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A million is a multiple of a thousand.
On a weekday, about 0600.
With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Twelve)
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He's a sensible by the book green lantern who can talk to plants, and he's a ruthlessly pragmatic and sensible orange lantern who goes by his own book! together they methodically fight crime!
I rather like how they seem to work quite well together just because they are both sensible and calm. Even if Medphyll may not think very highly of Pauls moral character he will stake his life on Pauls competence.
Buddy-cop movie confirmed
Nitronorm5688
The Armchair Reader
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Saw some typos at the end - think instead of thing, and metal instead of mental...
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I found the metal but I can't find the think.
esotericist
A Weary Hand
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I think this is what you're looking for.
spencer1519
(Verified Heretic)
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Well OL does consider Medphyll a model of Lantern comportment, and is one of the three or so Lanterns that OL actually respects. It would make sense that they would work well together.
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Thank you, corrected.
Frustratedbuffal
"I shaved my balls for this?!?"
1:30ish am, personally.
Incidentally, I sleep best when my phone access is cut off.
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Thank you, corrected.
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- Rochester, New York
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- Rochester, New York
Lol.
I read all of Paragon and thought of giving Grayven a go.
Then I remember the clusterfuck that is the whole New Genesis thing and the fact that he is pretending to be someone else and decided against it.
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"So, how are we going to play this?"
"You're the good, sensible cop. I'm the good, pragmatic cop."
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- US
Me too, thanks.
SaltyWaffles
I am dissapoint, son
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There's also "Guardians" which should be "Guardians'".
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It makes sense, and was forshadowed to be such, that he would Want to have the Desires of him and his alies be Shared.
I'm using the right Light color here, right?
Not really. He has alies to act as his morality chains, so having more of them, that he can work with as well as this, is exactly heartwarming.
There's no reason he can't retire to something like a consultant position.
Hye
Reader of The Long Words
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Yes, and it is oh so fun getting an email at around 6-7 in the morning, most often, while i'm sleeping
But seriously, I love that you are apparently in GMT 0 timezone, because that means I have something to read when i eat breakfast or travelling with the bus.
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Finally finished catching up, I've been bingeing for... almost two weeks now.
Generally I like it, though of course I have a few quibbles:
Also is Captain Cornwall actually a real character, and is there an RSS feed?
Keep up the good work.
Generally I like it, though of course I have a few quibbles:
A real pain to read on an e-ink reader due to the colors and the meta links, not what it was written for but still
For a while there I was really, really, really frustrated by dialogue structure not being clear. You'd name a character once in paragraph one, and I would so many times somehow miss it and then become utterly confused when I couldn't figure out who was talking, or get confused about who was talking in the middle because you don't use "____ said" indicators enough. I would go for a few pages trying to figure out what characters were present at the scene and then backtrack to figure out.. Though that seems better in later chapters.
Also, not interested in Renegade so I skipped them all, and I assumed they were just omake and wouldn't intertwine. Probably lead to a lot of confusion if the two actually did overlap. Otherwise I've been assuming you're just skipping stuff, like with the whole "Joker takes over Mt. Justice" event I assume was from canon YJ and just not written in this story.
You have one persistent hypercorrectism: "Character and I" in places when it should be "Character and me". A rule of thumb: replace the whole construction with a simple "I" or "me" and see if that sounds wrong.
"Did you wish to talk with Diana and I?" -> *"Did you wish to talk with I?"
Of course this can be part of your own idiolect and your SI's dialogue, but probably not for other characters. Otherwise your language is pretty good for an Englishman.
For a while there I was really, really, really frustrated by dialogue structure not being clear. You'd name a character once in paragraph one, and I would so many times somehow miss it and then become utterly confused when I couldn't figure out who was talking, or get confused about who was talking in the middle because you don't use "____ said" indicators enough. I would go for a few pages trying to figure out what characters were present at the scene and then backtrack to figure out.. Though that seems better in later chapters.
Also, not interested in Renegade so I skipped them all, and I assumed they were just omake and wouldn't intertwine. Probably lead to a lot of confusion if the two actually did overlap. Otherwise I've been assuming you're just skipping stuff, like with the whole "Joker takes over Mt. Justice" event I assume was from canon YJ and just not written in this story.
You have one persistent hypercorrectism: "Character and I" in places when it should be "Character and me". A rule of thumb: replace the whole construction with a simple "I" or "me" and see if that sounds wrong.
"Did you wish to talk with Diana and I?" -> *"Did you wish to talk with I?"
Of course this can be part of your own idiolect and your SI's dialogue, but probably not for other characters. Otherwise your language is pretty good for an Englishman.
Also is Captain Cornwall actually a real character, and is there an RSS feed?
Keep up the good work.
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Thank you, corrected.
Captain Cornwall is indeed a real character, though he only appeared briefly. I do not believe that there is an RSS feed.
So it really is a buddy cop movie!
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- Ashtabula
And if that doesnt' work, then what are you prepared to do?
Also, looks like you're going to be book solid for oh...the next couple of centuries or so. I feel bad for all the people who could use help in the meantime, and I'm mildly horrified at the amount of, lacking a better word, evil, that you are prepared to allow to continue just so you can continue to hold yourself up as some kind of moral superior.
No offense, but I'd rather have heroes like OL are floating around then your type.
I would say what changed was that OL changed what he wanted to do. No, really. I think it's really just that simple.
You may have a point with the military order thing. I still don't understand what it meant myself.
Late reply is late, but my Mother just went through back/spinal surgery (She's just fine now) and so I"ve been in a hospital with TERRIBLE smart phone reception.
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Probably not going to happen, but I wonder what Paul's back up plan would be if Brainiac 2 just flat out refused to join him for whatever reasons. The guy has basically been a real lynch pin of Paul's whole plan for the OLC. I wonder who else he could get?
....I'm then remembering that he's still telling this whole story to Sinestro's daughter. Huh.
....I'm then remembering that he's still telling this whole story to Sinestro's daughter. Huh.
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