If it was me, I'd have gotten it in such a way that one of the puella Magi was dead, like kyouko or Mami and then give the choice but have everything else be fine.
Problem there is, if all the girls buy Miyuki are slated to return for the sequel, then the only choice I have for killing one of the girls off is Miyuki, but we... Don't really care about her to the same extent we do the other girls on the team.
 
It wouldn't be a perfectly happy ending and more importantly it would throw more unknowns into who our teammates would be. Which is why I'd do it. But that's just me, anywho.

It looks like we'll be back to daily updates at the current pace... We've quickened the pace to five updates in the last week. As opposed to the two or three we were at when I was busy :p
 
I was gonna post this piece of art hyperlinked with something like 'crazy writer man makes smol girls sad' as like a piece of low-quality joke art
It's currently night where I am
20~ minutes per meguca
Considerable drop-off in quality the more it goes on
what have I done
I'm gonna... practice a bit more before I actually try and make fanart for this quest. And maybe get some actual rest before I do that.

On the current subject matter though, yeah, maybe you shouldn't have spoiled the sequel's general storyline lol
 
On the current subject matter though, yeah, maybe you shouldn't have spoiled the sequel's general storyline lol
I know for a fact that I shouldn't have, but I'll be the first to admit that I'd much rather be working on the sequel than on the Wally fight. I also know that's a terrible take to have as a writer, because as you've all clearly demonstrated it means none of you care about the fight because I don't care about the fight. I also also know I could have handled the Wally fight a lot better, and looking back on it I really regret how I've handled everything after Assassin's death. I almost wish I could redo the whole fight after that point, but I also don't want to subject everyone to this disasterpiece of a boss battle again in the hopes that I can get it right a second time.
 
I liked the fight

I just don't mind spoilers in a quest context because my munchkin instincts that I've largely been holding back
 
[x] Keep fighting; don't let Archer's death be for nothing

This is the closest Homura has ever come to beating Wally. If not now, then when?
 
[X] Keep fighting; don't let Archer's death be for nothing

Oh frak no. We'll beat the bitch bloody, and then we'll re-summon our servants, and our Puellas will live happily ever after.
 
If that vote was about who shows up I'm sorta regretting not picking shirou... Since if this plan works he'd probably have Saber here and Lancelot would have an interesting time. So would Homura and Kirika since they'd get to meet the person their servants keep dreaming about.

We really need to have Lancelot Skype call Saber if there is an opportunity. It might bring some peace to his life.
 
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On the other hand, I very much like to see if we can convince Auntie Illya to use a CS to remove OG!Berserker's Madness Enhancement. Having a coherent Heracles that's closer to his stronger classes like Archer? Sounds like a good idea to me.
 
Omake, side Madoka - When the Wind Blows
The storm winds howled as dawn broke on the sunless Sunday, and the sound of thunder roared in the distance. It had been hours since the family Kaname had been roused from their slumber by news of the incoming storm and been herded into the nearby shelter. But while the rest of the family was worried about the damage the storm winds might do to their house, Madoka had something far different on her mind to worry her.

Each time the drumbeat of thunder sounded, her heart froze, and she wondered whether that sound were really the sound of thunder, or the sound of the terrible battle she knew was taking place but could not see. Her hand pressed against the glass of the window - even though the storm was quiet for the moment, Madoka knew she wasn't supposed to be here - feeling the chill from the outside seep into the flesh of her palm. She wished Homura were there to warm her hand for her. "I hope Homura-chan and the others are alright out there..."

"Thinking about Homura?"

Madoka turned her head as the sound of her mother's voice caught her ears. "Yeah," she said, nodding her head, before returning her gaze to the world beyond the rain-slicked window. How could she tell her mother the truth? "I haven't seen her at all so far. I hope she's alright."

"She probably got herded under the train station, like a lot of people in that area would have," Junko replied. Forcing a smile, the mother Kaname approached her daughter, placing a hand on her shoulder. Madoka didn't know this yet, but the flooding in that area was pretty severe. Junko held her tongue, and hoping that nothing had happened to her daughter's girlfriend, she offered up an "I'm sure she'll be fine," meant as much to calm herself as it was meant to calm Madoka.

"I wish she were here."

"Yeah, I know," Junko said, adding with a shrug of her shoulders "But what can you do?" Her stomach growled, and mother and daughter looked on each other as Junko said "They're still serving breakfast for a little while longer. Won't be as good as Tomo's, but food's food. Can't be too picky when things are like this."

"Sure." Madoka nodded and moved to join her mother, when a shadow on the nearby wall caught her attention. "On second thought," she said, her voice a nervous hesitation now. "I think I'll join you in a little bit."

"Want some privacy while you stare longingly into the abyss as you wait for you lover? Don't worry, I got you." Madoka balked at her mother's insinuation, but going along with it was better for her than the alternative. Outside, the rolling thunder prompted Junko to add "But make it quick. I know they're saying the storm looks like it's going to die down soon, but you still aren't supposed to be out here. If the wind picks up again or, heaven forbid, the coast gets hit with another wave, I don't want to think about what could happen to you if you got caught in it."

"Don't worry, mama, I won't be long."

"I'll hold you to that." Parting from her daughter with a hug and a kiss on the cheek, Junko said "I'll be in the chow line. Meet you there in a few?"

"Yeah."

Madoka waited until her mother was out of earshot before addressing the shadow stalking her along the far wall. "What are you doing here?" she asked the shape behind the shadow. "I thought Homura-chan gave me those magic stones to keep you away."

"The wards given to you by Akemi Homura are only effective so long as you stay within their boundaries," the Incubator stated. "Even so, I have had little reason to approach you until now, Kaname Madoka."

"What?"

"I have been busy elsewhere, attempting to recoup the damage done to the local ecosystem by Mikuni Oriko and Kure Kirika. But as long as you are willing to cooperate with me now, that time spent waiting will not have been spent poorly."

"I told you before, I'm not interested in making a contract with you."

"Is that so?" The Incubator moved out of the shadows, its thick white tail swishing back and forth as it stared at Madoka with its cherry-candy eyes. "You could save her, you know. Every second longer that it takes for them to end the battle, the chance that they will lose grows greater." Hearing those words, the blood in Madoka's veins turned to ice. Homura-chan... Would lose? "However, if you were to for a contract with me and become a puella magi, you would become so powerful that Walpurgisnacht would be unable to stand against you."

Madoka knew the Incubator wasn't bluffing. Archer had told her about the tremendous power sleeping inside of her; the power to become a god. She had made a promise to Homura, a promise not to contract with the Incubator, and she didn't want to break that promise. "... But if I give in to that power, I could save Homura-chan. I could save Mitakihara..." Madoka's hands trembled at her sides. "Why me?" Madoka asked. "Why am I the one to have so much power, when there are so many other girls who are so much more deserving?"

"If you must assign blame for the hand Fate has dealt you, you may consider blaming Akemi Homura." Madoka's eyes went wide at the Incubator's words. "Each time she returns to the past, her actions add additional karmic weight to you. Individually, there is nothing unique about you that I have not seen in millions of other candidates that have come before you. It is the combined karmic weight of every Kaname Madoka acting in unison, which gives you your tremendous potential. If you would only realise that potential, you would be strong enough to vanquish Walpurgisnacht without trouble."

"Homura-chan... She...." Madoka shook her head; she knew Homura wasn't the person to blame, no matter what the Incubator said. "You said you've seen millions of other candidates before me, right?" she asked. "How... How long have you been doing this, and how many other girls have you coerced into making contracts?"

"Since the beginning." Madoka didn't need to urge the Incubator to explain itself. "Over countless millennia, my species has influenced the evolution and development of the ancestors of your species into the present day. You did not seriously think that the earliest cornerstones of your species' civilisation appeared from nothing, did you? They were the products of the wishes of countless others just like yourself. Many of history's most famous and influential women only became so thanks to the contracts they formed with members of my species; and you can join their ranks, Kaname Madoka."

"I can... Be someone important?" Madoka shook her head. "No! I don't care about that!" her thoughts screamed back at her. "I just want Homura-chan to be safe." Madoka's words were stolen from her as the Incubator's stare broke, and both she and it turned their heads towards the window as the sound of rolling thunder crashed in the distance.

"I take your silence to mean that you still require time to make a decision, Kaname Madoka. I can give you as much time as you need to make a decision, if you still have not made up your mind. But do keep in mind that the longer you delay making a decision, the greater the likelihood of Akemi Homura falling in battle. It would be wise to come to a decision soon."

"Just tell me the truth," Madoka said, finding her words at last. "Homura-chan... Is she still alive, right now?"

"Akemi Homura is still alive, that is correct," the Incubator said. "But the longer you wait to make a decision, the less likely is becomes that you will make it in time to save her."

"That's good," Madoka said, meeting the unblinking, cherry-candy stare of the Incubator with one of her own. As long as Homura was alive, she would continue to believe in her. No matter if those thoughts continued to nag her in the back of her mind.
 
Honestly, that would have been the perfect thing. To hunt down any white rats. That being said, Kyuubey has never revealed himself to Bazett so it's unlikely anything would have happened.
 
Day 47 Chapter 24
[X] Keep fighting; don't let Archer's death be for nothing



"Imagine something you can win with."

Those are the last words your father says to you before vanishing, just like all the other servants on your team. You fall to your knees, unable to stop the tears from falling. Your allies are hard at work, raising their shields to keep the buildings from falling on their heads, but you can't even bring yourself to rise to your feet and help them. You stare at the back of your hand, your vision blurry, as the Command Seals which had tied you to Archer for the past forty-six days fade away.

The battle is lost.

Your servants were always the ones dealing the most damage to Walpurgisnacht. Without them, how can you possibly hope to win?

"Imagine something you can win with."
"How can I?" you say to yourself. "How can I imagine something I can win with if I can't even imagine winning in the first place?"

Your hand shakes as you raise it up, resting it against the edge of your shield. You've come so close to victory, but with Archer gone you can't see any way to reach that final stretch, to claim what he believed you could. "I'm sorry," you say; whether it's an apology to your allies who are still fighting, to Madoka and your friends who are expecting you to come back alive, to Archer for betraying his belief in your success, or to yourself, you wouldn't be able to say. But you'll have another forty-six days to think of what to say next time.

"What do you think you're doing, Akemi-san?" Your hand is stayed by the voice of Tomoe-san. You do your best to blink away the tears, looking up at her, as she looks back at you. "I know how much it hurts, losing your father, but you mustn't give up."

"There's no hope left," you say. "We can't win, not like this."

"Well, you're right about that." She's agreeing with you? "We are a team, Akemi-san. How can we expect to win if one of us is intent on sitting the rest of the fight out." Tomoe-san extends a hand to you, her golden eyes urging you to take it. "Archer believed in us, Akemi-san; believed in you. There will be time to mourn later, but first we have to make sure we win before we can mourn what we've lost, and we cannot do it without you."

"Imagine something you can win with."

You reach for Tomoe-san's hand, and she helps you to your feet as you say "Sorry," to her. "I was being a real idiot there, wasn't I?" Though Tomoe-san says nothing, nor makes any motion of her head to confirm, on the inside you're sure she's agreeing with you. "Believe it or not, but I used to be really good at running away from my problems. I thought, 'as long as I survive to try again,' that it didn't matter who I left behind; and if you hadn't caught me just now, I know I would have done the same to all of you. But..."

You feel the tears coming on again, but Tomoe-san is there to help you, getting a Grief Seed ready for you to cleanse your clouded Soul Gem with once you've dried your tears. "But when I see all of you, still trying your very hardest, still fighting no matter how hopeless things look..."

Madoka stares at you, a look of determination on her face. "That's exactly why." High above, far, far above the darkened rainclouds, the ominous figure looms over the city, laughing maniacally, as the slight "tick-tock" of its geared undercarriage echoes to infinity with each rotation. "Walpurgisnacht still needs to be stopped... And I'm the only one left."

"... It reminds of the person who inspired me to become a puella magi in the first place." The middle of a ruined city is hardly the place for propriety, but something within you forces you to bow for Tomoe-san, and you say "I'm sorry. I know this probably isn't the best time for apologies right now, but I'd like to fight beside all of you, one last time! I don't want to let my friends face this by themselves!"

Tomoe-san smiles, accepting your ill-timed bow and saying "Thank you. We all want you to fight beside us too."

The crack of thunder roars high above your head, and Kyouko barks "Hey! You two! Quit with the yakking, an' get with the attacking!"

You take stock of your inventory; "I've only got a few Grief Seeds left." You don't know how many more attacks you have left; you'll have to make each of them count. But how? What's the best way to maximise your chances of winning in a situation like this? What can you imagine yourself winning with? That's when it hits you; that there's still something left you haven't tried. "I have an idea," you say to the members of your team.

"Well, spit it out already! Ain't like we've got all morning to wait on you!"

"Right," you say, nodding your head. "My Inguz rune- There's still an application I haven't tried using yet. I don't know if it'll work the way I want it to , but if it does it may be our best chance of winning."

Your teammates look between one another. "It's not like we have much of a choice," Kirika says. "I mean, some of us can't even touch that stupid thing."

"It's risky though, isn't it?" Mikuni Oriko asks. "Placing our hopes in an untested application? What are you hoping it will accomplish?"

"I have another finishing move, beyond Finitora Freccia. It should be strong enough to defeat Walpurgisnacht now that it's been softened up this much, but..." You recall that day, which now feels so long ago, when you discovered this attack lurking deep within the recesses of your love for Madoka. "But it's incredibly taxing on my Soul Gem, and with as few Grief Seeds as I have left, I don't know if I'd be able to survive if I used it at its full power. I'm hoping that, by using this application of Inguz, I'll be able to... I don't know, hold hands with each of your souls and use your mana to bolster my own. If I'm right, it'll be taxing for all of us, but not to the point where it's fatal to any one of us."

Your teammates look between one another a second time. You can see it etched onto each of their faces. "I guess we really don't have much of a choice, then," Tomoe-san says. "Risky or not, we're not going to defeat Walpurgisnacht standing around here, doing nothing but rebuking its attacks. With our servants gone, we have to bring the fight back to our opponent. If Akemi-san thinks she can do it, then I'm all in."

"Agreed."

"If Oriko's in, then so am I!"

"If this fails, Spooky, I'm gunna find yer ass and haunt ya ta whichever world yer spirit ends up in."

"It's like you all said. We don't really have any better options at the moment. I'm in."

"Then it's settled." You pass around the last of the Grief Seeds, making sure everyone has enough to cleanse themselves with before saying "I'll need a little while to get everything prepared. We'll clean ourselves up, and hit Walpurgisnacht with our counterattack as soon as it finishes throwing its most recent round of attacks at us. We'll finish this, together."

Together, you can accomplish what you never could fighting by yourself.

You'll never run away from your problems again.

Walpurgisnacht
rains fire, death, and concrete down on your teammates, but each of them is ready to shoulder the burden, to give you the time you need to make sure you'll win this! Tomoe-san tears the largest chunks of concrete to shreds with an artillery barrage, before Kyouko breaks the back of Walpurgisnacht's attack with a wall of giant spears. Nagatsuki Miyuki meets a torrent of flame with a wall of ice, stopping the fire in its tracks as Mikuni Oriko brings up her barrier lattice to protect your heads from the falling debris.

You discard your bow, and call upon every memory you possess to create the image of Madoka's rosewood bow. "I invoke the Inguz rune," you say to yourself, tracing the shape of the rune in the air with your finger, focusing all your thought on achieving the desired result. On holding hands with the souls of each of the allies fighting valiantly alongside you. On imagining something you can win with. You draw back with your hand, though there is no string and no arrow to be drawn back. But it doesn't matter if there's no arrow, because you'll be the arrow. In imitation of your father's mantra, you chant "I am the arrow of Madoka's bow."

Your Soul Gem burns with a brilliant light as every part of you becomes a part of the arrow forming in your hand. It burns with the vibrant pink of Madoka's soul; but there's something else there, something that wasn't there before. You can see a swirling mix of other colours, helping the burning pink to take its shape; emerald, gold, amber, cherry, wine, and royal purple.

A flash of light blinds you for a moment, but before death has a chance to claim you Kirika has intercepted the blast with the sheath given to her by Archer. Even though he's gone, your father is still watching over you, making sure you stay safe. "Do it!" Kirika cries out, tilting Avalon to divert the course of Walpurgisnacht's laser, giving you a clear path to victory. "Finish this stupid thing off already!"

"Right!" You take aim with Madoka's bow, leveling the massive arrow of your soul - of everyone's souls - directly at Walpurgisnacht. You only have one shot, one chance to make sure your aim is true; it has to be. "Quintett Fuoco!"

You loose the tremendous arrow of mana, aiming straight for the heart of the devil. It soars, flashing brilliantly with every colour of the rainbow as thick arcs of mana trail off in its wake. The arrow pierces clean through Walpurgisnacht, sending a shower of light washing over the city as the black gear hangs motionless in the air. A second passes, then another, and for a moment it appears that even this attack has failed.

Then, with the most brilliant explosion you've ever borne witness to, Walpurgisnacht is no more, and you fall to the ground, exhausted in body and spent in soul.

You have just enough strength left to move your head, to confirm that all of your allies have met a similar fate, and have likewise fallen under the spell of exhaustion. You can't even lift your hand to reach for a Grief Seed, as though you still had any in serviceable condition. With nothing left to do but wait for the end, you decide to take one last look at the city you've given your life to defend.

Ruin. The city that had once been Japan's shining symbol of modernity is reduced to it as a sunless dawn breaks high above the city skyline. All around you lies ruin; broken towers of concrete, steel, and glass stand like gravestones for the dead; and beneath them, what had once been roads, sidewalks, flat lines drawn up by a city planing committee, have been reduced to concrete lakes in the middle of nothing but ruin. It would be such a pitiful sight, if only you had the strength to move and see it all.

"It looks like it's over for both of us," you say to the Madoka you imagine laying beside you. "Do you have any Grief Seeds left?" Even though that Madoka isn't there, you can still see her, just as clearly as you can see the sunrise. You can see her shaking her head, just the way she did that time, too. "I see."

"Say... Do you want to become monsters, and destroy everything in the world?" You can hardly hear the sound of your own voice, even though what little remains of the city has fallen silent in its ruin. "We'll destroy everything, and we'll keep destroying until it looks like all the bad things... All the sad things... Never happened at all."

"Don't you think that sounds nice?" you ask yourself, as your eyes grow heavy, and your world fades into darkness.​
 
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Good shit.

Over countless millennia, my species has influenced the evolution and development of the ancestors of your species into the present day. You did not seriously think that the earliest cornerstones of your species' civilisation appeared from nothing, did you? They were the products of the wishes of countless others just like yourself. Many of history's most famous and influential women only became so thanks to the contracts they formed with members of my species; and you can join their ranks, Kaname Madoka

I sense a incubator truth. His influence was far less than he seems to be implying.

What's interesting is the cornerstone bit...

Gil is a non human in the truest sense in the long and short of it, he's more so a conceptual entity, the first cornerstone of the age of man. Makes me wonder.

Then, with the most brilliant explosion you've ever borne witness to, Walpurgisnacht is no more, and you fall to the ground, exhausted in body and spent in soul.

Oh cool. It's prolly above Excalibur and Ea.
 
Surprise! The sequel actually takes places in the perspective of the Pleiades Saints, and they have to fight the witches of the main girls and their resummoned, blackened servants.
 
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