Honestly @theJMPer if you want me to critique your story seriously I guess I can try even though I have the lowest standards ever but like...

Iunno. Like this is fine. This is cool. This is great. I'm actually empty, I have nothing else to say.
 
A certain historian is going to either rage or hit the bunk.:V



Otherwise...

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Is it bad that I kind of want Wash and Kirishima to overhear Gale say that she's basically given up on being with Wash because said Battleship is with Kirishima? Mainly because this is becoming sort of painful now.

If I were to be completely honest, I'm inclined to agree on some level. It's just getting...almost sad now. That might just be my idealistic side speaking, but Gale has gone past harem protagonist levels of thickness.

Wash already passed that a long time ago.
 
If I were to be completely honest, I'm inclined to agree on some level. It's just getting...almost sad now. That might just be my idealistic side speaking, but Gale has gone past harem protagonist levels of thickness.

Wash already passed that a long time ago.
At least Jersey and Crowling have spoken honestly about their feelings and why it wouldn't work out.
 
it somehow involved Tenryuu loosing a swordfight to an inanimate cardboard box.
Well, that's a thing. I really want to see this, by the way.

"So…" Gale shook her head. "So where does that leave us? Some random omniscient being has a hard-on for battleships?"

"Yes," Crowning shrugged. "But I think it means there's more going on here than we think."
Oh my sides.

"Coming," said Musashi.

"That's what she said,"

USS New Jersey said: "Yo, Gale. How do I lesbian?"
Not any time soon though, apparently. Also, it looks like the CrowningxJerseyxSashi OT3 is one step closer to fulfillment - I mean, uh, this can only end in tears and drama since Jersey know Crowning Wuvs her and Crowning knows she feels the same way even if she can't spit it out or admit they went on a date.

when did Jersey learn to text?
This might be a larger reveal than Crowning telling Gale Vestal told him to knock up Jersey, Jersey and Musashi in bed together, and learning that a cardboard Box can defeat Tenryuu combined.
 
Eh, I imagine IRL yuri goggles is a thing, and some people... overcompensate it. I feel Gale is basically like that.

But yeah, the storyline feels a bit stale. Resolution would be preferred.
 
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But yeah, the storyline feels a bit stale. Resolution would be preferred.
I have to agree with the Gale x Washington storyline. I have found myself skipping those parts because they just repeating.

I nearly skipped this chapter because it had Gale's name in the title. Luckily I saw Crowning's name and stopped to actually read it.

Gale needs to talk to Washington or move on.
 
If I were to be completely honest, I'm inclined to agree on some level. It's just getting...almost sad now. That might just be my idealistic side speaking, but Gale has gone past harem protagonist levels of thickness.

Wash already passed that a long time ago.
Few things are thicker than Bunker C.
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At least Jersey and Crowling have spoken honestly about their feelings and why it wouldn't work out.
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When the heck did this happen?
They talked about it, but I don't think it was with each other. Unless I've skipped something, somewhere.
 
Okay. Gale, just stop. Granted NCO and Officer relations are frowned on from what I understand. Abuse of authority and all that. Now Crowning, I hope to God that he learns of this and talks to Jersey about it. He has more patience then I do, because Jersey demands so much from him, yet shuts down any discussion of a relationship then goes and fscks Musashi? Do the humans even have a chance in these relationships or should I skip the shippy stuff?
 
"I haven't fucked anything in a sexual manner in months. I'm Navy. I didn't know that kind of restraint was even possible."

"But…" Musashi trailed off. She couldn't imagine something like this was actually happening! "We're both…"

"Yeah," Jersey shrugged. "I dunno, how hard could it be."

Correct me if am wrong, but Jersey and Crowning love each other and are in the early but established stages of a relationship right?.....and Jersey is sleeping with Musashi.....unless of course, the author retconned the Crowning-Jersey relationship......talk about confusing lol
 
Okay. Gale, just stop. Granted NCO and Officer relations are frowned on from what I understand. Abuse of authority and all that. Now Crowning, I hope to God that he learns of this and talks to Jersey about it. He has more patience then I do, because Jersey demands so much from him, yet shuts down any discussion of a relationship then goes and fscks Musashi? Do the humans even have a chance in these relationships or should I skip the shippy stuff?
Correct me if am wrong, but Jersey and Crowning love each other and are in the early but established stages of a relationship right?.....and Jersey is sleeping with Musashi.....unless of course, the author retconned the Crowning-Jersey relationship......talk about confusing lol
No, the relationship hasn't been retconned. Jersey's just a shitty person, as has been established several times over.
 
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When the heck did this happen?
They talked about it, but I don't think it was with each other. Unless I've skipped something, somewhere.
No, Jersey said she can't be with Crowning because she's not used to being a girl and it scares her, and Crowning gave the spiel on how Jersey's completely perfect to him. It was chapter Deus Ex Machina.
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No, the relationship hasn't been retconned. Jersey's just a shitty person, as has been established several times over.
If I may, as an aside, I think you're reaching the point where the rom-com and harem jokes have worn out their welcome. Either perceptible progression or moving on is needed now IMO.
 
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No, the relationship hasn't been retconned. Jersey's just a shitty person, as has been established several times over.

I think you might want to done Jersey's jerkassery IMHO, cheating on someone is going too far....one can only imagine how this would hurt Crowning.

Okay. Gale, just stop. Granted NCO and Officer relations are frowned on from what I understand. Abuse of authority and all that. Now Crowning, I hope to God that he learns of this and talks to Jersey about it. He has more patience then I do, because Jersey demands so much from him, yet shuts down any discussion of a relationship then goes and fscks Musashi? Do the humans even have a chance in these relationships or should I skip the shippy stuff?

I agree with you, the Gale story is getting repetitive and stale, and with this act its downright impossible to justify Jersey's feelings of uncertainty in a relationship.

No, Jersey said she can't be with Crowning because she's not used to being a girl and it scares her, and Crowning gave the spiel on how Jersey's completely perfect to him. It was chapter Deus Ex Machina.
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If I may, as an aside, I think you're reaching the point where the rom-com and harem jokes have worn out their welcome. Either perceptible progression or moving on is needed now IMO.

Agreed on the Rom-com and harem parts...also I think you read to much in that one particular line in the chapter you linked.

Edit : That particular line in a chapter was Jersey displaying her insecurity as a shipgirl and ship...too which Crowning says that she is beautiful one...nothing there about break-ups or the like.
 
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You know, maybe Jersey's purposefully trying to sink the ship because she's convinced she'll hurt crowning in an even worse way if they keep it going.
 
I think it's been said that Jersey doesn't think she deserves Crowning.

Then she should give reasons and end it amicably with him.....and yet she has the GALL to demand so much from Crowning, give nothing in return, and cheat on him....is love of so little value these days that people switch partners as much as clothes?

Truly Jersey is a shining example of the people of the United States of America.

Oh yeah...except that the bad parts are slowly and surely overtaking the good. This is where it starts.

You know, maybe Jersey's purposefully trying to sink the ship because she's convinced she'll hurt crowning in an even worse way if they keep it going.

Righttt....well she might tear Crowning's heart out....but at least it's for the greater good....right?

Edit : On the subject of Gale and Crowning...If I were them I would have given up long ago, reorientated myself and then gone and looked for a proper partner, one who would love and respect me as I them. It doesn't matter that they aren't shipgirls, beauty is skin deep after all.

Also with Jersey acting like this, it can be seen by some of us that shipgirls get a free pass at doing ANYTHING they want, even bad things, without repercussions. Do we want that?
 
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I'm going to have to reluctantly agree that we need some forward movement on the Kirishima/Wash/Gale front- not necessarily a resolution, but something that at least brings a resolution noticeably closer in some way. They've been in stasis for several updates, and it's starting to wear down the humor of the situation.

I think I will reserve judgment on the Musashi/Jersey/Crowning front. Jersey has staggeringly bad impulse control, and rather poor people skills. We've known this for a long time. Honestly, her having a fling, as opposed to being faithful in a not-very-firm relationship she's seriously unsure if she's even fit to hold up her end of... Does not really surprise me too much.

If Jersey grows up enough to realize what she did was wrong, I'm not going to say this in itself makes her a bad person permanently. Simply a person who very, very much needs to be better. If this continues to be the sort of person she is indefinitely, then yeah Crowning (or just about anyone who wants a stable relationship) deserves better.
 
Then she should give reasons and end it amicably with him.....and yet she has the GALL to demand so much from Crowning, give nothing in return, and cheat on him....is love of so little value these days that people switch partners as much as clothes?
Depends on one's definition of love. And that I can tell you, that is very much something which changes based on culture and the individual.
Oh yeah...except that the bad parts are slowly and surely overtaking the good. This is wherr it starts.
I think you've forgotten all the other things Jersey's done.
I think I will reserve judgment on the Musashi/Jersey/Crowning front. Jersey has staggeringly bad impulse control, and rather poor people skills. We've known this for a long time. Honestly, her having a fling, as opposed to being faithful in a not-very-firm relationship she's seriously unsure if she's even fit to hold up her end of... Does not really surprise me too much.
I concur. I think how people are reacting to Jersey's words says as much about the readership, as Jersey explicitly saying she needs to have sex, not love.
 
There's also the fact that people in her position (just finding out about a sibling/relatives very violent death) almost never make anything that could remotely be described as rational decisions.
 
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