Threads Of Destiny(Eastern Fantasy, Sequel to Forge of Destiny)

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[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[X] Endure. Remain as far immersed as you can while remaining whole. Until the end.

I'm always a fan of hatred and spite.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
Typo roundup.

Feeling's aint enough
ain't

The first person Ming Xia killed was an an accident.
Extra 'an' either wants to be removed or be an 'as'

his head bounced off the side of building and something broke.
missing "the" before "building"

She would have a victim, a helpless pig again.
Missing "been" after "have"

Missing capitalization.

Sixiang said whistfully.
wistfully
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
[] Endure. Remain as far immersed as you can while remaining whole. Until the end.

All the better to see, to find the cracks that will let us stop such terrible things in the future.
We survived the fires of a sovereign battle, we can survive this glimpse into a red realm.

Will Sixiang show us how to pry at the weaknesses of another?

[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.

However, after actually surviving the sovereign battle, and with the oncoming war, it is so hard to willingly dive into a harder than necessary trauma.

Finesse and shrewdness on where to draw the line on our own existence will carry today. We have already risked annihilation a few times this lesson.
 
[X] A step back. See, feel, experience the driving force of a life ending grudge. You are not Shu Yue, and should not try to be.
 
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