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dob you seem to think that Adam should care about a universe that, while real, has no importance to him. Hundreds of people die every day to random things not in anyone's control so why should he care about people he does not know. The kids are safe and well cared for. The Jedi are able to return to the temple any time if they go incognito. Vader is mentally handicapped and Sidious it never returning. There is no reason for him to stay other than a Star Wars fan wanting to see him run around in the setting.
The two main things I don't like about the chapter are.
1. That he wants to go back to worm-verse to do the same thing he was already doing in the star wars universe. AKA he should be taking the time to train in another universe to ensure his safety as well as the safety of worm-verse. If he wanted to instead train in ponyverse or the other universe he visited I would be fine with that as-well.
2. That he didn't take the tiniest bit more effort to stop sidious here, which should of been quite easy, and is against how he has acted in every other situation so far. I don't expect him to try and solve every problem, but dealing with sidious shouldn't have even taken him any more time in the starwars universe at all.
EDIT: It also goes against everything else he did in the star wars universe, he spent all this time building up stuff to help the universe then doesn't spend the tiny bit of extra effort to deal with sidious. Hell it would have taken him less effort than building that massive energy draining array he made.
 
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The two main things I don't like about the chapter are.
1. That he wants to go back to worm-verse to do the same thing he was already doing in the star wars universe. AKA he should be taking the time to train in another universe to ensure his safety as well as the safety of worm-verse. If he wanted to instead train in ponyverse or the other universe he visited I would be fine with that as-well.
2. That he didn't take the tiniest bit more effort to stop sidious here, which should of been quite easy, and is against how he has acted in every other situation so far. I don't expect him to try and solve every problem, but dealing with sidious shouldn't have even taken him any more time in the starwars universe at all.
1. Would you like to work at home or in another country surrounded by a bunch of crazy extremists. That is what the Jedi and Sith are. Force Extremist.
2. Again you seem to think he should care when he knows that Sidious will get taken care of by the Jedi. As theaceoffire said "Not his problem". Not everyone is an activist or crusader. Everything I have read about Adam makes him out to have an Inner circle kind of focus. If you are in his group you are taken care of. If not, he will help you if you are in front of him.
 
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1. Would you like to work at home or in another country surrounded by a bunch of crazy extremists. That is what the Jedi and Sith are. Force Extremist.
So go to ponyverse or the spiritual universe then?
2. Again you seem to think he should care when he knows that Sidious will get taken care of by the Jedi. As theaceoffire said "Not his problem". Not everyone is an activist or cursaider. Everything I have read about Adam makes him out to have an Inner circle kind of focus. If you are in his group you are taken care of. If not, he will help you if you are in front of him.
It goes against all the effort he spent / energy he spent in the starwars universe + sidious was on the same planet and he had unrestricted world-wide range simmy to help aswell as everyone else. Why spend all that time on what he did for the jedi temple but not spend the tiniest bit more effort to deal with sidious?
EDIT: If thats how he seemed to have been the rest of the story, or if he hasn't put much effort into the starwars-verse and had committed to not spending much effort in future jumps then thats fine. But here it seems against what he has done for the rest of the story and doesn't make sense with how much effort he put into the universe.
 
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So go to ponyverse or the spiritual universe then?

It goes against all the effort he spent / energy he spent in the starwars universe + sidious was on the same planet and he had unrestricted world-wide range simmy to help aswell as everyone else. Why spend all that time on what he did for the jedi temple but not spend the tiniest bit more effort to deal with sidious?
Worm has his lady friends.
Adam does not care about the Star Wars universe at all. All that work he did was during the acquisition of all the knowledge in the Universe. Then he made the AI chef because the kids could not cook. Adam didn't make all those advancement to help the Star Wars universe. He was bored and decided to putter around.
 
Why Stay Home?
So go to ponyverse or the spiritual universe then?

Maybe? Honestly, he needs to spend time in Worm Realm to ensure that the conversion of the Shard Network continues through the System, as time is paused there while out exploring.

Once every Shard is converted, it will be a VERY safe home base to go adventuring from in the future. Plus lots of advancements for his shard based powers.

Getting the robot stuff was both to enhance his many digital friends and make Dragon/etc more maneuverable in real life outside holoemitters.

Why spend all that time on what he did for the jedi temple but not spend the tiniest bit more effort to deal with sidious?

More important than Sidious, there is intergalatic slavery. Real bad stuff that happens without any Sith intervention. And whole species in civil wars, and pirates, and murders, etc, etc.

I feel it should be noted that Adam has no clue where Sidious is OR what he is doing. Simmy probably does, but the only thing the Sith is doing to Adam's knowledge is donating free attack lasers to the Temple's energy supplies.
 
EDIT: If thats how he seemed to have been the rest of the story, or if he hasn't put much effort into the starwars-verse and had committed to not spending much effort in future jumps then thats fine. But here it seems against what he has done for the rest of the story and doesn't make sense with how much effort he put into the universe.
He literally slept away the Inuyasha universe.
 
It goes against all the effort he spent / energy he spent in the starwars universe + sidious was on the same planet and he had unrestricted world-wide range simmy to help aswell as everyone else. Why spend all that time on what he did for the jedi temple but not spend the tiniest bit more effort to deal with sidious?
EDIT: If thats how he seemed to have been the rest of the story, or if he hasn't put much effort into the starwars-verse and had committed to not spending much effort in future jumps then thats fine. But here it seems against what he has done for the rest of the story and doesn't make sense with how much effort he put into the universe.

Most of the good Adam was doing was directed at those in his immediate vicinity and their long-term future, plus serving his own goals and whims. He never acted in a manner as if he truly planned to "fix" the universe; if he had been he would have been paying far more attention to all of the ramifications of Light and Dark force stuff. He was just being kind to some children, researching, tinkering, and following his own interests. Most of the work changing things was done by Shirley. Adam and Simmy was just helping her while researching and tinkering.

I think you've attributed a lot more actual investment on Adam's part than was actually there. He really was fairly detached for the entire thing. It might have seemed like a lot more investment because of all his inventions that he was gifting Shirley, and the AI was his own personal pet project. But both of those were tinkering that he was learning from and served his overall goals. He was mainly just being cooperative and not a dick while following his own goals.

Edit: In retrospect, Adam was a lot like a benevolent force of nature that just came in and disrupted everything. The Force (Light and Dark) then took advantage of that and warned the Jedi, made Shirley, etc. Most of that was the Force making use of the opportunity that Adam represented.
 
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Maybe? Honestly, he needs to spend time in Worm Realm to ensure that the conversion of the Shard Network continues through the System, as time is paused there while out exploring.
Except its also time passing that may lead to scion discovering him, which is the most major threat to himself right now except for going into new universes.
I feel it should be noted that Adam has no clue where Sidious is OR what he is doing.
But he should know of the timeline and that hes a threat, so he could quickly ask simmy if theres anything that they can do about him considering how much effort they just spent here.
Also simmy should of been working towards the same goals as Adam here, so she should know that adam would want Sidious crushed if it was going to take them basically nothing to do.
 
But he should know of the timeline and that hes a threat, so he could quickly ask simmy if theres anything that they can do about him considering how much effort they just spent here.
Also simmy should of been working towards the same goals as Adam here, so she should know that adam would want Sidious crushed if it was going to take them basically nothing to do.

Who says it was Adam's goal to destroy Sidious? Shirley and co. can protect, nurture, and teach the children. That's all he seemed invested in.
 
Who says it was Adam's goal to destroy Sidious? Shirley and co. can protect, nurture, and teach the children. That's all he seemed invested in.
Except that they grow up + will likely eventually leave the jedi temple and he seemed to be concerned with other issues effecting the galaxy earlier? Its not like making an attempt on sidious's life would take any extra time or much extra effort, hell if they decided not to do it because the representation of the dark side of the force told them to not interfere because they are outsiders or didn't interfere for some other reason, that would be fine as well. Just seems super stupid to me to not have simmy crush sidious considering how much effort they put into the universe when it should be a breeze to do so. If it would take time to travel or something I could understand but they just seemed to ignore it when ignoring it doesn't really fit with everything else that happened and it shouldn't be difficult at all, while it would make a pretty big difference in the future of that universe.
 
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Personally, I'm glad that Adam just went to the SW universe, got what he came for, and left. I'm not interested in reading a fic where the SI just wanders throughout the multiverse solving everyone's problems for no reason. There's an infinite number of universes and an infinite amount of problems he has access to, if he isn't emotionally invested there it doesn't make sense for Adam to go around minding other people's business.
 
Actually, I have a question.
Without Simmy in the Worm reality what happens with suggestions that the System provides for its users?
 
Personally, I think the reason he felt the need to leave was from the Force. The Force, otherwise known as Narrative Causality or Plot, appreciated the help it was given; patted him on the head; and said 'Off my lawn, youngling. Off my lawn.'
 
I'm Home!
In retrospect, telling a bunch of young children that the magical robot keeping them safe was going home had been a bad idea.

Adam looked down at the various species of kids hanging from his limbs.

At least the older ones were just giving those damn puppy eyes.

...Did puppies exist here? Something small, cute, and furry did. Surely.

Hell, there was enough genetic manipulation ability here to just MAKE something small and cute. Anyway.

Point was, his original plan of tossing this body into one of the Conversion Generators on the way out was likely a bad idea at this point. HE knew his body was generated on the fly, and that the unicorn bones would likely be great fuel... but to kids, it would just be a hero burning himself alive.

Trauma, basically.

Some quick conversation and tricky wordplay convinced them he would just be meditating for a few... dozen years or so. At that point, they wouldn't have such an issue with the spirit of a robot abandoning an outfit to head home for a while. Hopefully.

So his body was floating in a pillar of blue fire, Force runes of absorption in a circle below him so that the Temple would benefit in some way, and he was prepared to head back to his home planet without giving some kids nightmares for all time.

A few modifications to the body, some joints solidified and a bit of magic given runes so that the eye sockets didn't go black, a confirmation that the Force would keep him from being disturbed... and it was time.

"Transfer: Abyss."

~~~Broken Adventure~~~

Aayla Secura groaned. "Come on Bly, this isn't even the strangest thing I've asked from you guys."

The clone Commander frowned. "I just feel we are missing a step somewhere."

She gestured. "Padawan Bene said get in the snake. Grand Master Yoda said get in the snake. Bly. Get in the snake."

Her friend and the clones behind him looked at the massive white serpent, black jaws opened and sharp fangs retracted into theoretically safe positions.

The fact that comfortable seating could be seen inside the massive beast didn't make the situation less creepy to the crowd.

Bly suddenly felt Aayla shove him with the Force as he was tossed into the open jaws. "Right, our brave Commander volunteered, now the rest of you get in. The Temple is full of children that need our care while the other Jedi fortify the robotic fleet, and I am not waiting for any scared soldiers to sit in a strangely shaped bus."

The giant snake hissing in laughter didn't convince them to move faster.

~~~Broken Adventure~~~

Emperor Palpatine shuddered as SOMETHING made the Force buck, something at that bloody Temple vanishing. Some powerful Jedi being digested? Or maybe it had finally broken containment and was starting to consume the entire planet. With the Force being devoured in the process, no one would know until it was far too late.

Well, after the economy was stabilized and his minions replaced with people more competent he could go back and consider evacuating any useful survivors on the planet and then crack the damn rock in half.

He went back to his massive work load, his theoretical victory still marred by the unexpected and unending interference. Damn Jedi.

~~~Broken Adventure~~~

Padawan Bene winced. "No, you can not ask to taste Master Aayla Secura. That is socially inappropriate."

The hologram of Tenebris gave a saucy smile. "Depends on your social circles I suppose. Now..."

The droid body behind the image held up a hand, various holograms of the physically fit Twi'lek female dancing in the air. "Does she follow that silly creed about not having families? And if not, is she single?"

A holographic tongue gently licked lips. "Or if not single... is her significant other willing to get experimental? Three heads are better than one, so to speak..."

Robotic Master Lux sighed. "Most adult Jedi have been reared towards celibacy, Master Tenebris. As you know."

The Dark rune covered droid snorted. "I've seen that 'reared' and it is too fine to be celibate. Forbidding that ass from society is a crime against the Force itself."

Lux focused on the blushing Padawan. "It would be best to allow Master Aayla to address the issue herself, I am afraid. In the mean time, you should ask Shirley to ensure enough rooms are prepared for the Clone Troops supporting her."

Tenebris hummed. "Oh don't get me started on that male harem following her around. Identical fit men who all are trained to say 'Yes Mistress'! What a time to be almost alive!"

At times Bene wondered exactly how prepared the Jedi were for the recent changes at the Temple.

Then again... As soon as they finally showed up, it wasn't her problem! Best to go visit Robo for some lunch instead.

Better take along the Younglings as well, 'facing inner chaos' or not it probably wasn't wise to leave children around that particular robot.

~~~Broken Adventure~~~

The pull of his former body was quickly followed by magical flexing, his bones updating with all the additional runes he had discovered. The new stuff should help absorb desired energy (Even kinetic energy!) directly into his skeleton for Consume to absorb, even if the flesh would be damaged in the process.

He rose from the medical table and... just stretched. That had been the longest ever spent as a flesh-less skeleton to date, and all kinds of small sensations and touches had made him feel slightly disconnected from the world... his muscles flexed and twisted as he sort of shifted about, enjoying the feeling of being whole again. With a grin, he moved to the monitoring room the girls should be in.

Adam bounced into the meeting room, most of his more technologically talented girls already waiting. They had known his journey's actual goal after all. "Right, good news everyone!"

Narwhal was just here out of curiosity, but the Dragon sisters and Twilight had barely nodded before they were parsing the massive stream of compressed data Simmy was sending.

So uh. He didn't get much response.

Nightmare Moon chuckled, her near transparent outfit shimmering. "Woo!" A weak pity clap sort of summed up the experience.

Adam blinked at the lack luster response. "Hey, Come on! I was gone for like a month, at least like... I don't know."

Narwhal walked over and hugged him from behind, her right hand on his stomach and the other over his chest. "Love, it has only been seconds for us. That said... Welcome home dear."

Simmy's blue limbs joined in the hug as Narwhal chuckled at his weak grumbling. "Now come cuddle for a while and tell me how it went."

Adam gave in with a chuckle. Cuddles rock. "I want to make a stop by the kitchens, I developed a kitchen droid squad led by a celebrity based food obsessed AI and I want to try some of his dishes now that I have a fully organic body again."

She blinked. "Food obsessed?"

He nodded. "After I brought the building to life we found out that ancient religious structures are terrible cooks, even when trying to follow the recipe."

Yeah, she needed the full story.

~~~Broken Adventure~~~

Even as he gave Narwhal the blow by blow of his recent trip, Adam was modifying Variance Villa.

The Magma Generators were swapped easily with Conversion Generators, even without extra fuel it was far more efficient converting the heat supplied into stored power. The vastly reduced size helped a lot too, and he began crafting Element Furnaces in the freed up space underground... followed by more than a few storage units.

Since everything was built using his Flame Metal and Null Metal, the designs shrunk significantly. With all the free space left over, he allowed Simmy the ability to fill it with versions of her Molecular Furnace designs even as they connected to his Gardens to allow the AI to control them.

Not that they would, all the tech girls were still super busy with the raw data he had returned with... still, he could now convert energy directly into materials, each new version of the furnace lowering the energy costs and increasing the output productivity.

Simmy does some VERY good engineering when interested.

Eventually though, due to something or other he said (Was it robbing the Emperor blind?) Narwhal had to take a break.

So Adam wandered off to the Kitchen facilities to set up his new droid employees and introduce them to the human staff.

In the end, building Boro and his kitchen staff had ended up causing... issues.

Building them with advanced Flame Metal and Null Metal? Easy.

Having them take over the kitchens? Went great! The human staff would not lose their jobs, but the night, weekend, and holiday shifts would have a robotic workforce now.

...Then the Patisserie Chef Droid got an invitation to the System.

All hell broke loose.

Thankfully, once all the droids had access to a System Class, they got distracted enough by the battle of dinner preparation for Adam to escape back to this lab.

Of course, he had been forced to accept a series of sandwiches, a custom drink that honestly was the best thing he had ever sipped made from various berries, and some sort of dessert offset from the third plane of reality.

The final dish was delicious, but tasted partly like strawberries and sometimes like limes. For a dessert he would rate it highly, although the blue color threw him off a bit.

He uh... really was not sure how giving the droids classes was going to work out. But the ability to communicate with each other and other chefs and cooks around the world using the features of System would likely improve meal quality at some point, so... probably fine. That said, it didn't take long for Boro to set up some websites that gathered, translated, and tested recipes from around the world. The number of virtual food dishes had skyrocketed as well, as Adam's company had been expanding the various virtual reality experiences available. Several clubs had jumped on the 'Palanquin' night club wagon, and talks were in the works for some theme parks to get a virtual presence as well.

Point was, at least now Adam had free time to redesign the holographic and hard light flying drones. The fact that improvements there would make life easier for his electronic girls was a side note, really!

Anyway, the redesigned drones included Ember Generators for energy, a smaller but more powerful sensor, and less access compartments needed for repair and maintenance thanks to the Construction beam, dropping the size of the devices by a factor. The many methods of converting software into hardware chips actually helped him simplify the sensors attached to the drone's hull, and instead of adding new features he allowed the entire device to be reduced in size.

Thus his various factories were producing and launching drones the size of footballs, able to stay in air for years at a time without maintenance unless something went very wrong or some jerk targeted them. Huh. Too slowly produced, at that.

A few hours later and the newly designed factories had all kinds of fun mechanical limbs, like cool future junk SHOULD look like. Even had sparks and pings and bangs and stuff, even if most of it was for appearance and the Construction Beam was hidden in the middle of the mess. The Rule of Cool should back him up on this, who wants silent manufacturing planets? Seriously.

Adam hummed away in his lab, white suit sprouting bone limbs with very advance sensors and manipulators brought home from the Star Wars Realm, several tightly focused Gather and Construction beams causing sections of the devices being worked on to fade into and out of existence. At least when personally crafting things he wasn't so lazy as to just point his Construction beam and be done with it, creating stuff should be fun damn it.

Absently he used a limb to shove the most advanced Ember Generator designed so far into his flesh until the small orb was inside his chest cavity and fused to the unicorn bones of his ribs, directly over the heart. The runes built into his bones helped the generator connect to his whole skeletal system, and weakly reached out through his flesh.

Magic and fire seeped into the generator, his blood and magical energies more than enough to redirect non-physical attacks into the chest bound generator to store up charge and defend his body. Probably. Not like he couldn't whip up a new body or two if there was a problem.

A few tests, a quick redesign so he would stop cooking his body meat all the time, another few small modifications to allow easy redirection of the generators energy to either his limbs or the robotic tools he spawned.

Uh... crud, that just burned some back muscles. Redirect stuff to the spine, around the spine, follow the spine...

There, now he would theoretically have energy when needed, a way to store excess power without bleeding random flames everywhere, and a defensive mechanism 'just in case'. Maybe next time he should get some information on better biological integration with technology. This stuff would work, but it still felt like a kludged system even with 'Recovery' fixing all kinds of issues.

Star Wars had far too little advancements on that front really, at least compared to other 'future' story lines. He had to hack a dozen products together to make the more realistic organic droid bodies. Wonder if Shirley found those designs yet.

His thoughts brightened a bit as he continued to fiddle with technology. The Ember Generator attached to his ribs was already absorbing energy and storing it as radioactive material inside, and the more power entering the device the more stable his work became. An unexpected bonus!

Random sparks and flames stopped interfering with his movements, and somehow his hands felt less... sticky. Everything was more dry in a conceptual way, and it was easier to grip and manipulate the tiny components of his most recent design as he moved along.

His sixteen arms faltered when the Lab doors opened and two cybernetic beauties strutted in, holograms giving the illusions of thin satin cloths dropping from exposed skin.

Clearly Nightmare Moon and Cyber Dragon found his 'personal' droid designs. "Adam, you've been working for hours now. Come watch a movie with us. Narwhal has the popcorn and Simmy picked the film."

Adam looked at the two beauties, synthetic skin shifting over replacement muscles, the inbuilt lipstick and makeup working with their perfect hair.

He glanced down at the partially assembled personal weapons he had been planning on completing today.

Right, priorities.

His robotic limbs faded into flame as he walked with large strides. "Well, we shouldn't leave the girls waiting, right?" Lab powered off, commands for automatic assembler systems listed, and... and whatever.

Sexy girlfriend and girls now, cleaning the lab later.
 
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I get the feeling that he either has a subconscious trying to get him to gather the more "fun" technologies (though I imagine that it might also be a certain ex-Endbringer) or that he's not properly considering just how much reduction in productivity the new tech will cause (via "distractions")...

At what point does he visit PA and out-BESRMOW the inhabitants?
 
Screw you, Issie.

I hate Issei SO MUCH it made it hard to get into DxD.

Aside from Big Red, Ophis, TriHexia, and other OP (And I mean God himself had problems dealing with them OP) characters, I would be tempted to visit just to slap Issei on the head a few times.

Perverted? Yeah, but I can put up with that.

Stupid? No. Guy who does nothing but masturbate and spy on women and scream about boobs all the time gets a hot girl beg him to go out and he gets CONFUSED!?!?!? F*** that guy.

Not to mention, the few times I felt sympathy and connection with the jerk he just... throws that emotional investment away.

Any story that replaces that guy tends to be an improvement. At least, in my opinion.
 
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