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Wonder if the parents realized that Paul literally meant it when he said 'blink of an eye'?

Who's to say that Martians use idioms in their language? For all we know, they might take every idiom the SI and Kon (and M'gann) use quite literally.

"A penny for my thoughts? What's a penny?"

"There's more than one way to skin a cat? Why would you do such a barbaric thing?" "Especially to one as cute as Teekl..."

"Bite off more than you can chew? I didn't know Earthlings could distend their jaws."

"Let the cat out of the bag? What was it doing in there in the first place!?"

"Hit the nail on the head? But where else would you hit it?"

"Curiosity killed the cat? What do you people have against cats?!"
 
Wait a minute...

S'monn? A young boy living in an underground society forced there by an inhospitable surface and aliens who invaded long ago to subjugate the local populous 'for their own good'?

Well, tell me when the drills and giant robots start popping up!
Well M'gann watched Earth TV about a show called Hello Megan, so I can totally see S'monn watching a newer show called Gurren Lagann.
I think that at the very beginning OL overwrote his brain so that whenever someone says "wow" he always hears "whaw".
I found it funny to believe that the spelling is an inherent property of Earth 16, so that if OL ever goes to another plane the spelling changes.
The Martians who don't look entirely Martians appear to be affecting parts of the Human physique.
Don't look entirely Martian
I suppose with telepathy and social norm of constant mental contact news media of the sort we have on Earth probably aren't a thing.
And social norms

News media... Isn't a thing
M'gann turns the Bio-Ship away from the main flow of traffic and directs in through a short but wide tunnel between caverns.
Directs it through
I suppose they just don't go in for decorative planting in works areas.
In work areas?
Dozens of Martians of all ages turn their heads up to look at us as we come in and starts losing altitude. More than a few of the..
And start losing
That would be S'randa and E'ann M'orzz, then. The hug looks a little awkward; their forms are completely Martians and their arms don't bend quite enough to properly embrace her much smaller body.
Are completely Martian
I notice one of the more Human-looking Martians observing our conversation from a balcony above us focus her eyes on the top of M'gann's head, then begin growing hair on her own bald scalp.
From the pictures of the YJ Martians I just looked up, Martians don't even have pupils, so I'm unsure how he could see what the Martian is looking at so precisely. Given the distance it would be difficult to tell even for a human.
 
From the pictures of the YJ Martians I just looked up, Martians don't even have pupils, so I'm unsure how he could see what the Martian is looking at so precisely. Given the distance it would be difficult to tell even for a human.

Inference? Mild usage of desire-sight letting him know where people focus their attention?
 
Don't look entirely Martian
And social norms
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News media... Isn't a thing
I think this is the UK/US groups things again.
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He's drawing a conclusion rather than asking a question.
And start losing
Are completely Martian
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From the pictures of the YJ Martians I just looked up, Martians don't even have pupils, so I'm unsure how he could see what the Martian is looking at so precisely. Given the distance it would be difficult to tell even for a human.
She was one of the more Human-looking ones.
 
What's the adjective form of "M'arzz"? Because it would likely be "Martian society" if it were using the English spelling.
"Modern Earth society" sounds normal for me, better than "Modern Terran society" or "Modern Earth's society", so I think it's fine as is.
"works" as in "public works," not as in "under construction."
Hence why I'm unsure.

So I wonder if M'gann will be sharing her knowledge of Star Conquerer telepathic and telekinetic amplification nodes with other Martians. Seems like it could be a game changer for their society.
 
So I wonder if M'gann will be sharing her knowledge of Star Conquerer telepathic and telekinetic amplification nodes with other Martians. Seems like it could be a game changer for their society.

"Great. First J'arknn decides to try to infect us with weird human sexual fetishes, then M'orzz shows up trying to get us to turn into starfish! What next, is the orange guy going to try to light us on fire?!"
 
I'll highlight the its -> it's in teal because of the number of them. Other corrections in red.
I apologize in advance.
Ah, heck. This is what you e-mailed to me months ago, isn't it? Sorry for not getting around to it ever.
Loath
Let's see
Beam,
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It was much later stated that he has trouble with large constructs. 10 miles is a bit large to say that.
It's simple and he's under to pressure.
The SI misremembered.

Whaw, I really don't know how to use the word 'its' at all, do I?
backup
Ring. Too early for his second one.
An
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Also, is he supposed to only be able to fly at 20mph? Look a bit further down for reference.
It's circumstantial. He uses avarice to fly. As he says, if he doesn't care he slows down.
Don't think an American would say 'in' there.
Also, this update taking place over 500 miles doesn't match up with her later stated max speed nor that he only goes supersonic briefly before landing at the correct place. ~10 miles would probably be a better fit.
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No, it's (used it right!) marking the horizon.
an orange trail
in a furrow
Breathe out
In the future, because American
user's contempt
The last sentence makes it seem like he intends to talk to the police.
Casual, although presumably it is also causal.
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Not sure if you want to change this, as "Harley Quinn" as a supervillain doesn't exist here.
No, but I think that she's the one his mind would go to and he hasn't checked up on her yet.
Boss' handwriting
meantime
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Metres

This is one of the few times I actually get to correct it back to the British spellings. Usually it's correcting it to be American. I mean i[t's obvious why, but it is still rare.
I've converted one!
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Really? You don't say 'half hour' where you're from?
Built
Underwater
Confrontational
Then the renegade bits have the same typos:
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Done with episode one. Hopefully the rest of the episodes left don't require multiple parts, each huge.
From your keyboard to Eris'-

NO!
 
You Zoat, there's this wonderful tool called a spellcheck, using such a tool would avoid you a lot of pain. Though perhaps you're into that kind of self flagellation. Hey, I don't judge.
 
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You Zoat, there's this wonderful tool called a spellcheck, using such a tool would avoid you a lot of pain. Though perhaps you're into that kind of self flagellation. Hey, I don't judge.
There weren't any actual spelling errors in that set of corrections. It was all grammar errors save for one plausibility issue.
 
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