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So, I have free time, so I want to point out a few more interesting things in this chapter.

After taking a few minutes to perform her usual morning routine at your insistence, Mami emerges looking far less weary and ready for the day. She wears her hair not in her usual ringlets, but instead a short braid you threw together practically as an afterthought. Surprisingly, it's Ayin's memories that guide your hands in crossing and weaving the structure. He, and by extension you, are actually rather good at it. You wonder how your creator could have acquired such a skill, but there is not enough time for further contemplation. Not today.

Now, this is a rather curious detail. Is it possible that Ayin had a younger sister in this story before he became, well, Ayin? Given who X is, she and Ayin may have a lot more in common than we're used to thinking.

Mami grimaces. "I've been trying not to think about it. I'm sorry, it just must be horrible to have your humanity taken away like that."

"I appreciate the concern, but it's not necessary." you say with a sigh. "I don't feel any different now than I did before. If anything, I'm stronger than I used to be. I should be happy about it."

Now, while this may be a subtle detail in the conversation, it's more likely to help Mami accept how she's changed since becoming a Magical Girl when she finds out about it. After all, even though her body and soul had changed, she didn't become less of Mami.

Mami has far more pastries and pastry supplies than a single person could ever eat, some of which have been in her pantry for a long time.

Your daily reminder of how much Mami really needs all the hugs.

And that's the question, isn't it? Were you always a monster? You want to say no, because you always tried not to be. The facility seemed almost designed to demand sacrifice. In the beginning, you lacked the force of will to resist that design. But the guilt grew and grew until you could bear it no longer, and your next iteration held the lives of their agents in higher regard.

This is an interesting detail - while the various iterations of X did not inherit each other's memories, there was a sort of continuity between them even then. I wonder if Madoka is experiencing something similar.

Yuma and Mami stare in rapt attention as you speak. Without realizing it, you've slipped into the same tone you'd use for delivering announcements to your Agents. Not the same as when delivering orders, but instead a softer, warmer tilt. Announcements weren't a part of your job, but a personal decision that you kept up until the very end. They were usually for establishing missions for the day or just congratulating your employees on a job well done. Honestly, that's not too far off from what you're doing right now.

This is actually a great part. Little things like this show why the employees of the corporation trusted the Manager so much, and all those subtle things that made X and Ayin different. I'm actually surprised that only Hokma and Binah could tell the difference. No wonder a person like her was able to help each and every Sephirah with their problems and was even able to convince Ayin to pull himself together.

Holy shit, X turned her in a typical happy 14 year old. And changed her hair! I've never seen this before, absolutely incredible.

Homura: Ah, I get it, I'm just sleeping. Now everything that happens makes much more sense.
 
Now, this is a rather curious detail. Is it possible that Ayin had a younger sister in this story before he became, well, Ayin? Given who X is, she and Ayin may have a lot more in common than we're used to thinking.
Is it really that hard to imagine that Carmen just forced Ayin to learn how braid for the sake of doting on Lisa?

I mean, it's Carmen and Ayin, them doing something like that is 100% plausible.
 
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Is it really that hard to imagine that Carmen just forced Ayin to learn how braid for the sake of doting on Lisa?

I mean, it's Carmen and Ayin, them doing something like that is 100% plausible.

I can imagine that Carmen could have come up with this, but it's Lisa we're talking about. I doubt that she would actually allow it, or that it would go on long enough for this skill to be so deeply embedded in Ayin's memory.
 
I can imagine that Carmen could have come up with this, but it's Lisa we're talking about. I doubt that she would actually allow it, or that it would go on long enough for this skill to be so deeply embedded in Ayin's memory.
Are we sure we are talking about the same guy here? I'm pretty sure that if Lisa allowed him to do it even once, it would become a core memory for the rest of his life.
 
Yeah
Ayin is a pond that extends into an aquifer compared to say a shallow lake or ocean most people are in that regard
 
Are we sure we are talking about the same guy here? I'm pretty sure that if Lisa allowed him to do it even once, it would become a core memory for the rest of his life.

Then Ayin would not be able to get rid of these memories, even if he wanted to as a result.

Although now I have this image in my head - Tipheret is hiding all over the Library from X, who wants to braid her hair. Truly, X is about to surpass Carmen when she inevitably tries to adopt Tiphereth. It will probably be much more difficult than winning the battle with the White Night solo.
 
Now, this is a rather curious detail. Is it possible that Ayin had a younger sister in this story before he became, well, Ayin? Given who X is, she and Ayin may have a lot more in common than we're used to thinking.

My main guesses would be Lisa (he did adopt the twins, sorta) and Carmen, my main problem with both is that they don't wear their hair that way most of the time, and Ayin is familiar with doing it, which don't mesh well with that.

I wonder if Madoka is experiencing something similar.

Huh, that's an interesting point, have an insightful.
 


Look in those eyes and think: how well will it fly if punted?

Not far enough, thats for sure.

[X] Madoka Kaname, with Homura alongside her

Feel like it might be a good idea to discuss things now that we haven't just gotten out of a dire situation and everyone has had time to calm down and process things.

On another note, I confess i haven't actually watched PMMM all the way through from ep1. Most of my knowledge of the series was absorbed via osmosis from the internet and a few clips on youtube. I plan to rectify that today. Time to start a binge session! (Breaks out the doirtos and milk).
 
Nah, be like me. Never watch the show, never play the games, never read the spinoffs.

I've been in this neck of the internet woods for over seven years and have had no direct exposure to the franchise, only fan discussions and fan works.
 
Sidestory 8 - Workplace Chatter
Sidestory 8 - Workplace Chatter

"Bye Mom! Have a nice day at work!"

As Madoka headed off to school carrying a sleeping Kyubey in her arms, she pondered for a moment how strange her life had gotten recently. A lot of it was frightening, like Witches and seeing people acting strange and whatever it was that Sayaka, X, Mami, and Homura were fighting but weren't supposed to talk about. Sayaka had let slip yesterday that there were things even more horrible than Witches, and that she thought that X probably came here to hunt them. Sayaka had a lot of theories about X, ranging from her being a veteran from some sort of Magical Girl war to a time-traveller to a reformed villain who outlived all their old rivals. Madoka didn't really know what to think. She wasn't even a Magical Girl, and no matter how much Kyubey insisted she couldn't really accept the idea that she would be stronger than people like Mami and X when she did make a Contract.

Mami was really the perfect Magical Girl. Refined, talented, caring, she was absolutely amazing. Even if actually being a Magical Girl seemed so much harder and more difficult than shows always made it seem, Mami seemed every bit the archetypical heroine right down to her calling out her attacks before using them. Seeing her trying so hard was really inspiring. She had welcomed Madoka and Sayaka into her life and promised to guide them through the challenges they would face as Magical Girls. When Mami was around, Madoka always felt a bit more confident. It was like Mami believed in her so much that Madoka couldn't help but believe too.

X was… a lot like Mom. They both had that commanding presence to them, like they always knew what to do and how to deal with whatever was happening. She was way older and more experienced than anybody else there, and it showed. Madoka wasn't sure if she agreed with all of Sayaka's theories on who X was, but sometimes they actually seemed pretty accurate. Between her demeanor and those soldiers she used, X really did seem like a General or some sort of military leader. Mami seemed unfamiliar with X's abilities, and when Madoka had asked Kyubey once the mascot creature had admitted to having little idea as to what X was. Whatever X had done to protect her when they first met hadn't worn off yet, as Madoka discovered when going completely unharmed after tripping over a chair one morning. X was a mysterious person, but clearly strong and caring. It did make Madoka wonder why the older woman was all alone now, though. Even Madoka could tell she clearly had experience fighting alongside and directing others, but she had been alone before meeting them and never mentioned anything about having friends or allies they would be looking for. It wasn't any of Madoka's business though, so she did her best to put it out of mind.

Sayaka was a Magical Girl too now. She hadn't told anybody what her Wish was, but Madoka could put two and two together. Kyousuke's injury had miraculously been cured the same day Sayaka had contracted, and nobody had been happier for him than her. Her Magic was really impressive too, even if Sayaka seemed a bit disappointed that she had to stay back all the time. But if Madoka could choose, she would want Magic like that. Fighting really wasn't for her, but healing or supporting people? She had always wanted to be a doctor, and since it was implied that balancing such a demanding career with being a Magical Girl would be next to impossible Madoka hoped she'd still be able to help people in the same way if she made a Contract. Sayaka would find her footing eventually, Madoka was sure of it.

Homura was kind of cool, too. Madoka could tell that, as cold as she acted, she wasn't a bad person. She was always talking about how being a Magical Girl was too dangerous or would get people hurt, so she must have just be trying to protect them in her own way. She had fought alongside Mami, X, and Sayaka when it counted, so she definitely wasn't a bad person. But there was something fundamentally broken in the dark-haired Magixal Girl. Madoka remembered the transfer student approaching her even before Kyubey did, telling her to value her life the way it had been before. That was her telling Madoka to stay out of things right from the beginning, wasn't it?

Homura was probably right about her. Because Madoka knew that she wasn't the kind of person who could be a hero.

But if she could at least be there for everybody, then it would be worth it anyways.

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Something was wrong with Hitomi, and everyone could see it. Her clothing was messy and askew, her hair wasn't done properly, and she kept staring off into space in the middle of class.

"I'm really fine, Sayaka. There's no need to worry."

"That's not even remotely true!" Sayaka exclaimed. "Look, you can just tell us what it is. Are you sick or something? You don't look well."

"I-I can take you to the nurse's office." Madoka offered. But Hitomi just shook her head slowly. After an awkward pause, she speaks up again.

"There's no need for you to worry. Everything is fine, after all. I actually feel great."

Madoka and Sayaka exchange a worried look.

"Do you think this could be… you know… a Witch? They have those Kisses they use on people"

"We could ask Mami. She'd know, wouldn't she?"

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Madoka is doing her very best to stay calm. Her memories of the night are fuzzy, but she can clearly recall a bright, gentle light guiding her forwards. Everything is still a blur as Homura unlocks Madoka's front door and steps into her house. It should probably be more disconcerting that the other girl has a key to Madoka's house, but at the moment she's still trying to process everything that has happened.

She almost died, didn't she? If Homura and X hadn't been there, she would've died. And her whole family would've died, too. Madoka couldn't do anything about it. She had been struck just like everybody else, and very nearly paid for it.

Neither girl speaks as they lay the still-sleeping civilians in their respective beds. Even with the weight of the Forest Guardian's presence lifted, the dark night remains a heavy burden bearing down on the pair. The sounds of the city are muted and hollow, the rustling of small animals barely noticeable. Madoka stood in her room alongside her classmate, unable to decide what to say.

"Think carefully about what I warned you of." Homura says at last, breaking the silence. "The life of a Magical Girl will only lead to grief. If you care at all about what you have now…" Her voice trails off, and in that moment Madoka noticed the other girl shaking. Only slightly, practically imperceptible in the dark, but still undeniably there.

"Thanks," she says, and Homura freezes completely. "for saving me. If you and X hadn't been there, I would have died. If there's anything I can do for you, please tell me." The Magical Girl remains fixed in place, that same stern expression now perfectly still.

"X…" Homura's voice trails off again. "She's a strong person. You should take her advice and not get any more involved than you have to."

"Do you think she'll be alright? I know she said she'd be okay, but she was missing an arm. I'm afraid that she just doesn't want us to worry."

"X will be fine." Homura answers. "She claimed that it would grow back. Self-healing to that level is uncommon but not impossible, though individuals who can regenerate to such a degree tend to be far more foolhardy and get themselves hurt pointlessly." she continues, and it sounds to Madoka as if Homura has someone in mind as she says it.

An uncomfortable silence settles over the room.

"So, are you… going to be staying here tonight? You can use the bed, I can-" Madoka starts before being cut off.

"You should sleep in your own bed. I am used to uncomfortable arrangements." Homura says, dragging a sleeping bag out of nowhere. Her attention is not on the conversation, but fixed on something outside that Madoka cannot see. Once more, the two lapse into silence as they each crawl into their respective beds.

"Goodnight, Homura."

A long, overwhelming silence fills the void. Just when Madoka thinks she will go unanswered, Homura's voice cuts through the empty room. She sounds afraid, uncertain, not at all like her ordinary self.

"Goodnight, Madoka."

And the night is quiet once more.
 
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Well arguably sayaka is right on all accounts except the nitty gritty
X as Ayin did out live their competitors and arguably reformed...... then promptly back slided back, we are a time traveler..... just not one who has travelled through this worlds time but in a time loop in another universe, we are a veteran of a war.... just not a magical girl or a war in their universe

I think sayaka is safe to converse with if only because she acknowledges we 'were' a villain but 'reformed'
 
Less errors than usual, that's good (done reconfirming)
No solutions to offer, but the transition from what X is and Madoka not knowing what to think, to Madoka not being a MG doesn't really mesh well. Stream-of-consciousness, perhaps?
Not like removing it is a good idea, and the link to the next paragraph from there is clear

discovered when going being completely unharmed

Uh, it's not clear from context whether this refers to Maodka or Sayaka here?
Fighting really wasn't for her, but healing or supporting people? She had always wanted to be a doctor

"Workplace" huh, I thought this was going to be about Madoka's mom or their teachers originally

E:
You should sleep in your own bed. I am used to uncomfortable arrangements
Homura's own house, or her hospital stuff, or?
 
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[x] Madoka Kaname, with Homura alongside her

Might as well take advantage of the Sidestory information then, and maybe poke at the issues between them further

(At least Homura won't have to see us going down a certain path given the time it took to recover...)
 
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Sayaka was a Magical Girl too now. She hadn't told anybody what her Wish was, but Madoka could put two and two together. Kyousuke's injury had miraculously been cured the same day Sayaka had contracted, and nobody had been happier for him than her.

We've got confirmation on Sayaka's wish. Or at least pretty close to confirmation, considering the circumstances and Madoka's closeness to Sayaka. It's very interesting that Sayaka still wished for Kyosuke's recovery, yet her magic expressed itself very differently this time around. It makes me wonder about what X said that struck a chord in Sayaka to change her wish magic.
 
For like the first paragraph I thought this chapter was from Junko's perspective and I was like 'wow shit really is different'.
 
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