Madison) interrupted by noises coming from the roof. You recognize them as the sound of two people coming to a less than graceful landing on top of each other. Along with Rachel swearing.
Madison swears under her breath, but you ignore her, cocking your head at the sound. You frown, slightly, pretending to know absolutely nothing.
"What was that?" you wonder, and secretly relish the brief panic you see in Madison's face, before her expression suddenly brightens, as if she suddenly had an idea.
"Must be a couple who couldn't keep it in their pants," she tells you, and you pretend to be shocked, shocked!
"If you can get me a pic of them, I'll put in a good words with Emma for you, what do you say?" Madison whispers conspirationally, lying with a smile. You giggle, nodding along with her plan. Armed with your phone, you head towards the roof access.
"... dumbass," you hear Madison say under her breath, and then hurry away from the scene. Your empty-headed smile slides off, replaced by your real smile.
Bitch.
You slip your phone back into your jeans pocket. Quietly, you climb the stairs towards the roof, coming to a stop right before the door. You listen; there's no sound coming from the other side.
Smirking, you unlock the door and throw it open. Just as you expected, Rachel launches herself towards you, expecting Madison to be the one opening the door.
Time seems to slow down. You watch Rachel's expression go from utter fury, to confusion, to terror as she realizes that she's headed right for a trap, airborne and unable to stop. The smaller magical girl crashes into you, and your arms snap around her, pulling Rachel into a tight embrace.
"Aww, I missed you too!" you coo, swinging Rachel around to get rid of her momentum. "Hey Taylor!" you greet the other girl. You squeeze Rachel against yourself and... huh.
"... Where's Madison?" Taylor asks, snapping you out of your musings, her heavy backback in her arms. She tries to see behind you, obviously expecting her least-intimidating tormentor to be right behind you. You step aside so she can see that's not the case.
"Well, she was having a tiny moral dillema over if being on Emma's good side is worth the guilt of leaving two classmates to freeze overnight or not," you answer, "But then I came around and solved it for her." You look down at Rachel. "Am I great or what?"
"LET GO OF ME," your neighbor roars, "NOW."
You pout. "Awww... but you give Taylor hugs!" you whine. "It's not fair!"
"SARAH YOU ARE LETTING GO OF ME OR I WILL MAKE YOU."
You let go. "Fine," you sigh. Pausing for a moment, as Rachel busies herself with dusting herself off, you then casually add, "You know, I think I know why Taylor likes your hugs so much."
There's a pause. Rachel is frozen still. Taylor has a blush so bright it's almost incandescent.
With a scream of frustration, Taylor throws herself at you, swinging her backpack. The heavy weight hits your chest, ("Ooof!") then your back, ("Argh!"). It slips from her grip, but Taylor doesn't relent, calling you every insult under the sun as she starts pounding every part of you that she can reach with her fists.
Shielding yourself from her blows, you hide a smile.
[-] That night.
Sarah is really their best worst friend, hehe.
I know it's been said elsewhere but there are some really amusing parallels of Rachel and Taylor to Madoka and Homura. It really feels like we are in the first time line and Taylor is going to make a looping wish and instead of Walpurgisnacht it's going to be an Endbringer, Leviathan unless more messing with the timeline occurs.
In this analogy, I guess Sarah is some horrifying amalgamation of... Sayaka and Mami?
It's funny because Taylor's potential should be utterly immense given what she did in canon and this is feeling like the PMMM anime where the whole driving question is what Madoka will wish for... Though I suspect that Taylor making a wish won't be the end but the beginning ish.
I do have a question for you; has Rachel and Taylor discussed what to do for grief seeding hunting? I feel like Rachel would prep Taylor as much as possible before she even seriously considered doing a wish. If Taylor does her wish, she will either need her own territory or will have to combine with Rachel. Well, does her wish and survives for longer than a week.
Actually, what's the word on magical girl teams?
I know it's been said elsewhere but there are some really amusing parallels of Rachel and Taylor to Madoka and Homura. It really feels like we are in the first time line and Taylor is going to make a looping wish and instead of Walpurgisnacht it's going to be an Endbringer, Leviathan unless more messing with the timeline occurs.
In this analogy, I guess Sarah is some horrifying amalgamation of... Sayaka and Mami?
It's funny because Taylor's potential should be utterly immense given what she did in canon and this is feeling like the PMMM anime where the whole driving question is what Madoka will wish for... Though I suspect that Taylor making a wish won't be the end but the beginning ish.
I do have a question for you; has Rachel and Taylor discussed what to do for grief seeding hunting? I feel like Rachel would prep Taylor as much as possible before she even seriously considered doing a wish. If Taylor does her wish, she will either need her own territory or will have to combine with Rachel. Well, does her wish and survives for longer than a week.
Actually, what's the word on magical girl teams?
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Jamie Roberts
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Dalek Ix
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(Feed me comments plz.)
Yesterday's chapter was technically supposed to be Tuesday's. I'm seriously considering going to a slower schedule, since I no longer have the same wealth of free time I had in the past.
[Hyena-like cackling in the background.]
The problem with Rachel prepping Taylor that much is that she's low-key hoping Taylor doesn't contract at all. Taylor's a mess, mentally speaking, and Rachel is terrified about what that would mean for her new friend's lifespan after she contracts.
Unfortunately for Rachel, there's no easy way (for her, at least) to tell someone who desperately wants to be special that they're too depressed to be special without coming off as a massive asshole.
So now Rachel's in a rather uncomfortable postion. She can't refuse to help or answer questions if Taylor asks as that would just push her away, and worsen her chances when (or if) Taylor contracts. But she also doesn't want to encourage Taylor to contract, since it's not exactly a lifestyle which Rachel would reccomend to anyone, to pit it mildly.
And as for magical teams:
Yesterday's chapter was technically supposed to be Tuesday's. I'm seriously considering going to a slower schedule, since I no longer have the same wealth of free time I had in the past.
[Hyena-like cackling in the background.]
The problem with Rachel prepping Taylor that much is that she's low-key hoping Taylor doesn't contract at all. Taylor's a mess, mentally speaking, and Rachel is terrified about what that would mean for her new friend's lifespan after she contracts.
Unfortunately for Rachel, there's no easy way (for her, at least) to tell someone who desperately wants to be special that they're too depressed to be special without coming off as a massive asshole.
So now Rachel's in a rather uncomfortable postion. She can't refuse to help or answer questions if Taylor asks as that would just push her away, and worsen her chances when (or if) Taylor contracts. But she also doesn't want to encourage Taylor to contract, since it's not exactly a lifestyle which Rachel would reccomend to anyone, to pit it mildly.
And as for magical teams:
Kkutlord
Prince of Breath
- Location
- Indianapolis, Indiana
Honestly at this point I just wanna know what canon Meguca/Potentials survived Japan, as I really hope Yuma replaces Vista as the resident badass adorable of the Brockton Wards. Seriously, there's no way Yuma didn't Trigger, she's literally one of the only Meguca for who "Inevitably become a nightmare abomination" was a legitimate improvement.
I get that, and I shall feed you comments!
An argument could be made that telling Taylor the logistics (grief seed management) of it would be another soft way to trying dissuade her without directly telling her she is too depressed to be a meguca. Could proooobably work in a slight discussion on how to save grief seeds for when feeling negative outside of meguca stuff.
Albeit this should all be done if we get closer to Taylor contracting. There is still the entirely possible thing that Taylor's wish is a reactionary thing to someone dying or bad shit happening like endbringer.
My personal theory is that Taylor is going to trigger at some point and then give it up for a wish.
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- She/Her
This story really leaves me on the edge of my seat. I'm super invested in where it's going to go.
Will Taylor contract? Will she trigger (I think not based on what you've said)? Will Taylor pull a Madoka in terms of wish scale? She definitely won't go for the same wish, because she is way different from Madoka. But she could go for something with a similar purpose. Or maybe something related to parahumans? Will she somehow resist the temptation of superpowers and a wish come true and start up a support system for Magical Girls? We just don't know!
Will Taylor contract? Will she trigger (I think not based on what you've said)? Will Taylor pull a Madoka in terms of wish scale? She definitely won't go for the same wish, because she is way different from Madoka. But she could go for something with a similar purpose. Or maybe something related to parahumans? Will she somehow resist the temptation of superpowers and a wish come true and start up a support system for Magical Girls? We just don't know!
In which a Witch is hunted
Dalek Ix
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[X] That night.
You are Rachel Zoranski, Magical Girl, and you are about to bring your normal, standard-issue-human friend Witch Hunting.
Standing right outside Taylor's house, transformed, you take a moment to digest that statement. Roll it around in your head. Ponder it.
Is this a good idea? No.
Is this safe? No.
Are you gonna do it anyways? Yes.
Yep. You are officially out of your mind.
"Sarah," you say, to the girl you're only barely tolerating because she makes this whole thing marginally safe enough to not be assisted suicide, "If you say the word 'date', or imply that this is a date, or anything like that at all, I will shoot you until there's nothing left to shoot."
"Mmhmm." Sarah, being Sarah, is completely unharmed from the ferocious beat-down that Taylor had delivered on the roof and even less apologetic.
"I am not fucking joking."
"I believe you."
You... Okay, it's physically impossible to intimidate Sarah, because the girl seems to be missing the part of her brain (or Soul, since she's a Magical Girl?) that's responsible for feeling fear. But you're reasonably certain that she understands that there will be severe consequences if she jokes around.
Resigning yourself to a... less than ideal hunting partner, you creep towards Taylor's house. You don't want to make a comment on other people's homes, especially considering the state of your family life, but... well, you have the feeling that this house's seen better days, to put it politely.
Glancing up towards the upper floor windows, you send a nudge.
<<Taylor?>>
Shadows move. The window opens, and you crouch down and jump, grabbing the windowsill and pulling yourself inside Taylor's room in one smooth movement. You blink at each other a couple times, and immediately look elsewhere.
Before either of you can say anything, Sarah follows you inside through the window. Taylor sends a glare at the unwelcome visitor, and Sarah gleefully ignores the hostility, looking around with interest.
"Nice poster!" she chirped.
Taylor shushed her harshly. "Quiet!" she hissed, "My dad'll hear you!"
"Sorry! Nice poster!" Sarah repeats, this time in a whisper, "Alexandria fan?"
You look and, sure enough, there's a poster of Alexandria pinned to the wall by the bed. Theres a few other bits of cape merchandise dotted about; small things, and on the cheaper end of the scale, but the prominent way they were presented spoke volumes about what their owner thought of them. Your own collection comes to mind and you feel more than a little self-conscious.
"Yes. What about it?" Taylor asks, a little defensively.
"Mouse Protector's my fave," Sarah whispers conversationally. Unsheathing her sword she thrust it skywards at an angle, missing the exposed cabling above by an inch. "Huzzah!" she stage-whispers.
Taylor and you turn your eyes to look at each other. Even without telepathy, you just know that the same thought crossed both your minds:
Good heavens, that explains so much.
... Wait.
<<Why are you whispering?>> you ask, switching to telepathy.
The three of you share looks.
<<... I'm still not used to using telepathy,>> Taylor admits.
<<It felt appropriate,>> Sarah put in, shrugging.
<<How am I the sneaky one?>> you wonder, <<Anyway... Taylor, you ready?>>
<<Yeah... about as ready as I can get,>> she answered. She was wearing even darker clothing than usual, and had her backpack slung over her shoulders. After some debate, she'd agreed to be the one carrying the medical supplies. You sincerely hoped that she didn't get the chance to use them.
<<Alright...>> You steel yourself. <<Let's do this thing.>>
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First Sarah, and then you, carrying Taylor on your back, jumped out of the window, closing it behind you. Jumping from rooftop to rooftop, you leapt into the night, explaining what you were doing to the girl awkwardly riding your back.
There's a skill to finding Witches. Your gems can feel their presence at a distance, but getting close enough for that to work, even with the relatively small size of your territory, took skill, patience, and knowing where to look.
(Speaking of which; you don't think Taylor's house is inside anyone's territory, at least according to the map of Brockton Bay that lives in your head, but... well, one can never be entirely sure.)
The first thing a magical girl has to remember, you tell Taylor, is that Witches both cause misery and are drawn to it. It's why hospitals are a good source. Or morgues. Or... well, the run-down, gang-infested neighborhoods of which Brockton Bay has a lot of. But it's also why one had to be on the lookout for strange things. Mass suicides. Deadly accidents (you feel Taylor tense). Crashing planes and derailed trains. Stuff that killed a lot of people that make no sense. You remember Alice musing that the infamous Jack the Ripper could've been the result of a Witch.
...or an especially murderous Magical Girl. You don't mention that part.
But, the point is that, by keeping a lookout for those sorts of things, one can get a rough idea where the Witch that caused would be. Hunt it down, get the Grief Seed you need to live another day, and stop it from hurting anyone else. Everyone wins.
Which is why, instead of making Winslow your first stop of the night, as usual, you're taking a detour. Two days ago, police had raided an abandoned house in an ABB neighborhood to find the occupants in various stages of rotting away. The verdict: mass drug overdose, not helped by the neighbors not notifying police.
You'd dug a little deeper. One's mother had given an interview, swearing up and down that her kid hated drugs with a passion, after a sibling had passed away from overdose. A father claimed that the other victims were not the friends his son kept.
But what really convinced you was a single photograph you'd found in a dark corner of the internet. A single, uncensored photo of one of the victims, where you saw, just faintly, a tiny mark on his neck.
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[X] Be Taylor
<<Got anything?>>
<<Not yet. Can't be much further.>>
I'm clinging to the back of a girl much shorter than me as she jumps from one rooftop to the next, and I have to wonder, "how did I get here?"
If I'm being honest with myself, I did ask Rachel to take me hunting with her. And she's a Magical Girl, and thus has cape-like strength and speed. Meanwhile, I'm... me. And while I was under no illusion that I'd be bringing much to a fight --magical crowbar or not-- being carried like an awkwardly-large backpack wasn't exactly what I had in mind.
<<And this is why hunting in pairs is always better than hunting by yourself. Just so long as you get enough to share between you.>>
Some deep part of me realizes that this is the strongest acknowledgement of the gulf between her and me. There's no way I could've kept up with them on foot, or even with a bicycle.
On the other hand, there's what Susan told me earlier today. We're doing this so I can cross that gulf I've been feeling between us; even if I end up being useless at least I'll be there. And as much as some part of me wants to just call out for Kyuubey and wish for the first thing to come to mind because I want to do more than that...
Make sure my wish means something.
... Yeah. And... well, if carrying me with her is slowing Rachel down, she's not showing any signs of it; she's hopping from one rooftop to the next quickly enough that we might just as well be flying, and anyone who thinks that doing that isn't incredible is just wrong.
Rachel pauses, making her Gem (her Soul) appear in her hand, bringing it up to where I can see it. It pulses with a grey-blew light, and as she slowly swings that arm from side to side, the strength of that glow dims... and then brightens, pointing in one direction.
<<Got it,>> she says, and there's triumph in her mental voice. <<Sarah! I've got something!>>
<<Where?>>
<<Bearing is... forty or forty-five degrees from where I am.>>
<<Great! That means nothing to me, though.>>
<<... Northeast.>>
<<Much better. Hmmm... Let's see- Ah-hah~! Got her~!>>
"Think it's the one we're looking for?" I ask. Rachel shrugs.
"Only one way to find out..."
[-] Be Rachel.
[-] Keep being Taylor.
Announcement (10/11/2021)
Dalek Ix
Verified Dalek
A couple of things.
First: For once, I'm actually interesed in what you, my readers, have to say about the options being offered. Should I present the following fight from Taylor's point of view? Should I instead go with Rachel?
Also, what does everyone here think of me occasionally showing things from Taylor's perspective?
Second: I've been re-thinking my posting schedule. What would everyone feel if I slowed down the pace to three times a week (those being Monday, Wednesday and Friday)?
First: For once, I'm actually interesed in what you, my readers, have to say about the options being offered. Should I present the following fight from Taylor's point of view? Should I instead go with Rachel?
Also, what does everyone here think of me occasionally showing things from Taylor's perspective?
Second: I've been re-thinking my posting schedule. What would everyone feel if I slowed down the pace to three times a week (those being Monday, Wednesday and Friday)?
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I feel like Taylor is an interesting perspective here. This is her first exposure to a Witch fight, to really wild demonstrations of magic, and that seems useful? And it lets us have a sense of her willingness to wish, which I think will be speculated on.
Kkutlord
Prince of Breath
- Location
- Indianapolis, Indiana
She thinks Magical Girls and Witches are separate beings. Jack probably Witched, since murdering people would be the kind of thing that'd break someone.
Taylor's PoV about the Witch Fight is more appealing to me, since it'd just be a "Tuesday" for Rachel.
I really don't mind the perspective shifts, and if you didn't then that information would somehow need to be shared with Rachel so the audience can know too.
Pace, I don't really mind- this should be fun for you, not a chore you feel compelled to work on.
No strong opinion here as both seem reasonable, but I'm gonna go with
[X] Keep being Taylor.
It's her first witch fight, and we have a lot less info on her mental state. Overall I'm fine with Taylor's perspective but IMO it's best as an occasional thing, giving us hints but not full answers.
As for posting schedule, I only just caught up so I can't really say. As a random internet person paying you nothing but my attention, I think 3 chapters per week is easily enough to stay relevant but the more the better. If reducing the rate raises quality and/or prevents making this a boring obligation I'm all for it (until you start hitting diminishing returns and with multi-month breaks, because then I'll have forgotten half the plot)
[X] Keep being Taylor.
It's her first witch fight, and we have a lot less info on her mental state. Overall I'm fine with Taylor's perspective but IMO it's best as an occasional thing, giving us hints but not full answers.
As for posting schedule, I only just caught up so I can't really say. As a random internet person paying you nothing but my attention, I think 3 chapters per week is easily enough to stay relevant but the more the better. If reducing the rate raises quality and/or prevents making this a boring obligation I'm all for it (until you start hitting diminishing returns and with multi-month breaks, because then I'll have forgotten half the plot)
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- Plato's Cave
"Well I hadn't actually thought about it before you brought it up just now, but since you did...."
-We will return in a moment after the bullet holes in the set have been patched-
Well, the good news is that you didn't get there by making the wrong decisions.
The bad news is that you didn't get there by making the right ones either.
I've always assumed there's some vague sense for distance to help narrow things down, but only working off of a bearing should be sufficient for most hunting scenarios. Not necessarily optimal, but being a Magical Girl makes going in a straight line to the origin less of a problem than it might otherwise be.
I think it depends on what you want to emphasize. Going with Rachel as the perspective will let you give a fairly detailed play-by-play on how the Witch fight goes, what Rachel/Sarah are doing, and more relevantly why they're doing it. You haven't written a proper Witch fight yet, and so it'd be a good way to get around to introducing the fighting styles used by Rachel and Sarah.
That being said, I think the more narratively relevant perspective here is Taylor's. Rachel has done this before, and god willing will do this again. Her perspective might be interesting from a technical standpoint, but this is going to be Taylor's first exposure and first reactions to the psychodelic nightmare carnival that is a Witch's Barrier. There's no way this won't have some impact on Taylor's perspective of "being a Magical Girl", regardless of whether or not it makes her feel like she's stepped closer to Rachel's world or not. I think it would be a bit of a waste to have all this happen "off-screen" as it were, unless it's going to lead into something you want to be a surprise.
My personal (and supremely unhelpful) stance is that authors update when they update and I don't actually expect any sort of consistent schedule. If it happens, it happens, but if I'm watching a story that means I'm happy and willing to read chapters as they come out, regardless of when they do.
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I want more frequent updates, but if it sacrifices quality and willingness to continue writing, I would prefer that you would do as you like. Also, you know, better to be happy doing what you want to how you like to than not. Happiness=better productivity and general quality.
[-] Keep being Taylor.