Broken Adventure

[theaceoffire]

There were at least two instances in which the "Sit!" was used to save Inuyasha, pulling him out of the way of attacks he couldn't dodge or parry otherwise.

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I threw the collar issue in as a partial joke until I really sat down and thought about it.

Aside from the girl just spamming the command a dozen times in a few seconds after a man with 50 years of isolation makes an innuendo, it was useful 2 out of... how many times? It was the slapstick part, so 2-6 times an episode wouldn't be too exaggerated.

As for the sensual possibility of it, having a weak human call you beloved, forcing you to your knees before her glory as she ignores your power and heritage?

...Yeah, that could be interpreted. Better keep Narwhal away from those things.

 

[theaceoffire]

That's true, but all the powers come from his soul which would be missing. Maybe the gate could connect the soul to the body when he leaves?

I'll be honest, I like jelly more then peanutbutter. Also curious how going to a xianxia world would affect him. Is there souls made in a certain way that makes them all asshole?

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Most of Xianxia novels tend to focus on self discovery and self modification. And that can turn out in many ways unknown.

The negative though, is most Xianxia novels have a 'might makes right' society, where you can do everything ethically and one really powerful dragon-shrimp can rape your wife and kill your family. The lack of resources is a common theme, betrayal allowing quick but unstable powerups, or even powers that require cruelty to operate.

People individually can be cool, but if a high percentage of jerks get powers expect some real bad guys to pop up.

 

[theaceoffire]

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Ah, this one may be a cultural issue.

When wearing a suit or outfit that is high quality, it is common to wear thin partial shirts underneath to ensure no unwanted skin tones shine through or to collect excess sweat. Neither is an issue when you have nothing but bones, but the term I heard most commonly used for said items is an 'Undershirt', other terms such as 'Wifebeater' or 'Muscle shirt' also exist.

It is not normally thick enough nor cover enough to be used on its own in formal situations, hence why I went with 'undershirt' for that spot.

The other one WAS an issue, thank you for pointing it out.

Wouldn't be surprised if Adam accidentally recruited Lustrum.

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As you and others mentioned, there is an age issue.

Spoiler: Further more, about her specifically:

This particular OC is based on a combination of famous women names and is meant to represent Danny's boss's former boss/comrade, one from before the rise of Parahumans when moxie and ruthless business sense had to win the day in the corporate world.

 

[theaceoffire]

Unless my memory of the timeline of Gold Morning events is way off (possible), isn't the death of Eidolon specifically why Tattletale was able to get the Simurgh to help out?

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Well, over the course of the story so far:

Spoiler: Things we found out!

*This world is AU, and several things from the story have been proven not true (Overlapping Shards/powers, etc)
*Endbringers attack less often
*Ages of some people are modified, some trigger events are earlier/later than expected
*Adam never read the story like he thought he did, the act of visiting a realty gives him new memories, with some grasp of the universe involved. Discovered during his Void journey.
*This Simurgh has been killing people randomly for trying to bother her by joining her in space. Not expected, less predictable.
*Unlike in canon, Scion is not attacking right now. No reason to help out if freed, at least not immediately.

Personal opinion so far: This world is alternate, the actions taken have left ripples and butterflies everywhere, so the safe bet is to NOT assume the killing bots will act reasonably once freed from slavery. Or at least, once ownership was transferred.

 

[theaceoffire]

One correction though. Chapter 'This Escalated Quickly' mentions Scion rescuing Kitties, however in the beginning you mentioned that Scion had vanished. I think you had also mentioned a fear of Scion just before we went off to MLP.

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Unless he decided to use a worldwide stranger power for some reason he would have been noticed and as 'the 1st hero's he was always of great interest.

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While scion was the big bad he didn't change a lot in the day to day, while pretty much the entire parahuman culture was based on having enough people for the fights.

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Spoiler: Minor Spoiler, if this issue actually bothers you.

Scion STILL isn't on this earth.

Just like powers are deployed on multiple earths, Scion can visit any that the shards have access to.

Unlike in Canon, this Scion wandered into a different area than Earth Bet.

 

[theaceoffire]

I'm honestly surprised the merchants can still use the system. Thought they would be the first to lose it.

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Forcing drugs on people? Power lost. Attacking people without being self defence? (Simmy determined?) Power lost.

Being high? Meh. Doing Drugs? Not his issue. Same with Drinking. Or having random sex, as long as it is consensual.

I think it there is even a 'Thief' and 'Stripper' class at this point.

And I think people have proven how far they will go to get high. "Stay mostly peaceful to keep powers to help get more drugs? Sure!"

 

[theaceoffire]

Would he consider adding gang affiliations to people and villain names for everyone to see? Like you see Max Anders walking down the street and above his head is a floating title saying "Kaiser/Nazi/E88".
He could also do the opposite for heroes and use stranger effects to make it difficult for people to figure out their identities.

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Turbulent times, now that the Endbringers are 'missing' the whole point of the 'Unwritten Rules' may come under question.

Keeping criminals available to fight the death gods was part of the reason for the '3 Strikes' birdcage rule, I believe.

Still, if he does NOTHING then eventually Adam wins. No reason to start conflict deliberately, so unless you are on the 'Kill List' or some VERY specific quests come out, your ID will probably be safe.

 

[theaceoffire]

The issue is which star wars time point, etc.

Spoiler: And the one I am going with (Minor Spoiler)

Well, it will be original. Important to people in real life, but in canon, to the movies, to the fictions... it is less than a sentence long, a foot note, part of a longer montage segment.

Part of me WANTED him to pop in during a space fight or one of the famous scenes (Pod racing, captured (pick any), I don't like sand, etc etc) but well...

There is only a few places that I feel would really fit this character if he wanted to make small, meaningful changes that are similar to past actions.

That said, it will still be an AU version of Star Wars. It is too loved and too researched, if I stuck too close to standard then everyone would know all the tricks and such.

 

[theaceoffire]

Can I suggest something other than Star Wars, at least? Of course, if you already have plans there or want to go, it's fine. But if you are still thinking about it, I just don't find the setting all that interesting.

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To be honest, it is too large for a lot of people. Literally massive number of inhabited planets, each with multiple planets worth of places to visit, not to mention space bases and stuff.

Without the Force or Fate messing with you, you could go to a new place every day and NEVER see a fight, jedi, sith, etc, for a life time.

That is how low the number of force users are. Even when actively hunting each other, it still takes time.

You could have a million SI's dropped into a million planets, and have NONE of them bump into each other. Even then, without Dues Ex Machina, Force, Magic, etc, you ain't going to bump into nothing.

Thankfully Adam's travel has the negative effect of showing up at interesting times and places.

 

[theaceoffire]

Better question actually...which world do you reckon is going to be next?

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Spoiler: Well, to be fair there are a few choices.

Aside from the possibility of Star Wars, there are also some minor series and shows that I feel never actually get visited.
A lot of people head to Halo, or Stargate, or of course Naruto or Harry Potter.

And I won't pretend that those are not options.

No, I want this to be organically chosen by the story. A need that Adam has, then ask the transit method to pick something to help.

For example, I had NO plan on going to Inuyasha's Realm until the need for spiritual protection (Pretty sure Imperio is a soul based attack) was a theoretical possibility, as an example.

So I deliberately DON'T plan too far ahead or decide too soon, because I want the choice to be both accurate but interesting.

That said, after getting magic, spiritual powers, and lots of tech abilities Adam's tinkering options are low. Most require Worm Realm Entities to actually operate, so he needs to get some tech based on more logical science basis than what he currently works with. Oh, 'Technomancy' and 'Research' will help a ton, and Magic will let him cheat, but even if he copies the Tinker libraries he would need to drag moon sized crystal everywhere to make ships. It is inconvenient.